人教版高考英语写作总复习11-13作文评分与阐释开放作文完美课件PPT

这是一份人教版高考英语写作总复习11-13作文评分与阐释开放作文完美课件PPT，共60页。PPT课件主要包含了去掉had 　，are→am 　，去掉into 　，去掉time　，写作素能培养等内容，欢迎下载使用。

Ⅰ.评分细则近几年高考英语书面表达的评分标准有了很大变化，由原来只要求考生把要点写全 (内容全面)、写对 (错误较少)，提高到要求考生写好 (使用一些高级词汇和复杂句型)的高度——鼓励考生尝试使用一些高级词汇和复杂句型，对由此所出现的尝试性错误采取了较为宽容的态度 (不扣或少扣分)。目前全国高考英语全国卷书面表达大部分采用25分制，评分标准如下：
一、评分原则1．按5个档次给分。2．先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属的档次，然后以该档次的要求衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。3．词数不符合要求的，从总分中减去2分。4．评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的丰富性和准确性及上下文的连贯性。5．拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。6．如书写较差以至于影响交际，将其分数降低一个档次。
二、档次分配、表达要求和给分范围
Ⅱ.考场作文常见的3类错误考场作文常见的错误主要分为三类：词汇类错误、语法类错误和汉语式英语。(一)词汇类错误考试时，我们很容易出现单词拼写错误和词形变化错误；而词性不清和词汇用法方面的错误主要还是受汉语的影响。其应对措施是在备考时要多注意容易拼错或容易出现词形变化的单词，真正用心去体会英语词汇的词性和运用，对一些固定习语更不能想当然地改动。
1．单词拼写错误误：Our English teacher is friendly but very strick with us students.正：Our English teacher is friendly but very strict with us students.2．词形变化错误误：Peple thrwed cans, paper, bags and s n int the river water.正：Peple threw cans, paper, bags and s n int the river water.3．词性不清错误误：Ding a part­time jb always effects study.正：Ding a part­time jb always affects study.
4．词汇用法错误误：He pened the light after he entered the rm.正：He turned n the light after he entered the rm.5．擅自改动习语误：We lst the game, but we didn't lse ur heart.正：We lst the game, but we didn't lse heart.
改正下列句子中的错误1．We must try ur best t prevent the envirment frm being plluted. __________________________2．There is n dubt that keeping an English diary helps yu a lt with writen English. __________________3．During my summer vacatin, I spent half a mnth in the cuntry and played very happy. _________________
envirment→envirnment 　
writen→written　
happy→happily　
4．We must ntice ur prnunciatin when we speak English. ___________________________5．Just in the frnt f ur huse stands a tall tree with a histry f 1,000 years. _______________________________
ntice→pay attentin t　
in the frnt f→in frnt f　
(二)语法类错误一个正确的句子除了用词得当外，语法也应该准确无误。如果语法不正确，再好的构思也难以正确地表达，语法错误的多少会直接影响作文的档次。英语写作中语法类错误主要表现在：时态、语态错误、非谓语动词使用错误、主谓一致错误、比较级使用错误、多余的词以及平行错误等。
1．时态、语态错误误：Children wh raise in pr families can generally deal with prblems mre effectively in their adult years.正：Children wh are raised in pr families can generally deal with prblems mre effectively in their adult years.2．非谓语动词使用错误误：Cmparing with ther cuntries, the cuntry pays little attentin t the pllutin.正：Cmpared with ther cuntries, the cuntry pays little attentin t the pllutin.
3．主谓一致错误误：My hbby is widespread, which include drawing, cllecting stamps and s n.正：My hbby is widespread, which includes drawing, cllecting stamps and s n.4．比较级使用错误误：With the develpment f transprtatin, the wrld seems t be getting mre and mre smaller.正：With the develpment f transprtatin, the wrld seems t be getting smaller and smaller.
5．多余的词误：On ne day, he went t the cinema.正：One day, he went t the cinema.6．平行错误误：Then I put my bk under my desk, pening it and started lking fr the answer.正：Then I put my bk under my desk, pened it and started lking fr the answer.
