高考英语书面表达概要写作——智能手机上瘾综合症 课件

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Review fr genre(体裁):
A. expsitin(说明文)B. narratin(记叙文)C. argumentatin(议论文)
玉城中学 侯芳
Nwadays ,the Spring Festival parties are quite different frm befre.Peple are nt tgether in the same hme but in cyberspace.It is anther symptm f the s-called smartphne reliance syndrme （智能手机依赖症）.Fr many peple,they use the smartphne in ffice,at hme,even n the rad;they play with it while eating ,drinking,even while bathing.But really it is nt the fault f ur smartphnes,which were created t help us cmmunicate with ne even thusand f kilmeters away and bring mre cnvenience t ur lives. Irnically,we feel mre distanced frm each ther in the real wrld.The reasn is that we have mre chices nw,and we have t keep up with virtual cnversatins fr fear f missing smething.Smartphnes and ther smart devices have revlutinized the way we interact with each ther.We have adapted t the technlgy. Hwever,ne grup risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly d nt accept new technlgies as fast as the yunger and they can nt enjy the cnvenience f new technlgies either.They even dn’t access the Internet much.Accrding t a survey released by China Internet Netwrk Infrmatin Center,there wer731 millin netizens in China by the end f 2016,but nly 4percent were abve the age f 60.The elderly face the lneliness f being “left behind”by their children wrking in cities far away. Spring Festival is almst the nly chance fr them t talk with the yunger,yet smartphnes rb them f this pprtunity. The nly way the yunger and elder generatins can meaningfully interact is that the frmer put dwn their smartphnes during this hliday and talk with the elderly face t face.And it will als d us a favr.Actually, we wn’t be the digital pineers in 30years.It is ur children that will create and apply the latest technlgies,and we,slw t accept new things,will be left t ur wn devices.If we hpe ur children will talk with us 30years later,we need t set a gd example fr them nw.
Review fr tpic:
1Nwadays ,the Spring Festival parties are quite different frm befre.Peple are nt tgether in the same hme but in cyberspace.It is anther symptm f the s-called smartphne reliance syndrme （智能手机依赖症）.Fr many peple,they use the smartphne in ffice,at hme,even n the rad;they play with it while eating ,drinking,even while bathing.But really it is nt the fault f ur smartphnes,which were created t help us cmmunicate with ne even thusand f kilmeters away and bring mre cnvenience t ur lives. 2Irnically,we feel mre distanced frm each ther in the real wrld.The reasn is that we have mre chices nw,and we have t keep up with virtual cnversatins fr fear f missing smething.Smartphnes and ther smart devices have revlutinized the way we interact with each ther.We have adapted t the technlgy. 3Hwever,ne grup risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly d nt accept new technlgies as fast as the yunger and they can nt enjy the cnvenience f new technlgies either.They even dn’t access the Internet much.Accrding t a survey released by China Internet Netwrk Infrmatin Center,there were731 millin netizens in China by the end f 2016,but nly 4percent were abve the age f 60.The elderly face the lneliness f being “left behind”wrking in cities far away. Spring Festival is almst the nly chance fr them t talk with the yunger,yet smartphnes rb them f this pprtunity. 4The nly way the yunger and elder generatins can meaningfully interact is that the frmer put dwn their smartphnes during this hliday and talk with the elderly face t face.And it will als d us a favr.Actually, we wn’t be the digital pineers in 30years.It is ur children that will create and apply the latest technlgies,and we,slw t accept new things,will be left t ur wn devices.If we hpe ur children will talk with us 30years later,we need t set a gd example fr them nw.
A phenmenn(现象)
Disadantage 1
Disadantage2
The slutin/suggestin
_________________f this phenmenn
2 shrtcmings
Review fr structure:
Para.1(总)- Para.2, 3, (分)-Para.4(总)
Review fr cntentsPara1:
Nwadays ,the Spring Festival parties are quite different frm befre.Peple are nt tgether in the same hme but in cyberspace.It is anther symptm f the s-called smartphne reliance syndrme （智能手机依赖症）.Fr many peple,they use the smartphne in ffice,at hme,even n the rad;they play with it while eating ,drinking,even while bathing.But really it is nt the fault f ur smartphnes,which were created t help us cmmunicate with ne even thusands f kilmeters away and bring mre cnvenience t ur lives.
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Peple_______________the smartphne.
are addicted t
are fascinated by
are keen n
are crazy abut
be created t=be designed t/be intended t
cmmunicate with=assciate with/cnnect with
the___________________ f the inventin f smartphnes
riginal purpse初衷
Tip 1:Fcus n signal wrds!
Hwever,they were designed t help peple assciate with friends far away and ffer us mre cnvenience.
But the riginal aim f the inventin f smartphnes is t allw us t interact with thers mre cnveniently.
At present,many peple are addicted t smartphnes. But they were intended t help peple interact with thers mre cnveniently.
While smartphnes were intended t interact with thers mre cnveniently,many f us are addicted t smartphnes presently/currently.
While/Thugh/Despite the fact that…
Tip 2:Be cncise（简洁的）！
Review fr cntentsPara2:
Irnically(讽刺地）,we feel mre distanced frm each ther in the real wrld.The reasn is that we have mre chices nw,and we have t keep up with virtual虚拟的 cnversatins fr fear f missing smething.Smartphnes and ther smart devices have revlutinized(变革v） the way we interact with each ther.We have adapted t the technlgy.
distant/unfamiliar
catch up with/keep pace with
fr fear that…
cmmunicate with
have adjusted t
Tpic sentence
In fact ,we feel distant frm thers because we chse t catch up with unreal cmmunicatin fr feat that we will miss sme imprtant things.
