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【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Tringg-Tringggggg! Anna rlled in bed hping the ringing wuld stp. When she eventually answered, her maid was calling t infrm she wuldn’t cme as usual, as rains had flded her huse. Unhappy, Anna slid back under the quilt, wishing she als culd stay in.
Having mved t the city few mnths back, Anna lived alne and wrked with an advertising firm. Assisting her clleague Mary n a presentatin fr a rich custmer Mr. Jhn, Anna wrked rather hard. Hwever, the fact that she wasn’t part f the team handling the deal was highly disheartening. Reaching fr the bedside clck, she wke up hurriedly. 8:00 am — the red figure glared back. Damn! Late AGAIN! Taking a quick shwer, she rushed t the bus-stp.
She had barely stepped ut when dwnpur caught her in the middle. Blaming the rains, she made her way thrugh the crwd when she sptted her bus leaving. She ran after it but lst her balance and her purse cntents spilled ut. Frustratingly lking up twards heaven, Anna sighed. Stuffing her purse, she decided t take a taxi. Attempting t hail an empty taxi fr 20 minutes, Anna paced restlessly, when smene pulled at her. A yung beggar girl was vying fr attentin. Anna shrugged her ff, assuming the girl wanted mney. Hwever, the girl held ut her hand hlding Anna’s mbile, which Anna left behind when she drpped her bag. Embarrassed at her insensitivity, Anna ffered her chclate fr appreciatin, which the girl grabbed quickly. The prize lighting up her face, she jined her cmpanins, playing in the rains with jy. Anna’s heart sared seeing the pr children treasure the little things.
Half-hur later, Anna stepped int her ffice which t n surprise wre a deserted lk. Befre she culd reach her desk, Chris was walking twards her. “ Meeting with Jhn nw! Mary is nt in because f water lgging in here, we will g ahead”, Chris rdered seriusly. Shcked yet excited at the develpment, Anna fllwed. Pst the meeting, Chris annunced that staff shuld leave instantly as thunderstrms were predicted.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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After an eventful day, Anna reached hme, hungry and exhausted.
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Lst in thught, Anna lked back n the events f the day.
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：一大早，Anna诸事不顺：女佣因大雨不能来做家务；上班时错过了公交车；追赶公交车时摔了一跤；打的迟迟等不到车。但幸运的是，手机失而复得、工作出现了转机… …
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。
公司职员Anna、Anna的女佣、Ann的同事Mary、上司Chris、大客户Mr. Jhn、捡到她手机的乞丐。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。
下雨天女佣请假，Anna上班错过了公交车，追赶公交车时摔了一跤，等出租车久候不至，乞丐送回了捡到的手机，上班后因同事请假意外地被委以重任。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(develpment)。
故事总体的发展应该是Anna下班后又累又饿，但是因为女佣请假只能拖着疲惫的身躯继续做家务。然而在做家务的过程中，她渐渐地体会到了其中的乐趣。做完家务她开始看电视，意外地看到了她早上错过的公交车出事故的新闻。回想这一天发生的事，Anna体会到了塞翁失马焉知非福的道理。续写第一段：Anna刚回家时心不甘情不愿地烧饭烧菜搞卫生。然而，她一边干家务一边感受渐渐感受到了做家务时的宁静和愉悦，上班带来的身心疲惫得到了缓解。带着这样的心情，她开始看电视，却吃惊地看到原本她要坐的公交车发生了车祸。续写第二段：Anna回想这一天所有的事情，才发现有时候坏运气也会带来好的结果。如果女仆不请假，她不会体验到做家务带来的简单的快乐；如果她赶上了公交车，会遭遇车祸；如果她及时打到了出租车，她的手机就丢了；如果不是因为大雨同事Mary没来上班，她就无法得到上司的重用。可见，塞翁失马，焉知非福等。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(pints)
结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点：“What did Anna d at hme? Hw did she feel at first? Did smething unexpected happen t her again?等”。 第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“Hw did she think her maid’s absence? What wuld happen if she caught the bus? Was it a cincidence fr her t get her mbile back? What des this stry intend t cnvey?等”。
[参考范文]
After an eventful day, Anna reached hme, hungry and exhausted. The mment she came in, she saw a messy huse. “Why is the universe ut t get me?” she screamed, taking n the bring tasks f cking and cleaning. After a while, Anna realized she was enjying herself and the “me-time” made her refreshed. Cffee fr cmpany, she settled t catch the news. Disturbing images f a minr accident were being bradcast. Anna’s heart sank when she figured that it was the bus that she had missed.
