高中英语：高考写作精练
展开【写作任务】 假设你是高三学生陈辉，你在某英文杂志社Help栏目中Talk with Mr. Helper的主持人Mr. Smith帮助下减轻了压力，目前在备考中一切顺利。现在请你给Mr. Smith写一封感谢信，要点包括：1. 感谢Mr. Smith；2. 如何减轻压力；目前学习状况；3. 再次表达感谢。注意：1. 词数100左右(信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数)；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。Dear Mr. Smith,I’m Chen Hui, a student that you helped three weeks ago. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours, Chen Hui写作步骤Step 1: 审题(1)体裁：此书面表达要求写一封信表达感谢，属于应用文；(2)人称：以第一人称和第二人称为主；(3)时态：以一般过去时为主。Step 2: 内容要点及写作顺序(1)表达感谢；(2)“我”采纳了 减压 的建议；(3)参加体育运动减压；(4)听音乐放松自己；(5)“我”已改变对考试的态度；(6)“我”在上周测试中得了第一名；(7)没有你的帮助，“我”不会取得这么快的进步；(8)“我”目前忙于备考，但也会抽时间参加社交活动；(9)“我”相信在即将到来的考试中“我”会取得成功；(10)再次致谢。 Step 3: 注意事项(1)分段：此感谢信正文可以分为三段。第一段：表明写信目的——感谢；第二段：如何减轻压力并告知对方自己目前的学习情况；第三段：再次致谢。(2)感谢信写作要有诚意，语言要具体，不能落空或落于俗套。(3)行文思路要清晰，拓展信息要合理，用语要简洁、精炼，避免使用繁杂句式，前后要照应，句、段之间要使用恰当的衔接成分。参考范文Dear Mr. Smith,I’m Chen Hui, a student that you helped three weeks ago. I’m writing to express my deep appreciation of the kind help you offered to me. Having consulted you, I followed your advice on how to cope with stress. To begin with, I took some physical exercise, such as playing football. Additionally, by listening to music, I became relaxed. More importantly, I have changed my attitude toward exams. In the test held last week, I got the first place. Without your help, I wouldn’t have made such rapid progress. At present, while occupied with my studies, I manage to spare some time to participate in some social activities. I’m convinced that I’ll succeed in the coming exam. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you. Yours, Chen Hui点评(1)此感谢信写作正文结构安排恰当，拓展信息合理，表达准确、语气恰当。正文共分三段。第一段：表明写信目的——感谢；第二段：如何减轻压力并告知对方自己目前的学习情况；第三段：再次致谢。(2)范文使用的亮点词语：appreciation, consult, cope with, additionally, rapid, occupied with, spare及participate in等。亮点句式：Having consulted you… (V-ing结构作状语), Without your help, I wouldn’t have made such rapid progress (虚拟语气的使用), …while occupied with my studies …( 状语从句 的省略)等。 【一句多译】1. Having consulted you, I followed your advice on how to cope with stress.◆After I consulted you, I followed your advice on how to deal with stress.◆After consulting you, I took your advice on how to cope with stress.2. More importantly, I have changed my attitude toward exams.◆What is more important is that I have changed my attitude toward exams.◆I have changed my attitude toward exams, which is more important. ◆It is more important that I have changed my attitude toward exams.3. Without your help, I wouldn’t have made such rapid progress.◆If it hadn’t been for your help, I wouldn’t have made such rapid progress.◆If you hadn’t helped me, I wouldn’t have made such rapid progress.◆Had you not helped me, I wouldn’t have made such rapid progress.◆But for your help, I wouldn’t have made such rapid progress.4. At present, while occupied with my studies, I manage to spare some time to participate in some social activities.◆At present, while I’m occupied with my studies, I manage to spare some time to participate in some social activities.◆At present, although I’m occupied with my studies, I manage to spare some time to participate in some social activities.
