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押天津卷第61题
书面表达（短文投稿）

应用文是最贴近日常生活的文体，它包括通知、广告、便条、申请书、个人简介、商品说明与介绍、新闻报道、短文投稿、发言稿等，形式多样，题材各异，如图示、表格等。天津新高考英语应用文写作创设了接近现实生活的交际语境，明确了交际场合与参与人的身份，注重在真实的任务和情景中考查考生的语言表达能力。最近两年天津高考英语应用文写作以书信和电子邮件类为主，以发言稿和短文投稿为辅，既体现了天津新高考的稳定性，又展现出了考查主题新的变化。短文投稿，通常会有特定的主题，如你最喜欢的中国节日、想去的地方、最敬爱的人或者外国文化栏目约稿等等。

题型
体裁
话题
分值
2020.05
应用文



2020.07
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2021.03
应用文
短文投稿
介绍一个国内你喜欢或去过的地方
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2021.06
应用文




短文投稿的写作，一定注意以下几个要点，才能写出高分作文。短文投稿的话题写作上基本类似于书信类，不过在表达上可能人称需要换一下，书信格式需要删除即可。内容上基本是写一篇相关话题的小短文，以记叙文或者议论文为主。考生生需要掌握相关词汇，句式用法以及出彩句式。短文投稿类应用文写作可采用“三段式”行文结构：
首段
开门见山，点明投稿约稿目的
主体
介绍稿件要点内容
尾段
表达期望祝福
[审题谋篇] 第一步： 审题。审题的目的是获取重要信息。定时态，一般来说人称为第一人称，时态为一般现在时，一般过去时和一般将来时。第二步：布局段落，确定主要段落，次要段落，段落数量。第三步：确定关键词汇和短语。第四步：确定较为高级的句子，如定语从句、倒装句和强调句等。第五步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连接词进行过渡衔接：After that, besides, however。第六步：注意书写，保持卷面整洁，避免划线，乱擦。






Passage 1（2021•天津3月卷•第61题）
假设你是晨光中学的李津。我市为外国友人提供生活信息的某英文网站新增了 《最美中华》栏目，请你给该栏目投稿，介绍一个国内你喜欢或去过的地方。内容包括：
1. 该地方的基本情况(如名称、地理位置等)；
2. 该地方的特色(如文化、景点等)；
3. 你对该地方的印象和感受。
注意：
1. 词数不少于100；
2. 可适当加入细节，使内容充实、行文连贯。
3. 开头和结尾巳给出，不计入总词数。
A Beautiful Place in China
March 19, 2021
By Li Jin
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【参考范文】
A Beautiful Place in China
March 19, 2021
By Li Jin
Sichuan Province is located in southwestern part of China. It enjoys many world-famous places of interest, such as Jiuzhaigou and Dujiangyan Irrigation project.
Jiuzhaigou National Park is a nature reserve in the north of Sichuan Province. What is the most impressive is its many multi-level waterfalls and colorful lakes. What’s more , walking in the nature reserve, you have a chance to see rare animals like giant pandas, golden monkeys. There are also many species of rare plants protected here. Another famous scenic spot is Dujiangyan Irrigation Project. It dates from over 2,000 years ago. However, it is still playing an important part in irrigation today.
I’m sure the visitors will be amazed by the beautiful scenery in Jiazhaigou as well as the construction Dujiangyan Irrigation Project.
【语篇分析】
本篇书面表达属于短文投稿。要求给英文网站《最美中华》栏目投稿，介绍介绍一个国内你喜欢或去过的地方。
【详解】
第一步：审题
体裁：说明文
时态： 一般现在时
结构：总分法
第一段是文章的总起段，说明四川省有很多著名的景点；第二段介绍景点九寨沟和都江堰灌溉工程，第三部分说明你对该地方的印象和感受。
要求：
1. 说明四川省有很多著名的景点
①四川的地理位置：中国西南部
②著名景点：九寨沟、都江堰灌溉工程
2. 介绍景点九寨沟和都江堰灌溉工程
① 九寨沟是自然保护区
②给人印象最深的层层叠叠的瀑布和五颜六色的湖泊，有很多珍稀动植物
③都江堰灌溉工程始于2000多年前，现在仍然起着灌溉的作用
3. 你对该地方的印象和感受：九寨沟的美景和都江堰灌溉工程的建造会让你惊叹
第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）
be located in；world-famous；places of interest；a nature reserve ；impressive；multi-level waterfalls；have a chance to do…；rare animals；scenic spot；date from；play an important part in；be amazed by
第三步：连词成句
(1) Sichuan Province is located in southwestern part of China.
