2023届高考英语二轮复习读后续写：家庭亲情惊讶篇课件

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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。2021新高考1卷 A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISEThe twins were filled with excitement as they thught f the surprise they were planning fr Mther’s Day. Hw pleased and prud Mther wuld be when they brught her breakfast in bed. They planned t make French tast and chicken prridge. They had watched their mther in the kitchen. There was nthing t it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what t d.
Read fr wh, when, where, what and prblems
Jenna and Jeff (twins)，mther, father
at 6 a.m n Mther's Day
in the kitchen
the prridge biled ver, bread turned black, Jeff's hand gt burnedthe kitchen was in a mess
Read fr theme
The twins were filled with excitement as they thught f the surprise they were planning fr Mther’s DayHw pleased and prud Mther wuld be when they brught her breakfast in bed. The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and wke their mther up.
They had watched their mther in the kitchen.The piece f bread in the pan had turned black as well
gratitude t mther's hard wrk
Husewrk shuld be learned and mastered
plt muntain
Read fr plts and emtins
Tip 1 利用plt muntian， 根据原文主要人物梳理原文情节发展线和情感发展线
①the twins planned t make breakfast
②the twins thught they knew hw t make
③The plan began well
④The bread gt burnt
⑤The prridge biled ver
⑦the secnd bread turned black
⑥Jeff's hand gt burned
disappinted, upset, discuraged
Read fr language
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went dwn the stairs quietly t the kitchen. They decided t bil the prridge first. They put sme rice int a pt f water and left it t bil while they made the French tast. Jeff brke tw eggs int a plate and added in sme milk. Jenna fund the bread and put tw slices int the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned n the secnd stve burner t heat up the frying pan. Everything was ging smthly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was t ht and the bread turned black within secnds. Jenna threw the burnt piece int the sink and put in the ther slice f bread. This time, she turned dwn the fire s it cked nicely.
描写双胞胎做早餐的动作细节描写，极具画面感。多处利用双连动词构成动作链：谓语动词A +and+ 谓语动词B
注意观察情感和场景细节描写
Then Jeff nticed steam shting ut f the pt and the lid starting t shake. The next minute, the prridge biled ver and put ut the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned ff the gas quickly. But the stve was a mess nw. Jenna tld Jeff t clean it up s they culd cntinue t ck the rest f the prridge. But Jeff’s hand tuched the ht burner and he gave a cry f pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cld water. Then she caught the smell f burning. Oh dear! The piece f bread in the pan had turned black as well.
利用间接引语描写人物对话
利用形容词、副词、动词表达人物情感
极具画面感的描写：有动作、声音（粥溢出的声音、Jeff手被烫疼的叫声、味道（糊了）
Read the given sentences 推测续写情节
As the twins lked arund them in disappintment, their father appeared.
父亲的出现使双胞胎面临的尴尬局面出现转机，他会做什么？
第一段重在解决问题侧重描写动作、和双胞胎由失望转为高兴的情感变化
What wuld their father d ?Wuld their father be willing t help them ut?Hw did the twins feel?Result---wh made the breakfast at last?
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and wke their mther up.
Prblems—Slutin
The kitchen was in a mess
the prriage biled ver
nt gd at cking
the bread gt burnt
make them again (father r the twins helped by their father)
began t learn under their father's guidance
What did the twins say? Hw did their mther react and feel? What did their father d and say?What did the twins d?What did the twins realize frm the experience?
双胞胎向妈妈献上母亲节惊喜的时刻到了
第二段重在描写一家人的温情侧重描写人物动作、神态和情感：惊喜、爱、温暖适当添加人物简短的对话
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISEThe twins were filled with excitement as they thught f the surprise they were planning fr Mther’s Day. Hw pleased and prud Mther wuld be when they brught her breakfast in bed. They planned t make French tast and chicken prridge. They had watched their mther in the kitchen. There was nthing t it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what t d.
