专题34读后续写之如何延续故事高潮-2023年高考英语一轮复习 精讲与精练资料（教师版）

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专题34读后续写之如何延续故事高潮
《考点•题型 •技巧》

考向分析

故事中的高潮(climax)也通常是故事的转折点(turning point)，是指故事达到最紧张或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有时候是剧情中的“危机”点。有时它只是达到关键时刻或者转折点时，发生了一些事情，或者人物必须做出决定，从而导致一个结果或其他。营造故事发展的高潮可以通过营造冲突实现。冲突带来紧迫感，因此营造冲突是一种有效地将故事推向情节发展的高潮的方式。
考点导航

一、高潮冲突思维1：.增加外部冲突增加外部冲突是一种明显有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。冲突带来紧迫感, 将故事推向必要的解决或崩溃。
1.角色之间的冲突 (人物观点差异, 竞争需要等)
2.角色与环境之间的冲突
3.时间依赖的发展 ：决策变得紧急
4.增加的障碍：人物角色必须克服 挑战, 以达到他们的目标
二、高潮冲突思维2：放大内心冲突 放大内心冲突（你的角色的内心斗争）也有助于建立一个高度紧张和不确定的时刻。
三、高潮冲突思维3：使用环境描写增加不确定性 充分利用环境描写可以起到烘托故事高潮的作用，具体方法可以看上期读后续写微技能。当故事角色在碰到困难时候，我们往往要加大笔墨来描写故事环境的黑暗，恐怖和不祥。强化环境描写增强了高潮元素。我们感受到了紧张的倍增。

【题型赏析】
1.常见故事高潮
A little girl has been searching for her lost dog. All of a sudden, she hears a bark coming from around the corner, and she looks around to see . . .
Kevin has worked very hard to try out for the soccer team at school. The coach has posted a list of this year's team members on his office door. Kevin walks forward to look at the list . . . .
Mary's parents have been discussing whether or not to move to another state. They call Mary and her sister down to talk with them about their decision . . .
Lois has performed in the state gymnastics finals. She waits anxiously to hear the names of the winners. The announcer says, "And first place goes to . . ."
2.文学名著中的一些故事高潮
The deaths of Romeo (who kills himself because he thinks Juliet is dead) and Juliet (who kills herself when she awakes and sees Romeo dead). Romeo and Juliet, Shakespeare （《罗密欧和朱丽叶》）
When Gaston and the townspeople come to attack the beast, and Belle admits her love for the beast. Beauty and the Beast, Disney （《美女与野兽》）
In "The Three Little Pigs," suspense builds up until the confrontation between the third pig and the wolf. This confrontation is the climax.（三只小猪） How to create a climax of a story?
3.角色之间的冲突 (人物观点差异, 竞争需要等)
On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn't we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there? David and I became nervous. 开车找旅馆---徒劳无功---母亲建议搭帐篷在他人后院---David和我倍感紧张，心有不悦（母子的观点不一）
4.角色与环境之间的冲突
Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. ……he saw instantly that it wasn't a dog at all, but a wolf: quickly catching up with him. Mac's heart jumped. ……, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, ……. Then it ……, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back …… Mac骑车独自行，路遇饿狼，与之搏斗，险象环生。（人（角色）----狼（环境）大战）

5.时间依赖的发展 ：决策变得紧急
The car abruptly stopped in front of him. "Get into the car." Paul shouted at Mac. Mac jumped off the bike and slid into the car without delay as the wolf was just two steps away and was about to tear Mac into pieces. What a narrow escape! 骑车突停面前---急喊上车---Max上车避险---饿狼近在咫尺（此情此景，刻不容缓）
6.增加的障碍：人物角色必须克服 挑战, 以达到他们的目标
But before we jumped off the horses, we found that we had been off the beaten track and got lost. We had no idea where we were and it got dark. Exhausted and hungry, I wondered if we could find our way back. 小兔突现---马儿受惊---草原迷路（障碍1）----天色渐黑（障碍2）----又累又饿（障碍3）----心理恐慌（障碍4）
检测训练

1、阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy -his name was Bernard-had interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.”
After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成).”
The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn(爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右:
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too.
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With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.
【范文】
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. So, they went to the local supermarket together. They bought a bag of corn and some special bags for popcorn. When they got home, they made a lot of popcorn and put it in the special bags. With the popcorn, they went to Bernard’s home. They told Bernard how to sell the popcorn. Bernard and his parents were very grateful. And the Meredith family also felt very happy to help this family.
