新高考英语复习:训练04 读后续写示例与写作训练4新高考英语复习:
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阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
Arriving in Sydney n his wn frm India, my husband , Rashid, stayed in a htel fr a shrt time while lking fr a huse fr me and ur children as we wuld g there when he made everything settled.
During the first week f his stay, he went ut ne t d sme shpping. He almst gt lst in thse unfamiliar blcks. When he came back in the late afternn, he discvered that his suitcase was gne. He was extremely wrried as the suitcase had all his imprtant papers, including his passprt. Fr a while, he was verwhelmed with depressin with n ne t turn t.
He reprted the case t the plice and then sat there,lst and lnely in a strange , thinking f the terrible trubles f getting all the paperwrk rganized again a distant cuntry while trying t settle dwn in a new ne.
Late in the evening, the phne rang. It was a stranger. He was trying t prnunce my husband’s name and was asking him a lt f questins. Then he said they had fund a pile f papers in their trash can(垃圾桶)that had been left ut n the ftpath.
My husband rushed t their hme t find a kind family hlding all papers and dcuments. Their yung daughter had gne t the trash can and fund a pile f unfamiliar papers. Her parents had carefully srted them ut, althugh they had fund mainly freign addresses n f the dcuments. At they had seen a half-written letter in the pile in which my husband had given his new tele number t a friend. My husband was s excited abut the return f the suitcase. Meanwhile, the kindness f this family made him feel that this place culd be a new start, a new hme fr a brand new life.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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In rder t thank this family,…
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A few weeks later, my children and I arrived in Sydney.
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为:主人公Rashid来到陌生的城市悉尼,打算找房子开始他的新生活。然而他的手提箱却意外丢失,包括里面所有的重要文件,他向警方报案,在这座陌生城市他感到孤独和无助。幸运的是,最后手提箱被一个善良的家庭捡到,并顺利回到Rashid手中。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为Rashid,捡到旅行箱的热心家庭。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。Rashid来到陌生城市准备找房子安顿下来;结果意外丢失其重要的旅行箱;旅行箱被当地一户善良的人家捡到,失而复得。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(develpment)。故事总体的发展应该是主人公Rashid为了表示对这户家庭的感谢晚上请他们一家在餐馆吃饭,同时也聊到了Rashid的经历以及在陌生城市的迷惘和无助。这户人家在知道了Rashid的事情之后,决定帮助Rashid找房子,同时帮助他熟悉街区,一来一往之后,Rashid和他们成为了挚友。几个星期之后,Rashid的妻子和孩子也来到了悉尼,他们的房子已经定下来,开启了他们人生的一段新旅程。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(pints)。结合下划线词和文本内容,展开尽可能丰富的想象,罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如,第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“Accrding t the stry, what wuld Rashid d t thank this family? Hw culd he find his huse?等”第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点:“What wuld happen when Rashid’s family came t Sydney? Wuld they have a new life in this unfamiliar city, why?等”
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In rder t thank this family, Rashid invited them t a dinner in a nearby restaurant. Rashid tld them he was a newcmer in this city and wanted t find a huse t settle dwn here waiting fr his family t jin him. “When I fund ut that my suitcase was missing, I was disappinted and hpeless. Thank yu sincerely fr yur help. What a timely assistance fr me! ” Rashid said. This family culd have chsen t ignre this suitcase. Hwever, they didn’t. They fund ut the wner ut f their kindness and turned this trash int a treasure. “Yu are welcme, Rashid. I heard that there are sme huses fr sale in my neighbrhd. I can shw yu arund, if yu’re interested.” Again, thanks t this kind family, Rashid fund a sweet hme.
