新高考英语复习：05 读后续写：趣事型（两大核心技巧）-高考英语读后续写技巧与训练（新高考专用）新高考英语复习：

这是一份新高考英语复习：05 读后续写：趣事型（两大核心技巧）-高考英语读后续写技巧与训练（新高考专用）新高考英语复习：，共15页。

\l "_Tc22417" Part2：趣事类描写“两大核心技巧” PAGEREF _Tc22417 \h 3
\l "_Tc4122" 核心技巧1：矛盾塑造（尴尬+紧张） PAGEREF _Tc4122 \h 3
\l "_Tc23042" 核心技巧2：快乐结局塑造（感激+开心） PAGEREF _Tc23042 \h 4
\l "_Tc3375" Part3：灵活应用 PAGEREF _Tc3375 \h 4
\l "_Tc16046" 例1：成功的“复仇” PAGEREF _Tc16046 \h 4
\l "_Tc4114" 例2：做家务 PAGEREF _Tc4114 \h 7
\l "_Tc21875" Part 4: 高考真题再现 PAGEREF _Tc21875 \h 9
\l "_Tc22297" 【真题1】2021年1月浙江卷：万圣节南瓜卡头 PAGEREF _Tc22297 \h 9
\l "_Tc8571" 【真题2】2017年浙江卷：健忘而可爱的妈妈 PAGEREF _Tc8571 \h 12
Part1：经典例文（姐弟重逢）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
One day, I fund a wallet n the street. The wallet cntained nly three dllars and a very ld letter. The envelpe was wrn and the nly thing n it was the return address. I started t pen the letter, hping t find sme infrmatin. Then I saw the date-1990, and the signature-Beatrice. The letter was written several decades ag.
Then I made every effrt and fund ut that Beatrice was nw wrking in a hspital. I shwed her the letter. The secnd she saw the letter, she tk a deep breath and said, “Yung man, this letter was the last cntact I ever had with Henry. He is my nly brther. I lved him very much. I was nly 16 at the time and my brther is tw years yunger than me. If yu can find him, tell him I'm still lking fr him,” she said and tears began t well up in her eyes. “Mther is waiting fr him t cme back hme.”
When I walked ut f the building with the wallet in my hand, the guard f the building recgnized the wallet, and with his help, I finally fund its wner, Henry. I handed the wallet t Henry and he said, “Yes, that's mine! It must have drpped ut f my pcket this afternn.”
“I read the letter in the hpe f finding ut wh wned the wallet.” I said. The smile n his face suddenly disappeared. He asked, “Yu read that letter?” “Nt nly did I read it, but als Beatrice read.” I replied. He suddenly became excited. “Beatrice? Yu knw where she is? Hw is she? Please tell me,” he begged. “She's fine. She has been lking fr yu.” I said sftly.
He grabbed my hand and said, “Sir, yu knw she is my nly sister in this wrld. I've always missed her.”
Henry and I tk the elevatr (电梯) dwn t Beatrice's rm. I walked ver t her. “Beatrice,” I said sftly, pinting t Henry, wh was waiting with me in the drway. “D yu knw the man?”
注意：
1．续写词数应为150左右；
2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Beatrice adjusted her glasses, lked fr a mment, but didn't say a wrd．
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Abut three weeks later I gt a call at my ffice frm Beatrice．
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Beatrice adjusted her glasses, lked fr a mment, but didn't say a wrd．Henry said sftly, almst in a whisper, “Beatrice, it’s Henry. D yu remember me? ” She said excitedly, “Henry! I dn’t believe it! Henry! It's yu! My Henry! ” He walked slwly twards her and they hugged. The nurse and I left with tears falling dwn ur faces.
比阿特丽斯调整了一下眼镜，看了一会儿，但一句话也没说。亨利轻声说，几乎是轻声说，“比阿特丽斯，是亨利。你还记得我了吗？她兴奋地说，“亨利！”我不相信！亨利！是你的名字！我的亨利先生！他慢慢地向她走去，他们拥抱在一起。护士和我离开了，眼泪流了下来。
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Abut three weeks later I gt a call at my ffice frm Beatrice．“Can yu break away n Sunday t attend a party? Henry and Beatrice are ging t have a party in the hme! ” It was a beautiful party with all the peple dressed up t jin in the celebratin. If yu ever wanted t see a wman and a man acting like tw teenagers, yu had t see this elder sister and yunger brther. It was a perfect ending fr a family affectin that had lasted nearly several decades.