Lst in thught, Anna lked back n the events f the day. Had the maid shwed up, Anna wuldn’t have the chance t appreciate life’s simple jys. If she caught the taxi earlier, she wuldn’t have gt her mbile back. Had it nt been incessantly raining, Mary wuld attend the meeting instead f Anna. Overcme with a strange feeling that the universe was srt f lking after her, Anna smiled, clsed her eyes, said a small thank yu t GOD and prmised t lk mre carefully fr the tiny bright spt in every glm and be mre patient in understanding life’s hidden meaning. When ne dr clses, anther pens.
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。前面的文本出现了很多的转折，因此，第一段延续这种内容的设定，写了Anna对做家务前后心态的变化，结合上文的伏笔，引出本文一个高潮：原本Anna要搭乘的公交车出事故了。第二段的目的在于通过Anna对这一天的反思，对全文进行概括，突出故事的主题。
[提炼归纳]
1. 把握内在线索
好的故事往往上下文呼应，所谓“草蛇灰线，伏脉千里”。因此，要做好文本的续写一定要读懂给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件，抓住内在的线索。只有做到这一点，才能对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。要做好本篇的读后续写，必须发现文本中的几组对比：Anna等了很久的出租车非常郁闷，然而因为她一直在原地等车，导致她能找回原本丢失的手机；下大雨上班让Anna狼狈不堪，然而正因为恶劣的天气同事请假，使她得到了上司的重用。所以，续写要按照这一模式创造更多的意料之外、情理之中的巧合，强化文章要表达的真正目的。
2. 学会运用排比
在写作过程中，我们要根据文本特点选择相应的写作手法。在第二段的续写中，Anna回顾一天中发生的众多事情，而这些事情都有意想不到的后续，根据这一内容，采取排比句的方式不仅能让读者一目了然，而且在气势上造成强化的效果。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Sally had anxiety disrder truble that made her fail t speak in scial situatins. I’m a nurse and use Bella t help children in my cmmunity, t bring them cmfrt and cnfidence the way nly a dg can. I thught back t the day when I’d first brught Bella t the schl.
That mrning in January, her teacher led us t a rm. “Sally hasn’t spken utside her hme in tw years,” she tld me. “Her parents have taken her t dctrs, but nthing has wrked.” A little girl std shyly just inside the drway. Her eyes brightened when she nticed my dg.
“This is Bella.” I said. “She des tricks. Wuld yu like t see?”
Sally ndded. I mtined with my hand. Bella lay dwn and then rlled ver. Sally’s eyes lit up. I shwed Sally the hand signals fr varius cmmands. She was a natural with Bella, maybe because she culdn’t rely n the spken wrd herself. Bella sensed that and respnded. Sn Sally was able t put Bella thrugh her paces all n her wn. I culd see her standing taller, mre sure f herself each time we met.
One mrning in March when she was wrking with Bella, I heard a tiny vice, barely a whisper, “Gd dg.” Sally didn't take her eyes ff Bella, but I wanted t jump fr jy. Sally spke a little mre each week, nly t Bella at first, but then t me. Later, she started giving vice cmmands with her hand signals and her cnfidence rse.
Nw, five-year-ld Sally std nervusly in frnt f her kindergarten class, with Bella, my trained dg, sitting calmly by her side. All the eyes f her classmates were fcused n Sally. They were waiting fr her t speak. It was June—nly ne week f schl left—but they had never heard her vice. Nt nce.
2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
An ld wden seat that Susan extremely valued ften reminded her f mther’s Glden Rule.