A few weeks later, my children and I arrived in Sydney. My husband had prepared a new hme fr us surrunded by kind neighbrs. Thugh the beginning f the stry was filled with terrible trubles, it wrked ut perfectly in the end. This family let us feel the warmth frm this unfamiliar city. A small kindness can indeed make a difference.(除给定词外,160 wrds)
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。根据故事发展的线索,范文第一段将续写Rashid为了回报这个家庭的善举请他们在餐馆里。于是Rashid向他们叙说了自己的处境,而捡到手提箱的家庭又一次帮助Rashid找到了住处。第二段,Rashid的家人来到悉尼,而此时,Rashid已经安顿好了一切,虽然这个城市对他们来说仍旧陌生,但是他们相信这是一个值得安家定居的地方因为当地人的善行。在故事的最后,再一次点名主题。
[提炼归纳]
1. 合理拓展情节
读后续写首先要读通给定文本,把握故事的人物和事件。在此基础上根据提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化,可以通过设问的方式,将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来,以利后续写作时的信息整理和语言组织。在该练习中,我们通过4个问题来拓展并整理自己的写作思路,这4个问题以Rashid以及其家人为表达的主体,问题之间有一定的逻辑联系,符合故事发展的合理结局。
2. 有效运用连接手段
在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合,还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段(cnnectives)的有效运用,例如范文中我们用了Hwever,thugh来说明事件的转折,again表示Rashid再一次对这户家庭的感谢。这些连接词的使用可以使文本更加紧凑连贯。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
I lay n my bed, legs leaning against the wall, desperately wishing my mther wuld call. But I remembered the last time I'd seen her, right befre the train fr Prvidence pulled ut f the statin, “Yu knw hw expensive it is t call,” she said, then hugged me tight and said gd- bye.
This was my first birthday away frm hme. I missed my mm, missed my sister, and mst certainly missed the special pund cake my mther always made fr my birthday. Since getting t cllege that year, I wuld watch jealusly as the ther freshmen received care packages frm their parents n their birthdays--and even n rdinary days. Big bxes cntaining summer slacks and bluses, packages f M&M's and Snickers , things they needed and things they didn't. Instead f feeling thrilled abut my upcming eighteenth birthday, I felt empty. I wished my mm wuld send me smething, t, but I knew that she culdn’t affrd presents r the pstage. She had dne her best with my sister and me--raising us by herself. The simple truth was there just was never enugh mney.
But that didn’t stp her frm filling us with dreams. “Yu can be anything yu want t be,” she wuld tell us. “Pliticians, dancers, writers -- yu just have t wrk fr it; yu have t get an educatin.”
Thanks t my mm's sacrifices and big dreams, I’d made it t the Ivy League: Brwn University in Prvidence, Rhde Island.
As I was recalling these things, my rmmate jined me n the bed. “Hey. After we study, let's buy ice cream and cake.” I ndded, clsed my eyes, and imagined the cake Mm wuld have made. Mmm. I culd see the glden yellw f each f the twelve eggs, and I culd almst smell the vanilla(香草) filling the huse while the cake baked.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
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As I daydreamed, there was a knck n the dr.
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2..阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
Mr. Plumbean lived n a street where all the huses were the same. He liked it that way. S did everybdy else n Mr. Plumbean's street. Then ne day a seagull flew ver Mr. Plumbean's huse and made a big range splt(斑块) n Mr. Plumbean's huse.
“Oh! T bad!” everybdy said. “Mr. Plumbean will have t paint his huse again.”
S Mr. Plumbean gt sme blue paint and sme white paint, and that night he gt busy. He painted at night because it was cler. When the paint was gne, the rf was blue. The walls were white. And the big range splt was still there. Then he gt sme mre paint. He gt red paint, yellw paint, green paint, and purple paint.
In the mrning the ther peple n the street came ut f their huses. Their huses were all the same. But Mr. Plumbean's huse was like a rainbw. It was like a jungle. It was like an explsin. There was the big range splt. And there were little range splts. There were stripes. There were pictures f elephants and lins and pretty girls and steam-shvels. That day Mr. Plumbean bught carpenter's tls. That night he built a twer n tp f his rf, and he painted a clck n the twer.