(2) It enjoys many world-famous places of interest, such as Jiuzhaigou and Dujiangyan Irrigation project.
(3)Jiuzhaigou National Park is a nature reserve in the north of Sichuan Province.
(4) What is the most impressive is its many multi-level waterfalls and colorful lakes.
(5) Walking in the nature reserve, you have a chance to see rare animals such as giant pandas, golden monkeys.
(6) There are many species of rare plants protected here.
(7) Another famous scenic spot is Dujiangyan Irrigation Project.
(8) It dates from over 2,000 years ago.
(9) It is still playing an important part in irrigation today.
(10) I’m sure the visitors will be amazed by its construction.
根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步：连句成篇
1.表递进关系：what is more
2.表转折关系：however
3.表示列举：such as, like
【点睛】
[高分句型1]
What is the most impressive is its many multi-level waterfalls and colorful lakes.（what引导的主语从句）
[高分句型2]
Walking in the nature reserve, you have a chance to see rare animals such as giant pandas, golden monkeys.（现在分词作状语）

Passage 1（2022届安徽省宣城市高三下学期第二次调研英语测试）
每年的4月23日为“世界读书日”。你校英文报以“我爱读书”为主题进行征文活动。请你为校报投稿。
内容包括：
1. 读书的重要性；
2. 简单介绍你喜欢的一本书。
注意：
1. 词数应为100左右。
2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
I love reading
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I loving reading
As a book lover, I read all the time.
Why is reading so attractive to me? For starters, reading helps me discover a new world, a world of dreams and magic. Another reason is that reading is fun, not because it tells me something, but because it stirs my imagination. It can also allow for creative and critical thinking.
When it comes to my favorite book, the answer must be Charlotte’s web. Although it is a kid’s book, I believe it will stay with me as I grow up. I like Dr. Dorian very much. What he teaches me is trying not to fear what I don’t understand. When Fern’s mother worries about Fern’s talking with animals, Dr. Dorian comforts her even though people think a doctor must know everything, he never lets it worry him because he can’t make it, which really relaxes Fern’s mother. It helps me too.
Keep reading, making yourself a better person.
【解析】
【导语】
本篇书面表达属于开放性作文，要求作者向校英文报“我爱读书”为主题的征文活动进行投稿。
【详解】
1.词汇积累
吸引人的：attractive→appealing
激发：stir→inspire
害怕：fear→be afraid of
即使：even though→even if
2.句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：I like Dr. Dorian very much. What he teaches me is trying not to fear what I don’t understand.
拓展句：I like Dr. Dorian very much because what he teaches me is trying not to fear what I don’t understand.
【点睛】
[高分句型1] Another reason is that reading is fun, not because it tells me something, but because it stirs my imagination. (运用了that引导表语从句和because引导原因状语从句)
[高分句型2] Although it is a kid’s book, I believe it will stay with me as I grow up. (运用了although/as引导状语从句和省略连接词的宾语从句)
Passage 2（2021届天津市南开区高三下学期二模）
假如你是李津。你校的英语校报最近新开辟了“中国历史上的名人”(A Famous Figure in Chinese History)栏目。现请你给该栏目投稿，介绍一位你喜欢的中国历史人物。内容包括：
1. 该人物是谁；
2. 该人物的贡献：
3. 该人物对你的影响。
注意：
1. 词数不少于100字;
2. 可适当加入细节，使内容充实、行文连贯。
3. 开头和结尾巳给出，不计入总词数。
A Famous Figure in Chinese History
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May 20, 2022
by Li Jin
【参考范文】
A Famous Figure in Chinese History
As for my favorite figure in Chinese history, it must be Wei Yuan, a great thinker in the late Qing Dynasty. He was the first person that opened his eyes to see the world in modern China and he, in his book，HaiguoTuzhi(Maps and Records of the World)introduced modern technologies and ideas to China,which opened our eyes to the world. At the same time, he actively asked the Qing government to carry out reform focusing on the reform of the economic field. In fact,he inspires me to major in English in college to be a bridge between China and the world.
