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【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
The passengers n the bus watched sympathetically as the attractive yung wman with a white walking stick made her way carefully up the steps. She paid the driver and, fund the seat he’d tld her was empty. Then she settled in and rested her stick against her leg.
It had been a year since Susan became blind. Due t a medical misdiagnsis(误诊), she was suddenly thrwn int a wrld f darkness and frustratin. And all she had t depend n was her husband, Mark.
Mark was an Air Frce fficer. When she first lst her sight, he watched her sink int hpelessness and was determined t help he gain the cnfidence.
Finally, Susan felt ready t return t her jb, but hw wuld she get there? She was nw t frightened t get arund the city by herself. S, Mark drve her t wrk each day, even thugh they wrked at ppsite ends f the city.
At first, this cmfrted Susan. Sn, hwever, Mark realized the necessity fr Susan t becme independent and wanted her t start taking the bus again. Just as expected, Susan was afraid f this idea. But Make prmised Susan that he wuld ride the bus with her until she gt the hang f it.
Fr tw weeks, Mark, in military unifrm accmpanied Susan t and frm wrk each day. He taught her hw t rely n her ther senses, specifically her hearing, t tell where she was and hw t adapt t her new surrundings.
At last, Susan decided that she was ready t try n her wn. Mnday mrning arrived, and befre she left, she hugged Mark. Her eyes was filled with tears f gratitude fr his patience and lve. She said gd-bye, and fr the first time, they went their separate ways.
Each day went perfectly, and Susan had never felt better. She made it.
On Friday mrning, Susan tk the bus t wrk as usual. As she was paying fr the bus fare, the driver said, “Lady, I sure d envy yu.” (340 wrds)
注意：
所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语以为你写好；
续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
Paragraph 1:
Curius, she asked the driver, “Why d yu say that yu envy me?”
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Paragraph 2:
Tears f happiness pured dwn Susan’s cheeks.
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：一位女士因失明而感到沮丧与绝望，丈夫陪伴她重建自信。在她害怕独自出门时，她丈夫每天开车接送她上下班。为了让她重新独立起来，她丈夫说服她重新坐公交车上班。一开始，他陪她一同坐公交车，教她学会用其他的感官去判断位置。两周后，女士决定独自出行，一切都很顺利。在第五天早上上车之后，司机表达了对她的羡慕。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为失明的女士Susan，她的丈夫Mark以及公交车司机。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。丈夫陪失明的妻子每天坐公交车上下班两周后，妻子开始自己坐公交车。在她独自出行的第五天，公交车司机表达了对她的羡慕。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(develpment)。故事总体的发展应该是司机告诉Susan羡慕她的原因。因为司机叙述的这个原因，Susan流下了幸福的眼泪。可以结合前文表达的Mark对Susan的耐心与爱，预测这个原因可能是因为Mark每天都在暗中跟着Susan上下班，为了保证她的安全。续写第一段：Susan问司机为何羡慕她，司机告诉她羡慕她的原因是因为她有一个非常爱她的人。他看到她丈夫每天都看着她坐公交车安全到达办公室才离开，表达了对她浓浓的爱意。续写第二段：Susan听完之后流下了幸福的眼泪。或许她回忆起Mark一直以来对她的爱和照顾，并因此而感到幸福与感动；或许她开始想象回想这一周上班的经历，回忆着Mark在周围暗中关注她的迹象；也有可能她回家后表达了对Mark所做的一切的感动，表达了她的幸运与对丈夫的爱。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(pints)。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“Why did the driver envy Susan? What wuld be the pssible answer? What wuld the driver say? Did it have anything t d with Susan’s husband, Mark? 等”；第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：What wuld Susan think? What might be her futher reactin? What wuld she d? 等”。
[参考范文]
Curius, she asked the driver, “Why d yu say that yu envy me?” The driver respnded, “It must feel gd t be taken care f and prtected like yu are.” Cnfused, Susan asked again, “What d yu mean?” The driver explained, “Well, yu knw, every mrning fr the past week, a fine lking gentleman in a military unifrm has been standing acrss the crner watching yu as yu get ff the bus. He makes sure yu crss the street safely and he watches until yu enter yur ffice building. Then he blws yu a kiss and walks away. Yu are a lucky lady.”