大约三周后，我接到比阿特丽斯的电话。“你星期天可以参加聚会吗？”亨利和比阿特丽斯将在家里举办一个聚会！“这是一个美丽的派对，所有人都盛装参加庆祝活动。如果你想看到一个女人和一个男人像两个青少年，你必须看到这个姐姐和弟弟。这是一个持续了近几十年的家庭感情的完美结局。
【解析】
本文以信封为线索展开，讲述了作者在街上发现了一个钱包，在里面发现一封破旧的信，通过努力找到信主人的姐姐，通过保安大叔找到了钱包主人，最后，姐弟重逢的故事。
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“比阿特丽斯扶了扶眼镜，看了一会儿，但没有说一句话。”可知，第一段可描写姐弟两人重逢的温馨场景。
②由第二段首句内容“大约三周后，我在办公室接到比阿特丽斯的电话。”可知，第二段可描写作者对重逢事件的感慨。
2.续写线索：发现信封——找到信封主人姐姐——找到主人——姐弟重逢——感谢——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
接电话：get a call at/put sb n t/pick up the telephne/answer the phne
抽出时间：break away n/take time ff/spare ne’s time
情绪类
兴奋：did excitedly/thrilled
泪流满面：tears bathe/stream dwn/ne’s cheeks
【点睛】
[高分句型1]：The nurse and I left with tears falling dwn ur faces.这句话运用了with的复合结构。
[高分句型2]：It was a perfect ending fr a family affectin that had lasted nearly several decades这句话运用了that引导的定语从句。
Part2：趣事类描写“两大核心技巧”
核心技巧1：矛盾塑造（尴尬+紧张）
S nervus was he that （他太紧张了）he drpped the electric carving knife.（2021.04 台州高三调考）
I gt int a panic（ 陷入惊慌之中）as I pressed firmly against the table and mved my head arund trying t find the right angle, but it was n use. （2021年1月浙江高考）
3. Sweating and nearly tearing（汗流浃背，眼泪差点流下来）, I culd imagine hw silly and strange I was at that mment based n the cntinuing laughter frm my parents and Jasn. （2021年1月浙江高考）
她立刻涨红了脸，感到尴尬几乎把她整个包围起来。
Blushing scarlet instantly, she felt embarrassment almst wreathed her entirely.
核心技巧2：快乐结局塑造（感激+开心）
1. 他们耸了耸肩，咧着嘴笑，这就驱散了她的一切烦恼，给了她安慰。
They shrugged and grinned, which dissipated all her distress and cnsled her.
谢谢。她紧紧抓住打开的袋子，充满了感激和温暖。
‘Thanks.’ Clinging her hands t the bag pening, she was verwhelmed by a surge f gratitude and warmth.
这两个强壮的陌生人点亮了她的一天。
The tw strng strangers undubtedly lit her day up.
3. We all jumped t ur feet, dancing and screaming with jy（开心得欢呼雀跃）. （2021.04 台州高三调考）
4. Thugh I was dissatisfied with my ugly gesture and stupid image, I was satisfied with the happiness and fun that I brught t thers（对我带给别人的快乐和乐趣感到满意）. （2021年1月浙江高考）
5. 她停了下来，心中洋溢着欢快的心情，拿出一把硬币，扭头把它们攥在他们的手里，尽管两个男人的表情都很惊讶。（2021嘉兴二模）
Brimming ver with bright feeling and jy, she stpped, fished ut a handful cins and tuned arund t squeeze them in their fists despite tw men's astnished expressin.
Part3：灵活应用
例1：成功的“复仇”
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
“I will have revenge(复仇) n him, and make him regret what he did t me,” said Philip t himself, his face red with anger. Stephen, wh happened at that mment t walk past and hear him talking t himself.
“Wh is that yu want t take revenge n?” asked Stephen. Philip lked at his friend and said, “Yu remember my new ball given by my father? Lk! It is punctured! It was farmer Rbinsn’s sn wh did this!”
Stephen asked him why yung Rbinsn had ruined it. “I was walking and kicking my ball.” Philip replied, “By accident, when I was ppsite the gate, my ball bumped ver a bucket f water left in the pathway by him.”