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. He took the popcorn around to the houses and sold all his popcorn. He earned a lot of money. Then, he wanted to be self-dependent. Therefore, he asked Mrs. Meredith to teach him how to make popcorn. After that, not only did he sell popcorn, but he also added cream and salt to the popcorn to make it taste better. Bernard grew up to be a remarkable man. He did not forget the help of Meredith’s family, and he also did what he could to help those in need.
【解析】本文是根据短文进行续写，使之成为一个完整的故事。
1.认真读懂所给提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一个小社区里，他们想帮助一个贫困的家庭。那家的男主人生病卧床，女主人要照顾丈夫、无法外出赚钱，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生活十分困难。后来，Meredith的孩子想出了一个主意--制作爆米花，让Bernard去卖爆米花。
2.根据所给材料确定文章主题:Meredith如何通过制作和卖爆米花帮助Bernard一家摆脱困境的。
3.续写部分和前面的文章衔接得上，并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致，故事情节的向后延续发展要合乎情理。
4.根据第一段首句When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too.(当Meredith太太听到John的主意时，她也认为这是个好主意)可以针对如何实现制作爆米花这个提议展开构思；根据第二段首句With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.(一切准备就绪后，Bernard开始了他的新生意)可以针对Bernard如何通过卖爆米花让家庭摆脱困境展开构思。
5.续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致。文章时态以一般过去时为主。应使用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合题干要求，句子结构准确，适当补充信息，使篇章结构连贯。
2. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
No One Will Ever Know
Karen, Judy and I were the last ones back in the classroom after lunch. All of the other sixth graders were already outside, since it was a pleasant spring day.
“Look at what I found this morning in the storage cupboard when I was getting out some art supplies for Mrs. Eiffler.” said Karen, holding up a wooden box filled with short pieces of chalk in every color of the rainbow.
"Wow! What fun it would be to write on the chalkboard while everyone is outside.” Judy said. “But M “s. Eiffler doesn't allow us to write on the chalkboard.” I responded, already feeling guilty. “Don't be afraid, Janet. No one will ever know,” said Karen.
I unwillingly joined my friends in the artwork, but was afraid of being caught. I knew well that we were breaking not one, but two class rules. The second rule-was that no one was allowed to stay inside at noon without a written excuse from home if the weather was nice.
Trying various colors, we drew houses, trees and three-dimensional boxes. It was fun! Then Judy had an idea. "We're all right-handed. Let's see who can write our names best using our left hands. Judy and Karen picked up their chalk and started writing. I chose a white piece from the box and wrote my name. “I think Judy is the winner,” said Karen. “Hers is the best.”
“We’d better get this board cleaned off before Mrs. Eiffler comes back,” said Judy, erasing our artwork from the board. Everything came off but my name!
In disbelief; I looked carefully at the chalk I held in my sweaty hand. It wasn't chalk at all, but a small piece of white color crayon. My mother had a saying: " Fools, names and faces always appear in. public places.” I never understood fully what it meant before. Now I did! My knees felt weak. What would Mrs. Eiffler do to me? And the teacher would be returning soon.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1
“Quick, let’s get some wet paper towels,” said Judy.
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Paragraph 2
We were just slipping into our desks when the bell rang.
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【参考范文】Paragraph 1:
“Quick, let’s get some wet paper towels," said Judy. Everyone sprang into action. After rubbing pretty hard, my name still remained. “I think I saw a can of cleaner by the sink in the coat room,” I said as I raced to find it. We rubbed with the cleaner and my name came off all right, but in the process of removing it, we left a friction mark on the chalkboard. Listening for footsteps coming down the hall, we dried the wet area as much as we could with more paper towels and fanned it with a book to remove every tell-tale trace of wetness.
Paragraph 2:
We were just slipping into our desks when the bell rang. The other students began entering the classroom. The teacher walked in soon afterwards. Mrs. Eiffler never asked about the friction mark. Maybe she never noticed it, but I did. Every time I walked past the damaged surface of the chalkboard, I remembered it. Oh, how I remembered it so well. The lesson I learned that day is one I never forgot, even though 40 years have passed since the event. "No one will ever know” is never true. Even if no one else found out, I myself knew. Sometimes living with a guilty conscience is punishment enough.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者和朋友用从老师储藏柜里拿来的粉笔在黑板上写字，并且赶在老师回来之前擦掉粉笔画的东西，结果作者的名字因为是蜡烛写的擦不掉，虽然最后用清洁剂擦掉了，但是在黑板上留下了一个擦痕，这也提醒着作者，“没人会知道”是不可能的。即使别人都不知道，自己也知道。有时候，受到良心的谴责已经是最大的惩罚了。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“‘快，我们去拿些湿纸巾。’Judy说。”可知，第一段可描写作者他们是如何擦掉黑板上名字的经过的。
②由第二段首句内容“我们正要溜进自己的课桌，铃声就响了。”可知，第二段可描写事情的后续以及作者从中得到的感悟。
2.续写线索：拿湿纸巾——用清洁剂擦名字——擦掉名字——黑板留下擦痕——老师没有发现——作者得到教训——作者感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
采取行动：spring into action/ jump into action
进入：enter/ get into
奔跑：race/ run
情绪类
用力：hard / violently
真的：true/ real
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1] Every time I walked past the damaged surface of the chalkboard, I remembered it. (运用了every time引导时间状语从句)
[高分句型2] The lesson I learned that day is one I never forgot, even though 40 years have passed since the event. (运用了even thoug引导让步状语从句)
3、阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
A Vacation with My Mother
I had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because of my mother---loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.