At night the next day Mr. Plumbean gt a truck full f green things. He planted palm trees, bababs , bushes, and nins. When the ther peple came ut f their huses, they saw Mr. Plumbean swinging between tw palm trees and Mr. Plumbean was drinking lemnade.
Plumbean has gne t far! “Plumbean, what have yu dne t yur huse?” the peple shuted.
“My huse is me and I am it. My huse is where I like t be and it lks like all my dreams,” Mr. Plumbean said.
The peple went away. They asked the man wh lived next dr t Mr. Plumbean t g and have a talk with him. "Tell him that we all liked it here befre he changed his huse. Tell him that his huse has t be the same as urs s we can have a neat street."
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。
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The man went t see Mr. Plumbean that evening.
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Then, ne by ne, they went t see Mr. Plumbean, late at night.
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I had been swimming cmpetitively fr five years and was ready t quit because I felt I was hrrible at it. I was ften the nly African American at a swimming cmpetitin. I kept receiving “Hnurable Mentins”. Any athlete knws that yu dn’t want t have a bkshelf full f “Hnurable Mentins”, which yu get just because yu shwed up.
One summer day, the day befre a big swim meet, I decided t break the news t my grandma that I was quitting the swim team. When I tld her f my desire t quit swimming, she lked me int my face, saying firmly but warmly, “Baby, remember these wrds ‘Quitters never win and winners never quit.’ Yur grandmther didn’t raise lsers r quitters. Yu g t that meet tmrrw, and yu swim like yu are a grandchild f mine, yu hear?” I was t afraid t say anything but “Yes, ma’am.”
The next day we arrived at the swim meet late, missing my grup f swimmers in the 15/16 age grup. My cach insisted I be allwed t swim with the lder grup. I knew she was including me in the race s ur lng drive wuld nt be wasted, and she had n expectatins whatsever that I wuld cme in anything but eighth place and nly that because there were nt nine lanes.
As I was munting the bard, all the ther girls lked at me. I quickly nticed that these girls were here t d ne thing—beat me! All f a sudden my grandma’s wrds rang in my head:“Quitters never win and winners never quit. Yu swim like yu are a grandchild f mine. Quitters never win and winners never quit...” “Yes, grandma, I will swim like I am a grandchild f yurs, ” I said t myself.
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SPLASH! I was swimming harder than I’d ever swum befre.
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Just then, cheers and claps verwhelmed me.
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4.阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文, 续写的词数应为150左右。
Mike licked the last f the mint chclate chip ice cream. It was almst time t leave. He jumped int the car with his parents and headed ff t the Olympic-sized pl fr the big swim meet.
When his race came up, Mike was cnfident. He was strng and swift. Mike climbed ut the pl, smiling. He had just wn first place, making him the fastest by in his age grup.
“Cngratulatins, sn, “ his father said. His mm gave him a hug, even thugh he was saking wet.
A week later, it was time fr anther swim meet. Like befre, Mike decided t enjy his favrite ice cream flavr. Mike remembered that the last time he had wn a race, he als ate mint chclate chip ice cream first. Maybe he’d win again.
He tk first place again in his race. Mike was feeling pretty gd. As it turned ut, Mike decided t have mint chclate chip ice cream befre every ne f the next few swim meets. He began t think f it as his lucky charm. After several muths f placing in the tp psitins f every race he swam, Mike was feeling unbeatable. And he wuldn’t admit it, but all that ice cream was adding a few punds t his athletic swimmer’s build.
It didn’t take lng after that fr Mike t start cming in secnd place---and then third---and then last place in his races. The lucky mint chclate chip ice cream had lst its magic.
On the day f his next swim meet, his mther sat dwn at the table with him. “Mike, we all lve ice cream, bu it’s nt healthy fr yur bdy t eat s much f it. Maybe it’s time t quit the sweet treats fr a while, especially befre yu g swimming.”