Tears f happiness pured dwn Susan’s cheeks. Althugh she culdn’t see him with her eyes, she had always felt that Mark was just there. She was such a lucky and happy lady, fr her husband had given her a gift mre pwerful than sight, a gift that she culd feel and didn’t need t see—the gift f lve that can bring light where there is darkness. (150 wrds)
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。给出的两段开头分别为Susan 好奇地问司机为何羡慕她，以及Susan留下幸福的眼泪。因此第一段主要写司机对Susan的这一问题进行回答，而这一原因是Susan的丈夫为确保安全而每天暗暗陪伴她上班，因而让Susan流下了幸福的眼泪。第二段写Susan知道之后的心理活动，包括回顾这几天坐公交车有被陪伴的感觉，以及对丈夫的这种无微不至的爱的感动。范文最后一句写了这份爱“照亮”了Susan黑暗的世界，既与她失明这一事实想结合，又升华了主题。
[提炼归纳]
1. 合理拓展情节
读后续写首先要读通给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基础上根据提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化，可以通过设问的方式，将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来，以利后续写作时的心理整理和语言组织。在该练习中，我们通过7个问题来拓展并整理自己的写作思路，这7个问题以“司机羡慕Susan的原因”以及“Susan由此做出的反应”为主体，之间有一定的逻辑关系，符合故事发展的合理结局。
2. 有效运用衔接手段
在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合，还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段(cnnectives)的有效运用，例如在范文中，我们用了“until”，“althugh”，“fr”等连词，使得小句间的逻辑关系更清晰明了，文章更加连贯。同时，我们也使用了“waching …”和“cnfused”这样的非谓语动词结构作伴随状语和原因状语，使得行文更加流畅，语言更加地道。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
At Dana’s yard sale, Tim chse a baseball frm the tys spread n the card table and asked abut the price. Dana tld him everything was a quarter except Nezumi, a cttn ty rat. It was grey with sme cttn sticking ut frm the hle where an ear had been trn ff.
“Nezumi is extra special, s he is ten dllars. He needs a safe new hme.” Dana sighed. Tim laughed saying he didn’t have ten dllars. Dana laughed t and gave Nezumi t Tim as a free gift because he was her friend. When Tim whispered it was srt f ld, Dana said ld tys were the best. She then invited Tim t her birthday party the next evening, adding that her parents were giving her a real rat fr her birthday. Tim was amazed and asked if it was a live rat.
“Of curse.” Dana said.
At hme, Tim’s mther shwed him the gift she had bught fr Dana. It was a knitting spl(针织线轴) shaped like a mushrm. Mm said Dana culd knit a scarf fr her dll. Tim sighed that Dana wasn’t a knitting kind f persn but a rat kind f persn. Mm laughed after knwing what had happened. Tgether they drve t the pet stre, where Tim searched and searched and selected a clear plastic ball, ne in which the rat culd run arund n the flr safe frm cats and dgs. Tim thught f Nezumi’s ear and decided Dana’s new rat wuld need this ball.
The next day, Dana brught cupcakes t class. When she handed a cupcake t Tim, she asked if Tim brught Nezumi t schl as Nezumi liked t ride in backpacks. Tim was at a lss because Nezumi was at hme n his bed. Then Dana asked what gift he was giving her. Tim replied it was a surprise. In silence they sat fr a while befre he heard Dana say her parents were giving her a new bike fr her birthday instead f a live rat because they thught rats wuld bite things.
注意:1. 所续写的短文词数应为 150 左右;
2. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
Para 1:
At hme that afternn, Tim stared at the plastic rat ball.
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All f a sudden, he had an idea.
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Every night after dinner, my grandparents wuld turn n TV fr the 6 'clck news. N matter hw hard I tried t act the grwn-up and watch with them, I wuld inevitably(不可避免地) get distracted until 6:30 when Wheel f Frtune came n.
My grandma wuld play alng, trying t guess the answers befre the players. Her shuts f excitement when she succeeded culd be heard acrss the huse.
As I grew lder, my lve f reading and writing blssmed, and I wuld jin my grandma in yelling ut letters. Sn, I was experiencing the thrill f slving the puzzles faster than the cntestants(选手) and even my grandma. I was hked.
