上海普陀区2022-2020年英语中考一模试题-作文

上海普陀区2022-2020年英语中考一模试题-作文

一、话题作文

1．（2022·上海普陀·统考一模）Write at least 60 words according to the pictures about “A 14th birthday ceremony”

【根据所给的图片，写一篇关于 “十四岁生日仪式” 的短文，题目可另拟，字数不少于 60 个词，标点符号不占格】

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2．（2021·上海普陀·统考一模）Write at least 60 words on the topic “I can be a winner”(以“我可以成为赢家”为题，写一篇不少于60词的短文，标点符号不占格)

提示：马拉松爱好者Allen的人生经历告诉我们：每个人都能够在某方面取得成功。请结合具体自己的经历谈谈你对这一观点的认识。

(注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息。照抄语篇不得分)

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3．（2020·上海普陀·统考一模）Writing

Write at least 60 words on the topic“The thing I want to do in the coming winter holiday”

【以“寒假里我想做的一件事”为题，写一篇不少于 60 词的短文，标点符号不占格】

提示：平日里学习任务较重，如今寒假即将到来，你是否有一件想做而没有机会做的事情呢? 请谈谈想做的这件事，并阐述理由。

（注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息。）__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

参考答案：

1．例文：

An unforgettable experience

Last Sunday, we had our 14th birthday ceremony in the school hall. The hall was decorated with balloons and streamers. Students with uniforms attended the ceremony at 10:00 a.m. First, the headmaster gave a speech. He praised the great progress we made, and gave best wishes to us. Next, the parent representative appreciated the communication with the teenagers and talked about the happy family time with us. To our surprise, we received letters from our parents, which were filled with love and expectation. Finally, cakes with white house and colorful chocolate were presented to us. We enjoyed the cakes and had a great time. What an unforgettable experience!

【详解】1.题干解读：该题目属于记叙文写作。在写作时应根据题目要求及图片显示的信息讲述14岁生日庆典的时间、地点、庆典的具体步骤及自己的感受。

2.写作指导：本文时态以一般过去时为主，人称以第一人称为主，讲述庆典的具体内容，要叙述完整，条理清晰。

2．例文：

I can be a winner

The life experience of marathon enthusiast Allen tells us that everyone can succeed in some way. I couldn't agree more with that.

At the beginning of learning English, I felt it was very difficult. I dared not speak English because my pronunciation was not standard. I also thought my classmates would laugh at me. It wasn't until I learned Allen's life story that I realized I could work to change that. I began to get up early every day to read English. I tried my best to imitate the pronunciation by listening to English songs and watching English movies. Finally, I got an A in the final speaking test.

I believe that as long as I persist, my spoken English will be better and better. Nothing is difficult if you put your heart into it.

【详解】1.题干解读：阅读题干可知，本文要求以“我可以成为赢家”为题写一篇记叙文。根据提示可知写作内容包括结合自己的经历和经验谈谈关于“每个人都能够在某方面取得成功”。写作要思路清晰，层次分明，逻辑清楚，语言的表达符合语法结构。

2.写作指导：例文采取三段式的写作手法，时态为一般过去时和第一人称为主，第一段写根据马拉松爱好者Allen的人生经历告诉我们：每个人都能够在某方面取得成功；第二段联系身边小事和经验来说明；第三段写个人观点和感受。

3．The thing I want to do in the coming winter holiday

The winter holiday is coming. I am very excited because I can have time to do what I want to do. During the school days, I am always busy with my school work. So I don’t have much free time. I have always been longing for a trip to Chongqing. In the winter holiday, I will go to Chongqing with my parents. I hear it is a beautiful city with many attractive places. Also I can have a lot of delicious food there. I think my trip will be very enjoyable.

【详解】题干解读：这篇作文要求以The thing I want to do in the coming winter holiday为题，介绍一下在即将到来的寒假里，自己最想做的事情。这是一篇话题作文，题目比较贴近学生们的日常生活，是学生们比较熟悉的，因此写作内容上对于学生来说不是难题。审题可知，短文应围绕自己假期里想做的这件事进行具体的介绍，这也是文章的主体部分。短文应以一般现在时为主，第一人称来叙述。

例文点评：这是一篇优秀的作文，短文有以下几个优点：首先短文内容完整、充实，叙述详细、清晰、有条理。作者说他假期里最想做的事情是去旅行，并介绍了自己想去的地方。其次短文中使用了正确的时态和人称，语法规范，用词准确。句式结构完整，符合英语的表达习惯，使用了简单句、并列句、宾语从句、状语从句等。短文中使用较多丰富的句型和短语，文章表达流畅，意思连贯。

高分亮点：

短语：be busy with；free time；long for；a lot of。

句型：I am very excited because I can have time to do what I want to do.；During the school days, I am always busy with my school work.；I have always been longing for a trip to Chongqing.；I hear it is a beautiful city with many attractive places.。