上海闵行区2020-2022年中考英语二模试题-04作文

上海闵行区2020-2022年中考英语二模试题-04作文

一、话题作文

1．（2020·上海闵行·统考二模）Write at least 60 words on the topic “Ways to improve my online learning”（以“提高我在线学习效率的方法”为题，写一篇不少于 60 个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）在线学习是当代青少年需要掌握的一项重要技能，请结合居家学习期间自己在线学习中的具体事例，谈谈你有些哪里提高学习效率的方法。   

（注意；短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息）

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2．（2021·上海闵行·统考二模）Write at least 60 words on the topic “My funnest family memory” (根据提示，以“我最有趣的家庭回忆”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)

提示：回忆有趣的家庭生活总是美好的。请结合你的亲身经历，描述你和家人在一起时最有趣的事儿，并谈谈感想。(注意：文中不得出现人名、校名及其它相关信息。抄袭阅读理解语篇的不给分。)

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3．（2022·上海闵行·统考二模）Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “________ makes no difference”. （以“……是无济于事的”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）阅读D篇怀特家的故事告诉我们：一旦事情已经发生，责备任何人都无济于事，相反会让被责备的人背负罪恶感。在我们的生活中，总会遇到困难或者发生一些不愉快的事情，这时候谩骂、责备、抱怨、生气、担忧等等都不会起到任何作用。我们应该改变自身，寻求智慧的解决办法。请结合你的经历或见闻，谈谈你的感受。写作前请你先把题目补充完整。

注意：

文中不得出现人名、校名及其它相关信息，抄袭阅读理解语篇的不给分。

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参考答案：

1．Ways to improve my online learning

Because of the coronavirus（新冠病毒）, almost all of the students took online classes during the winter vacation. But the learning effects vary from one to another. Therefore, we should find ways to improve online learning. And I have some pieces of advice about it.

First of all, we need a peaceful environment. Online learning takes strong self-discipline（自律）. For example, my mom likes to offer me snacks, which sometimes interrupts me. I have aksed her to stop doing so. A quiet and peaceful room can help us stay focused. What’s more, we should catch every chance to communicate with our teachers online. Different from school learning, we can’t easily find our teachers to ask questions, so we have to solve all our problems during the classes. By doing this, we can have no confusion after class.

These are my own ways to improve online learning. You can try taking my advice, and get better results in this period of time.

【详解】题干分析：根据题干分析，这是一篇讨论型文章。讨论的是在线学习如何提高学习效率，文章分为三段，第一段是因为疫情的原因，我们在家上网课，第二段是提高学习效率的具体方法，第三段是一个总结。这类文章一般以一般现在时为主。

例文分析：这是一篇优秀的例文，很好的完成了试题所给的任务，符合英语语言语境。例文层次清晰，第一段指明原由，第二段运用多个连接词，使文章更加连贯，第三段总结，构成一篇完整的文章。同时例文有些亮点词句，增强了逻辑关系，句子通顺，用词准确，行文流畅。

亮点词句：

    短语：because of....的原因；from one to another从一个到另一个；first of all首先；for example例如；have to do sth不得不做某事；

    句型：（1）Because of the coronavirus（新冠病毒）, almost all of the students took online classes during the winter vacation.因为新冠病毒，几乎所有学生这个寒假都在上网课。Because of.....的原因；during the winter vacation在寒假期间；（2）You can try taking my advice, and get better results in this period of time.你可以试着接受我的建议，在这段时间得到更好的结果。try doing sth尝试做某事；in this period of time在这段时间。

2．范文：

My funnest family memory

There are countless interesting things in our family. Let me tell you one thing. It’s about eating.

I remember once again, when I was at my grandma’s house, it was going to a dinner. My stomach was hungry and sang “I want to eat”. I ran to the table in a windy manner and started eating. I just had a bite of the food, feeling very spicy, asked her mother, “Mom, why is vegetable pepper so hot?” Mom ran over and tasted vegetable pepper and said, “This is not vegetable pepper, it’s pepper!” “Ah?” I asked in confusion. This is chili, no wonder it’s so spicy. “Give me some water!” The family laughed when they heard it. In fact, there are many interesting family stories, waiting for us to discover. As long as you are serious about discovering it, you will feel that family fun everywhere.

【详解】1. 题干解读：这篇作文要求我们以“我最有趣的家庭回忆”为题，根据写作提示，谈一谈自己最有趣的家庭回忆，属于话题作文。

2. 写作指导：审题可知，这篇短文应以第一人称和一般过去时为主来叙述，要写出家庭生活的有趣及自己的感受，注意主谓一致，保证无语法和单词拼写错误。

3．

例文：

Blaming others makes no difference

In our life, there will always be difficulties or unpleasant things. Blaming, complaining, getting angry, worrying and so on will not do any good. We should change ourselves and seek intelligent solutions.

I used to climb mountains with my friend who insisted on going to remote places. Finally we got lost, and I knew it was useless to blame my friend. So I called for help right away. At last we were saved.

I think when something unexpected happens, we should try to solve it instead of blaming the other person.

【详解】1.题干解读：本文是一篇话题作文，首先把题目补全完整。其次根据题目要求结合自己的经历和见闻写一篇短文。

2.写作指导：本文在叙述过去的经历时用一般过去时，叙述感受时使用一般现在时。人称以第一人为主。写作时可以从“谩骂、责备、抱怨、生气、担忧”等词中选取一个把题目补充完整，然后围绕主题展开叙述。确保语句通顺，无单词语法错误。