高考英语写作专题科学与技术

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这是一份高考英语写作专题科学与技术，共5页。学案主要包含了高分范文，参考范文，写作指导等内容，欢迎下载使用。

演讲稿
(2021·全国乙卷)你校将举办英语演讲比赛。请你以Be Smart Online Learners为题写一篇发言稿参赛，内容包括：
1. 分析优势与不足；
2. 提出学习建议。
注意：1. 词数100左右；
2. 题目和首句已为你写好。
Be Smart Online Learners
Gd mrning, everyne.

【高分范文】
Be Smart Online Learners
Gd mrning, everyne. It is nice t deliver a speech titled “Be smart nline learners” .
Nwadays, with the rapid develpment f the Internet, nline learning brings us significant advantages in furthering ur study. ①Fr instance, its flexibility enables us t learn at ur wn pace and learn repeatedly until we master what we are learning. ②Hwever, nline learning presents challenges, the biggest f which is lw efficiency caused by a lack f selfdiscipline. Therefre, I wuld like t recmmend ways t be smart nline learners. ③Clsing ther scial media cmes first. Advance planning and gd time management will als cntribute t ur prductivity.
At last, hpe all f us can be smart nline learners. Thank yu fr listening!
点评：
1. 词汇美：文章运用了很多高级词汇，如with the rapid develpment f, further, enable ... t ... , at ur wn pace, present, a lack f, cntribute t等。
2. 句式美：①句until we master what we are learning是until引导的时间状语从句，其中又包含一个what引导的宾语从句。
②句the biggest f which is lw efficiency caused by a lack f selfdiscipline是which引导的非限制性定语从句，定语从句中caused by a lack f selfdiscipline是过去分词短语作后置定语修饰lw efficiency。
③句Clsing ther scial media是动词ing形式短语作主语。
练习：
(2021·山东威海模拟)你校正在举行主题为“Hitech in My Life”的英语演讲比赛，请你结合自身经历写一篇演讲稿参赛，谈谈新科技带来的变化。
注意：1. 词数80左右；
2. 不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息。

【参考范文】
Nwadays, hitech has been impacting n ur daily life greatly.
Take visiting museums fr example. They are nt merely places f lking and learning any lnger. Thanks t mdern technlgy, they allw visitrs t participate and interact with exhibits, instead. Last summer, I went n a visit t the Shanghai Natural Histry Museum, where I experienced its immersive multimedia display fr the first time. I really gt a kick ut f walking int histry, experiencing the rise and fall f human civilisatin in persn.
Apparently, it is the advance f technlgy that is making static exhibits mre interesting and attractive.
Ⅱ. 读后续写
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“Are yu ready fr ur walk？” Grandma asked the usual questin every Friday evening.[悬念1]
“Of curse, we are！” we shuted excitedly, ready t talk abut the end f the week and fill Grandma in abut ur week.
Grwing up, my sisters and I always knew Grandma had heart prblems and culdn't d anything hard, but we did knw she wuld d anything t spend mre time with us. Whether it was a wander arund the blck r a walk t the library, Grandma was there by ur side.
When I was ging int sixth grade, we were tld that Grandma nly had 2% heart functin. Her heart wasn't benefiting her anymre, but she fund ut that there was a way t live lnger: an IVAD. It is a heart pump (起搏器) that replaces the heart, basically, a battery instead f a heart and it's cnnected t a battery pack by a tube that cmes ut f the side. Grandma wuld becme a rbt with n heart! The Tled Hspital, the nly hspital near us that culd d this surgery, ffered t d it fr Grandma. She, bviusly, agreed.
The grey mrning f the surgery was rugh fr ur family, as we wke up bright and early t drive t the hspital.[悬念2] That car ride left me with wrried thughts racing thrugh my mind: Will Grandma be kay? Will we ever take anther walk arund the blck?
When we arrived at the hspital, we knew exactly where t g, as we'd been there many times befre. After ging thrugh thse familiar drs and up the stairs, my mum and I walked up t the nurses' desk and asked fr Grandma.
“Oh, Mary？” A nurse answered. “She's ne f the nicest patients we've had.”[悬念3] Then she directed us t the waiting rm and tld us that nly tw f us were permitted t g int the ward (病房) at a time t say gdbye t Grandma befre she went in fr surgery.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
The last tw peple were Grandpa and me.

Finally, after the lngest mrning f my life, the dctr entered the waiting rm, smiling.

【写作指导】
一、理清文章大意
关键：Wh: Grandma
Where: in the hspital
When: when the authr was ging int sixth grade
What: Grandma's heart prblem
Hw: Grandma was in hspital fr surgery.
大意：奶奶心脏有问题，不得不做手术，作者和她的家人们都非常担心。
二、挖掘文中悬念点
悬念1 思考：奶奶为什么每周五晚上就会问这个问题？
悬念2思考：作者为什么说奶奶动手术的那天早晨的天是灰色的，有什么寓意吗？
悬念3思考：这句话除了说明奶奶经常住院治疗，还能说明奶奶是什么样的性格？
三、分析段落开头语
段首句1思考：
①作者看到奶奶了吗？会拥抱奶奶吗？奶奶会对作者说些什么？
②爷爷会安慰奶奶吗？奶奶会有什么反应？
段首句2思考：
①医生会怎样说？
②作者他们会有什么样的反应？
③奶奶手术后的状态怎样？
通过以上思路，预设续写情节如下：
Paragraph 1：作者看见手术前的奶奶→含泪拥抱→奶奶安慰作者→爷爷安慰奶奶
Paragraph 2：医生允许探视病人→家人放心→进病房探视奶奶→奶奶手术后状况良好
【高分范文】
The last tw peple were Grandpa and me. Entering the rm, I saw Grandma sitting n the bed with a blanket arund her. I ran frward and gave her the biggest hug with tearful eyes. Grandma, hlding me tightly in her arms, said, “I knw there's a chance I wn't make it, but I lve yu frever.” Grandpa patted Grandma n the back and cmfrted her, “Dn't wrry, hney. We are all waiting fr yu here.” Grandma ndded with her usual smile. Then she was wheeled away, leaving us waiting and praying anxiusly.
Finally, after the lngest mrning f my life, the dctr entered the waiting rm, smiling. “Mary is ut f surgery. Yu're allwed t visit her as lng as yu're quiet，” he said. Relief swept ver my bdy and tears began rlling dwn my face. Once we walked int the rm, there lay Grandma, lking peaceful yet painful with s many tubes attached t her. I felt s shcked but s happy. Grandma wuld be kay. She was taking the first step t becming better and ging n anther walk with us ne day.
点评：
1. 使用恰当的修饰词让描写更加生动。
①biggest和tearful将作者担心奶奶手术和对奶奶的爱表现得淋漓尽致。
②用usual修饰smile，表明奶奶平时就很坚强乐观。
③用s修饰shcked和happy，更能凸显作者当时吃惊和高兴的程度。
2. 词汇与语法结构丰富、准确。
①文章中高级词汇make it, anxiusly, allw, rll dwn, attach等的运用贴切生动。
②动词ing形式Entering the rm作时间状语，saw后接动词ing形式作宾语，hlding me tightly ... leaving us waiting ...等非谓语动词的运用使得续写简洁流畅。
③chance后接省略that的同位语从句，这是一个增分点。
④用as lng as和nce引导时间状语从句，彰显了考生扎实的语言功底。