My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we’d ever see them again? Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we’d returned home to get the purse and traveler’s checks Mom had forgotten.
David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept: “You stand outside the door and play lookout(放哨) while I go, and I’ll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gosh…I thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t about to take any chances.
On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn’t we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there? David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections(反对). If a strange family showed up on her front doorstep, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world is as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. ______________

Paragraph 2:
We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. ______________
【范文】
The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. Thinking of this tent, Mom suggested that we go camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering. Considering her enthusiasm, we all agreed. When the door of our car opened, Mom stormed out instantly and urged us to put up the tent. David and I were asked to pick up some branches to build a fire. And when we came back, Dad and Mom had already lain down the grass comfortably in front of the tent, talking merrily with a local boy at our age, who kept glancing at this tent curiously. Soon we learnt that the boy in rags even didn’t have a home to live in. Of course, Mom “forgot” to take this tent with us again.
We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. And we also had a nice time living with my grandparents during that trip. But what impressed me most was that tent, which was forgotten deliberately by Mom. Though she did love going camping, she presented that poor boy with this tent out of sympathy. It was Mom that made my childhood colorful. And it was also she that showed me the true meaning of giving.
【解析】这是一篇读后续写。短文叙述了作者的母亲很健忘，一家四口自驾旅游去祖父母所居住的地方，途中发生了有趣的事情。
【详解】
首先，根据文章当中第二段内容比较开心的基调，第一段的故事情节应该比较偏向正面感情色彩，例如：我们在露营过程中一起搭建帐篷的开心时光或露营过程中的趣事(尤其是前文有铺垫妈妈是个forgetful的人，这一点也可以埋下伏笔来表达后面过程中由于妈妈健忘而带来的趣事)(也有同学在此处描述了露营过程中对其他陌生人提供帮助，来集中体现nice这一个点);
其次，第二段开头说来描述欣赏风景： 此处可以用一些描述景色环境的表达来烘托下氛围，但是第二段不能仅仅只能有景色描述；例如：这里可以实写和虚写结合的方式，看到景色(同时回忆往事)，最终把故事的落脚点放在“家人的感情”“亲情”“生活的乐趣”“与妈妈一起的趣事”等等角度都可以的;当然也有同学描述与陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意这个主题;总之这次的话题比较开放，情节可以写的角度比较多;
再次，除了情节方面的内容以外，以下几个方面是考生需要着重关注的得分点：字迹清晰程度，语法多样性和句式丰富性，衔接成分的使用，语言的场景恰当程度;高考英语写作中，考生所采用的句型结构一定程度上影响了老师对考生写作水平的判断;说到语法丰富性方面，例如在作文中用到从句结构、强调句、非谓语结构等。尤其应该注意的是：避免句型单一化，如通篇使用定语从句，这样反而使阅卷老师觉得该考生对句型掌握的不够充分。应该在文章写作中有意识地多使用不同的句型结构。
【点睛】
文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式: 虚 拟 语 气 和 with 复 合 结 构 Mom suggested that we go camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering. Considering her enthusiasm, we all agreed. what引导的主语从句和which引导的非限制性定语从句But what impressed me most was that tent, which was forgotten deliberately by Mom.
高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。

4. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Father’s Day Chess
It was Dale's third Sunday volunteering at the retirement home. He had thought it would be a good way to give back. But today he just felt tired. While on a short break, Dale took a walk through the garden. There were people sitting on benches, chatting together. A woman sat knitting, looking very pleased with herself. The strands of brightly-colored yarn disappeared quickly through her hands.
Across the courtyard, there was a man sitting alone at a table with a chessboard in front of him. Dale watched with curiosity as the man would stare at the pieces, then move them, and then would do the same from the other side of the board. On his way home after the day had ended, Dale found himself thinking about the man. How he was hunched over in deep thought, playing a game against himself. How odd, he thought.