Back in the 1930s, the cuntry life was really tugh. One day after dinner, Susan’s mther sat n the seat, annuncing t the children the Glden Rule: “Treat thers the way yu want t be treated.” Susan reflected carefully and seriusly n what her mther had said. She reslved that she wuld keep in mind and fllw the rule.
One Saturday afternn, she went t farmer Jasn’s inn (小旅馆) t get the pay fr her mther’s washing fr the guests there, which amunted t five dllars. She fund Jasn in the yard, wh, as all the villagers knew, was selfish and mean.
His eyes cluded with anger, as he had just finished a quarrel with ne f his guests. He held in his hand an pen wallet, full f bills. He barely nticed Susan until she made her request fr the mney. Instead f shuting at her, as usual, fr trubling him when he was busy, he handed her a bank nte.
Feeling relieved fr escaping frm Jasn s easily, Susan hurried ut f the inn. When carefully putting the mney int her pcket, she discvered that Jasn had given her tw bills instead f ne, and her first reactin was jy at the unexpected prize. She lked arund and there was nbdy nearby t share her discvery. “It is mine. All mine.” she said t herself. “I will buy mum a new cat with it, and she can give her ld ne t sister Mary, and then Mary can g t the Sunday schl with me next winter. I wnder if I can buy a pair f shes fr brther Tm t.”
Just at that mment, she realized that Jasn must have given the extra mney t her by mistake, and therefre she had n right t wn it. But a vice f temptatin (诱惑) whispered, “He gave it, and yu can keep it. He will never knw, even if it is a mistake. ”
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As Susan hurried hme, this cnflict went n in her mind.
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Susan’s face became red with embarrassment and annyance.
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Getting t watch surgeries shuld be exciting fr any medical student. But in my case, while tw dctrs were ding the peratin, I was checking my phne every 20 secnds t see hw much lnger until I culd leave. I didn’t belng there; I was nly pretending t be there. The truth was, halfway thrugh university, I knew I didn’t want t be a dctr. And I had t decide whether t keep lying t myself, r change curse.
Befre university, I had n idea what I wanted t d with my life. I’d always wanted t d English but my parents didn’t apprve, saying there was n mney in it. S I figured I’d just pick a career that lked well-paid, satisfying, and wuld make my parents prud. “Dctr” hit all three, s I decided t d medicine. I knew all the cursewrk wuldn’t be easy, but didn't expect t find it as hard as I did. I spent many late nights and weekends studying my brains ut, but still didn’t get gd grades. I just culdn’t get the material t stick t my brain. By exam time, my grades were terrible and I felt like a fl, but I thught maybe a medical internship (实习医生期) wuld help raise my spirits. Absurdly, my internship was where I realized hw little I wanted t be a dctr.
Every day I’d just g int wrk and d exactly what I was tld, g where I was tld t g, and watch what I was tld t watch. And then I’d g hme. It was fun whenever I gt t play with expensive micrscpes r watch crazy surgeries, but the rest f the time I struggled t get thrugh the day. The ther interns, hwever, practically wrked s hard. They were s driven. I thught, “Ww, these interns really want t be dctrs. I bviusly dn’t.” It was a sad realizatin that led t a sadder, scarier questin: If I didn’t want t be dctr, what did I want t d?
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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It wasn’t an easy decisin.
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Eventually, I changed my curse t English writing and suddenly I was enjying university.
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4.阅读下面短文, 根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
On Friday evening, Emmett and I went t a mvie as scheduled. After purchasing the tickets and drinks, we entered the cinema with delight befrehand, waiting fr the beginning f the mvie.
When I gt up in the middle f the mvie, Emmett whispered, “ Carter, where are yu ging?” “I frgt t call my mm t tell her what time t pick us up.” I whispered back, leaving my jacket n the seat.
I squeezed past the peple in my rw, trying nt t step n any feet while still watching the screen. I didn’t want t miss a thing. Balfur, the gd guy in the mvie, was trapped in an undergrund cave.