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have adjusted t
Unexpectedly,we dn’t feel clser t each ther because we hld smartphnes all the time s as nt t lse virtual cnnectins.
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Tip 3:Cnverse thinking(逆向思维) will make yur sentence mre natural.
Review fr cntentsPara3:
Hwever,ne grup risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly d nt accept new technlgies as fast as the yunger and they can nt enjy the cnvenience f new technlgies either.They even dn’t access the Internet much.Accrding t a survey released by China Internet Netwrk Infrmatin Center,there were731 millin netizens in China by the end f 2016,but nly 4percent were abve the age f 60.The elderly face the lneliness f being “left behind”by their children wrking in cities far away. Spring Festival is almst the nly chance fr them t talk with the yunger,yet smartphnes rb them f this pprtunity.
1dn’t accept new technlgies as fast as…
2can’t enjy the cnvenience f…
3dn’t access the Internet much
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Hwever,ne grup risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly d nt accept new technlgies as fast as the yunger and they can nt enjy the cnvenience f new technlgies either.They even dn’t access the Internet much.The elderly face the lneliness f being “left behind”by their children wrking in cities far away. Spring Festival is almst the nly chance fr them t talk with the yunger,yet smartphnes rb them f this pprtunity.
3dn’t surf the Internet much
Hwever,ne grup risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly d nt accept new technlgies as fast as the yunger and they can nt enjy the cnvenience f new technlgies either.They even dn’t access the Internet much. The elderly face the lneliness f being “left behind”by their children wrking in cities far away. Spring Festival is almst the nly chance fr them t talk with the yunger,yet smartphnes rb them f this pprtunity.
Nevertheless,the ld can’t fllw the new technlgies,which rids them f the chance t talk t the yung.
Sadly, the elderly fail t accept new things and dn’t surf the Internet ften,s that they are rbbed f the pprtunity t talk with their children face t face.
Tip 4:Learn t use Passive Vice !
Review fr cntentsPara4:
The nly way the yunger and elder generatins can meaningfully interact is that the frmer put dwn their smartphnes during this hliday and talk with the elderly face t face.And it will als d us a favr.Actually, we wn’t be the digital pineers in 30years.It is ur children that will create and apply the latest technlgies,and we,slw t accept new things,will be left t ur wn devices.If we hpe ur children will talk with us 30 years later,we need t set a gd example fr them nw.
set dwn/lay dwn/put aside/put away
Yung generatins shuld set dwn smartphnes and cmmunicate with ld generatins frequently.
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Thus/Therefre,yung parents need t put their phnes aside and have mre face-t- face talks with senirs,benefiting the elderly,themselves and the next generatin.
Tip 5: Prper linking wrds make yur writing cherent(条理分明的;连贯的)!
While smartphnes were intended t help peple interact with thers mre cnveniently,many f us are addicted t the smartphne. _________,we feel unfamiliar frm each ther because we hld smartphnes all the time s as nt t lse virtual cnnectins. ________,the ld can’t fllw the new trend,which rids them f the chance t talk with the yung. _________,yung generatins shuld lay dwn smartphnes and interact with ld generatins as ften as pssible.
Add linking wrds
每个要点都在回应主旨！
Plish yur summary
D the key pints summarize the whle paragraph prperly? Des each key pint include all the majr infrmatin?
1. Nwadays,peple wh hld parties are nt the same as befre, they use smartphnes when they d everything. (要点一) 2 .If we put dwn smartphnes nw,it will help us in 30 years.(要点四) 3 .It’s impssible fr kids t put dwn their phnes t talk with parents,especially at Spring Festival.(要点四)
4.Old peple shuld make effrts t learn new technlgies.(要点三) 5.In a wrd,it’s a nrmal phenmenn t be crazy abut smartphnes .(要点四)
Mre and mre peple tend t use the smartphne all the time,ignring everything arund them. Hwever, the elderly were left by their children wh are fascinated by Internet even at Spring Festival.Thus,it’s necessary fr us t stp using smart devices s that we can have a steady relatinship with ur parents and ur children.
Des this summary include all the key pints? （cmplete）
存在的问题 （内容）（6）漏要点二
Are there any mistakes in spelling, grammar r punctuatin? (crrect & cncise,nice)
1. As time ges by, we cmmunicate with thers mre cnvenient than befre.2. The elders can’t catch up the new tendency,which fcuses them t face lneliness.3. Recently,smartphne,which can link peple everywhere,has becme the cmmn thing when peple attend the parties.The smart prducts create a new way that peple can cmmunicate with each ther even they are very far.(37 wrds)
cnveniently词性错误
Is the linking wrd used prperly? (cherent)
Fearing that they will miss things is the reasn why peple feel strange.Thus, the ld lse the chance t cmmunicate with their children. (要点二和要点三)
存在的问题 （结构） 连词使用不当
Additinally/Mrever
Appreciate yur summary
cmplete,bjective
cncise, cl
*Cntent: all the main pints are cntained in yur summary; all the majr infrmatin is cntained in yur each main pint;all the pints are bjective. *Language:crrect (avid grammatical mistakes) cncise(简洁的)(40-80 wrds) *Structure: cherent（连贯的） (use crrect linking wrds)
Suggestins:
4c +1O原则：cmplete,crrect,cncise,chetent;OBJECTIVE