专题03 户外冒险类-备战2023高考读后续写真题逐步解析专练

这是一份专题03 户外冒险类-备战2023高考读后续写真题逐步解析专练，共9页。试卷主要包含了1 整体把握， 一片漆黑立刻笼罩了整个森林等内容，欢迎下载使用。
（2016年10月浙江卷）
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tm, had driven three hurs t camp vernight by a lake in the frest. Unfrtunately, n the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started t quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was s angry that she said t Tm, “I’m ging t find a better spt fr us t camp” and walked away.
With n path t fllw, Jane just walked n fr quite a lng time. After she had climbed t a high place, she turned arund, hping t see the lake. T her surprise, she saw nthing but frest and, far beynd, a snwcapped muntain tp. She suddenly realized that she was lst.
“Tm!” she cried. “Help!”
N reply. If nly she had nt left her mbile phne in that bag with Tm. Jane kept mving, but the farther she walked, the mre cnfused she became. As night was beginning t fall, Jane was s tired that she had t stp fr the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much t be with Tm and her family. She wanted t hld him and tell him hw much she lved him.
Jane rse at the break f day, hungry and thirsty. She culd hear water trickling (滴落)smewhere at a distance. Quickly she fllwed the sund t a stream. T her great jy, she als saw sme berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling strnger nw, Jane began t walk alng the stream and hpe it wuld lead her t the lake.
As she picked her way carefully alng the stream, Jane heard a helicpter. Is that fr me? Unfrtunately, the trees made it impssible fr peple t see her frm abve. A few minutes later, anther helicpter flew verhead. Jane tk ff her yellw bluse, thinking that she shuld g t an pen area and flag them if they came back again.
But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again.
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It was daybreak when Jane wke up.
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2.1 整体把握：
2.2逐句写作：
第一段：
1. 一片漆黑立刻笼罩了整个森林。
Immediately, an abslute darkness ruled the frest.
2. 简，精疲力竭，害怕，躺在一块石头旁边，想念她遥远的家人。
Jane, exhausted and scared, lay dwn near a stne, missing her family at a distance.
3. 所有美好的回忆涌上心头，她忍不住哭了起来：“如果不是我和汤姆吵架，走开，爬到高处，我就不会被困在这个可怕的地方，面对死亡的危险。”
All the fantastic memry crwded in and she culdn’t help crying, “Hadn’t I quarreled with Tm, walked away and climbed t the high place, I wuldn’t be trapped in this awful place, cnfrnted with the danger f dying.”
4. 她因无休止的焦虑而后悔，然后眼睛里噙着晶莹的泪水。
She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
第二段：
5. 尽管她很虚弱，她还是挣扎着站起来，继续寻求帮助。
Weak as she was, she struggled t her feet, cntinuing searching fr assistance.
6. 令她非常高兴的是，一架直升飞机一次又一次地从头顶飞过。
T her great jy, a helicpter was flying verhead again and again.
7. 她又急又兴奋，用自己的黄色上衣向直升机示意，不遗余力地大叫，以吸引别人的注意。
Eager and excited, she flagged her yellw bluse and spared n effrt t yell s as t attract thers’ attentin.
8. 幸运的是，她最终被发现并被带上了直升机。
Frtunately, she was eventually nticed and brught int the helicpter.
9. 在那里，她看到了她的丈夫，一个男人盯着她，脸上带着欣慰的表情。
There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expressin f relief.
10．她尽可能紧紧地抱住他，激动得说不出话来。
As tightly as pssible, she hugged him and was t thrilled t say anything.
11. 此外，他们同意不再吵架，决定过上最充实的生活。
Besides, they agreed never t quarrel again, determining t live the life t the fullest.
2.3 范文赏析
But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again. Immediately, an abslute darkness ruled the frest. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay dwn near a stne, missing her family at a distance. All the fantastic memry crwded in and she culdn’t help crying, “Hadn’t I quarreled with Tm, walked away and climbed t the high place, I wuldn’t be trapped in this awful place, cnfrnted with the danger f dying.” She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
It was daybreak when Jane wke up. Weak as she was, she struggled t her feet, cntinuing searching fr assistance. T her great jy, a helicpter was flying verhead again and again. Eager and excited, she flagged her yellw bluse and spared n effrt t yell s as t attract thers’ attentin. Frtunately, she was eventually nticed and brught int the helicpter. There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expressin f relief. As tightly as pssible, she hugged him and was t thrilled t say anything. Besides, they agreed never t quarrel again, determining t live the life t the fullest.