When I came back, Balfur’s flashlight almst went ut. An enrmus snake was mving tward him, twisting its bdy. Balfur struggled t lsen the chains arund his hands and feet t reach his magic cape (魔法斗篷). With the cape arund him, he culd cmpletely disappear.
I crawled (缓慢行进) back acrss eight peple (I cunted n the way ut), never taking my eyes ff the screen. I sat dwn in my seat slwly, then picked up my drink, and swallwed it quickly. But suddenly my brain said, “That’s nt cke. That’s lemnade.” I lked dwn at the cup, just as the girl next t me shuted, “He drank my lemnade!”
“Shhhh!” the peple arund us said, making quiet cmplaints.
“Where’s Emmett?” I asked, as if the girl had hidden him under her seat.
“Carter, dwn here,” Emmett answered in a lw vice. He was tw rws ahead f me. I was in the wrng rw! Everyne was turning arund t lk at me.
“Here,” I said, handing the girl her drink.
“Eww,” she said. “Yu have had a drink f it, s yu we me a lemnade.”
“Shhhh!” everyne said again.
“OK, OK,” I said, starting my crawl acrss eight sets f feet again. Everybdy were cmplaining as I inched ut.
“Dn’t cme back,” the by n the end said.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；
2. 至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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But the prblem was that I had t cme back t bring this girl a new lemnade.
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I thught abut crawling ut f this rw and back int Emmett’s rw, but I culdn’t.
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5.阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
Mr. Taylr checked again: water, fd, bandage, medicines, a cmpass, and a map wrapped in plastic... Bing! He put all that he prepared fr the cming hiking int his backpack.
Mr. Taylr was fnd f hiking, this time in particular, fr it was the first time fr him t hike with his tw sns, Harry and Jel. Jel liked reading bks abut explrers and Harry jined the hiking club in his schl this term. “It will be an unfrgettable experience, definitely.” he whispered t himself, uncnsciusly a smile spreading ver his face.
Harry and Jel, hwever, argued fr the first three miles f their hiking trip. Harry accused Jel f wearing smelly ld shes. Jel blamed Harry fr using all f the bug spray(喷雾防虫剂). Harry tld Jel he smelled terrible. Jel called Harry a cward(懦夫).
“Will the tw f yu just quiet dwn and enjy ur hike tgether?” their father said. “Yu’re missing all f the beautiful scenery!”
It was true. Neither Jel nr Harry had taken ntice f the bear their father had spied at the start f their trip. They hadn’t lked up at the eagle he pinted ut verhead. Wrst f all, they hadn’t paid any attentin t the turns and twists alng the way while they cntinued their argument.
“Jel threw a stick at me!” Harry screamed. “That’s nt true!” Jel shuted back.
Mr. Taylr culd n lnger cntain his anger. “And bth f yu need t stp arguing!” he erupted. As he turned t face them, his left ft caught n a rt. He slipped backward and dwn muddy bank, falling int the river that ran alngside the path.
Harry and Jel raced t their father’s assistance. They helped him up ut f the water, and then dragged his wet backpack up nt land.
Frtunately, their wet-thrugh father fund himself just slightly injured.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；
2. 至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段, 每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后, 请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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But his glasses came ff when he fell in the water.
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”Just calm dwn.” Mr. Taylr shuted, “Withut my glasses, we need t wrk tgether t find ur way.
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答案与解析
1.【参考范文】
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But nt a wrd came ut. Sally had been s excited abut putting n a dg shw fr her class. She had been quite familiar with the hand signals and had practiced fr weeks. Nw her eyes fund mine. I ndded encuragingly. She tk a deep breath and pened her muth. Her muth---then her whle bdy--- seemed t clse in n itself in defeat. Sally std ff t the side, head dwn. I felt awful. Sally returned t her seat, nt lking at anyne, nt even Bella.