“He came up and began t yell at me. I assured him that what I had dne was an accident, and that I was terribly srry fr it. I als ffered t fetch anther bucket f water fr him. But despite all I had said, he tk a nail ut f his pcket and twisted it int the ball, as yu see. I will make him pay fr this.”
“Hnestly speaking,” said Stephen, “he is already punished fr what he has dne, because nbdy likes him and he ften walks arund alne. He is just a lnely and miserable by. This will be enugh revenge fr yu.”
“But the ball is my favrite gift and I enjy playing with it s much…” murmured Philip.
“Nw Philip,” said Stephen, “I think yu can act better than him in terms f getting revenge. I will tell yu what happened t him nt lng ag.”
“A while ag he saw a bee hvering abut a flwer. He caught the bee and was ging t pull ff its wings fr fun. The bee, f curse, stung him. The pain made him s angry that, like yu, he decided t get revenge. He gt a stick, and pressed it int the beehive (蜂巢).”
“Immediately the whle swarm f bees flew ut and stung him s badly that he had t spend a few days in bed.”
“S yu see, he was nt very successful in getting revenge. What if he culd act better and frgive the bee fr stinging him?” asked Stephen.
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“I must say,” replied Philip, “that yur advice seems very gd”.
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A few days afterward, Philip saw this yung Rbinsn fall as he was carrying hme a heavy lg f wd.
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2.答案：
“I must say,” replied Philip, “that yur advice seems very gd. S cme with me please, and I will tell my father what happened t the ball, and I think he will nt be angry with me.” They went, and Philip tld his father what had happened. He thanked Stephen fr the gd advice he had given his sn, and prmised Philip t give him anther ball exactly the same as the first.
“我得说，”菲利普回答说，“你的建议似乎很好。所以请跟我来，我要告诉我父亲舞会发生了什么事，我想他不会对我生气的。他们走了，菲利普把发生的事告诉了他父亲。他感谢斯蒂芬给他儿子的好建议，并答应菲利普再给他一个和第一个完全一样的舞会。
A few days afterwards, Philip saw this yung Rbinsn fall as he was carrying hme a heavy lg f wd. It was t heavy fr him t lift up again. Philip ran t him, and helped him t put it n his shulder again. The by was embarrassed t be treated s kindly when he had ruined Philip’s ball the week befre! He said that he was very srry fr his behavir. Philip went hme quite happy. “This,” he said,“ is the best revenge I culd take, in returning gd fr bad.”
几天后，菲利普看见这个年轻的罗宾逊带着一根沉重的木头回家时倒下了。它太重了，他不能再抬不起来了。菲利普跑到他跟前，帮他又把它放在肩上。这个男孩在一周前毁了菲利普的球，对这样友好感到很尴尬！他说他对自己的行为感到非常抱歉。菲利普很高兴地回家了。“这是，”他说，“这是我所能得到的最好的报复。”
解析：
通过阅读所给文章可知,Philip因为农夫Rbinsn的儿子用钉子刺穿了自己新买的球而非常生气,扬言要报复他。Stephen劝他说没有人喜欢Rbinsn的儿子,他经常一个人走来走去。他只是一个孤独可怜的男孩。Stephen还告诉Philip,几天前Rbinsn的儿子被蜜蜂蛰了,就去打蜜蜂巢,结果被一大群蜜蜂蛰了,不得不在床上躺了几天的事情。
续写部分分为两段,第一段开头是:“我得说,” Philip回答说,“你的建议似乎很好。”所以后文应该是讲述Philip放弃了报复的计划,告诉了父亲实情,Philip的父亲感谢Stephen给他儿子的忠告,答应Philip再给他买一个球,和第一个一模一样的。第二段开头是:几天后,Philip看到Rbinsn的儿子在把一根沉重的木头搬回家时摔倒了。本段应该写Philip帮助了Rbinsn的儿子,Rbinsn的儿子为自己几天前的行为道了歉,Philip高高兴兴地回了家,认为以德报怨就是最好的报复。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【点睛】本文描写详略得当,使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如:be angry with;gd advice;the same as;t…t…;embarrassed等高级词汇;He said that he was very srry fr his behavir.宾语从句等高级句式。
例2：做家务
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。（满分25分）
During lunchtime，Emma suggested ging t the z t feed the animals and her mm agreed.