Due t cnstant mving arund with my mm and father, I started t spend less time with my grandparents, but ur bnd remained strng. My grandparents prvided me with the stability, lve and supprt that I desperately needed when I grew up. When I was in a bad md, I wuld remember thse sweet nights.
A few years later, I was living with my grandpa in Chicag. While watching an episde(集) f Wheel f Frtune, we had a wave f nstalgia(怀旧). With applicatin, I didn't think much f it until I received a mail mnths later, annuncing that the Wheel f Frtune casting team wuld cme t Chicag. In rder t be cnsidered fr an in-persn auditin(试演), applicants wuld need t submit a sixty-secnd vide explaining why they wanted t be a cntestant.
All my childhd memries f watching the shw came flding back, and I knew I was meant t spin(旋转) the wheel fr real. Immediately, I recrded a vide and submitted it. A cuple f weeks later, I received an e-mail inviting me t auditin in persn. I was very nervus n the auditin day. I culdn't believe I was trying ut fr ''America's Game''! After tw runds f intense auditining, with half f the hpefuls letting g after the first rund, it was ver. All f us applicants were tld we wuld receive a letter in the mail within tw weeks if we were selected.
注意：
所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右;
2. 至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语
Paragraph 1:
I ran t the mailbx every day but there was nthing.
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Then ne mrning while getting ready fr wrk, I checked my mail and let ut the ludest scream ever.
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
When she lked arund her huse, Betty Margaret saw lts f electrnics. Alng with the usual things like her laptp and smart phne, there were all f her kids’ electrnic devices: cell phnes, vide game devices and mre! There seemed t be mre than enugh ways fr her and her three children t be nline all day, every day.
Ms. Margaret wrried that her kids were becming t dependent n the Internet and electrnics. Then she began t reread ne f her favrite bks, Henry Threau’s Walden, which gave Ms. Margaret an idea. Threau spent 2 years in a simple cabin withut running water, and having t grw his wn fd. Maybe she and her family culd live withut such luxuries as cmputers and electrnic devices fr a while.
Ms. Margaret talked with her kids and explained that she wanted the family t try living fr 6 mnths withut the Internet, cell phnes, TV, and vide games. Ms. Margaret writes articles fr a newspaper in Australia, and had written several bks as well. She tld her children that if they agreed, she wuld write a bk abut their experience and they culd g n a trip abrad with the mney frm sales f the bk. Her three children agreed, and “the experiment,” as Ms. Margaret called, began.
Over the curse f the experiment, the Margaret children had different reactins t life withut electrnics. Befre the experiment began, Anni, the eldest f the children, read bks mre than her yunger brther and sister. She therefre had a relatively easy adjustment t the family’s new lifestyle. Anni culd als use the library’s cmputer fr her hmewrk. Bill, wh lved t play vide games befre the experiment began, had t find a way t spend all f his new free time. He started t spend mre time practicing his saxphne (萨克斯管). Susan, the yungest child in the family, had the hardest time adjusting t life withut electrnics. She felt restless fr the first weeks and later, influenced by her elder sister, gradually began t find interest in the nvel experiences brught by varius bks.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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The family carried n with the experiment fr the 6 mnths withut technlgy cntrlling their lives.
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Ms. Margaret wrte the bk she had planned.
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为 150 左右。
I was lacking in everything needed t start a new friendship.
My parents mved t the twn when they decided t lk fr new jbs but they didn’t realize I was really hurt when I said gdbye t my ld friends. It felt awful t be a new student in the schl and when my classmates were chatting, what I culd d was t be caught up in my thughts watching the cluds utside the windw. I was nt gd at math r histry; nr was I gd at drawing r dancing. I was shy and timid. I had a few friends back at my hmetwn and it seemed that they were the nly nes wh I culd be friends with fr my whle life. I felt I had achieved a pint f saturatin with regard t having friends and I culd make n further additin t my friend list. I was ashamed f myself, s I believed I deserved n ntice frm thers until Emily came t my wrld.
Emily was fearless, utspken and easy t g. She was everything I was nt and I was t shy t cme ut f my shell. I met Emily in schl almst every day and yet I never talked t her. We were in the same class but we were like ples apart. Hw I wished I culd be like her r at least be a friend f hers!