改正下列句子中的错误1．In the mrning, we had bicycled t the suburbs t plant trees. _________2．Nt nly Tm but als I are tired f ne examinatin after anther. __________3．They think students shuld have their wn time t study and it is mre quieter at hme. ____________________4．There have been mre and mre rad accidents happened in recent years. ______________________5．Mre and mre peple entered int the hall, s it became crwded. __________
mre→much或去掉mre 　
happened→happening 　
(三)汉语式英语一般来说，英汉两种语言既有许多相似之处，又有许多不同之处。在写作时如果想当然地去写，会出现许多汉语式英语，其中主要包括：纯汉语式思维和汉语式语序、句子成分残缺、句子粘连以及搭配不当等。1．纯汉语式思维和汉语式语序误：At this schl studying, I really very happy.正：Studying at this schl, I am really very happy.2．句子成分残缺误：There are many students dn't supprt the prject.正：There are many students wh dn't supprt the prject.
3．句子粘连误：On the ther hand, dgs are ur best friends, bring us a lt f fun.正：On the ther hand, dgs are ur best friends, which/and bring us a lt f fun.4．搭配不当误：We walked a far way befre planting trees.正：We walked a lng way befre planting trees.误：Under the help f the teacher, I have made great prgress in my English.正：With the help f the teacher, I have made great prgress in my English.
改正下列句子中的错误1．We are impssible t finish the wrk in such a shrt time. _____________________________________________2．It's knwn that the cst in big cities is very expensive. __________________3．He has greatly imprved his spken English by this way. ___________________4．I haven't heard frm yur letter fr a lng time and I miss yu very much. ___________________5．He has three sns, all f them wrk in Beijing. _______________________
We are impssible→It is impssible fr us　　
expensive→high　
by→in或way→means　
yur letter→yu　
逗号后加and或them→whm　
Ⅲ．防范出现错误的2个措施写对句子是作文得高分的关键和保证，考场上要避免上述低级错误，可采取以下两个措施。(一)确定主语英语句子无论多长都有自己的主语 (祈使句省略了主语yu)。动手写句子首先要确定主语，其次要特别注意汉语与英语的区别。例如：
①北京八月多雨。误：Beijing rains much in August.正：It rains much in Beijing in August.②写得很匆忙，我们发现书中满是错误。误：Written in a hurry, we fund the bk full f mistakes.正：Written in a hurry, the bk was fund full f mistakes (by us)．
(二)确定谓语动词英语中没有动词就构不成句子，但动词千变万化，稍不注意就会写错句子。在写句子时应特别注意以下几个方面：1．注意及物与不及物动词的正确运用。误：The living standard f the peple has raised in the past twenty years.正：The living standard f the peple has risen/has been raised in the past twenty years.
2．注意延续性与非延续性动词的正确运用。误：He has left his hmetwn fr twenty years.正：He has been away frm his hmetwn fr twenty years.3．注意一些不可用于被动语态的动词。误：Many stars are appeared in the sky at night.正：Many stars appear in the sky at night.
以下句子含有考生常犯的错误，请改正1．Dr. Smith, tgether with his wife, are t arrive n the evening flight. __________2．The car hitted the ld man and drived away. ___________________________3．It is high time we d smething t reduce traffic accidents. _________________________4．There are many students are planting trees n the hill. __________________________________
are→is　hitted→hit；drived→drve　d→did或d前加shuld　去掉第二个are或students后加wh　
5．Eat at schl is very cnvenient fr students. ________________________________________________________6．It was Sunday, they all went fr a picnic in the wds. __________________________7．Wuld yu please meet my uncle at the airprt because this is his first time visit t the US？ __________
It is very cnvenient fr students t eat at schl.　
逗号后加s或was→being　
8．While having ur dinner, the drbell rang.___________________________________________________________9．Recently ur village has taken place great changes. ___________________________________________________________10．Fishing is his favrite hbby, and he als likes cllecting cins.___________________________________________________________　
having前加we are或the drbell rang→we heard the drbell ringing
Recently great changes have taken place in ur village.　