“We’ll stp by the bakery and pick sme bread up. Nw hurry and eat and then we’ll g. It’s ging t be a lvely day. Grandma is cming with us. She’ll be here any minute，”mm said.
Emma ate her lunch and then ran int her rm t get her shes.The prblem was that she culd nly find ne f them. She lked under her bed, but all she culd see were dirty twels and pants. She mved sme f her tys ut f the way，but still culdn’t find her she. After she’d checked everywhere in her rm，she ran int the kitchen. “Mm，I can’t find my she.Will yu wait while I lk fr it？”she asked.
Her mm thught abut hw many times she’d tld Emma t clean her rm up. She whispered smething t Emma’s grandma and then said t Emma，“Yu will have t stay hme.Yur dad and I will take Ryan t the z. Grandma will stay here with yu.”
“N！Please wait fr me. I want t g t the z，”Emma cried. “I’m srry, Emma. I’ve tld yu a dzen times t clean yur rm and yu ignred me.Yu can’t find yur she nw. It’s yur wn fault fr nt ding as I asked.Yu will stay hme.”
Emma ran int her bedrm, crying. Her mm came t the dr and said，“Emma，clean that rm f yurs befre I get hme. I’ve tld grandma nt t give yu any sweets until yu finish the wrk.” She went ut t the car with Ryan and Emma’s dad and then they drve away.
注意：
1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2．应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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Emma sat n her bed and cried fr a lng time.
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Emma and her grandma were sitting at the table，eating when her mm，dad，and Ryan came hme.
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【答案】Emma sat n her bed and cried fr a lng time. And then she wiped her eyes and started t clean her rm. It tk her tw hurs t clean up the rm.“I did it！”she said prudly. She even fund her missing she. She ran int the living rm.“Grandma！Cme and see. I cleaned my rm and fund my she.” Grandma lked in Emma’s rm. “If yu had kept it this way, yu wuldn’t have lst yur she.Cme and have sme sweets nw，”she said.
艾玛坐在床上哭了很长时间。然后她擦了擦眼睛，开始打扫房间。她花了两个小时才打扫房间。“我做了！”她骄傲地说。她甚至找到了她丢失的鞋子。她跑进客厅。“奶奶！”来看看吧。我打扫了我的房间，找到了我的鞋子。奶奶看着艾玛的房间。“如果你一直这样做，你就不会丢鞋了。现在就来吃点糖果吧，”她说。
Emma and her grandma were sitting at the table，eating when her mm，dad，and Ryan came hme.“Well，lk at Emma’s rm！It’s clean，”her dad said.“Hw was the z？Did yu have fun？I wish I culd have gne there with yu，”Emma said.“If yu keep yur rm clean，we may g and see animals again，”her mm said. Frm then n，Emma tried her best t keep her rm clean.
艾玛和奶奶坐在桌边吃饭，妈妈、爸爸和瑞恩回家。“嗯，看看艾玛的房间！它很干净，”她爸爸说，“动物园怎么样？你玩得开心吗？我希望我能和你一起去，”艾玛说。“如果你保持房间干净，我们可以再去看动物，”她妈妈说。从那时起，艾玛就尽力保持她的房间干净。
Part 4: 高考真题再现
【真题1】2021年1月浙江卷：万圣节南瓜卡头
：阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Pumpkin (南瓜）carving at Hallween is a family traditin. We visit a lcal farm every Octber. In the pumpkin field, I cmpete with my three brthers and sister t seek ut the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have t carry ur pumpkins back hme, and as the eldest child I have an advantage — I carried an 85-punder back last year.
This year, it was hard t tell whether my prize r the ne chsen by my 14-year-ld brther, Jasn, was the winner. Unfrtunately we frgt t weigh them befre taking ut their insides, but I was determined t prve my pint. All f us were hard at wrk at the kitchen table, with my mm filming the annual event. I’m unsure nw why I thught frcing my head inside the pumpkin wuld settle the matter, but it seemed t make perfect sense at the time.
With the pumpkin resting n the table, hle uppermst, I bent ver and pressed my head against the pening. At first I gt jammed just abve my eyes and then, as I went n with my task, unwilling t quit, my nse briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed t put my whle head int it, like a crk (软木塞) frced int a bttle. I was able t straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting n my shulders.