                                                                                                     May 20, 2022
by Li Jin
【语篇分析】
这是一篇短文投稿文，考生所在学校的英语校报最近新开辟了 “中国历史上的名人”(A Famous Figure in Chinese History)栏目。现请你给该栏目投稿，介绍一位考生喜欢的中国历史人物。
【详解】
1. 词汇积累
与此同时：at the same time→in the meantime
集中：focus on→concentrate on
事实上：in fact→as a matter of fact
实施：implement→carry out
2. 句式拓展
合并简单句
原句：In fact, he inspires me to major in English in college to be a bridge between China and the world.
拓展句：In fact, it is he that inspires me to major in English in college to be a bridge between China and the world.
【点睛】
[高分句型1] He actively asked the Qing government to carry out reform focusing on the reform of the economic field（现在分词作定语）
[高分句型2] He was the first person that opened his eyes to see the world in modern China and he, in his book，HaiguoTuzhi(Maps and Records of the World)introduced modern technologies and ideas to China,which opened our eyes to the world.（that引导的限制性定语从句和which引导的非限制性定语从句）
Passage 3（2022江西省宜春市高三下学期一模）
你校英语社团微信公众号拟向高三学生开展题为“一起向未来”的征文活动，请你写一篇短文投稿。内容包括：
1)未来梦想；2)努力方向；3)展望期待。
注意:1.词数100左右；
2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Together for a Shared Future
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【参考范文】
Together for a Shared Future
The theme of Together for a Shared Future has gone viral on and off line since 2022 Beijing Winter Olympic Games. As a Senior Three student, I dream of being admitted to college and long for a happy life in the future.
In order to turn my dream into reality, being disciplined is of great importance. For me, doing regular exercise comes first to keep healthy. Moreover, great efforts should be made for further study, and thus we will be equipped with knowledge and skills. On top of that, what’s stressed is to actively participate in social practice. It is through voluntary activities that cooperation and communication will bring out the best in us.
I strongly believe that our little action can make a big difference to the future. Let’s strive together!
【语篇分析】
这是一篇应用文。考生所在校英语社团微信公众号拟向高三学生开展题为“一起向未来”的征文活动，请考生写一篇短文投稿。
【详解】
1. 词汇积累
保持健康：keep fit→keep healthy
装备：be furnished with→be equipped with
参加：take part in→participate in
认为：figure→believe
2. 句式拓展
合并简单句
原句： As a Senior Three student, I dream of being admitted to college and long for a happy life in the future.
拓展句：As a Senior Three student, what I dream of is to be admitted to college and long for a happy life in the future.
【点睛】
[高分句型1]. It is through voluntary activities that cooperation and communication will bring out the best in us. (强调句式)
[高分句型2]. I strongly believe that our little action can make a big difference to the future. (that引导的宾语从句)

Passage 1
近几年，越来越多的优秀国产主旋律电影把“中国故事”、“中国精神” 讲得越来越精彩、生动。上周日，你校组织了一场观影活动。现你校校报英文专栏征稿，请就此用英语写一篇短文，内容包括：
1. 影片：长津湖；
2. 影片的主要内容（抗美援朝最惨烈的战斗之一，志愿军身着单衣在极寒环境下，凭着钢铁意志扭转
了战局）；
3. 你的感受（勿忘历史，铭记英烈，维护和平等等）。
注意：
1. 词数100左右；
2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3. 开头已给。
提示词：The Battle at Lake Changjin;The War to Resist US Aggression and Aid Korea
Last Sunday, we watched an epic war film named The Battle at Lake Changjin at the school hall.
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【参考范文】
Last Sunday, we watched an epic war film named The Battle at Lake Changjin at the school lecture hall. The blockbuster glorifies Chinese sacrifices and heroism during the War to Resist US Aggression and Aid Korea.