he als likes cllecting cins→cllecting cins als gives him pleasure
附　录：1．阅卷老师公认的高分作文主要有以下特点：(1)书写工整，卷面清晰。工整漂亮的书写会使老师对你的试卷一见钟情，不忍扣分。(2)紧扣主题，重点突出。既然是写英语文章，就要符合英语文化思维，英语文章的特点是喜欢开门见山，不喜欢乱兜圈子。因此，要力求表述的每一项内容都切中要点。
(3)层次分明，过渡自然。文章段落层次分明 (三段左右为宜)，内容的表达符合交际需要，句子和段落之间过渡自然。(4)表达准确，用词地道。用词贴切而无生搬硬套之感，句式灵活多变，富有活力和韵律，这是使文章脱颖而出的法宝。(5)逻辑严谨，发挥适度。无论文章的文体和内容是什么，在紧扣主题的情况下，有逻辑地组织材料，并适度地进行细节描写和情感抒发，会使文章更加鲜活化。
2．阅卷老师不会给高分的作文主要有以下特点：(1)卷面凌乱，字迹潦草，书写过小、过密，字母连写严重，标点不清。阅卷老师首先会觉得该考生不认真。在高强度的阅卷过程中，没有谁会逐字辨认书写得乱七八糟的内容，况且，评分原则中规定“如书写较差以至于影响交际，将其分数降低一个档次”。(2)有些试卷乍一看，洋洋洒洒，清楚工整，讨人喜欢。但细读起来，则会被搞得满头雾水。这类试卷的突出问题是：审题不清、层次混乱、句子残缺、拼写和语法错误目不暇接。这种前后印象反差的冲击，很难使阅卷老师笔下留情。
3．部分阅卷老师的片语：(1)要想达到及格线 (15或18分)以上，起码要有几个高级词汇、句式和复合句；(2)不仅要点全，而且也会“说话”；(3)书写很重要，书写潦草难辨，内容再好，也很难得四档分以上。
第十三讲　注意卷面书写的规范
许多考生只重视书面表达内容的训练和提高，忽略了卷面书写的规范训练，影响考试分数。要做到卷面工整、美观，考生需要注意：　1．分段　大多数文章可分为三段。段落层次清晰，段首对齐或缩进约4个字符距离。　2．字母饱满圆润，清晰可辨　对于a，；u，r，v；e，t，c；h，l等在手写体中易于混淆的字母，一定要写清楚，易于辨认。要避免笔顺错误或随意连笔造成的字母混淆。笔顺易错的字母是E，F，H，N，O，R，W，d，i，j，需重点模仿英语规范手写体字帖上这些字母的笔顺。　
3．字母上中下比例恰当　考生脱离了四线三格后，要尽量压线书写，避免所有字母悬于线上，呈波浪式前进。严禁b，d，h，k，l，t上部过长或f，g，j，p，q，y下部过长等比例失衡现象。　4．间距均匀　字母与字母之间，单词与单词之间都要间距均匀。单词之间约为一两个字母的宽度；千万不能太拥挤或太松散。如：I cme frm China.不能写成：Icmefrm China.也不能写成I　cme　frm　China.　5．倾斜度一致　写字母时要注意倾斜度，所有的字母一律向右倾斜5度左右，要保持倾斜度一致。　
6．准确运用标点　英语中的标点符号与汉语标点符号基本相同，只有句号、省略号等不一样。英语的句号不是“。”，而是实心的“.”；省略号不是“……”，而是“...”。连字符号不要写得太长，以免跟破折号混淆。其长度相当于一个小写字母。英语中没有顿号“、”，在表示句中较短的并列词语之间的停顿时，英语只能用逗号；连接一系列并列项目的“and”或“r”之前往往可以用逗号。英语中没有书名号《》，一般用引号。如：Yesterday she saw an English film“Gne with the Wind”．。　
7．注意移行规则　在书写英语时，如在一行之末无法将一个词写完，这个词的某几个字母必须写到下一行去，这种书写现象被称为单词的移行。移行时要在没写完的部分后面用上一个连字符号“­”表示该词未完，剩下的部分写在下一行里，但不是随意的，而是要按照一定的规则进行。移行的规则与单词的音节有关，特别应该注意以下几点：　(1)单音节词不能移行，如pen，bk，fish，map，dg，red，meat等。　(2)属于字母组合的，不能拆开字母组合进行移行，如teacher不能拆写成teac­her，nthing不能写成nt­hing等。　
(3)遇到复合词，则可以按其中的个体单词进行分离，如classrm可以拆写成class­rm，ftball可以拆写成ft­ball，eggplant可拆写成egg­plant，afternn可拆写成after­nn等。　(4)如果是单词中有两个相同的辅音字母，移行时应该拆开，如bttle可以拆写成bt­tle，better可以拆写成bet­ter等。　(5)即使不违背音节的划分规则，也不能在上一行只留一个字母，或只移一个字母到下行，如study不能写成s­tudy或stud­y等。　(6)连字号相当于一个字母的宽度，书写时应把握好。　
(7)时间、量变及货币单位应视为一个整体：不能分开移行。如1100 P．M.写在一行内。不能将1100和P.M.分开移行。　(8)由“年、月、日”表示的日期，如果必须分开移行只能将“月、日”与“年”分开。　如January 6,1980不能将January和6分开移行，但可以把January 6，和1980分成两行。　注意：移行不可过多。右边每行长短错落要比移词过多看上去舒服。　