Each Sunday, Dale would see the man doing the same thing. While everyone else talked with one another or happily carried on, the man would sit, slightly bent over and scratching his chin. His eyes rarely came off of the chessboard. One Sunday, Dale went to the garden on his break expecting to see the man at his normal spot. But he wasn't there. It was Father's Day and there were many visitors at the home. Dale shrugged and thought the man must be busy with his family.
That afternoon, Dale was mopping the hallways when he happened to pass by the man's room. The door was slightly open and he could see the man sitting in a chair next to the window, peering out at the courtyard. Dale knocked lightly and asked to come in.
The man nodded. Dale saw a collection of framed photographs on the bedside table. “Are those your children?” he asked.
“Yes, they’re all grown and live far away. They have their own kids now,” he replied. Dale, not wanting the man to be alone on Father's Day, had an idea.
注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para. 1:
He went outside and got the chessboard from the table.
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Para. 2:
Dale was glad that he volunteered.
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【参考范文】
Para. 1:
He went outside and got the chessboard from the table. “Shall we play chess together?" The man hesitated. He stared at the chessboard sinking into his thoughts. It took a while before the old man finally shared his thoughts with Dale. In the past, he often played chess with his children, which were some of his fondest memories. However, they all died because of a car accident and the old man has been alone ever since. "Sorry, I lied to you," the man choked, eyes brimming with tears. “Thank you for your kind help.”
Para. 2:
Dale was glad that he volunteered. Deeply touched, he now understood why the man preferred to play chess alone, and why he sat silently in his room on Father's Day. He carefully placed all the pieces on the chessboard and said, "Sir, I'm sorry for your loss. But as you may notice, I come here every Sunday. If you wish, you can play chess with me, as you did with your children. A flicker of a smile crossed the man’s face. Taking a deep breath, he settled himself opposite to Dale and moved a piece.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Dale在养老院做志愿者时注意到了一个孤独的父亲，每天都在下棋，他还发现这个人一个人过父亲节。于是这天Dale主动提出和老人下棋，老人告诉了Dale自己的孩子因为车祸去世的事情，最后Dale提出每周都可以和他下棋。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“他走到外面，从桌上拿起棋盘。”可知，第一段可描写老人告诉Dale自己孩子去世的遭遇。
②由第二段首句内容“Dale很高兴他做了志愿者。”可知，第二段可描写Dale得知真相后的心理活动以及Dale提出每周都可以和老人下棋。
2.续写线索：Dale拿起棋盘——老人告知自己经历——Dale高兴自己当了志愿者——Dale提出陪老人下棋
3.词汇激活
行为类
陷入沉思：sinking into his thoughts / be lost in thought
去世：die/ pass away
坐下：settled himself opposite to / sit down
情绪类
高兴：glad / happy
最爱的：fondest / favorite
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1] In the past, he often played chess with his children, which were some of his fondest memories. (运用了which引导非限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2] Deeply touched, he now understood why the man preferred to play chess alone, and why he sat silently in his room on Father's Day. (运用了why引导宾语从句)
5、阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
"Pick up the pace!" said Amy's husband. "But I can't!" Amy said, her heart beating quickly inside. "I can't go any faster! Her husband encouraged her. "Yes, you can! You're making progress every day.”
To help Amy stay healthy, her husband had been running with her for over two years. Several years ago, Amy could barely walk down the stairs of her apartment building due to fatness caused by eating disorders. She realized the problem after a failed job interview and began walking to improve her ability to move. At first, she could walk for only 15 minutes at a time. But she pushed herself every day, walking 5 minutes longer than she did the day before until she walked for an hour and eventually two. For three years, Amy kept her walking habit, slowly and painstakingly building her body shape. Then she changed her walking shoes to running shoes about two years ago and became an excellent runner.
In March 2001, an advertisement invited people to nominate（提名）an ordinary person who inspired them to bring the Olympic flame to Salt Lake City as torch bearers（火炬手）or support runners.（Support runners serve as “guardians of the flame" and run with torch bearers along the journey.）Amy's experiences touched her husband, so he nominated her to be a torch bearer. The possibility to be selected was low, but Amy wanted to try.
Running taught Amy the importance of training for a race. She pictured herself running a race and crossing the finish line. For months, she ran through her neighborhood carrying a broken-off broom handle, feeling the weight of the torch. She waved at her neighbors, pretending they were cheering crowds. She also printed a picture of a torch bearer wearing the white uniform, replaced the face with a picture of hers, and put it onto her refrigerator door.