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The next week, she tld me she wanted t try again, lking up at me with determinatin. I asked whether she was sure and suggested it wuld be OK if she waited till next year. She refused and insisted giving her presentatin that day. Then we headed t Sally’s classrm. The kids were sitting in a circle n the flr listening t the teacher. We walked t the frnt f the rm. I shk Sally’s hands and stepped back. Fr a few secnds, she std silently, staring at her classmates.Finally she whispered, “This is Bella.” Then, a little luder with mre cnfidence. “Bella.”
【解析】
通过阅读文章可知，莎莉患有焦虑症,作者用训练过的狗贝拉帮助莎莉慢慢学会张嘴说话，培养她的自信。在距离学期结束还有一周的时候,莎莉站在全班同学面前，所有人都等着她说出第一句话。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：但是一句话都没有。第二段开头是：第二个礼拜，她抬头坚定地看着我，告诉我她想再试一次。可知，莎莉的第一次尝试失败了，所以第一段应该写莎莉站在台上那种挣扎，作者内心的感受，注意表情描写和心理活动描写。第二段应该写萨利最终克服自己的焦虑和不自信，在全班同学面前说出了第一句话，注意过程细节的描写。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
写好这类作文要注意几个步骤:
1. 认真审题,找准提示语中的关键词或句,确定中心思想；
2. 依据关键句,草拟提纲,梳理文章的脉络;
3. 准确定位人称时态。注意使用高級词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次:
4. 最后还要认真查验是否有漏写情况,有无拼写错误及标误用等
【范文点评】
本书面表达要点齐全,上下文连贯,使用一定数量的句式结构,让句子更加生动丰满,同时运用了许多高级词汇和固定短语,提高文章的档次,体现了对英语的熟练的驾驭能力。如Sally std ff t the side, head dwn.运用了独立主格;①Sally returned t her seat, nt lking at anyne, nt even Bella.②The next week, she tld me she wanted t try again, lking up at me with determinatin. ③The kids were sitting in a circle n the flr listening t the teacher.④Fr a few secnds, she std silently, staring at her classmates.这些句子则巧妙运用了非谓语动词作状语。
2.【参考范文】
As Susan hurried hme, this cnflict went n in her mind. When she passed thrugh the gate, her eyes fell upn the wden seat. Instantly, the wrds f the Glden Rule rang in her ears. Turning arund quickly, she raced alng the rad breathlessly until she fund herself again at farmer Jasn’s gate. “Why are yu back again?” shuted the cld fellw angrily, as he saw Susan again at his side. “Sir, yu gave me tw bills, instead f ne,” she said in a trembling vice. “Tw bills? Did I? Let me see. Well, s I did. Why didn’t yu bring it back sner? Yu want t keep it yurself?” he blamed.
Susan’s face became red with embarrassment and annyance. Tears rlling dwn her cheeks, she ludly argued that she returned it almst the mment she discvered the truth. Jasn lked at the child, seemingly tuched. Putting his hand in his pcket, he drew ut a few cins and handed them t her. “N, sir. I thank yu,” sbbed Susan, “I d nt want t be paid fr ding right. I nly wish yu wuld nt think me dishnest.” After hearing this, Jasn said srry t her, ashamed. Susan returned hme with a lightened heart. Never wuld she frget her mther’s Glden rule in her life.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，文章讲述了Susan在帮妈妈向Jasn索要洗衣费的时候，收到了两张纸币，其中一张是Jasn不小心多拿出的，在是否将这张多余的纸币据为己有的矛盾中，Susan最终选择了将其还给Jasn。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：As Susan hurried hme, this cnflict went n in her mind. (当Susan匆忙赶回家时，这个矛盾在她的脑海里继续着。)所以应该写Susan回到家看到那把木制椅子时的感触，想到妈妈的教导，而把多余的钱还给Jasn，同时应描写Jasn和Susan之间关于还钱的对话，包括Jasn的疑惑，质问等；第二段开头是Susan’s face became red with embarrassment and annyance. ( Susan又尴尬又恼怒，脸都红了。) 本段应该写Susan对于Jasn质问的回答，同时Jasn对于Susan回答的反应，比如给与奖励，同时呼应文章主题“己所不欲勿施于人”，应描写Susan对此做出的回应，比如拒绝奖励，诚实地表达出个人的想法等。要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：1.高级词汇：fall upn n; rll dwn; draw ut; hand sth. t sb.2.复合句式：“Why are yu back again?” shuted the cld fellw angrily, as he saw Susan again at his side. (as引导时间状语从句)Tears rlling dwn her cheeks, she ludly argued that she returned it almst the mment she discvered the truth .(“tears rlling dwn her cheeks”为独立主格结构，表伴随；the mment 引导时间状语从句。)Putting his hand in his pcket, he drew ut a few cins and handed them t her. (putting his hand in his pcket为现在分词作状语)Never wuld she frget her mther’s Glden rule in her life.(否定词置于句首，部分倒装)
3.【参考范文】
It wasn’t an easy decisin. I had tw chices——either keep lying t myself r d a different degree. Changing curse wuld make the past tw years f university a waste f time and mney. But I realized that thugh I’d hate myself fr quitting, I’d hate myself mre if I ended up being a terrible dctr. I was glad t mve nt smething new, but I had t deal with my parents’ cnstant disappintment and cmplaining abut my future.