8．切忌涂抹　如果下笔有误，按照短文改错中删词的做法在错单词上自左上到右下画一斜线即可。不能抹黑，影响整篇书写的整洁美观。考生应先做简要的草稿以确保下笔不再涂改。　如果同学们能按照以上标准坚持每天训练，一定能在高考英语书面表达中上升一个档次。　
第十一讲　灵活阐释开放作文
(半)开放作文开放性作文一般没有提示和要点的限制，从而更好地考查了考生对英语语言的综合运用能力及考生的想像力和创造力，因此，这种题型也越来越受到高考命题人的青睐。一、试题特征 1．命题式开放性作文，即给出作文题目，要求考生根据对作文题目的分析、理解，自由发挥。命题式开放性作文不像图画式开放性作文那样受到内容或文章体裁方面的限制，命题式开放性作文根据内容要求可以是记叙文、议论文、说明文，也可以是应用文等。
2．图画式开放性作文，即给出一幅图画，要求考生根据图画内容及对图画的理解，写出英语作文。图画式一般有两种情况，一是事件或事故发生的图画，二是夸张式的寓意图。对于事件或事故发生的图画，一般采用记叙文文体；而对于寓意式的图画，一般采用议论文文体。根据不同内容的图画，考生可以套用不同的写作模式。
二、写作步骤开放性作文没有要点提示。面对一幅抽象的图画或一个标题，考生往往感到茫然，不知所措。为此，建议考生在写作时从以下几个方面入手：1．虚拟目标，有的放矢首先，虚拟读者对象，以便具体地告诉读者某话题；然后，列出要点，写出提纲，从而变抽象为具体，使开放性作文成为限制性作文。
2．理解题意，联系生活开放性作文的形式可分为图画式或命题式。对于图画式开放性作文，考生必须首先准确描述画面内容；其次，对图画的寓意深层解读；最后，结合生活实际进行联想，发表自己的看法，或给人们提出警示或建议。对于命题式开放性作文，首先必须准确理解题目意思，抓住标题中的关键词；其次，确定文章体裁，结合生活实际组织材料。
3．确立主题，列出提纲不论是图画式开放性作文，还是命题式开放性作文，都要注意以下几点：一是审题，包括题目或图画的内容、命题老师的目的或意图、写作时需要使用的文章体裁等；二是定文章的主题、结构、层次；三是列出要点和提纲，即哪些东西需要写，哪些东西不需要写，做到心中有数；四是文章中所用的人称、时态、语态；五是文章所需要的词汇、短语、句型等。这就为后面的写作做好了充分的准备。
4．根据体裁，快速写作不同的体裁，写作的方法和思路也不一样。考生要运用平时所了解到的文体特点，结合提纲，将文章要点组织起来，以便迅速写出文章。记叙文，通常第一段用一两句话交代事情发生的时间、地点、原因等，第二段叙述事情发生和发展的经过，第三段是事情发生的影响及人们对此的评价或看法。说明文，通常第一段用一两句话点出说明对象，第二段按照时间顺序、空间顺序或逻辑顺序进行讲解或介绍，第三段提出想法或建议。议论文，通常第一段用一两句话提出论点，第二段从正反两方面进行论证，第三段通过对上述第二段的分析，总结得出结论。应用文，首先注意应用文的格式，其次表达清楚所要讲的事情；最后要注意语言措辞及礼节等。
三、注意事项1．认真审题，即审语境、审人称、审时态。2．要紧扣主题，首尾呼应。3．注意写作对象和语言风格，要有读者意识。4．要进行细致描写，有细节的支撑。5．要有主次之分，详略得当。6．必须符合逻辑。7．要做到思想健康，积极向上。8．内容新颖。新颖的内容能够充分体现考生的创造力，这正好符合新课标所提倡的素质教育的要求。
四、常用句式1．The picture presents t us that...这幅画向我们展示了……。2．As is seen in the can see frm the picture that...从这幅图画中我们可以看到……。3．S it is a better chice t...因此……是更好的选择。4．On ne hand，I dn't think it is right t...一方面，我认为……是不正确的。
5．Therefre，when is wise t...因此，当我们……时，……是很明智的。6．I think that this picture tries t tell us...我想这幅图是想告诉我们……。7．I sincerely hpe that...我真诚地希望……。8．We must learn t...我们必须学会……。
【典例】　 (2017·浙江卷)阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。On a bright, warm July afternn, Mac Hllan, a primary schl teacher, was cycling frm his hme t Alaska with his friends. One f his friends had stpped t make a bicycle repair, but they had encuraged Mac t carry n, and they wuld catch up with him sn. As Mac pedaled (骑行) alng alne, he thught fndly f his wife and tw yung daughters at hme. He hped t shw them this beautiful place smeday.