Every day, Amy imagined herself as a torch bearer. She was training for a historic running event. On September 26th, while on her daily run through her neighborhood, an express package arrived.
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Amy opened it and found a letter and a book on the Olympics.
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"One of today's torch bearers can't run her part, " announced the relay organizer.
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【范文】
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Amy opened it and found a letter and a book on the Olympics. The letter read, "Congratulations! You've been selected as a support runner for the Olympic Torch Relay..." Although she wouldn't be wearing the white uniform, she wasn't disappointed. She completed the required physical examination, delivered the forms, and waited. Months later, another package arrived. It contained her official blue support runner uniform along with instructions for her part of the relay. Then on a cold day, Amy and her husband stood outside the Torch Relay collection point.
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"One of today's torch bearers can't run her part," announced the relay organizer. Then he said, "One lucky support runner will become a torch bearer. Select a person now." Luckily, Amy became the torch bearer. Holding it tight, she ran down the street filled with people waving flags. The Olympic theme song was broadcast. Amy smiled and waved to the crowds, knowing that she was carrying not only the torch, but also the Olympic spirit.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。
【详解】
通过阅读所给文章可知，几年前，艾米由于饮食失调导致肥胖，几乎走不下公寓楼的楼梯。在丈夫的帮助下，慢慢地恢复身材，并成为一名优秀的跑步运动员。在看了一则广告后，丈夫鼓励艾米去竞选奥运火炬手。为此，艾米把自己想象成火炬手，一直为此训练，直到有一天，一个快递包裹到达。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：艾米打开它，发现了一封信和一本关于奥运会的书。本段应该写艾米看到信上写着自己被选为奥运火炬接力的助跑员。她完成体检几个月后，又来了一个包裹，里面是正式的蓝色助跑服，还有她那部分接力的说明，终于到了火炬接力的那一天。第二段开头是：“今天的火炬手中有一个不能胜任她的角色，”接力组织者宣布。本段应该写艾米在挥舞着旗帜的人们中，跑去接过火炬，奥运主题曲播出了，艾米微笑着向人群挥手致意，她传递的不仅是火炬，还有奥林匹克精神。
续写时要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：be selected as，run down，fill with等高级词汇；Although she wouldn't be wearing the white uniform, she wasn't disappointed. 让步状语从句的运用；Amy smiled and waved to the crowds, knowing that she was carrying not only the torch, but also the Olympic spirit.宾语从句的运用等高级句式。
6. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Like most children, I took my parents for granted. It wasn't until I became an adult that I realized their desire to make a difference in the lives of others. Mama and Daddy performed their angel magic with neither fanfare (炫耀) nor a desire for recognition. Because their kindness to others was something I accepted as a matter of course, I might never have evaluated this aspect of their personalities were it not for an event that my mother mentioned in passing.
Arizona in July ushered in the monsoon (季风) season, which was in full swing and just that morning had hit the Southern Arizona desert with severe thunder, lightining, rain, and high winds. Mama and Daddy chose to spend the day wandering the dry, air-conditioned mall, having a bite to eat, and taking in a movie. It seemed a nice way to spend a Saturday afternoon while leaving the storm outdoors.
They chose a casual restaurant for lunch and were reading the menu when their waitress, a young woman in her mid-twenties, approached the table to introduce herself and take their order. Mama and Daddy noted that her hair was damp, as were her clothes. She was friendly but seemed to be quite tired.
Drawing her into conversation, they learned she was a single mother and a college student working two jobs. That particular day had been unkind to her. Her car broke down, forcing her to walk to work in the rain and wind. She was concerned about how being without a vehicle would affect her ability to care for her daughter and go to college. Her frustration was obvious, and the day's events had certainly left her in a certain amount of despair. Yet, her comments centered on ideas for solving her problems rather than complaining about them. Her attitude aroused my parents' interest.
When Mama and Daddy finished with lunch, they said goodbye to their waitress and wished her well. Her plight (困境) and attempt at a positive attitude touched them, and they wondered what they might do to help
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2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
They had time before the movie started to do some shopping; so they walked into a bookstore.
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The waitress opened the bag and found some bills in a book.
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【参考范文】
They had time before the movie started to do some shopping; so they walked into a bookstore. While browsing, they came across a slim volume that discussed the presence of angels on Earth, and they immediately knew what they wanted to do. After purchasing the book, they withdrew money from the bank, stuffed the bills into the book, and put the book into a bag, which they delivered to the restaurant cashier. They requested that it be given to the waitress at first opportunity. They said there was no need to take their names. The cashier immediately went up to the waitress and told her that someone had given her a bag.
