初中英语中考复习 10 励志故事 2021年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版）

这是一份初中英语中考复习 10 励志故事 2021年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版），共8页。

素材储备与写作指导
“励志奋斗”的话题在模考及中考的作文中也是屡见不鲜，“ wrk hard I never give up”等字眼都是这类文章的提示词。内容取材是比较容易的，人人都会有面对困难的时候，而学生所面临的困难无非是学习上停滞不前、朋友间存在误会、师生间发生摩擦、与父母意
见不合、生活道理理解不透等等。但是有困难也必定会有解决办法，安么是学生自己领悟，要么是别人施以授手。总之。在结构安排上，最后都会回归到克展因难、奋斗排搏的主题上语言方面，在平时要注意这类词汇表达的积累。
以下就用一个具体案例来分析如何写好类似文章。
实践案例
题目
Write a cmpsitin in at least 60 wrds n“
给予我力量”的短文，字数不得少于60个词。)gave me pwer". (写一篇题为在你的生活和学习中，肯定有过困难的时刻。在这样的时刻中，是什么给子了你力量，让你不放弃、不气馁并且坚持不懈地奋斗下去呢?请具体描述这样的时刻，讲述你如何获得力量、取得成功。
这篇半命题作文对审题的能力要求比较高，不仔细审题很有可能偏离话题、选错题材。从题目上就能看出来时态是过去时，再加上“具体描述这样的时刻”的要求，就更能确定这篇文章的重点在于描述一件过去发生的事情，在这个事件中要有困难产生、克服困难这样一个转折的过程，因此选材一定要注意选择态度积极向 上的话题，将其写成记叙文。然面叙事文章都是以借叙事来抒情，所以结尾部分注意要有表决心、话奋斗的励志语言。
段落结构
根据题目要求，可以参考以下结构进行写作:
第一部分The 1st part
补充题目，开篇点题。
Encuragement / Lve / Patience/ Hpe ... gave me pwer when I met with difficulties.
.. nce helped me slve prblems because it prvided me with strng pwer.
第二部分The2ndpart
描述过去发生的一次励志经历 。
Once, there was a difficult situatin in which I had n idea what t I was at the age
1 vercame the difficulties successfully just because .. gave me pwer.
第三部分The 3rd part
表达愿望或信心作为总结，首尾呼应。
Because f am mre cnfident nw.
Thanks t the pwer frm .. am nt afraid f.. any mre.
核心语汇
“disadvantage 1 shrtcming缺点、不足
.my ability t d我做..的能力
be satisfied / pleased with对满意
make up ne's mind t d ..下定决心做...
. decide t d decisin t d ..决定做
Be gd at d well in擅长
make prgress in 方面取得进步
make effrts t d ...努力做
take actin t d ...采取行动
further imprve ...进一步改
vercme difficulties克服困难
have cnfidence in ...对..有信心
thanks t ...多亏
cheer ... up鼓舞某人
slve / wrk ut the prblem解决问题
face / meet with 1 cme acrss the difficulty面对/遇到困难
difficulties and frustratins困难和挫折
under a lt f pressure在巨大压力下
参考句型
. is a kind f pwer which pushes me frward. ...是一种能促我前进的力量。
... can help me vercme the 能帮助我克服困难。
... make it pssible/ easier t d ...使做有可能更容易
.. plays an imprtant rle and can give me 作用重大，能给予我力量。
.. were just like a stream flwing int my heart cleaning up all my
如.股清泉流人我心、 去我所痛。
I believe that the mre I try, the better I will be. 我相信我会越挫越勇。
I will succeed as lng as I have a willing heart只要有心，我定成功。
习作1
My dream gave me pwer
Life was full f ups and dwns, s it is very cmmn fr me t meet with sme difficulties and frustratins. At such mments, it was dream that gave me pwer t hang in there instead f giving up.
Fr example, when I failed in an exam, 1 wuldn't be upset fr a lng time because my dream pushed me frward t make effrts.
Where there is a will,, there is a way. My dream plays an imprtant rle in my life and I believe my dream will eventually cme true.
点评:
这篇习作看似文字优美，但在内容的选择上不是很恰当。文章并没有记叙过去某一时刻发生的事情，没有“具体描述这样的时刻”，只提供了一个"fr example" 来泛泛而谈，并无代表性，这是审题上的失误。另外，“我的梦想给予我力量”也并没有合乎逻辑地表述出来，“梦想”是什么也没有具体表述。从这篇习作可以看出，它虽有一一定的语言优势(用词漂亮，基本无错)，但内容处理不当，读起来抓不住要点。所以，要在内容抓准的前提下，再提高自己的语言修养，才是中考作文得分的法宝。
修改稿
My dream gave me pwer
In a Junir Three student's life, difficulties and frustratins are unavidable. At such mments, it was my dream一t get accepted by a key senir high schl一that gave me pwer.
Last Wednesday, I had a cld. After the tests at schl, I gt back hme s tired and exhausted that I didn't want t d my hmewrk. But I thught f my dream which needed my hard wrk t be realized. It gave me enugh pwer t abandn my excuse and finish my hmewrk perfectly.
h Where there is a will, there is a way. My dream plays an imprtant rle in my life and I believe my dream will eventually cme true with my strng will.
习作2
Encuragement gave me pwer
Encuragement is a kind f magic pwer that can help me vercme difficulties.
I didn't realize that until last year when I failed in the mid-term exam. I was s upset and frustrated that I refused t talk t anyne. My teacher came t cmfrt me, "One failure desn't mean anything. Believe in yurself. I knw yu can make it." Her encuragement really wrked. I gt the first place in the final exam.
Thanks t my teacher and her encuragement, I have nt nly mre pwer but als mre cnfidence nw.
点评:这篇习作相较于上面一-篇， 从内容上来说就更为得体，开头结尾非常清晰，间部分的叙事简短明了，考试失利一老师鼓励-重拾信心扭转格局，这样的叙事清时有力，能让人读完很快明白，“鼓励” 确实在此事件中发挥了极大的作用“给予我大量”。从语言上来说，这篇范文和上面一篇有类似之处，会用frustrated等些比较好的表达，也会用定语从句、s .. that结构，不简单也不繁冗，多用这样的表达和结构，中考作就比较完美了，不需要太多华丽的辞藻，那样反而累赘。