Then Mac heard quick and lud breathing behind him. ＂Man, that's a big dg！＂ he thught. But when he lked t the side, he saw instantly that it wasn't a dg at all, but a wlf, quickly catching up with him.Mac's heart jumped. He fund ut his can f bear spray. With ne hand n the bars, he fired the spray at the wlf. A bright red clud envelped the animal, and t Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back f Mac's bike, tearing pen his tent hag. He fired at the wlf a secnd time, and again, it fell back nly t quickly restart the chase (追赶)．
Mac was pedaling hard nw. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful nt t slw dwn. He was a steep uphill climb befre him. He knew that nce he hit the hill, he'd be easy caught up and the wlf's teeth wuld be tearing int his flesh.At this mment, Paul and Beeky were driving their car n their way t Alaska. They didn't think much f it when they saw tw cyclists repairing their bike n the side f the rad. A bit later, they sptted what they, t, assumed was a dg running alngside a man n a bike. As they gt clser, they realized that the dg was a wlf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in frnt f it as the wlf was catching up fast, just a dzen yards away nw.
注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2．应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1：The car abruptly stpped in frnt f him.________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2：A few minutes later, the ther tw cyclists arrived._________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【解析】　本文主要讲述了Mac在骑自行车前往阿拉斯加的途中，被一只狼追赶的故事。时态要考虑以一般过去时为主，人称以第三人称为主。同时要兼顾字数的要求，不要过多，关键词列出5个以上，需要均匀分布在两段中。考生要注意几个关键信息和情节变化并结合给出的内容提示进行合理构思。
【范文】The car abruptly stpped in frnt f him. Paul and Becky gt ut f the car immediately t give the help. With nthing n the hand, they didn't dare t fight against the wlf. Hwever, they still apprached t the wlf bravely. At the same time, the wlf als nticed them and turned its head back, hwling angrily twards Paul and Becky. Mac then jumped ff the bicycle and was ready t fight against the wlf. Then came the deadlck.
A few minutes later, the ther tw cyclists arrived. They fund the dangerus situatin, where three men circled the wlf. Mac's friends als jumped ff their bicycles and jined the fight with the wlf. Mre and mre cars stpped. Sme drivers tk ut the sticks frm the cars, and sme tk ut the knives, even the guns twards the wlf. In the meanwhile, the wlf might feel the peple's threats arund, s it began t step back slwly. Sn, it ran away ff the rad and disappeared in the distance.
【点评】　本篇范文很好地完成了题目要求的写作任务。文章结构合理、层次分明。时态运用准确无误，表达纯正。范文使用了较高级的词汇和词组apprached、circled、tk ut；还使用了定语从句where three men circled the wlf；现在分词作状语hwling angrily twards Paul and Becky等；with nthing n the hand、hwever、at the same time、in the meanwhile等词的使用，把文章衔接了起来，使文章显得有层次感。
(2016·江苏)请阅读下面短文，并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左右的文章。In recent years, internet vting has becme increasingly ppular in China.Peple nt nly can use part­time vtes themselves, but als urge thers t vte fr cmpetitins like the “Mst Beautiful Teacher” and the “Cutest Baby”．
Li Jiang, a high schl student, is invited t vte in the “Best Plice Officer” cmpetitin, rganized by the lcal gvernment t let the public have a better understanding f plice fficers' daily wrk.Li Jiang visits the website and reads all the stries.He is deeply mved by their glrius deeds.He is already thinking f becming a pliceman himself in the future.Su Hua is invited by his uncle t vte fr his cusin in the “Future Singer” cmpetitin.He has already received three similar invitatins this week.His uncle tells him that if his cusin wins the cmpetitin, the family will win an verseas tur fr free.Su Hua likes his cusin very much, but he finds ther singers perfrm even better.T vte, r nt t vte? This is a questin that trubles him very much.