It was anther rdinary day.
I wandered t the bus stp in the mrning and waited fr the schl bus. Birds were singing sngs with their friends but wh culd I sing sngs with? I gt n the bus and went straight t my usual seat, cmplaining in a lw vice abut getting up early and ging t schl like every ther day, and abut hw things were ging t be the same all ver again. Little did I realize smething different wuld happen that day.
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When I gt up t get dwn the bus, my schlbag was stuck in the armrest. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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I gt nticed by Emily, wh brught me curage t start a new friendship!
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5.阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The Meredith family lived in a small cmmunity. As the ecnmy was in decline, sme peple in the twn had lst their jbs. Many f their families were struggling t make ends meet. Peple were trying t help each ther meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a mst kind and thughtful wman. She spent a great deal f time visiting the pr. She knew they had prblems, and they needed all kinds f help. When she had time, she wuld bring fd and medicine t them.
One mrning she tld her children abut a family she had visited the day befre. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, wh tk care f him and culd nt g ut t wrk, and their little by. The little by -his name was Bernard-had interested her very much.
“I wish yu culd see him,” she said t her wn children, Jhn, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help t his mther. He wants very much t earn sme mney, but I dn't see what he can d.”
After their mther left the rm, the children sat thinking abut Bernard. “I wish we culd help him t earn mney,” said Clara. “His family is suffering s much.”
“S d I,” said Harry. “We really shuld d smething t assist them.”
Fr sme mments, Jhn said nthing, but, suddenly, he sprang t his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a slutin that we can all help accmplish(完成).”
The ther children als jumped up all attentin. When Jhn had an idea, it was sure t be a gd ne. “I tell yu what we can d,” said Jhn. “Yu knw that big bx f crn Uncle Jhn sent us? Well, we can make ppcrn(爆米花), and put it int paper bags, and Bernard can take it arund t the huses and sell it.”
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右:
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para.1:
When Mrs. Meredith heard f Jhn's idea, she thught it was a gd ne, t.
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With everything ready, Bernard started ut n his new business.
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答案与解析
1.【参考范文】
At hme that afternn, Tim stared at the plastic rat ball. Wndering abut the use f the clear plastic ball if Dana had n rat, he started walking up and dwn the rm with a frwn n his face. Mm was surprised and asked him what was happening. Tim tld her Dana wasn’t getting a live rat frm her parents but a bike. As they were racking their brains (绞脑汁) t cme up with an apprpriate gift, Tim turn arund and saw Nezumi n his bed.
All f a sudden, he had an idea. He lifted Nezumi and squeezing Nezumi int the plastic ball with great cautin s that Nezumi wuld be safe frm cats and dgs. Seeing this, Mm asked Tim whether he was giving Dana an ld cttn rat with ne ear as a gift, Tim ndded with a smile saying she wuld definitely like it. Lking at Mm’s cnfused expressin, Tim added that Dana was a Nezumi kind f persn wh thught ld tys were the BEST.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，Tim从Dana的庭院旧货出售会得到了有一只耳朵被扯掉了的玩具老鼠Nezumi，Tim很喜欢。Dana的生日快到了，Tim去商店里为Dana喜欢的老鼠买了一个透明的塑料球，可以让它在里面跑，不会被猫和狗咬伤。第二天Tim听到Dana说她的父母给她的生日礼物是一辆新自行车，而不是一只活老鼠，因为他们认为老鼠会咬东西。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：那天下午在家里，Tim盯着塑料老鼠球。所以后文应该是讲述Tim得知Dana不会受到老鼠作为生日礼物后的心理活动，他觉得买的这个塑料老鼠球没有用了，于是他皱着眉头开始在房间里走来走去。妈妈很惊讶，问他发生了什么事。Tim告诉她Dana从她父母那里得到的不是一只活老鼠，而是一辆自行车。当他们绞尽脑汁想出合适的礼物时，Tim转过身，看见Nezumi躺在床上；第二段开头是：突然，他有了一个主意。本段应该写Tim为Dana准备生日礼物的过程，Tim要送Dana一只长着一只耳朵的老鼠。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：walk up and dwn, nt…but…, with great cautin等高级词汇；Wndering abut the use f the clear plastic ball if Dana had n rat, he started walking up and dwn the rm with a frwn n his face.非谓语动词的运用和if引导的条件状语从句；Seeing this, Mm asked Tim whether he was giving Dana an ld cttn rat with ne ear as a gift, Tim ndded with a smile saying she wuld definitely like it.运用了whether引导的宾语从句等高级句式。
2.【参考范文】
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I ran t the mailbx every day but there was nthing. After ne week, I became very frustrated and even thught the mail had been delivered t the wrng department. My grandma came and cmfrted me, ''Laura, wait patiently.'' Feeling defeated, I replied, ''I wasn't gd enugh. They didn't want me. '' She said with a cnfident tne, ''Yu will be selected and receive the mail. Trust me.'' Thugh I didn't believe I wuld receive the mail, I was nt s anxius. I calmed dwn and lived my life as befre.