The waitress opened the bag and found some bills in a book. She was very surprised at first, with a puzzled expression on her face, then moved to tears. She glanced around for her benefactors, looked at the cashier who could only shrug, and clutched the book to her as if it were pure gold. Her unknown angels, pleased with their spread of magic, disappeared. Mama and Daddy watched from a distance, smiling at each other. Their act of kindness made the young lady understand that despite the challenges and cruelties she may encounter, the world is blessed with human beings who care about others.
【写作分析】文章以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者的父母为躲避暴风雨天气，打算在干燥、有空调的商场里度过这一天，吃点东西，看部电影，他们来到一家饭店吃饭，偶遇一位还是大学生的女服务员，经过交谈，了解到她的困境。于是，他们俩就想做一名天使来帮助这位女服务员。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写
①由第一段首句内容“在看电影之前，他们有时间去购物”可知，第一段可描写他们在书店买书以后想到了应该为这位女服务员做些什么并付诸行动。
②有第二段首句内容“女服务员打开袋子，在一本书里发现了一些钞票。”可知，第二段可描写女服务员收到装着书和钱的袋子后的感受。
2.续写线索：偶然发现一本薄书——购买这本书——取钱并塞进书里——将袋子送到收银台——要求将袋子给女服务员——女服务员感到惊讶——感动流泪——这个善举让服务员感受到关心
3.词汇激活
行为类
① 偶然发现：come across/run into/encounter
②购买：purchase/buy
③取钱：withdraw money/withdraw cash
④递送：deliver/send
⑤ 给：give/hand in
情绪类
①惊讶的：surprised/astonished/amazed
②感动的：moved/touched
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1]
After purchasing the book, they withdrew money from the bank, stuffed the bills into the book, and put the book into a bag, which they delivered to the restaurant cashier.（which引导非限制性定语从句）
[高分句型2]
Their act of kindness made the young lady understand that despite the challenges and cruelties she may encounter, the world is blessed with human beings who care about others.
（that引导宾语从句，who引导定语从句）
7. 阅读下面材料, 根据其内界和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I have kept a watch from my grandfather. When I was a schoolboy，the watch hung by my grandfather's bed. The face was marked with elegant Roman numerals and the case was gold. It was a splendid watch and I often stared at it longingly sitting with my grandfather. He would often ask about my progress at school. The day I told him my success in the examinations，he was overcome with pleasure. “You'll be going to a new school next. And then you'll go to university，will you？”he asked. “But you'll need plenty of patience. Patience and hard work. That's the way to succeed.”
He took off the watch and wound it. “It was given me for fifty years of faithful service with my firm，” he said proudly. Finally，he handed me the watch due to the progress in school. I held it，feeling its weight. As I was leaving him，he said，“And you'll not forget what I told you？” I was suddenly very moved. “No，Granddad，” I promised，“I'll not.”
Arriving home，my mother was to hold it in trust until she considered me old enough to look after it，but I protested so strongly that she finally agreed to hang it where I could always see it. The summer ended and it was time for me to enter the new school. I never made friends easily there. One boy，Crawley，was a well­to­do fellow whose way of impressing us was to show off his possessions. His bicycle was new；his boots were of the best hide；everything，in fact，was better than ours—until he brought a watch. Crawley said his watch was absolutely the finest watch.
“I have a better watch，” I announced. “Well，show it to us，”Crawley said sneeringly(讽刺地). “I'll bring it this afternoon，” I said. “Then you'll see.” I rode my bike home，wondering how I would persuade my mother to let me take the watch. Luckily，she stepped outside and I slipped the watch into my pocket.
1. 续写词数应为150左石：
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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I rode my bike fast to school after lunch，excitement through me.
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When I said my mother couldn't let me bring the watch，they burst into laughter.
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I rode my bike fast to school after lunch，excitement through me. Then suddenly a dog ran out into my path. I pulled at the brake so sharply that I fell over heavily to the ground with the handles over me. I picked myself up，put a trembling hand into my pocket，and brought out what was my grandfather's proudest possession. The glass was broken，and the pointers stopped turning. I put the watch back and rode slowly to school，numb with sorrow.
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When I said my mother couldn't let me bring the watch，they burst into laughter.“What a story！” Crawley said sneeringly(ironically). The others followed his cries. I nearly wept，for it was the saddest moment of my young life. As I sat quietly at my desk，a strange feeling stole over me. It was not shame at my classmates' laughing，nor was it fear of my mother's anger. All I could think of was my grandfather's words，“Patience and hard work.” I kept the broken watch as a good reminder since then，from which I have learned to be more patient and to work harder.