Eventually, I changed my curse t English writing and suddenly I was enjying university. I was still studying my brains ut writing all night and thrugh the weekend, but, this time, enjying the pain. I’d spend hurs perfecting a single paragraph until I was happy with it. Five hurs feels like 20 secnds because I was having s much fun striking my head n the keybard until gd wrds cme ut. I started lking fr internships that wuld give me experience in prfessinal writing. Frtunately, I made it as an editrial assistant at a website.
【解析】
这是一篇记叙文。观看手术对任何医科学生来说都是一件令人兴奋的事，但作者并不是这样的，他不想当医生，后来他做出了改变，幸运的是，作者最终成为了一个网站的编辑助理。
第一段给出的首句是It wasn’t an easy decisin.这一句是故事发展的转折点。可以从“我有两个选择——要么继续欺骗自己，要么攻读一个不同的学位。改变课程会让过去两年的大学生活变成时间和金钱的浪费。”入手扩展开去，——无论从何角度拓展，需注意与续写第二段首句呼应。
第二段所给首句Eventually, I changed my curse t English writing and suddenly I was enjying university.这一句呼应前文，紧接着可以从“整个周末，我仍在整晚钻研写作，但这一次，我很享受这种痛苦。”入手续写。
【范文点评】
这是一篇续写。段与段之间衔接紧密，句与句之间层层紧扣，同时文中使用高级句子。Changing curse wuld make the past tw years f university a waste f time and mney.动名词作主语；But I realized that thugh I’d hate myself fr quitting, I’d hate myself mre if I ended up being a terrible dctr.句中使用宾语从句和让步状语从句；I’d spend hurs perfecting a single paragraph until I was happy with it.句中使用until引导的时间状语从句；I started lking fr internships that wuld give me experience in prfessinal writing.句中使用定语从句。
4.【参考范文】
But the prblem was that I had t cme back t bring this girl a new lemnade. I bught a lemnade, tk a deep breath, and went back. This time, I bent lw, lking at every persn n the end f each rw. When I saw the same by, I mved thrugh fast t get back t that girl. Unfrtunately, I stepped n a by’s feet and banged my knee. After aplgized t him, I quickly fell int the seat next t the girl and handed her the lemnade. Everyne arund us all turned t stare at me again with sme cmplaints.
I thught abut crawling ut f this rw and back int Emmett’s rw, but I culdn’t. Maybe I wuld just stay there until the mvie ended. Thanking me fr the lemnade, the girl talked abut the plts I missed. I whispered back, “Thanks.” When the lights f the cinema came n, I grabbed my jacket n the seat and hurried ut. Emmett caught up with me, “D yu knw that girl?” “N.” I answered. “Then why d yu have her jacket?” I lked dwn and fund a bright pink jacket. “Here I g again,” I said with embarrassment, sptting the girl in the crwd.
