备考2024届高考英语一轮复习第二部分读后续写专题二热考话题素材8关爱动物

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[2023浙江1月]I was invited t a ckut n an ld friend’s farm in western Washingtn. I parked my car utside the farm and walked past a milking huse which had apparently nt been used in many years. A nise at a windw caught my attentin， s I entered it. It was a hummingbird（蜂鸟）， desperately trying t escape. She was cvered in spider-webs（蛛网） and was barely able t mve her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.
With the bird in my cupped hand， I lked arund t see hw she had gtten in. The brken windw glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece f clth int the hle and tk her utside， clsing the dr securely behind me.
When I pened my hand， the bird did nt fly away； she sat lking at me with her bright eyes. I remved the sticky spider-webs that cvered her head and wings. Still， she made n attempt t fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the windw t lng and was t tired？ Or t thirsty？
As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path tward my car where I kept a water bttle， she began t mve. I stpped， and she sn tk wing but did nt immediately fly away. Hvering（悬停）， she apprached within six inches f my face. Fr a very lng mment， this tiny creature lked int my eyes， turning her head frm side t side. Then she flew quickly ut f sight.
During the ckut， I tld my hsts abut the hummingbird incident. They prmised t fix the windw. As I was departing， my friends walked me t my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew t the center f ur grup and began hvering. She turned frm persn t persn until she came t me. She again lked directly int my eyes， then let ut a squeaking call and was gne. Fr a mment， all were speechless. Then smene said， "She must have cme t say gd-bye."
A few weeks later， I went t the farm again.
I was just abut t leave when the hummingbird appeared.
1.I remembered the hummingbird.
①将句子改写为无灵主语句，使表达更为生动。
Memries f the hummingbird ccurred t me.
②为句①补充时间状语从句，呼应原文"我"第一次发现蜂鸟时的场景，使上下文衔接更紧密、更流畅。
Memries f the hummingbird ccurred t me when I walked past the milking huse.
2.We rasted meat， chatted and laughed.
①用形象的气味描写和with复合结构改写句子，使表达更生动形象。
With the smell f rasting meat flating in the air， we chatted and laughed.
②为句①中的畅聊和欢笑补充情感副词、地点状语以及时间状语从句，使表达更加具有画面感。
With the smell f rasting meat flating in the air， we chatted and laughed merrily arund the picnic table till the sun set.
3.She flew t me.
①用动词dive， hver， stp将蜂鸟朝"我"飞来的动作细化，使表达更加准确、生动。
She dived twards me，hvered befre my face and then stpped n my left shulder.
②为句①蜂鸟俯冲和盘旋时的动作补充它当时的神态描写，体现蜂鸟看到"我"时的兴奋和喜悦。
She dived twards me， hvered befre my face lking at me with her bright eyes， and then stpped n my left shulder.
Afewweekslater，Iwenttthefarmagain. Having parked the car， I wandered n the blackberry-lined path again. Memries f the hummingbird ccurred t me（我想起） when I walked past the milking huse. Was she all right？ "Hw I wish I culd see her again！" I murmured t myself with a sense f lss（失落感）. I was lst in the memries（沉浸在回忆中） when my friends interrupted me， inviting me t the ckut. With the smell f rasting meat flating in the air（空气中飘着烤肉的味道）， we chatted and laughed merrily arund the picnic table till the sun set. The evening glw spreading acrss the farm（晚霞洒满整个农场）， it was time fr us t say gdbye， s we went t the parking lt tgether.
Iwasjustabuttleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared. With a squeaking call， she dived twards me， hvered befre my face（向我俯冲下来，在我面前盘旋） lking at me with her bright eyes， and then stpped n my left shulder. I patted her n the back which was cvered by clrful feathers. And I tk ut my water bttle， trying t give her sme water. Cntent and jyful（满足又快乐）， she flew abut 2 meters abve the grund， turning her head frm side t side as if expressing her gratitude fr saving her life t me again. At that mment， I felt a mixture f happiness and excitement welling up in my heart， tears rlling dwn my cheeks（幸福和激动一起涌上我的心头，泪水顺着我的脸颊滚落）. The sinking sun cast a warm glw ver（落日温暖的光照射在……上） me and the bird， witnessing the wnderful cnnectin between humans and animals.人物
主要角色"I"：从文中的描述"With the bird in my cupped hand" "stuffed a piece f clth int the hle" "remved the sticky spider-webs that cvered her head and wings"可知，"我"善良、细心、关爱动物，为续写第一段"我"重回旧地，想念蜂鸟，想知道它是否安好，埋下了伏笔。
主要角色a hummingbird：从文中的描述"ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up" "sat lking at me with her bright eyes" "Hvering（悬停）， she apprached within six inches f my face" "She must have cme t say gd-bye"表明蜂鸟相信人类，亲近"我"，心怀感恩，为续写第二段蜂鸟的再次出现做好了铺垫。
情节及
情感线
"我"去朋友农场野餐，发现一只被困的蜂鸟（好奇它是怎么被困的）→"我"把它解救出来，它却没有飞走（疑惑它是否累了或者渴了）→"我"告诉朋友蜂鸟事件（担心再有蜂鸟受困）→"我"离开之际，蜂鸟前来相送（惊讶又感动）
主题
原文讲述了"我"在朋友的农场外意外救下一只被困的蜂鸟，在"我"要离开农场时，这只蜂鸟又来到了"我"的面前，似乎在和"我"告别。再通过续写两段的提示语可知，文章展现的是关爱动物、人与动物和谐共处的主题。
续写
第一段
衔接原文最后一段，蜂鸟深情相送，再衔接本段首句，几周后"我"重访农场，应该是希望再次见到蜂鸟。续写的情节发展可以是：漫步黑莓小路（呼应前文）→想起蜂鸟（主要角色再现）→很想再见那只可爱的小鸟（情感流露）→与朋友烧烤、谈心直到日落→"我"该离开了（衔接下文）。
续写
第二段
衔接本段续写提示语"我正要离开时，蜂鸟出现了"可知，该段主要讲述"我"和蜂鸟的和谐互动。续写的情节发展可以是：蜂鸟向"我"飞来（情景复现）→"我"的反应→"我"的感受→人与动物应该和谐共处（主题升华）。