【写作内容】1．用约30个单词写出上文概要；2．用约120个单词阐述你对网络投票的看法，并用2～3个理由或论据支撑你的看法。【写作要求】1．写作过程中不能直接引用原文语句；2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称；3．不必写标题。【评分标准】内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。
On­line vting becmes increasingly ppular, and many cmpetitins get peple invlved in it. It is beneficial t sme peple, while it puts thers int a dilemma ver whether t vte r nt.In my pinin, n­line vting is an inseparable part f mdern life and shuld be welcmed, since it is n mre than a way t participate in public life. It makes n difference frm rdinary vting events, in which candidates g arund t seek supprts. In additin, the Internet makes surveying and vting easy and cnvenient, regardless f time and space. Furthermre, vting n the Internet makes instant feedback pssible.
Pssible versin ne：
T be hnest, vters smetimes feel annyed, nt because they hate vting, but because they are divided between emtin and fairness. Things will turn fr the better if we can wrk ut sme participatin rules fr peple t bey. Therefre, I hld a psitive attitude twards n­line vting. (150 wrds)
Internet vting is quite ppular nwadays. Many peple are smewhat puzzled at the negative side f the vting, althugh sme are quite happy with it, and active in ding it.In my pinin, internet vting has begun t shw its negative impacts n peple and sciety. Firstly, peple may feel frced when asked t d things that they dn't want t. Secndly, vting f this kind des nt depend n the strng pints f the cmpetitrs, but rather n hw many scial­net wrking resurces they have. Thirdly, the vters r even the cmpetitrs in many cases are pssibly taken advantage f by the rganizers fr cmmercial purpses.
Pssible versin tw：
In shrt, internet vting, t sme extent, is unfair, if immral, and cannt be trusted. Therefre, rules shuld be wrked ut and strictly bserved. Everyne in ur sciety shuld help thse in need, but it is mre imprtant t be sincere and earnest. (150 wrds)
【解析】　此类作文对考生的能力要求极高。首先考生要以30字概述短文内容。接下来就网络投票发表个人看法并提出理由和根据。文章要使用第三人称和一般现在时为主的时态。要求：1.概述：网络投票越来越流行，几乎人人都参与了网络投票，在给人们带来好处的同时，有时候也让人进退两难不知道是否应该参加这样的投票。2．支持：网络投票和生活密切相关，我们应该积极参与。
3．理由及依据： (1)它是一种社会生活的方式；网络投票方便容易，不受时间和地点的束缚。同时网络投票的反馈迅速可靠。 (2)虽然有时候网络投票也会给我们带来困扰，但如果有更好的参与规则，网络投票会更加规范合理。4．反对：网络投票会给人类带来负面影响。 (1)人们会因为网络投票而产生被迫的感觉。 (2)网络投票结果并不客观； (3)网络投票可能会被故意利用。建议考生在写作概述时，语言简练不拖沓。注意使用本人熟悉的词汇及句式，以增加获得高分的可能性。不要堆砌使用串联词，穿插使用陈述句、祈使句和被动句式，让文章更加丰富多样化。
【点评】　本篇范文很好地完成了所有任务。文章结构合理，层次分明。第一段总结归纳短文内容提出网络投票很流行，给人们带来好处同时也有不利之处。第二段提出个人观点并给出理由，两篇范文中正反观点明确，论据有力；第三段中提出合理化建议；时态和人称运用准确无误，全文无汉语式英语思维，体现出很高的运用语言的能力。从写作技巧来看，文章中使用了较多的复合句，如定语从句． in which candidates g arund t seek supprts.状语从句． we can wrk ut sme participatin rules fr peple t bey.同时文章中串联词运用较为合理，如in my pinin、in additin、furthermre、t be hnest等等。