My excitement was shrt-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. “I’m ging t set it dwn, nw,” I said, and with Jasn helping t supprt its weight, I bent back ver the table t give it smewhere t rest. It was nly when I tried t remve my head that I realized getting ut was ging t be less straightfrward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nse gt in the way. I gt int a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and mved my head arund trying t find the right angle, but it was n use. “I can’t get it ut!” I shuted, my vice sunding unnaturally lud in the enclsed space.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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That vide was psted the day befre Hallween. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
优秀范文1
It was five r six minutes thugh it felt much lnger. The air inside the hllw vegetable was full f my anxius breath. I culd hear my sister’s laughter and Jasn’s muffled vice talking abut cutting the giant thing pen. “N! Nt my precius pumpkin!” I prtested. Eventually, Dad helped me adjust my bdy t a mre relaxed psitin, and pulled the pumpkin gently ff my head. Hair in knts, nse and chain cvered in pumpkin flesh, I let ut a sigh f relief. That’s when I realized the camera had been rlling the whle time!
The vide was psted nline the Mnday befre Hallween.I lked just like a pumpkin head in it. Embarrassed and a little annyed, I fled t my rm, but Mm stpped me. “Yu haven’t read the cmments yet.” I scrlled dwn the screen and marveled at the stries the viewers shared abut Hallween. One girl recalled celebrating it with her brthers and sisters, and thanked us fr “bringing her hme”. The wrds brught warmth t my heart and tears t my eyes. I felt lucky t be a part f this mischievus yet lving family. (171 wrds)
出彩表达积累（出自原文及范文）
1.hllw adj. 中空的；空心的
2.muffled adj.沉闷的；模糊不清的
3.sigh n.叹气；叹息
4.marvel v.感到惊奇；大为赞叹
5.mischievus adj.顽皮的；捣蛋的
6.scrll dwn 向下滚动
7.Eventually, Dad helped me adjust my bdy t a mre relaxed psitin, and pulled the pumpkin gently ff my head.
最后，爸爸帮我把身体调整到一个比较放松的姿势，轻轻地把南瓜从我头上扯下来。（对动作的生动描写）
8.The wrds brught warmth t my heart and tears t my eyes.
这些话温暖了我的心，使我热泪盈眶。（对神态的生动描写）
优秀范文2
It was five r six minutes thugh it felt much lnger.Jasn suggested using a knife t cut the pumpkin pen. I waved my hands wildly in prtest at the plan. “Then yu need t find a way f pulling yurself ut.” My dad said in a calm, cl vice. His vice settled my nerves. I was cnscius that my nse was acting as an impediment t my escape. With stretching ut my face and biting int the pumpkin, I surmunted the large bstacle and managed t pull my head ut. A ripple f excitement ran thrugh us but the first thing I saw was the camera.
The vide was psted nline the Mnday befre Hallween. In the space f a week, it had been viewed ver a millin times. It filled Mm with greater astnishment. Rarely had a pumpkin’s vide had s many hits as this ne. Dangerus as it is, sme viewers’ curisity was t strng t resist. They left messages describing the feelings they had while watching it. Sme laughed at me, while thers praised my parents, wh remained calm thrughut. Lking thrugh these reviews, the sunlight peeking thrugh ur , Dad’s calm smile reflected his mtt “All’s well with us, never fear”. (186 wrds)
出彩表达积累（出自原文及范文）
1. nerve n.神经质；神经紧张
2. cnscius adj.意识到；注意到
3. impediment n.妨碍；阻碍；障碍
4. surmunt v.克服；解决
5. bstacle n.障碍；阻碍；绊脚石
6. ripple n.波纹；细浪；涟漪
7. His vice settled my nerves. 他的声音使我安定下来。（无灵主语）
8. It filled Mm with greater astnishment.这使母亲尤为惊讶。（对情绪的生动描写）
【真题2】2017年浙江卷：健忘而可爱的妈妈
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
A vacatin with my mther
I had an interesting childhd: It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because f my mther-lving, sweet, and yet absent-minded and frgetful. One strange family trip we tk when I was eleven tells a lt abut her.