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Then ne mrning while getting ready fr wrk, I checked my mail and let ut the ludest scream ever. There it was: a mail frm Wheel f Frtune stating that they had a tape date fr me. I had t read it several times befre I truly believed it. I was ging t be a cntestant n Wheel f Frtune! I ended up filming my episde a few mnths later, and the entire experience was amazing. Frm meeting Pat and Vanna, t spinning the wheel and, mst imprtantly, saying thse magical wrds, ''I'd like t slve the puzzle. '' It was a day I will never frget.
【解析】
这是一篇读后续写。文章讲述了作者在爷爷奶奶的影响下喜欢上一档名叫Wheel f Frtune的节目。多年后，当回到芝加哥和爷爷一起居住时，作者收到一封信，邀请他参加这个节目的试演。出于对这个节目的喜爱，作者决定录制一个短片尝试。两轮比赛后，节目组请作者回家等通知。
续写分为两段。
根据第一段的开头“我每天都去邮筒看，但什么都没有”可以接着写：一周后还是没有信件，作者感到沮丧，估计自己可能被淘汰了。但是祖父母安慰她，给她信心，并且让她耐心等待。作者调整心态，回归正常生活。
根据第二段的开头“那天早上我正准备好去上班，检查邮筒时，我大声尖叫起来”可以接着写：作者不敢相信自己收到节目组的来信，并给她安排了录制时间。作者把自己的喜悦同祖父母分享。非常感谢曾经那段陪着他们一起观看节目的日子，让她不仅得到了欢乐还学到了很多知识，得以参加这个全美国人民都喜欢的节目。
用5个以上的关键词加大了写作难度。考生应熟悉关键词，以便在适当时候加以运用。写作完成后，要将关键词下划线。
【范文点评】
范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了一些主从复合句，例如：Thugh I didn't believe I wuld receive the mail, I was nt s anxius.中thugh引导让步状语从句；There it was: a mail frm Wheel f Frtune stating that they had a tape date fr me.中that引导宾语从句。
3.【参考范文】
The family carried n with the experiment fr the 6 mnths withut technlgy cntrlling their lives. Ms. Margaret believes they all came ut better fr the experience. The children had a lt mre interactin with each ther and with their mther. Nw that they culd nt text thers, they had t actually see each ther and talk. Meanwhile, the family played bard games tgether, cked meals tgether and read the newspaper tgether. Bill ended up develping a serius interest in music, and in Susan’s case, she imprved her grades in schl.