A crucial victory for the Chinese side, the historic battle saw the CPV overcome long odds to successfully blow up the Shuimen Bridge and push US military forces into retreat. In order not to expose the target, all 125 officers and soldiers remained motionless in severely cold winter with temperature of around -40℃. Although they were frozen to the ground, they were still in combat posture, as if ready to charge.
It is not the film itself that makes us moved, but the heroes of the war years who fought bloodily for our country and the people. The real battlefield is definitely far more impressive than the scene in the film. They risked their lives to win us a peaceful life, hoping the next generation no longer has to live through war. The stories deserve to be heard by us and history should never be forgotten.
【语篇分析】
本篇书面表达属于记叙文，要求考生写一篇记录观影活动的文章，内容包括：1. 影片：长津湖；2. 影片的主要内容（抗美援朝最惨烈的战斗之一，志愿军身着单衣在极寒环境下，凭着钢铁意志扭转了战局）；3. 你的感受（勿忘历史，铭记英烈，维护和平等等）。
【详解】
1. 词汇积累
撤退：retreat→withdraw
保持：remain→keep
感动的：moved→touched
为了不：in order not to→so as not to
2. 句式拓展
合并简单句
原句：The real battlefield is definitely far more impressive than the scene in the film. They risked their lives to win us a peaceful life, hoping the next generation no longer has to live through war.
拓展句：The real battlefield where they risked their lives to win us a peaceful life, hoping the next generation no longer has to live through war, is definitely far more impressive than the scene in the film.
【点睛】
[高分句型1]Although they were frozen to the ground, they were still in combat posture, as if ready to charge.（运用了although引导的让步状语从句）
[高分句型2]It is not the film itself that makes us moved, but the heroes of the war years who fought bloodily for our country and the people.（运用了强调句和who引导的定语从句）
Passage 2
近日，某报社开展了以“Sports Make Me Happy”为主题的征文大赛，请你根据主题及以下内容投稿：
1. 强调运动的重要性；
2. 简述你最喜欢的一项运动；
3. 号召大家积极参加运动；
注意：
1. 词数100字左右
2. 标题已给出，文中不得透漏个人信息和学校名称。
Sports Make Me Happy
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【参考范文】
Sports Make Me Happy
I enjoy sports like tennis, basketball and swimming. But my favourite sport is playing basketball. I like sports because they can make me stronger and healthier. Besides, through sports, I can relax myself. I can forget unhappy things. What’s more, I can make many new friends in doing sports. We play together and then talk with each other. I feel very happy and excited when I am doing sports. So sports make me very happy.
【语篇分析】
本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生针对以“Sports Make Me Happy”为主题的征文大赛，根据主题及给出的内容投稿。
【详解】
1.词汇积累
喜欢：enjoy→ be fond of
此外：besides→ what’s more
放松：relax→ release
交谈：talk with→ communicate with
2.句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：Besides, through sports, I can relax myself. I can forget unhappy things.
拓展句：Besides, I can relax myself and forget unhappy things when I do sports.
【点睛】
【高分句型1】I like sports because they can make me stronger and healthier.（运用了because引导的原因状语从句）
【高分句型2】I feel very happy and excited when I am doing sports.（运用了when引导的时间状语从句）
Passage 3
北京成功申办2022年冬奥会(Beijing Winter Olympics)，某英文报开设了一个我最喜欢的体育运动员专栏。请用英语写一篇短文，介绍你最喜爱的体育运动员谷爱凌。
要点如下：
1. 该人物的基本信息。
2. 该人物在运动生涯中所取得的成就。
3. 你喜欢她的理由。
注意：
1. 词数100字左右；
2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
提示：
1. 她的母亲是中国人，父亲是美国人，她从父母那里发现了对运动的热爱；
2. 她的坚持、热爱和专业技巧让她获得了世界冠军（champion）；
3. 她的座右铭（motto）:如果一切都简单，我们也就不会有梦想。
提示词：对...热爱show strong passion in 滑雪 ski
致力于 devote oneself to sth. 为祖国而竞赛 compete for our nation
面对挑战和压力 face challenge and pressure 追求 v. pursue
实现某人的梦想 achieve one’s goal 为梦想而努力 struggle for on
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【参考范文】
Aileen Gu, also nicknamed “International Freestyle skier”, was born to a Chinese mother and American father, from whom she first discovered her love for the sport. When she was young, she showed strong passion in skiing. She has devoted great effort to skiing and was admitted to the national team eventually. In 2015, just a few months after she reached her first World Cup podium, the San Francisco native announced she was switching to compete for China instead of the US—a controversial decision that thrusted her firmly into the spotlight. But what impresses me most is her wonderful performance in 2022 Beijing Winter Olympics, when she faced great pressure from the French competitor. It is with great courage, outstanding professional skills, and perseverance, that she overcame all the difficulties and finally won the competition, becoming the world freestyle skiing champion.
