（新高考）2022届高中英语外研版一轮复习 板块三 读后续写 Part 2 典例示范 精品课件

这是一份（新高考）2022届高中英语外研版一轮复习 板块三 读后续写 Part 2 典例示范 精品课件，共19页。

阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。(2020·新高考全国Ⅰ卷)The Meredith family lived in a small cmmunity.As the ecnmy was in decline,sme peple in the twn had lst their jbs.Many f their families were struggling t make ends meet.Peple were trying t help each ther meet the challenges.Mrs Meredith was a mst kind and thughtful wman.She spent a great deal f time visiting the pr.She knew they had prblems,and they needed all kinds f help.When she had time,she wuld bring fd and medicine t them.
One mrning she tld her children abut a family she had visited the day befre.There was a man sick in bed,his wife,wh tk care f him and culd nt g ut t wrk,and their little by.The little by—his name was Bernard—had interested her very much.“I wish yu culd see him,”she said t her wn children,Jhn,Harry,and Clara.“He is such a help t his mther.He wants very much t earn sme mney,but I dn’t see what he can d.”After their mther left the rm,the children sat thinking abut Bernard.“I wish we culd help him t earn mney,”said Clara.“His family is suffering s much.”
“S d I,”said Harry.“We really shuld d smething t assist them.”Fr sme mments,Jhn said nthing,but,suddenly,he sprang t his feet and cried,“I have a great idea!I have a slutin that we can all help accmplish(完成).”The ther children als jumped up all attentin.When Jhn had an idea,it was sure t be a gd ne.“I tell yu what we can d,”said Jhn.“Yu knw that big bx f crn Uncle Jhn sent us?Well,we can make ppcrn(爆米花),and put it int paper bags,and Bernard can take it arund t the huses and sell it.”
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When Mrs Meredith heard f Jhn’s idea,she thught it was a gd ne,t.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________With everything ready,Bernard started ut n his new business.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【语篇解读】这是2020年新高考全国I卷的读后续写,语篇文体为记叙文。文章讲述了一户善良人家的三个孩子在母亲的影响下,开始想办法帮助镇上一个贫困家庭的孩子挣钱的故事。约翰是其中的一个孩子,他想出了“制作爆米花让那个贫困的孩子去卖”的好主意。语篇故事积极向上,充满正能量。故事中的人物善良聪明,在思想和行动上都树立了很好的榜样。在阅读文章时,我们要带着when、where、wh、what、why和hw去理清语篇内容和故事情节的发展脉络。在梳理故事情节发展的脉络时,我们要把握三条线索:时间线、故事情节线和情感发展线。
时间线:①One mrning she tld her children abut a family she had visited the day befre.→②After their mther left the rm,the children sat thinking abut Bernard.→③Fr sme mments,Jhn said nthing,but,suddenly,he sprang t his feet and cried,“I have a great idea!...”→④When Jhn had an idea,it was sure t be a gd ne.→⑤When Mrs Meredith heard f Jhn’s idea,she thught it was a gd ne,t.
故事情节线:故事背景:Meredith一家住在一个小社区里。由于经济衰退,城里有些人失业了,许多家庭都在努力维持生计。人们试图互相帮助以应对挑战。在社会经济萧条的环境下,大家仍保留着自己的善良,互相帮助。文中妈妈Mrs Meredith一直乐于助人。一个充满爱心的妈妈,身体力行,在自己的三个孩子心中播种了爱和善良的种子。虽然文章没有详述,但显而易见,妈妈的善良对孩子产生了积极的影响,所以当她给孩子们讲述了Bernard小男孩一家的情况后,三个孩子Jhn,Harry和Clara非常希望帮助他,并且确实想出了一个好主意——把家里的玉米做成爆米花,让Bernard在社区售卖。情感发展线:通过微观结构的分析,获取文章的内部连贯性,即可交叉两家人的情感线索:Meredith乐于帮助,而Bernard需要帮助。通过互动,双方都得偿所愿,情感自然是激动、感激相互交织。