Ms. Margaret wrte the bk she had planned. The bk became an immediate hit and arused great interest amng many parents. In her bk and in interviews abut the bk, Ms. Margaret describes the pleasant changes that happened in her family and the prgress her children have made. She encurages families t set aside special “screen-free days” where families unplug themselves and spend time tgether, which is exactly what her family have agreed t d after returning frm an enjyable family trip abrad.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，贝蒂·玛格丽是一位母亲，她有3个孩子。因为担心她的孩子们变得过于依赖互联网和电子产品，于是她向她的孩子们提出说她想让这个家庭试着在没有互联网、手机、电视和电子游戏的情况下生活6个月的计划。如果他们同意，她将写一本关于他们的经历的书，他们可以用卖书的钱去国外旅行。孩子们同意并开始了这种生活。
【范文点评】
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：这个家庭在没有科技控制他们生活的情况下进行了6个月的实验。所以本段应该写这次经历给她的孩子们带来的变化(好的方面)。第二段开头是：玛格丽特写了这本她计划好的书。本段应该写这本书出版后引起了人们的兴趣，以及贝蒂·玛格丽就这种生活方式向家长提出建议。续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
4.【参考范文】
Para. 1:
When I gt up t get ff the bus, my schlbag was stuck in the armrest. I didn’t ntice it and std up with all my strength. Unfrtunately, my schlbag was trn apart and all the cntents fell n the grund. I knelt dwn t pick them up. Suddenly, I saw a hand passing me sme f the bks. I lked up and fund it was Emily wh was helping me. With her help, I put all the cntents back t my schlbag. I began t talk with her and was surprised t find that we had much in cmmn.
Para. 2:
I gt nticed by Emily, wh brught me curage t start a new friendship! One day when I tld her that I admired her and hw I wished t be a friend f hers, she said, “We have already been friends.” I felt s happy that I even sang a sng. Hearing my sng, she thught highly f it and asked me t teach her t sing it. She made me realize hw unique I was and at last I came ut f me shell.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，作者跟随父母来到了一个新城镇，作为一名新生在学校的感觉很糟糕，作者很害羞，胆小，为自己感到羞愧，作者注意到了无所畏惧，直言不讳，容易相处的Emily，作者希望和她成为朋友，直到某一天一个早上发生了一些不同的事情。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：当我起身下车时，我的书包被卡在扶手上了。所以后文应该是讲述作者的书包被卡住，东西掉了出来，而Emily帮助了作者，二人开始相识起来；第二段开头是：我被Emily注意到了，她给了我勇气去开始一段新的友谊！本段应该写作者和Emily的友谊进展情况。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：with all my strength, fall n, talk with, have much in cmmn等高级词汇；I began t talk with her and was surprised t find that we had much in cmmn.运用了宾语从句；One day when I tld her that I admired her and hw I wished t be a friend f hers, she said, “We have already been friends.”运用了时间状语从句等高级句式。
5.【参考范文】
When Mrs. Meredith heard f Jhn’s idea, she thught it was a gd ne, t. S, they went t the lcal supermarket tgether. They bught a bag f crn and sme special bags fr ppcrn. When they gt hme, they made a lt f ppcrn and put it in the special bags. With the ppcrn, they went t Bernard’s hme. They tld Bernard hw t sell the ppcrn. Bernard and his parents were very grateful. And the Meredith family als felt very happy t help this family.
With everything ready, Bernard started ut n his new business. He tk the ppcrn arund t the huses and sld all his ppcrn. He earned a lt f mney. Then, he wanted t be self-dependent. Therefre, he asked Mrs. Meredith t teach him hw t make ppcrn. After that, nt nly did he sell ppcrn, but he als added cream and salt t the ppcrn t make it taste better. Bernard grew up t be a remarkable man. He did nt frget the help f Meredith’s family, and he als did what he culd t help thse in need.
【解析】
本文是根据短文进行续写，使之成为一个完整的故事。认真读懂所给提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一个小社区里，他们想帮助一个贫困的家庭。那家的男主人生病卧床，女主人要照顾丈夫、无法外出赚钱，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生活十分困难。后来，Meredith的孩子想出了一个主意--制作爆米花，让Bernard去卖爆米花。根据所给材料确定文章主题:Meredith如何通过制作和卖爆米花帮助Bernard一家摆脱困境的。
续写部分和前面的文章衔接得上，并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致，故事情节的向后延续发展要合乎情理。根据第一段首句When Mrs. Meredith heard f Jhn’s idea, she thught it was a gd ne, t.(当Meredith太太听到Jhn的主意时，她也认为这是个好主意)可以针对如何实现制作爆米花这个提议展开构思；根据第二段首句With everything ready, Bernard started ut n his new business.(一切准备就绪后，Bernard开始了他的新生意)可以针对Bernard如何通过卖爆米花让家庭摆脱困境展开构思。
续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致。文章时态以一般过去时为主。应使用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合题干要求，句子结构准确，适当补充信息，使篇章结构连贯。