相关话题优秀范文解析
书面表达
Write at least 60 wrds n the tpic ＂My prgress＂ （以＂进步了＂为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）
你在生活或学习中一定取得过不少进步，比如生活技能的获得、学习方法的掌握、良好习慣的养成。请选取其中一个方面，结合自身经历，谈一谈你是如何取得这一进步的。
注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。
The fllwing is fr reference nly （以下表达仅供参考）
used t d/be…try my best t d…make prgress in( ding)…
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考题解析
2018年上海卷中考作文仍沿袭近几年中考作文命题的趋势，关注自我成长，仍然从第一人称＂我＂出发，考题十分贴近学生的成长经历和真实情感。写作主题突出传递正能量，力求学生发现生活中积极的一面，考察学生用英语表达自己思想的能力。相较过去，我有什么进步？＂My prgress＂可以是学习生活技能上的，也可以是个人习惯上的，学生需思考自身通过怎样的努力实现了自我的进步与成长。
满分范文
I used t write badly, especially in English. It affected my perfrmance every cmpsitin. I felt annyed because I didn’t knw hw t d it.
Several mnths ag, ur English teacher reminded us t pay attentin t ur English Writing. He prepared a cpybk fr each student. We were asked t practice every day. I tried my best t cpy well. The teacher encuraged me and kept n telling me what t d next. With the help f my English teacher, I made prgress in writing.
N pains n gains. I will study hard t achieve greater prgress and I believe I will d better and better.
【名师点评】
本文属于写人叙事类话题类作文，话题是＂My prgress＂。主要根据自身的经历，谈谈如何取得进步的，具体内容可以围绕生活技能的获得、学习方法的掌握、良好习慣的养成方面去写。所给范文写了自己在＂英语书写＂方面的进步，人称是第一人称，讲述的是已经发生的事情，所以用一般过去时，在文章结尾作者表达自己以后会更加努力，取得更大的进步，所以用一般将来时。全文采用＂What—Hw—Cnclusin＂的三步写作思路来完成，条理清楚，结构完整，语言简洁明了。
本文第一段作者先引出话题，说自己在书写方面做的不好，但自己不知如何改进，＂I felt annyed because I didn’t knw hw t d it. ＂为下文自己在书写方面的进步作出铺垫，思路清晰。第二段主要叙述了自己是如何取得进步的过程。几个月前，在英语老师的帮助下，自己取得了很大的进步，交代清楚了事情发生的时间，人物，经过，结果符合叙事类作文的基本要点。作者采用时间状语Several mnths ag，动词短语pay attentin t，介词短语With the help f 简要清楚地表达了自己进步的经历，语言朴实无华，却能阐明事情的经过。第三段主要是升华主题，表达自己在未来会更加努力学习，取得更大的进步，＂ I will study hard t achieve greater prgress and I believe I will d better and better.＂。谚语＂N pains n gains.＂使用恰当准确，为文章在结尾添彩。
本文的体裁为议论文，根据所给图片和提示可知，文章要求介绍图中的两个主人公在做什么？其次谈论当你看到人们像这样扔垃圾时你怎么做？以及为什么这么做的理由。描述图片内容，男人的行为和女士的说话内容概括，要注意用现在进行时态。 叙述当你看到这种行为该怎么做，写出自己的建议和做法，并陈述理由。这是文章详写的部分，引入到环保的话题中。本文涵盖了材料中的所有内容，行文流畅，合理运用恰当的连接词，逻辑思路清晰。
相关话题满分作文必背
（一）
Write a passage f at least 60 wrds n the tpic I’m nt... . any mre".(以“我不...为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)要求:补全作文标题。(短 文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不子评分。)
范文
I'm nt a child any mre
I used t be dependent and weak. But nw I am a Junir Three student. I have change and the mst imprtant change fr me is that I have learnt t take care f myself.
Last week, my parents were n a business trip. I chse t stay at hme alne instead f asking my grandparents fr help. I set the alarm 'clck every mrning t make sure wuldn't be late fr schl. I did my hmewrk in time and went t bed after that. All my clthes were kept clean and I even tried t ck n the weekend. When my parents came back, they were glad t knw that I culd take gd care f myself.
I am satisfied with myself t., I'm nt a child any mre and I have been mre careful and independent. I believe I can d better in the future.
（二）
Write a passage in at least 60 wrds n the tpic“I want t say t myself
“我想对自己说”为题， 写一篇不少于60个字的短文，标点符号不占格。)(注意:短文中不得出现任何人名，校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。)
Questins fr reference (以下问题仅供参考)
1. What wuld yu like t say t yurself?
2. Why d yu want t say these wrds t yurself?
3. What d thse wrds r sentences mean t yu?
范文
I want t say t myself "Hld n t yur dream”
"Hd n t yur dream." 1 whisper the encuraging sentence t myself frm time t time. I’m firmly cnvinced that nthing in the wrld can take the place f ne's dream. Amy dream is t becme a surgen, these wrds can prvide me with curage t study harder and energy t fight fr it. Thanks t these wrds, n matter hw difficult life is, I never give up my hpe. Hld n t yur dream" means persistence and determinatin t me, s wuld like t say it t myself again and again.