【写作分析】本文以爷爷送给作者的手表为线索，讲述了爷爷把陪伴作者50年的手表，送给了作者，并告诉作者，耐心和努力工作。这才是成功之道。作者将爷爷说话的话记在心间。回到家后，母亲强烈建议替作者保管，但作者强烈抗议，最后母亲同意把它挂在作者总能看到的地方。暑期结束作者进入了一所新学校，有个叫克劳利总喜欢炫耀，但是作者要和他比一比谁的手表更好。作者骑车回到家，趁着妈妈不注意，偷偷将表放入兜中。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写
由第一段句首内容“午饭后作者骑自行车飞快地去学校，很是高兴”可知，第一段可以描写因为一条狗的突然窜出，发生了小事故，导致作者的手表表蒙破例，指针停止走动，作者只好把手表放回原处。
由第一段句首内容“当我说妈妈不让我带手表时，他们哄堂大笑起来”可知，第二段主要描写作者因为大家的嘲笑时以及打破表蒙后的心理状态和作者的感悟。
2.续写线索：上学路上——遇到狗打碎了表蒙表指针停止走动——作者找了个借口没有拿来表——心理状态——作者感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
跌倒：fall/drop
大笑，嘲笑：laugh/tease/make fun of
放回：put…back/replace
情绪类
悲伤：sad/disappointed/ sorrow
耐心的：patient/ staminal
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1] I pulled at the brake so sharply that I fell over heavily to the ground with the handles over me.（so…that引导的结果状语从句）
[高分句型2] I kept the broken watch as a good reminder since then，from which I have learned to be more patient and to work harder.（介词+关系代词引导的非限制性定语从句）
8. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In December 2020, Flores Gonzalez had her 4-year-olds, Luna and Gianella, tie their lists to two balloons and release them into the sky above their home in Liberal, Kansas. It was their way of reaching Santa Claus.
Flores Gonzalez thought it was important to do something special for her daughters because of the hard year they had during the pandemic (大流行病). The schools were shut down and she was out of work for more than two months. Everyone seemed to be in low spirits. She wanted to cheer the family up and wanted the girls to feel that 2020 was another year spent with mom making beautiful memories. It was never with the purpose that someone would find the balloons. She thought the balloons would just float away and disappear somewhere in a tree nearby.
But one of the balloons did make it to Alvin Bamburg, who was deer hunting in Grand Cane, Louisiana, in late December when he spotted a balloon tangled (纠缠) in a tree. He told himself he needed to get the trash out of the woods. However, when he got it, he noticed a folded yellow piece of paper sealed with a red star and it was a Christmas list from a girl named Luna. She had asked Santa to bring her candy, a Spider Man ball, a Frozen doll and a dachshund (腊肠狗) puppy, which was her most desired present.
The holidays kept Alvin Bamburg and his wife busy. They had family reunions and organized several charity parties to help whoever needed help but they didn’t forget about the list. In early January, Bamburg shared his discovery with family and friends on Facebook. “I would love to know when it was launched. It looks like it travelled 600 miles,” he wrote.
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2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
So many people shared the post that it eventually reached Flores Gonzalez.
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After months of communication, it was time for the Bamburgs to give them one last present.
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【参考范文】
Many people shared the post and it eventually found its way to Flores Gonzalez. He was so surprised that his daughter's wish list was found and shared. He replied the post and explained what had happened. Everyone thought it was a surprise and a miracle. Over the Internet , Gonzalez knew new friends the Bambergs. They often shared their daily lives online, as if they were old friends they hadn't seen in years.
After months of communication, it was time for the Bamburgs to give them one last present. The Bamberger never forgot Luna 's to do list. They wanted to finish it the night before Christmas with gifts like Santa's. When Luna received the gifts, she excitedly said to her father, "My wish has come true. ","As long as you keep a grateful heart, life will treat you kindly and give you unexpected surprises. All you have to do is passing on and keeping this kindness.” his father replied with a smile.