标题的照应：续写第二段添加细节描写妈妈见到早餐后的惊喜
特定物品的照应：French tast and chicken prridge 二段描写 孩子们将吐司和鸡肉粥端给妈妈
二段可描写妈妈看到早餐端到床前时很快乐，又为孩子能做早餐而为孩子们骄傲
特定物品的照应：rice, egg, milk, fire, bread一段添加细节描写孩子们和父亲利用鸡蛋、牛奶等再次做早餐
Then Jeff nticed steam shting ut f the pt and the lid starting t shake. The next minute, the prridge biled ver and put ut the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned ff the gas quickly. But the stve was a mess nw. Jenna tld Jeff t clean it up s they culd cntinue t ck the rest f the prridge. But Jeff’s hand tuched the ht burner and he gave a cry f pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cld water. Then she caught the smell f burning. Oh dear! The piece f bread in the pan had turned black as well.
一段添加细节描写父亲让双胞胎打扫厨房（解决厨房一团糟的问题）
二段添加细节描写妈妈看到Jeff的被烫伤的手指，心疼感动的情节
情感细节描写：高兴、激动、惊喜，吃惊、感动、骄傲 动作细节描写：添加人物肢体动作适当的对话细节描写：父亲交代双胞胎打扫的话可 利用间接引语场景细节描写：父亲和双胞胎在厨房忙碌的场景 母亲享受早餐的场景
1.看到他们失望的表情，他建议他们把厨房打扫干净，而他帮他们给妈妈做早餐。①He __________________________, and advised them t clean up the kitchen while he helped them make breakfast fr Mther.② __________________________, he advised them t clean up the kitchen while he helped them make breakfast fr Mther.（非谓语动词做状语）
saw their disappinted faces
Seeing their disappinted faces
2.双胞胎准备好早餐托盘，加上一张他们做的漂亮的卡片，走出厨房。The twins prepared the breakfast tray, added a beautiful card they had made, and __________________________. (三连动词构成动作链）
stepped ut f the kitchen
3.当他们的母亲看到眼前美味而完美的早餐时，她的脸上闪过一丝惊喜。When their mther saw the delicius and perfect breakfast in frnt f her, ________________________________________________. (无灵主语句）4.空气中弥漫着诱人的早餐香味，她的目光落到了早餐托盘上。① An inviting smell f breakfast filled the air, and her eyes landed n the breakfast tray. （无灵主语句）②_____________________________________________________, her eyes landed n the breakfast tray. (独立主格结构）
a spark f surprise flashed acrss her face
An inviting smell f breakfast filling the air
5.她惊喜极了，于是兴奋地摇醒正在假装睡觉的父亲。①The surprise was s sweet that she excitedly shk Father, wh was pretending t be asleep. （结果状语从句）②__________________________________________________, wh was pretending t be asleep. (倒装句）6.他看到早餐时装出惊讶的样子。He faked _______________ when he saw the breakfast.
S sweet was the surprise that she excitedly shk Father
astnishment
活动场景9.詹娜与她父亲目光相遇，他们偷偷地互相眨了眨眼。Jenna caught her father’s eyes and they each ther secretly.10.得知事情经过后，她立刻站起来看了看男孩的手，感动的泪水滑下脸颊。“谢谢你，亲爱的!”妈妈说。After learning abut what happened, she rse quickly t gaze at the by's hand with ." Thank yu, my hney! “ said the mther.
mved tears rlling dwn her cheeks
照应首段给母亲准备breakfast in bed 的细节，衔接二段首句中的关键信息carried their breakfast
照应原文首段双胞胎计划给妈妈做吐司和鸡肉粥的细节。细节的照应
照应原文厨房粥溢出，面包糊了，厨房一团糟的细节细节的照应
照应标题中的Mther's Day 细节的照应
与标题中surprise的照应衔接
与一段中细节breakfast tray的照应衔接
对父亲眼神、动作、情感的描写，突出一个成全了孩子们准备母亲节惊喜的计划，体现一家人之间的爱