专题18 读后续写备考指导2：适用浙江卷 课件PPT

这是一份专题18 读后续写备考指导2：适用浙江卷 课件PPT，共54页。PPT课件主要包含了题型解读及能力要求，读后续写的能力要求，浅层的信息定位能力，深层的文本分析能力，Jane Tom，一 语言的丰富性，urged，askd，complained，replied等内容，欢迎下载使用。
提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写(150词左右)，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。
第五档： 21-25第四档： 16-20第三档： 11-15第二档： 6-10第一档： 1-5
第一档 (21-25分 )与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
第四档 (16-20分)完全完成了试题规定的任务。—虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。—应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。—语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。—应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。达到了预期的写作目的。
第三档(11-15分)基本完成了试题规定的任务。—虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。—应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。—有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。—应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作的目的。
读后续写过程中存在的问题：
续写内容与所给短文在叙述意图上不一致续写内容与所给短文在相关细节上相矛盾续写内容与所给短文在语篇结构上不连贯
一、记叙文阅读理解能力二、由读到写的思维能力三、记叙文书面表达能力
一、记叙文阅读理解能力
what, when, where, wh, why, hw等
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tm, had driven three hurs t camp vernight by a lake in the frest. Unfrtunately, n the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started t quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was s angry that she said t Tm, “I’m ging t find a better spt fr us t camp” and walked away. With n path t fllw, Jane just walked n fr quite a lng time. After she had climbed t a high place, she turned arund, hping t see the lake. T her surprise, she saw nthing but frest and, far beynd, a snwcapped muntain tp. She suddenly realized that she was lst. “Tm!” she cried. “Help!” N reply. If nly she had nt left her mbile phne in that bag with Tm. Jane kept mving, but the farther she walked, the mre cnfused she became. As night was beginning t fall, Jane was s tired that she had t stp fr the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much t be with Tm and her family. She wanted t hld him and tell him hw much she lved him. Jane rse at the break f day, hungry and thirsty. She culd hear water trickling (滴落) smewhere at a distance. Quickly she fllwed the sund t a stream. T her great jy, she als saw sme berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling strnger nw, Jane began t walk alng the stream and hpe it wuld lead her t the lake. As she picked her way carefully alng the stream, Jane heard a helicpter. Is that fr me? Unfrtunately, the trees made it impssible fr peple t see her frm abve. A few minutes later, anther helicpter flew verhead. Jane tk ff her yellw bluse, thinking that she shuld g t an pen area and flag them if they came back again. But n mre helicpters came and it was dark. _________________________________ It was daybreak when Jane wke up. _________________________________________
2016年高考读后续写
Read fr infrmatin
wh:what:where:
Jane was lst.
in the frest
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tm, had driven three hurs t camp vernight by a lake in the frest. Unfrtunately, n the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started t quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was s angry that she said t Tm, “I’m ging t find a better spt fr us t camp” and walked away. With n path t fllw, Jane just walked n fr quite a lng time. After she had climbed t a high place, she turned arund, hping t see the lake. T her surprise, she saw nthing but frest and, far beynd, a snwcapped muntain tp. She suddenly realized that she was lst. “Tm!” she cried. “Help!” N reply. If nly she had nt left her mbile phne in that bag with Tm. Jane kept mving, but the farther she walked, the mre cnfused she became. As night was beginning t fall, Jane was s tired that she had t stp fr the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much t be with Tm and her family. She wanted t hld him and tell him hw much she lved him. Jane rse at the break f day, hungry and thirsty. She culd hear water trickling (滴落) smewhere at a distance. Quickly she fllwed the sund t a stream. T her great jy, she als saw sme berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling strnger nw, Jane began t walk alng the stream and hpe it wuld lead her t the lake. As she picked her way carefully alng the stream, Jane heard a helicpter. Is that fr me? Unfrtunately, the trees made it impssible fr peple t see her frm abve. A few minutes later, anther helicpter flew verhead. Jane tk ff her yellw bluse, thinking that she shuld g t an pen area and flag them if they came back again. But n mre helicpters came and it was dark. _________________________________ It was daybreak when Jane wke up. _________________________________________
In what rder is the material develped?