【解析】
这是一篇读后续写。周五晚上，作者和埃米特按计划去看了一场电影，在看电影期间作者去给妈妈打电话，回来了作者发现自己做错了座位，还误喝了一个女孩的柠檬水。
第一段给出的首句是But the prblem was that I had t cme back t bring this girl a new lemnade.这一句是故事发展的转折点。可以从“我买了一杯柠檬水，深吸了一口气，走了回去。这一次，我弯下腰，看着每一行末尾的每一个人。还是踩到了一个男孩的脚，迅速坐到女孩旁边的座位上，递给她柠檬水。周围的人都转过头来，抱怨着又盯着作者看。——无论从何角度拓展，需注意与续写第二段首句呼应。
第二段所给首句I thught abut crawling ut f this rw and back int Emmett’s rw, but I culdn’t.这一句呼应前文，紧接着可以从“也许我会一直呆在那里直到电影结束。这时要续写女孩谈到了作者错过的情节。作者低声说：“谢谢。”当电影院的灯亮了，作者抓起座位上的夹克就匆匆出去了。埃米特追上作者，“你认识那个女孩吗？“没有。”作者回答。“那你为什么拿她的夹克？“作者低头一看，发现了一件亮粉色的夹克衫。“作者很尴尬，在人群中看到了那个女孩。
【范文点评】
这是一篇续写。段落衔接紧密，句与句之间顺应自然，文中使用高级句子。This time, I bent lw, lking at every persn n the end f each rw.句中现在分词作伴随状语；When I saw the same by, I mved thrugh fast t get back t that girl.句中when引导时间状语从句；Thanking me fr the lemnade, the girl talked abut the plts I missed.定语从句用在句中。高级句式的应用彰显作者对英语写作的良好驾驭能力。
5.【参考范文】
Para 1.
But his glasses came ff when he fell in the water. Harry and Jel waded back int the river. Twigs and leaves swirled arund their ankles befre flating away n the current. N glasses! Harry thught they might have been swept dwnstream. But Mr. Taylr culdn’t see withut his glasses. Everything was a blur t him nw. Hw culd they get hme? “Oh great! Nw we’re lst,” graned Jel, “and it might be days befre smene finds us.” “N thanks t yu.” Harry blamed.
Para 2
“Just calm dwn.” Mr. Taylr shuted, “Withut my glasses, we need t wrk tgether t find ur way.” Mr. Taylr fumbled in his backpack and pulled the map and the cmpass ut. Luckily, Jel learned hw t read a map frm his bks, and Harry knew hw t use a cmpass frm his hiking club. They stpped arguing, lked dwn at the map, searched fr the river and used the cmpass t find the directin. In relief, Mr. Taylr beamed prudly, “Yu tw will save the day. Yu’re pretty gd hiking partners!”
【解析】
前文主要讲的是Taylr先生第一次和两个儿子Harry和Jel一起徒步旅行。然而，Harry和Jel为徒步旅行的前三英里而争吵。结果后来惹得Taylr先生生气了，他的左脚被树根缠住了，在泥泞的河岸上滑来滑去，掉进了路旁的河里。两个儿子前去帮助父亲，还好浑身湿透的父亲发现自己只是受了点轻伤。在给的第一段开头中，“But his glasses came ff when he fell in the water.”“came ff”意思是“掉进”，第二段开头“Just calm dwn.” Mr. Taylr shuted, “Withut my glasses, we need t wrk tgether t find ur way.”此句中的find ur way为关键词，因为后文都围绕这个词在说。
【高分句型1】
Harry thught his glasses might have been swept dwnstream, withut which Mr. Taylr culdn’t see. Harry想他的眼镜可能被冲到下游去了，没有眼镜Taylr先生就看不见。运用“介词+关系代词”结构非限制性定语从句。
【高分句型2】
They stpped arguing and lked dwn at the map, s that they culd search fr the river and used the cmpass t find the directin. 他们停止了争论，低头看了看地图，这样他们就可以寻找河流，用指南针找到方向。运用s that引导目的状语从句。