素材积累
3.1 情绪类素材积累
害怕/恐惧
害怕地 in panic 恐惧地 in terrr 充满恐惧 be full f fear / be struck with hrrr
感到害怕 fear creeps ver sb. 脸色变白 face turns pale
3.2 动作类素材积累
全身颤抖 tremble frm head t te 因为害怕而哽咽 chke with hrrr
心跳得厉害 heart beat vilently 深呼吸 take a deep breath
挥舞手臂 wave ne’s arms 一跃而起 spring t ne’s feet
摇摇晃晃站起来 stagger t ne’s feet 加快脚步 quicken ne’s steps
拖着疲劳的双腿 drag ne’s legs
他的心像小鹿乱撞。
His heart was beating wildly like a deer.
恐惧慢慢地蔓延到她身上。
Fear slwly creeps upn her.
他心中涌起一阵恐惧。
A fld f fear welled up in him.
她脸色苍白地站在那里，舌头打结。
Her face turned pale and std here tngue-tied.
她浑身颤抖，觉得如坐针毡。
She shk all ver, feeling like sitting n pins and needles.
四、模拟演练
练习（一）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节，使之构成一个完整的故事。
“I never wanted t cme n this stupid hiking trip anyway!” Jeff’s vice eched acrss the narrw canyn (峡谷). Nthing was as pretty as it had seemed when they first hiked this way t their campsite yesterday mrning. Befre, the rcks had been an interesting challenge. Nw, they were bstacles that were threatening their lives. Steep cliffs had earlier been natural curisities, but nw they were nature’s weapns, beating and rubbing Jeff and his father wh pushed thrugh as quickly as they culd.
His father stpped fr a third time, pale and ut f breath, and turned t lk at the 12-year-ld by. “This is hard n yu, sn, I knw. But yu’ve gt t cme thrugh with curage and calmness.” “But I’m scared! I dn’t even want t have curage!” he cmplained, turning his head the ther way, and wiped his eyes acrss his arm. “If nt curage, fine.” his father replied strictly. “Then have enugh lve fr yur sister t think this thrugh!” He gently placed his hand n the by’s shulder and cntinued, mre sftly this time. “I’m just hlding yu back. Yu’re yung, but yu’re strng and fast. D yu remember the way back frm here t the rad, if yu had t g alne?”
Jeff flashed back t the painful scene f his sister at their campsite this mrning. She’d been bitten by a snake, befre lng she culd barely mve, and the pain seemed t be getting wrse. She needed medical attentin right away, s leaving her at the campsite and seeking help was their nly chice. “Jeff? Jeff, culd yu d it? Culd yu climb up the canyn and make it withut me?”
Jeff lked past his father’s encuraging eyes t the end f the canyn, several miles away. He ndded slwly as the path and the plan began t take hld in his mind. “What was the name f that little twn we stpped in, Dad?” “Flint. We parked at the side f the main rad a few miles ut f twn.” Jeff thught abut this and then ndded.
Paragraph 1:
He waved gdbye t his father and mved n.
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Finally, he made it t the main rad.
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练习（二）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节，使之构成一个完整的故事。
“If mum finds ut that I'm ging t the beach, I'll be in big truble.” I said t myself sftly in a lw vice.
I went dwnstairs slwly and tried t walk casually int the kitchen. As I was walking twards the back dr, mum asked withut lking up frm her dish-washing, “Where are yu ging?” I answered back withut hesitatin, “I am ging t the garden t play.” After I gt ut f the kitchen, I breathed a sign f relief. My plan had wrked ut fine s far. I climbed the fence and jumped nt the muddy field next t my huse and started running twards the bus stp at tp speed.
After half an hur I was at the beach scanning the crwd fr my friends, Jimmy and Bbby. Tw yung men were racing in the canes (独木舟). After a while, I saw them near a ccnut tree. I ran twards them and gt int my swimming trunk (游泳裤). Fr abut an hur, we played vlleyball happily.
Suddenly, Bbby hit the ball t hard and the ball fell int the sea. Just as Bbby was ging t pick up the ball, the tide came in and carried the ball further and further away frm the shre. I wanted t shw ff my swimming skills s I declared t help get the ball fr him.
I dived int the water and started swimming at a steady pace. After swimming fr abut ten minutes, I became tired but when I saw that the ball was nly a few feet away frm me, I put in an extra burst f speed. Hwever, just as I was ging t get the ball, a very strng current swept the ball further away frm me. At that mment, a string f weed (海草) tangled (缠绕) up with my feet and I culd nt swim prperly.
I struggled t keep aflat but it was n use. “If I had listened t my parents, this wuld never have happened,” I thught silently.
注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:Finally, after struggling fr a minute r tw, I still gt pulled underwater.