Mike unwillingly agreed. He went t the swim meet, and didn’t perfrm well. His father ffered t g running with him a few days a week t help him feel better and strengthen his muscles. The extra weight sn disappeared, and Mike fund himself breathing easier at swim practices.
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It was the last meet f the seasn, and Mike wasn’t sure what t expect.
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Finally came the end f the race.
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I wuld like t share an act f kindness, which I practice regularly and which gives me great jy. I always carry at least $ 10 in my car and als in my pcket. I save it fr the first persn wh asks if I can “spare sme change. Smiling at the persn, I always respnd very cheerfully with a cmment like, “Yes, I wuld lve t.” r “It wuld be my pleasure. “ And I give them the mney. Then I replace it with my next $ 10 fr the next persn. I never spend this mney myself. I think that it is the pssessin f the next persn wh asks fr it. Ten dllars is a small amunt, yet it means a lt t the persn wh expects it, especially when delivered with jy and respect t them.
I als have taken t carrying things in my car, such as hats, scks, glves and umbrellas, just in case smene needs them. Recently I put tgether sme care packages fr the hmeless. It ccurred t me that things like band-aids, tthpaste, aspirin, cmbs, as well as fd and bttled water wuld be f use. I imagined that they wuld need things that are nn - breakable, s I chse plastic r paper cntainers. The flks wh received them were delighted. But I feel it’s nt just that I give them things that matters. I always remember it is they wh bless me with an pprtunity t be kind. What a jy!
注意:
1.续写的词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The idea f helping thers this way came t me when I gt similar help frm a wman.
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Interestingly enugh, I ften get smething in return frm the persn I help.
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答案与解析
1.【参考范文】
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As I daydreamed, there was a knck n the dr. My rmmate pened it t find a deliveryman asking fr me. He handed her a large bx, which she carefully placed n the desk near my bed. “Open it”. I did, and inside was a vanilla cake with chclate frsting. In icing were the wrds: “Happy Birthday, Sande! Lve, Mm.” I was filled with excitement, as if Mm were right there hugging me clse.
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Hw had she managed t affrd it? I felt as if I were back at hme with her, safe and secure while she sang and tld me hw much she lved having me in her life. I ran ut t the hall and kncked n my drmmates’ drs. “Birthday cake,” I called. I cut cake fr the students gathering in my rm and watched their faces as they ate, because I didn't need t eat t feel bth full and rich inside.
【解析】
第1步:根据提示可知,本文要求续写两段内容(我收到妈妈送我的生日蛋糕和我的感受以及我和室友们一起分享的情节),注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好时态应为一般过去时。
第2步:根据写作要求,确定关键词(组),如; deliveryman(送货员),carefully(小心翼翼地),excitement(兴奋),secure(安全), hug(拥抱)及gather(聚集)等。
第3步:根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步:连句成文,注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡,书写一定要规范清晰,保持卷面的整洁美观。
【范文点评】
范文语言地道,语篇连贯,词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式,高级词汇有be filled with(充满),run ut(跑出去),as if (仿佛、好像),ask fr sb(找某人)以及knck n(敲门),而且还使用了非限定性定语从句“He handed her a large bx, which she carefully placed n the desk near my bed.”,状语从句“I was filled with excitement, as if Mm were right there hugging me clse.”以及“I cut cake fr the students gathering in my rm and watched their faces as they ate, because I didn't need t eat t feel bth full and rich inside.”,非谓语动词“My rmmate pened it t find a deliveryman asking fr me.”,全文没有语法错误,上下句转换自然流畅。
2.【参考范文】
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The man went t see Mr. Plumbean that evening. They sat under the palm trees drinking lemnade and talking all night lng. Early the next mrning the man went ut t get rpe and nails and paint. When the peple came ut f their huses they saw a red and yellw ship next dr t the huse f Mr. Plumbean. “What have yu dne t yur huse?” they shuted at the man. “My huse is where I like t be and it lks like all my dreams,” said the man, wh had always lved ships.