【段首句解读】读后续写所给的段首句规划了我们的写作思路和框架。因此,在写作前必须仔细研究两段的开头语。续写第一段的段首语提到Mrs Meredith也同意Jhn的主意,那接下来就会涉及把计划告诉Bernard一家、他们有什么反应以及如何制作爆米花。第二段段首语提到Bernard开始他的新营生,接下来就应该着重描写Bernard这个穷苦的孩子是如何去卖爆米花的,以及他的收入情况,更要表达出他的喜悦和对Mrs Meredith一家的感激之情。
【写作思路】写作思路的确定必须遵循故事发展的时间线、情节线和情感发展线。首先要确定文章的故事情节,然后再考虑情感的铺垫。故事情节一般要有两个左右的人物、事件和场景。这样,一方面可以避免情节浮于表面或者过于简单,另一方面也可以有空间进行生动细致的描写。
思路①当Mrs Meredith听到约翰的主意时,她也认为这是个好主意。很快,孩子们就忙着做爆米花,而他们的妈妈则出去买纸袋。当她回来时,她把Bernard带来了。Bernard很高兴参加这项工作,他说:“好主意!”他们一起工作,直到准备好的玉米全部做成爆米花,并用纸袋装好,放在篮子里。一切就绪后,Bernard开始了他的新生意。比预期的要快得多,他带着一个空篮子回来了。他这辈子从来没有挣过这么多钱。几个星期以来,Meredith一家一直向Bernard提供爆米花。人们开始关注这个“爆米花小男孩”,每周他至少有20美元可以带回家,这对他和他的家人来说是一笔可观的收入。所有这些都要归功于约翰想出的好主意。
思路②当Mrs Meredith听到约翰的主意时,她也认为这是个好主意。所以她称赞约翰的建议,并给他一些建议。很快孩子们就忙着做爆米花了,而他们的母亲则出去买纸袋。当她回来时,她把Bernard带来了。所有的孩子都围在Bernard的周围,他们给Bernard准备了一个篮子。篮子里装满了装满爆米花的纸袋。一切就绪后,Bernard开始了他的新生意。比预期的要快得多,Bernard带着空篮子回来了。他这辈子从来没有挣过这么多钱。当他发现这一切都属于他的时候,他高兴得几乎说不出话来,但他那明朗的笑脸表达了他的内心所想。人们开始关注这个每周都挣点钱带回家的“爆米花小男孩”。这一切都是因为约翰的好主意。
【范文欣赏1】When Mrs Meredith heard f Jhn’s idea,she thught it was a gd ne,t.Very sn,the children were busy ppping the crn,while their mther went ut t buy the paper bags.When she came back,she brught Bernard with her.Bernard was very glad t jin in the wrk and said,“S gd an idea! I’ll try right nw.” They wrked tgether until all the crn they prepared was ppped,the paper bags filled and arranged in the basket.
With everything ready,Bernard started ut n his new business.Much sner than expected,he returned with an empty basket.He had never earned s much mney befre in his life.Fr many weeks,the Meredith family cntinued t ffer ppcrn t Bernard.Peple began t watch fr the “little ppcrn by”,and every week he had at least twenty dllars,a significant incme fr him and his family,t take hme.All f this was thanks t the gd idea that Jhn came up with.
【点评1】本文篇幅充实,语言丰富,情节向前发展,符合原文逻辑,体现了作者的写作目的。作者用朴实、细腻、形象的语言描写了孩子们对Bernard的帮助以及Bernard 卖爆米花的过程。情感方面的描写主要体现在Bernard的心理变化上,随着故事的发展,Bernard每周至少有20美元可以带回家补贴家用,而且他充满了对约翰的感激之情。全文没有用高大上的词汇渲染,但是像busy ppping the crn,was very glad t jin,Much sner than expected,cntinued t ffer,thanks t the gd idea...等词的灵活运用给读者“小桥流水”的感觉。
【范文欣赏2】When Mrs Meredith heard f Jhn’s idea,she thught it was a gd ne,t.S she praised Jhn fr his prpsal,and ffered him sme advice.Very sn the children were busy ppping the crn,while their mther went ut t buy the paper bags.When she came back,she brught Bernard with her.All the children came surrunding Bernard and they gave a basket t Bernard.The basket was full f paper bags which were filled with ppcrn.
【点评2】本文故事情节的设计与所给短文高度融合,与所提供的段落开头语的衔接非常合理,比较客观真实地完成了两个段落的续写。范文语言优美、情节合理、描述得当、衔接自然、生动有趣。“All this was because f Jhn’s bright idea.”中All的使用,将Bernard的感激之情表达得淋漓尽致。本文语言丰富,词汇运用灵活,高级句式多样。while连接的并列句、when引导的时间状语从句、which和wh引导的定语从句、Never放于句首的倒装句等高级句式比比皆是,让读者感受到了作者深厚的语言功底。