Read fr the plt
Read fr the language
With n path t fllw, Jane…………, she turned arund, hping t ……Jane tk ff her yellw bluse, thinking that ……Jane rse……, hungry and thirsty.If nly she had nt left her mbile phne ……Never in her life had she tasted anything better.
二、由读到写的思维能力
细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻辑关系；围绕划定的10个关键词，合理创新故事情节。
Para. 1: But n mre helicpters came and it was dark.  Hw did Jane feel then? Hw did Jane struggle thrugh the night? Did she fall asleep?Para. 2: It was daybreak when Jane wke up. Was Jane rescued? Wh rescued Jane? Hw was she rescued? Hw did she feel then?
The underlined wrds
Classify 10 key wrds int different grups.
_________________: Jane, Tm_________________: walked, climbed_________________: helicpter, yellw bluse_________________: lake, stream, at a distance_________________: t her great jy
三、记叙文书面表达能力
(一) 语言的丰富性 (二) 语篇的连贯性
1. 词汇、句式、语法的多样性2. 情感表达的多样性3. 动词使用的丰富性
1. 词汇、句式、语法的多样性
简单句，复合句以及强调句、倒装句等特殊句式的使用情况。
主被动语态、非谓语动词、独立主格结构、with的复合结构、虚拟语气的使用情况。
常见初级词汇、高级词汇，以及不同词性的使用情况。
比喻、拟人、夸张等修辞格的使用情况。
句式结构：语法结构：词汇选择：修辞手法：
2. 情感表达的多样性
surrundings
3. 动词使用的丰富性
“Anther race, anther race!” said the little by. The wise ld man stepped frward and presented the little by with tw new challengers, an elderly weak lady and a blind man. “What is this?” said the little by. “This is n race.” He said. “Race!” said the wise man. The race was started and the by was the nly finisher, the ther tw challengers left standing at the starting line. The little by was excited. He raised his arms in delight. The crwd, hwever, was silent shwing n sentiment tward the little by. “What has happened? Why dn’t the peple jin in my success?” he asked the wise ld man. “Race again.” said the man, “This time, finish tgether, all three f yu, finish tgether,” said the wise man.
Use mre specific wrds t replace “say”.
Gd felt sad and sighed t the butterfly, “D yu regret fr what yu have dne?” “N!” the butterfly said firmly, withut hesitatin. “He was yur lver, but nw he stays with anther wman. Withut yu, he culdn’t have recvered.” Gd said with pity. “I lve him.” the butterfly said in a lw vice, “althugh I can’t be the ne he lves, I want him t be happy. Never will I regret what I have dne.” Gd smiled, “True lve is the mst invaluable thing in the wrld.” The butterfly then left the twn with the best wishes fr the man.
Make yur “say” mre specific.
…… “Oh yes, Daddy, yu knw I lve yu,” the little girl said sincerely. “Well, then, give me yur pearls.” “Oh! Daddy, nt my pearls!” Jenny refused, shaking her head vilently. “But yu can have Rsy, my favrite dll. Remember her? Yu gave her t me last year fr my birthday. And yu can have her tea party utfit t. Okay?” “Oh n darling, that’s Okay.” Her father brushed her cheek with a kiss. “Gd night, little ne.”
stare / glare at / lk her in the eye / with her eyes shining/ filled with tearsHis eyes sparkle with excitement/ gratitude
pat him n the shulder/headgrasp/hld ne's handspint t sb/sthwave his hands
nd/shake his head vilentlyHe thught fr a mment
Make yur narratin mre vivid with apprpriate mvement.