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Then, ne by ne, they went t see Mr. Plumbean, late at night. They wuld talk abut their dreams. Whenever anybdy visited Mr. Plumbean's huse, the very next day that persn wuld set abut changing his wn huse t fit his dreams. Whenever a stranger came t the street, the stranger wuld say, “This is nt a neat street.” Then all the peple wuld say, “Our street is us and we are it. Our street is where we like t be, and it lks like all ur dreams.”
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知,这篇文章主要讲了Plumbean先生按照自己的想法设计和改造房子,使得街道看起来很不整洁,人们让Plumbean先生的邻居去劝说他。
续写部分分为两段,第一段开头是:那天晚上,这个人去见了Plumbean先生,所以后文应该是讲述这个人见到了Plumbean先生后,发生的事情,并且第二天这个人对自己的房子进行了改变。第二段开头是:然后,他们一个接一个地在深夜去见Plumbean先生。本段应该写同样的故事继续上演着,所有人都对自己的房子进行了改变。当有陌生人问起时,所有的人都会异口同声地回答Plumbean先生经常说的话。 最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当,使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如:“My huse is where I like t be and it lks like all my dreams,” said the man, wh had always lved ships.表语从句和非限制性定语从句的运用;Whenever anybdy visited Mr. Plumbean's huse, the very next day that persn wuld set abut changing his wn huse t fit his dreams.时间状语从句的运用。
3.【参考范文】
SPLASH(扑通一声)! I was swimming harder than I’d ever swum befre. As I drew my right arm back, I nticed I was tied with ne persn. I assumed we were battling fr eighth place and I refused t finish dead last, s I added mre kick n the last 200 yards. I hit the wall and lked t the left and t the right fr the swimmers wh had beat me, but n ne was there. They must have gtten ut f the water already.
Just then, cheers and claps verwhelmed me. I raised my head t see my cach screaming hysterically. My eyes fllwed her pinting finger and I culdn’t believe what I saw. The ther swimmers had just reached the halfway pint f the pl! That day, at age 15, I brke the natinal 17/18yearld 400freestyle recrd. I hung up my hnurable mentins and replaced them with a huge trphy. “Yes, grandma, yu’re right. Quitters never win and winners never quit.”
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知,上文讲述了作者已经参加了五年的游泳比赛,准备退出,因为觉得自己很糟糕。一个夏天的一天,在一个大型游泳比赛的前一天,作者把决定退出游泳队的消息告诉了奶奶,结果奶奶让作者坚持下去。第二天作者和奶奶来到比赛地点,没有赶上作者15/16岁年龄组的游泳选手。教练坚持允许作者和年龄大一些的人一起游泳。当作者登上跳板时,其他所有的女孩都看着自己。作者很快注意到这些女孩是来做一件事的——打败自己!突然,奶奶的话在作者的脑海里回响:“放弃者永不成功,胜利者永不放弃。”
续写部分分为两段,第一段开头是:扑通一声!我游得比以前任何时候都努力。所以后文应该是讲述作者比赛的经过和心理活动;第二段开头是:就在那时,欢呼声和掌声淹没了我。本段应该写作者打破了17/18 400自由泳的全国纪录,以及作者获胜后的感想。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当,使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如:add n,hysterically,hnurable等高级词汇;As I drew my right arm back, I nticed I was tied with ne persn.运用时间状语从句;My eyes fllwed her pinting finger and I culdn’t believe what I saw.运用宾语从句等高级句式。
4.【参考范文】
It was the last meet f the seasn, and Mike was nt sure what t expect. He’d been training hard with his dad, and staying away frm the rich desserts he enjyed s much. He felt healthy again, but he didn’t knw if he still had any speed in the pl.As he jumped int the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he culd. He made the turn at the end f the lane perfectly, and was feeling strng. Whenever he came up fr a breath, he culd see he was gaining n the by ahead f him in the next lane. Feeling determined t pass him, Mike fund the pwer in his muscles t push ahead, and as his hand tuched the edge f the pl, the race was ver.