Owing to that, her spirits will never stop influencing me, pushing me to work hard to achieve my goal. Aileen Gu has set an excellent example to us that whatever difficulties and ordinary appearance we have, or however frequently we are defeated,we can achieve what we pursuit in our life, as long as we are not disheartened and go on with our dreams. Her diverse talents to the world demonstrate her famous saying well, “if it were easy, it wouldn't be a dream”. From her motto, I would inspire myself to be a diligent man to struggle for my dream as well as for the human society.
【语篇分析】
本篇书面表达属于开放性作文，要求考生介绍最喜爱的体育运动员谷爱凌。
【详解】
1.词汇积累
致力于：devote oneself to=commit oneself to
最终：eventually→finally
竞赛：compete→contest
决定：decision→determination
2.句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：Owing to that, her spirits will never stop influencing me, pushing me to work hard to achieve my goal.
拓展句：Owing to that, her spirits will never stop influencing me, which will push me to work hard to achieve my goal.
【点睛】
[高分句型1] Aileen Gu, also nicknamed "International Freestyle skier", was born to a Chinese mother and American father, from whom she first discovered her love for the sport. (运用了过去分词作后置定语和from whom引导的非限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2] It is with great courage, outstanding professional skills, and perseverance, that she overcame all the difficulties and finally won the competition, becoming the world freestyle skiing champion. (运用了it强调句和现在分词作状语)
Passage 4
上周末，你班全体师生组织了一次环绕the City Lake的骑自行车观光活动。请你为班级的英语角写一篇英语短文，介绍这次活动。内容包括：
1. 活动目的；
2. 活动过程；
3. 个人感受；
注意：
1. 题目已给出。
2. 词数100左右；
3. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
A Cycling Tour
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【参考范文】
A Cycling Tour
With the aim to make our life colorful and enjoyable, a cycling tour was organized by our class last Sunday, which turned out to be an unforgettable experience.
As scheduled, we, together with our teachers, set off at 7:30 last Sunday at the school gate, rode orderly all the way, and finally arrived at the City Lake safely. To start with, we held a race down the bicycle path around the lake, which provided us great fun. Then we slowly rode to appreciate the fascinating scenery around us. What’s more, the teacher took a lot of precious photos of us.
Through this activity, not only did we refresh our minds, but also we fully experienced the pleasure of outdoor sports. Exhausted as we all were, the relaxing and meaningful ride strengthened the bond/relationship/connection among us. What a wonderful cycling tour!
【语篇分析】
本篇书面表达是一篇记叙文，要求考生为班级的英语角写一篇短文，介绍班级全体师生组织了一次环绕the City Lake的骑自行车观光活动。
【详解】
1.词汇积累
难忘的：unforgettable →memorable
出发：set off=set out
首先：to start with=first of all
最终：finally→eventually
2.句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：Then we slowly rode to appreciate the fascinating scenery around us.
拓展句：Then we slowly rode to appreciate the fascinating scenery around us, which was a feast for the eyes.