But n mre helicpter came and it was getting dark again. Amid the dreadful darkness, strange sunds f wild beasts were heard. “If it weren't fr that stupid quarrel, I wuldn't be trapped here,” she thught t herself, regretful tears cluding her eyes. Surrunded by the fear and tiredness, Jane felt exhausted and finally slid int sleep. “Tm, is that yu?”she murmured. “Tm, help!” In her dream, she saw a man extending his arms twards her at a distance. It was day break when Jane wke up. After a washing, Jane cntinued t frce her way ahead. In the bundless search, she fund it impssible t find a way ut, which threw her int desperatin. Frtunately, a helicpter flew verhead just at that mment. In n time did Jane rush t the rck and climb nt it. She waved her yellw bluse madly t the passing helicpter. T her great jy, this time, the helicpter sptted her. The mment Jane was reunited with her husband, her tears cluded her visin. They hugged each ther tightly in the warm light f the setting sun.
(二) 语篇的连贯性 1. 内容连贯
故事大意一致，写作意图一致
2. 语句连贯 —— 衔接词的准确使用
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tm, had driven three hurs t camp vernight by a lake in the frest. Unfrtunately, n the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started t quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was s angry that she said t Tm, “I’m ging t find a better spt fr us t camp” and walked away. With n path t fllw, Jane just walked n fr quite a lng time. After she had climbed t a high place, she turned arund, hping t see the lake. T her surprise, she saw nthing but frest and, far beynd, a snwcapped muntain tp. She suddenly realized that she was lst. “Tm!” she cried. “Help!” N reply. If nly she had nt left her mbile phne in that bag with Tm. Jane kept mving, but the farther she walked, the mre cnfused she became. As night was beginning t fall, Jane was s tired that she had t stp fr the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much t be with Tm and her family. She wanted t hld him and tell him hw much she lved him. Jane rse at the break f day, hungry and thirsty. She culd hear water trickling (滴落) smewhere at a distance. Quickly she fllwed the sund t a stream. T her great jy, she als saw sme berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling strnger nw, Jane began t walk alng the stream and hpe it wuld lead her t the lake. As she picked her way carefully alng the stream, Jane heard a helicpter. Is that fr me? Unfrtunately, the trees made it impssible fr peple t see her frm abve. A few minutes later, anther helicpter flew verhead. Jane tk ff her yellw bluse, thinking that she shuld g t an pen area and flag them if they came back again. But n mre helicpters came and it was dark. _________________________________ It was daybreak when Jane wke up. _________________________________________
3. 语言连贯 —— 语言风格一致
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tm, had driven three hurs t camp vernight by a lake in the frest. Unfrtunately, n the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started t quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was s angry that she said t Tm, “I’m ging t find a better spt fr us t camp” and walked away. With n path t fllw, Jane just walked n fr quite a lng time. After she had climbed t a high place, she turned arund, hping t see the lake. T her surprise, she saw nthing but frest and, far beynd, a snwcapped muntain tp. She suddenly realized that she was lst. “Tm!” she cried. “Help!” N reply. If nly she had nt left her mbile phne in that bag with Tm. Jane kept mving, but the farther she walked, the mre cnfused she became. As night was beginning t fall, Jane was s tired that she had t stp fr the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much t be with Tm and her family. She wanted t hld him and tell him hw much she lved him. Jane rse at the break f day, hungry and thirsty. She culd hear water trickling (滴落) smewhere at a distance. Quickly she fllwed the sund t a stream. T her great jy, she als saw sme berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling strnger nw, Jane began t walk alng the stream and hpe it wuld lead her t the lake. As she picked her way carefully alng the stream, Jane heard a helicpter. Is that fr me? Unfrtunately, the trees made it impssible fr peple t see her frm abve. A few minutes later, anther helicpter flew verhead. Jane tk ff her yellw bluse, thinking that she shuld g t an pen area and flag them if they came back again. But n mre helicpters came and it was dark. _________________________________ It was daybreak when Jane wke up. _________________________________________
关于衔接：1. 关注段落内部句与句之间的衔接；2. 关注与续写段落首句之间的衔接；3. 关注两个续写段落之间的衔接；4. 关注上下文间的前后呼应。
A funny thing happened t Arthur when he was n the way t wrk ne day. As he walked alng Park Avenue near the First Natinal Bank, he heard the sund f smene trying t start a car. He tried again and again but culdn’t get the car mving. Arthur turned and lked inside at the face f a yung man wh lked wrried. Arthur stpped and asked, “It lks like yu’ve gt a prblem,” Arthur said.“I’m afraid s. I’m in a big hurry and I can’t start my car.”