Finally came the end f the race. His jaw drpped as he realized he had beaten his wn best time, and everyne else’s t. Mike had wn his race. The audience and his teammates cheered ludly, and his parents were grinning frm ear t ear. “Hey champ, let’s g grab sme f yur favrite ice cream and celebrate!” said his father.“Thanks, Dad, but I’ll pass n the ice cream; it’s nt such a lucky charm after all!” he said.
【解析】
这是一篇读后续写类书面表达。前文记叙了迈克游泳比赛的表现。根据其内容和所给段落开头语,续写两段,构成一篇完整的短文。
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知, 迈克以比赛前吃冰淇淋为幸运符,开始时能获得第一名,之后导致成绩逐步下滑。放弃甜食后,也没有表现好。父亲同他一起跑步,使他游泳时呼吸更加轻松。
续写部分分为两段,第一段开头是:这是本赛季的最后一场比赛,迈克不知道该期待什么。所以应该写比赛前他对自己的看法以及比赛时的表现:他一直在和父亲一起刻苦训练,远离他非常喜欢的油腻甜点。他又恢复了健康,但他不知道自己在泳池里是否还有速度。当他跳进水里的时候,他踢着他的腿,并把他的手臂尽可能地伸展。努力的进行比赛。第二段开头是:比赛终于结束了。本段应该写比赛结束后迈克的成绩,以及结束后对自己取得的成绩的感悟。要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当,使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如:stay away frm,at the end f ,cme up等高级词汇;省略关系词that的定语从句He’d been training hard with his dad, and staying away frm the rich desserts he enjyed s much.,as引导的时间状语从句As he jumped int the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he culd.等高级句式。
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The idea f helping thers this way came t me when I gt similar help frm a wman. One day, I was shpping at a grcery stre and when I went t pay fr my grceries I discvered my wallet was gne. Yu can imagine hw embarrassed I was then. Luckily, a wman, verhearing my prblem, ffered t pay my bill. I was s thankful and asked fr her phne number s that I culd pay back the mney. “Dn’t pay it back. Pay it frward,” the wman replied with a smile. That was when I decided t d smething nice fr whever needs help.
Interestingly enugh, I ften get smething in return frm the persn I help. The ther day, a yung lady t whm I gave sme change, asked if I culd use a spare pair f glves she had. S I accepted them fr the next persn wh needs them. I was tuched t see she wanted t give me smething. In fact, she gave me mre. She gave me a feeling f happiness that nly thse wh are happy t shw kindness t thers can understand.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知,文章主要为作者分享自己经常做的一件善事,它给了作者莫大的快乐。作者总是在车里和口袋里至少带10美元,会把它留给第一个问“能不能给点零钱”的人。对着别人微笑,作者总是非常愉快地回答说:“是的,我很乐意。”或者“这是我的荣幸。”然后我给他们钱。作者还习惯在车里放一些东西,比如帽子、袜子、手套和雨伞,以防有人需要。
续写部分分为两段,第一段开头是:当我从一位女士那里得到类似的帮助时,我产生了用这种方式帮助别人的想法。所以后文应该是讲述让作者有了这种善举的原因是,作者从一个女士那里得到了类似的帮助,记叙故事发生的经过;第二段开头是:有趣的是,我经常从我帮助的人那里得到一些回报。本段应该写作者是如何从自己帮助的人那里得到回报的。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当,使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如:grcery stre,pay fr,ask fr,in fact等高级词汇;One day, I was shpping at a grcery stre and when I went t pay fr my grceries I discvered my wallet was gne.运用时间状语从句;She gave me a feeling f happiness that nly thse wh are happy t shw kindness t thers can understand.运用定语从句等高级句式。
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