【写作分析】本文以故事的发展顺序为线索展开，讲述了主人公弗洛雷斯·冈萨雷斯认为，为女儿们做些特别的事情很重要，于是他让女儿把心愿清单绑在气球上，随着气球飘向远方，最终卢娜的气球被乐于慈善事业的班伯格夫妇发现并帮助卢娜完成心愿的故事。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“很多人分享了这个帖子，最终传到了弗洛雷斯·冈萨雷斯这里”可知，第一段可描写弗洛雷斯·冈萨雷斯看到这个帖子的反应以及解释事情的经过。
②由第二段首句内容“经过几个月的沟通，现在是班伯格夫妇，送给他们最后一件礼物的时候了。”可知，第二段可描写班伯格夫妇完成卢娜的心愿清单。
2.续写线索：在气球上绑心愿清单——气球被发现——分享——完成心愿清单——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.回复：reply/answer
②.实现：come true/realize
情绪类
①.感激：a grateful heart /showing one’s appreciation
②.惊讶：surprised/amazed
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1]. He was so surprised that his daughter's wish list was found and shared .（由so...that引导的结果状语从句）
[高分句型2]. As long as you keep a grateful heart, life will treat you kindly and give you unexpected surprises.（as long as引导的条件状语从句）
9. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Pam Bales planned a six-hour hike through New Hampshire^ Mount. On the dashboard （汽车仪表板） was a detailed plan ensuring she could return before the arrival of some forecasted bad weather. Different from former hike, though, this time, she had packed for almost every accident and intended to walk alone.
At about 8 a.m., she'd checked the weather forecast. Bales knew from experience that her hike was realistic. Besides, she had two emergency plans and extra layers of clothing to better protect her core temperature as conditions changed.
Bales felt excited as she walked up into snowy paths. She was wearing a fleece tank top （绒衣）and hiking pants, and no gloves or hat because the air was mild. Thirty minutes later, she climbed into colder air and deeper snows. She now was in a quarter-zip fleece top and gloves. At 10 a.m.? the weather was showing its teeth. Bales added more layers to resist cold winds and dense fog. Making her way across the snow-covered ridge, she noticed something: a single set of footprints made by a pair of sneakers. Not giving them much thought, she walked on.
By 11 a.m.? Bales was getting cold. She decided to return to her car. On her way down, she again spotted the sneaker tracks, which suddenly made a hard left-hand turn off the trail. Now she felt genuinely alarmed. She was sure the hiker lost his way in the low visibility. If Bales continued to follow the tracks, she'd add risk and time to her return. But she couldn't let this go. She turned to the left and called out, “Hello!" Nothing.
Bales followed the tracks, rounded a slight comer and saw a man sitting motionless. He wore tennis sneakers, shorts, a light jacket and fingerless gloves. His skin was pale and he had a glazed （呆滞的）look on his face. uOh5 hello/5 Bales approached and said, "What's your name?” The man didn't react. Obviously, nothing was connecting for him and he was in really big trouble.
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1.续写词数应为150左右；
2 .请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Bales stopped being a curious and concerned hiker, and began a full-on rescue mission.
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Over the next hour, the man began to move and speak.
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【参考范文】
Bales stopped being a curious and concerned hiker, and began a full-on rescue mission. Immediately, she braved the increasingly wild and fierce weather to take off the outer layers of her clothes to cover the motionless man. And then Bales tried to help the man have some hot water but in vain. At the very helpless and even hopeless moment, an idea occurred to her. Quickly collecting some ice and snow, she began to rub the man’s body, from hands to arms, from toes to legs. Bales knew clearly it was time-consuming and painstaking, but it was bound to be effective.
Over the next hour, John began to move and speak. He first showed the sign of movement through his fingers, and then opened his eyes. In a weak voice, he thanked Bales and told her how he lost his way and was trapped here. Bales kept warming him up until he signaled he could walk. With the support of Bales, the man finally managed it back to the car and was sent to the hospital timely. Out of danger, he said gratefully but for Bales’ experience and skilled rescue, he would never see the beauty of the world.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Bales计划6个小时内独自登雪山，在登山前Bales做了非常详细的准备，可是在登山途中发现了别人的脚印，疑似是有人走丢了，Bales没有独自离开，而是寻着脚印寻找到了一个男人，此时男人已经一动不动。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“Bales不再是一个好奇和担心的徒步旅行者，开始了全面的救援任务。”可知，第一段可描写Bales想帮助这个男人，开始采取救援措施。
②由第二段首句内容“在接下来的一个小时里，John开始走动并说话了。”可知，第二段可描写被救的男人John恢复意识后，感谢Bales的救援。
2.续写线索：发现男人——采取援救措施——男人获救——感谢Bales
3.词汇激活
行为类
①冒风险：brave/take risks
②尝试帮忙：try to help/attempt to help
③想起一个主意：an idea occurs to sb./come up with an idea
情绪类
①费力的：painstaking/arduous②感激地：gratefully/appreciatively
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1]. In a weak voice, he thanked Bales and told her how he lost his way and was trapped here.（由省略连接词that的宾语从句）
[高分句型2]. Bales kept warming him up until he signaled he could walk.（由until引导时间状语从句）