“Is there smething I can d t help?” Arthur asked. The yung man lked at the tw suitcases in the back seat and then said,” Thanks. If yu’re sure it wuldn’t be t much truble, yu culd help me get these suitcases int a taxi.”“N truble at all. I’d be glad t help.”The yung man gt ut and tk ne f the suitcases frm the backseat. After placing it n the grund, he turned t get the ther ne. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the lng lud nise f an alarm.
It was frm the bank. There had been a rbbery(抢劫)!Park Avenue had been quiet a mment befre. Nw the air was filled with the sund f the alarm and the shuts f peple running frm all directins. Cars stpped and the passengers jined the crwd in frnt f the bank. Peple asked each ther ,“What happened?” But everyne had a different answer.Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned t lk at the bank and walked right int the yung wman in frnt f him.
She lked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised.” Why is she lking at me like that?” He thught. “The suitcase! She thinks I’m the bank thief!”Arthur lked arund at the crwd f peple. He became frightened, and withut anther thught, he started t run.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:As he was running, Arthur heard the yung man shuting behind,“Stp,stp!”_______________________________________________________________________Paragraph 2:The taxi stpped in frnt f the Plice Statin
原文所给关键词分类：地点：Park Avenue, the bank人物：The yung man, peple, the bank thief事件：suitcases, in the back seat, lud nise f an alarm, rbbery, the shuts在续写时，除了注意原文给出的关键词，还需要注意以下线索：1. Why did the yung man lk wrried?2. What happened? But everyne had a different answer.3. Arthur became frightened and withut anther thught, he started t run.
One pssible versin：As he was running, Arthur heard the yung man shuting behind,” Stp, stp! ”And als at the mment, Arthur suddenly realized that the yung man might be the bank rbber. S Arthur didn’t stp, but cntinued t run until he saw a taxi. He stpped it, jumped in with the suitcase and said t the driver, “G t the plice statin, please. The man shuting behind is the bank thief!’’ The taxi raced away like the wind.
The taxi stpped in frnt f the Plice Statin and Arthur tld the plice what had happened. Obviusly, the plice had already learned abut the rbbery. They pened the suitcase and there was a large sum f mney inside, as Arthur had expected. Then the plice asked Arthur t describe the yung man and the ther suitcase. Later, with the infrmatin, the plice caught the rbber. The plice and the bank bth thanked Arthur a lt. (Wrds 153)
明确读后续写的评分标准
评分: 先根据整体情况对文章进行定档，然后依据该档的相应要求来确定或调节档次，最后打分。打分主要从续写内容、词汇语法、篇章结构三方面考虑。1.创造情节的质量、续写的完整性及与原文情境的融洽度。2.词汇、语法的准确性、恰当性及多样性。3.上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
*1)内容上鼓励大胆想象，有创新意识(不离奇，重逻辑)，情节丰富，尽可能合理展开，并注意前后文呼应，与原文融洽度高。*2)写作尽可能传递正能量.要提炼有思想性、体现价值观和传递正能量的元素(例如珍爱生命，学会合作，学会感恩等)*3)记叙文语言表达流畅，避免低级语法错误，注意连接词的正确使用，使上下文连贯；注意句子结构的多样性和语言的丰富性。*4)检查，誊写---检查文章的连贯性、逻辑性，规范性。最后誊写要做到字迹工整，清晰美观。
反思学生续写中存在的主要问题及应对措施
*阅读方面，学生的问题主要是词汇贫乏和阅读能力不够或时间紧张没有意识到解读文本的重要性；*续写写作部分，主要在内容(逻辑性、合理性)，词汇和语法(丰富、准确)，以及语篇(连贯性，前后呼应)这三大方面存在问题
内容(逻辑性、合理性)---情节构建中的问题
*文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离。*情节没有得以展开，体现不出丰富新颖。*所创设的情境违背真实生活，缺乏合理性。*融洽度不高，衔接不合理。*大量对话无意义，段落间分布不均衡。*主题升华牵强或跑偏。