My tw sets f grandparents lived in Clrad and Nrth Dakta, and my parents decided t spend a few weeks driving t thse states and seeing all the sights alng the way. As the first day f ur trip apprached, David, my eight-year-ld brther, and I unwillingly said gd-bye t all f ur friends. Wh knew if we’d ever see them again? Finally, the mment f ur departure arrived, and we laded suitcases, bks, games, camping equipment, and a tent int the car and bravely drve ff. We bravely drve ff again tw hurs later after we’d returned hme t get the purse and traveler’s checks Mm had frgtten.
David and I were always a little nervus when using gas statin bathrms if Mm was driving while Dadslept:” Yu stand utside the dr and play lkut while I g, and I’ll stand utside the dr and play lkut while yu g.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Hney, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gsh… I thught they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t abut t take any chances.
On the furth r fifth night, we had truble finding a htel with a vacancy. After driving in vain fr sme time, Mm suddenly gt a great idea: Why didn’t we find a huse with a likely-lking backyard and ask if we culd set up tent there? David and I became nervus. T ur great relief, Dad turned dwn the idea. Mm never culd understand ur bjectins.If a strange family shwed up n her frnt drsteps, Mm wuld have been delighted. She thinks everyne in the wrld as as nice as she is. We finally fund a vacancy in the next twn.
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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us.
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We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way.
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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us.But then we were half an hur away frm the htel, where the tentwas left behind. Dad recmmended buying a new ne, while Mm insisted n ur ging back t fetch it, saying "Frgetful peple like me may lse things repeatedly, s it's unwise t give up the tent." Finally, we gt back the tent and hit the rad again. If Mm hadn't been that absent-minded, it wuld have saved us the truble f ging back again and again.
We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way. One day, twards evening, we fund a great campingsite at the ft f a high muntain. Davidand I helped Dad put up the tent, and Mm was busy preparing supper. When the setting sun cast an range light ver the muntains, the tent was set up and the meal was ready. Sitting arund the camp fire, we talked and laughed. Every time we mentined the funny incidents f the jurney a pleasant smile wuld spread ver Mm's face.
解析
文章中文大意：我的母亲很健忘（absent-minded and frgetful），一家四口去祖父母在的省自驾旅游，途中发生了有趣的事情，比如爸爸叫我盯住妈妈，以防她开车的时候睡着：
第一段开头句：我们拿出来新买的帐篷
第二段开头句：我们愉快地欣赏路边的景色
关键词： mm dad David （弟弟）, tent, camping, nice, truble, frgetful, absent-minded
实战解析
首先，根据文章当中第二段内容比较开心的基调，第一段的故事情节应该比较偏向正面感情色彩，例如：我们在露营过程中一起搭建帐篷的开心时光或露营过程中的趣事（尤其是前文有铺垫妈妈是个frgetful的人，这一点也可以埋下伏笔来表达后面过程中由于妈妈健忘而带来的趣事）（也有同学在此处描述了露营过程中对其他陌生人提供帮助，来集中体现nice这一个点）；
其次，第二段开头说来描述欣赏风景： 此处可以用一些描述景色环境的表达来烘托下氛围，但是第二段不能仅仅只有景色描述； 例如：这里可以实写和虚写结合的方式，看到景色（同时回忆往事），最终把故事的落脚点放在 "家人的感情" "亲情" "生活的乐趣" "与妈妈一起的趣事" 等等角度都可以的；当然也有同学描述与陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意这个主题；总之这次的话题比较开放，情节可以写的角度比较多；
再次，除了情节方面的内容以外，以下几个方面是考生需要着重关注的得分点：字迹清晰程度，语法多样性和句式丰富性，衔接成分的使用，语言的场景恰当程度；高考英语写作中，考生所采用的句型结构一定程度上影响了老师对考生写作水平的判断；说到语法丰富性方面，例如在作文中用到从句结构、强调句、非谓语结构等。尤其应该注意的是：避免句型单一化，如通篇使用定语从句，这样反而使阅卷老师觉得该考生对句型掌握的不够充分。应该在文章写作中有意识地多使用不同的句型结构。例如：They said it was such a beautiful day that they wuld remember it frever.（such… that结构）。 由于阅卷老师在评卷时的时间十分有限，在作文中放入显耀的连接词可以帮助老师快速抓住文章结构，促使老师更好地理解文章主旨，同时清晰的连接词可以显示作者写作时严谨的逻辑。例如：upn ne's arrival, then, hwever, besides, while等。