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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Brady was a recently retired search and rescue dg. He was nt happy and missed his wner Al because Al had gne ut n a rescue missin withut him. Al’s nephew Steve tk Brady alng when he and his friend Zach went n a vernight hike. But suddenly Steve and Zach smelled smething burning and they realized that lightning had set the wds n fire. Wind-blwn flame had leaped frm the tp f ne tree t anther. The lng dry summer had turned the frest int a tinderbx and the thunderstrm wasn’t helping much. It had mre wind and lightning than rain. Zach pulled Steve’s arm.“Let’s g! We can make it back t the river we crssed tday.” Steve pulled Brady’s leash and their heads dwn against the strng fire-wind, they hurried dwn the path they had fllwed earlier. The air was full f smke，and pine branches brke frm burning trees with a crisp sund. Steve kept his eyes n the rute. All they had t d was t make it dwn t the river…
Brady barked a sharp warning. Ahead f them lay a dense curtain f smke acrss the path. They’d never make it thrugh that. They wuld have t find anther escape rute. The dg was pulling at his leash trying t draw them away frm the smke. This was what Brady was trained t d, and yet Steve was uneasy. It seemed t him they were mving away frm the river.
Brady lifted his head and smelled the smky wind. Suddenly, the dg ran away and disappeared. The bys yelled and shuted fr him，but he didn’t cme back.
They had n chice but t leave him behind. Heartsick, Steve and Zach went up a slpe. He culdn’t blame Brady fr panicking and escaping. He himself wanted t run even thugh he didn’t have a clue which way. They hadn’t gne far when there was a familiar bark, and Brady came running tward him.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: “Where’ve yu been?” Steve cried .
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Paragraph 2: Brady led them back dwn the slpe and int the trees.
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范文赏析
练习（一）
Paragragh 1: He waved gdbye t his father and mved n. With great cautin, he climbed ver sharp rcks, crawled thrugh dead branches and avided the dangerus creatures, making his way up. At ne pint, he stpped just t catch his breath when suddenly, he stumbled ver a rck and fell. A sharp pain went acrss his leg. “N, I can’s stp,” he thught, struggling t his feet. With bld dripping dwn his leg, he limped n. Rising stne by stne, he was clser and clser t the edge.
Paragraph 2: Finally, he made it t the main rad. Much t his disappintment, nt a single persn was in sight. He was just at a lss what t d when he heard the deafening nise f a vehicle. “A truck!” he exclaimed with excitement. Gathering all his energy, he yelled, waving bth his arms. The truck pulled ver. Anxiusly, Jeff explained what happened. The driver instantly called the lcal rescue team fr help. Eventually, Jeff, tgether with tw medical wrkers, hurried back t the campsite just in time t save his sister.
练习（二）
Finally, after struggling fr a minute r tw, I still gt pulled underwater. I tld myself I shuld never give up. Then I pulled the weed again with great effrts. The weed finally brke. I swam back t the surface t take a deep breath. I saw tw yung men in the canes, racing each ther. I was exhausted and shuted fr help. The tw men saw me and raced twards me. By the time they reached me, I had been already uncnscius.
When I wke up, I was in an empty rm lying n a bed. It was nt until a dctr came int the rm that I realized that I was in the hspital. Jimmy and Bbby tld me the tw yung men brught me t the shre and sent me t the hspital. After a few minutes, my parents with half angry and half wrried faces walked in. My parents sclded me fr running ut f the huse secretly but were als glad that I was nt seriusly injured. I will never frget that terrifying experience. Neither will I ever want t shw ff again.
练习（三）
“Where’ve yu been?”Steve cried. Brady stpped directly in frnt f him and started pushing him back tward the slpe they’d just climbed. When Steve still didn’t get it, Brady grabbed the by’s jeans and pulled harder. The message was clear, but Steve hesitated. Of curse he remembered what his uncle had said abut Brady saving his life, but that had been a lng time ag. Was he still sharp enugh t get them thrugh this? Brady pulled again, urgently. “OK, big guy,” Steve decided.
Brady led them back dwn the slpe and int the trees. Several times the big dg stpped t get his escape rute. Often he changed directin. Hw lng they’d walked Steve had n idea. He just held nt Brady’s leash with ne hand and kept putting ne ft in frnt f the ther. He was almst numb when he heard the wnderful sund f rushing water. The river! With a yell the bys ran unsteadily frward until they jumped in cl, running water. “Brady, yu did it!”
主题语境
人与自我--生活与学习--个人、家庭、社区及学校生活
语篇话题
本篇读后续写为记叙文，文章大意为夫妻二人去露营，因为吵架女人独自离开，却在森林中迷路，历经周折最后被营救并且与丈夫重聚。
情节梳理
故事要素
when：One weekend in July
where：in the frest
wh：A cuple: Jane and Tm
what：Jane and Tm went camping but quarreled, and Jane left alne and was lst in the frest.
情节走向
通过第一段首句“But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again.”可预测，续写思路为：黑夜降临--Jane害怕--回忆--后悔--入睡
通过第二段首句“It was daybreak when Jane wke up.”可预测，续写思路为：寻求帮助--飞机飞过--示意飞机--被飞机发现并营救--夫妻重聚