【点睛】
[高分句型1]
To start with, we held a race down the bicycle path around the lake, which provided us great fun.(which引导非限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2]
Through this activity, not only did we refresh our minds, but also we fully experienced the pleasure of outdoor sports.(not only置于句首使用部分倒装)
Passage 5
COVID-19的爆发改变了我们的生活，然而在防疫所带来的生活改变之中，有没有哪些是你希望继续保持的?请你以此为主题给校报专栏写一篇文章投稿。内容包括：
1. 疫情带给你的生活改变；
2. 防疫生活中的哪些做法是你希望继续保持的，说明理由。
注意：
1. 字数100左右；
2. 可适当添加细节，以使行文连贯。
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【参考范文】
Since the outbreak of COVID-19, our daily life has changed greatly. Because of the necessity of keeping social distance, I no longer hang out with my friends as often as before. In fear of the spread of virus, I wear masks every day, which makes me feel distant from others. In spite of the inconvenience, there is something I hope I can keep after the pandemic. Washing hands often is the first thing I should stick to, because personal hygiene is essential to our health. Second, stay with families often. During the lockdown period, I had no choice but to stay home, which gave me the chance to enjoy quality time with my families. That’s really an unforgettable experience.
COVID-19 pandemic will be a history, but there is something that we can learn from it and pass them down.
【语篇分析】
本篇书面表达属于开放性作文。要求考生给校报专栏投稿，说说疫情给生活带来的改变和防疫生活中的哪些做法是自己希望继续保持的。
【详解】
1.词汇积累
改变：change → alter
希望：hope → wish
必不可少的：essential → necessary
机会：chance → opportunity
2.句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：Because of the necessity of keeping social distance, I no longer hang out with my friends as often as before.
拓展句：I no longer hang out with my friends as often as before, because it is necessary to keep social distance.
【点睛】
[高分句型1] Since the outbreak of COVID-19, our daily life has changed greatly. (运用了since引导时间状语从句)
[高分句型2] During the lockdown period, I had no choice but to stay home, which gave me the chance to enjoy quality time with my families. (运用了which引导非限制性定语从句)
Passage 6
假设你是晨光中学的李津。你校英语社团的微信公众号正在开展以 “Changes in Our Life”为题的征文活动。要求同学们谈一谈这些年来，在生活方 面发生的、使人们受益的变化。现请你投稿，文章内容应包括：
1. 描述生活上发生的变化(两个方面)；
2. 这些变化给人们带来的好处；
3. 相信未来生活更加美好。
注意：
1. 词数不少于100；
2. 内容充实、行文连贯；
3. 题目已给出，不计入总词数。
Changes in Our Life
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By Li Jin
【参考范文】
Great changes have taken place in our life in recent years, among which the most impressive one is the change in modern network technology and transportation mode.As for the modern network technology, I think we have experienced it. We can shop online and keep abreast of the news and events at home and abroad.As for the mode of transportation, with the improvement of living standard, people pay more attention to green travel, Shared bikes and some public transportation tools are becoming very popular.
These changes make our life more convenient and greatly improve work efficiency and life efficiency.It is also more in line with the concept of environmental protection.
I believe that through the efforts of our generation, we will make life better and happier.
【语篇分析】
这是一篇短文投稿，要求考生谈一谈这些年来，在生活方面发生的、使人们受益的变化。
【详解】
第一步：审题
类别：提纲类
时态：根据提示，时态应为一般过去时、一般现在时和一般将来时。
结构：总分法
   总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。
要求：1. 描述生活上发生的变化(两个方面)；
       2. 表明变化给人们带来的好处；
       3. 表达相信未来生活更加美好之情。
第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）
Change;   take place;   modern network technology;   transportation mode;   As for;   experience;   shop online;   keep abreast of;   at home and abroad;   living standard;     pay more attention to;   Shared bikes;   environmental protection;
第三步：连词成句
1. Great changes have taken place in our life in recent years, among which the most impressive one is the change in modern network technology and transportation mode.
2. We can shop online and keep abreast of the news and events at home and abroad.
3. with the improvement of living standard, people pay more attention to green travel.
4. Shared bikes and some public transportation tools are becoming very popular.
5. These changes make our life more convenient and greatly improve work efficiency and life efficiency.
6. It is also more in line with the concept of environmental protection.
7. I believe that through the efforts of our generation, we will make life better and happier.
根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）
1. 表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last
2. 表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,
3. 表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…
4. 表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，
第五步：润色修改
【点睛】
范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多主从复合句，如：Great changes have taken place in our life in recent years, among which the most impressive one is the change in modern network technology and transportation mode.这句话运用了which引导的非限定性定语从句。使用了一些固定词组，如take place，keep abreast of，at home and abroad等。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。