上海虹口区2022-2020年英语中考一模试题-作文

上海虹口区2022-2020年英语中考一模试题-作文

一、话题作文

1．（2022·上海虹口·统考一模）Write at least 60 words on the topic “A perfect family”（以“完美家庭”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格）

我们都和家人生活在一起，都希望拥有一个完美的家庭。请你描述一下你心目中的完美家庭。（注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息。）

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2．（2021·上海虹口·统考一模）Write at least 60 words on the topic "Happiness doesn't always disappear during difficult times"(以"在困难时期，幸福感不一定会消失"为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格).

小到个人，大到团队、城市、国家，都会有困难时期，但即便是困难时期，人们还是能感受生活中的小喜悦，感受幸福温馨的片刻，请结合自己或他人的经历，说说困难时期的幸福感。

(注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息)

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3．（2020·上海虹口·统考一模）Writing

Write a passage of at least 60 words about the topic “     in my memory”. （以“我记忆中（的）     ” 为题，写一篇不少于 60 个词的短文，标点符号不占格）

回顾初中几年的学习生活，你的记忆中一定有许多难忘的人、事、物或地点，请选取一个角度谈谈你的想法或感受。

（注意：1. 在答题纸上将题目补充完整。 2. 短文中不得出现任何真实人名、校名及其他相关信息。）

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参考答案：

1．例文：

A perfect family

Every child holds his or her own views on a perfect family. In my opinion, perfect families always have some specific qualities. First, family members always love each other. They love one another whether they have shortcomings or not. Second, they know how to respect each other, such as parents do not interfere with children’s privacy and children can understand their parents’ difficulties. Third, they support each other. If any of the family members is in trouble, the others give him or her encouragement and help.

【详解】1. 题干解读：本文是一篇话题作文。题目要求以“A perfect family”为题，用不少于60词描述一下你心目中的完美家庭。

2. 写作指导：本文主要以观点陈述或一般情况的描述为主，时态主要采用一般现在时；人称主要使用第三人称；在文章内容上可以结合日常生活从多角度阐述你认为的“完美家庭”所拥有的特质；写作完成后需保证文章内容符合题目要求，行文流畅，语言表达符合英文语法规则。

2．例文

Happiness doesn't always disappear during difficult times

Everyone may have difficult times. Even in difficult times, people can still feel the small joys in life.

One day, it was raining hard when I was on my way home from school. I didn’t take an umbrella, so I was wet. Suddenly, a stranger came toward me. He passed me an umbrella and said he could drive me home. I didn’t know him but I was very thankful he helped me. Although the weather was cold, I felt very warm in my heart.

【详解】题干解读：这篇作文要求学生们以“Happiness doesn't always disappear during difficult times在困难时期，幸福感不一定会消失”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文。题目中并没有规定具体的写作内容，学生们应发挥想象力，结合自己的实际生活，写一篇切题的文章。这是一个难点，学生所选取的生活中的事例应合情合理。

写作指导：审题可知，这篇短文应以一般过去时态、第一人称为主来叙述，注意谓语动词的正确形式。写作时应注意英语句式结构和表达习惯，写完整的句子，以简单句结构为基础，穿插并列句、复合句、非谓语结构等复杂句式，提升作文档次。同时注意上下文的衔接，使文意连贯、表达流畅。

3．范文

An unforgettable experience in my memory

Everybody has something unforgettable. For me, I still remember the day my dad taught me how to ride a bike. I was afraid to ride a bike. But my dad's encouragement made me determined to learn it. At first, I thought he was always behind me, holding the seat in order to keep me from falling off. I was happy with this, but he realized he can't hold me up all my life. And he told me that one day he would have to leave, so I must be independent. After a long time, I finally learned it. This unforgettable experience told me we can't depend on anyone else but ourselves.

【详解】题干解读：这是一篇半命题作文。要求补全题目“     in my memory”并根据题目完成作文。写作时要注意语句通顺，语意连贯，紧扣要点，注意句子之间的连接与过渡，要注意涵盖所给提示。

例文点评：例文采用一段式；使用第一人称，时态选用一般过去时。向我们介绍了自己难忘的回忆。

高分亮点：

短语：something unforgettable；be afraid to do sth；in order to；depend on等。

句型：For me, I still remember the day my dad taught me how to ride a bike. 使用了定语从句，that被省略。

This unforgettable experience told me we can't depend on anyone else but ourselves宾语从句，that被省略。

【点睛】首先认真审题，看清文章的要求和要点；其次，理顺自己的行文思路；再次紧扣要点，注意句子之间的连接与过渡；最后要仔细检查是否有单词拼写错误和标点的误用等，还要注意是否出现语法错误，有无重复遗漏，大小写是否正确，词数是否符合要求等。