2024届高考英语写作---如何给作文润色课件

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这是一份2024届高考英语写作---如何给作文润色课件，共18页。PPT课件主要包含了How，be concise，repetitive，Assignment等内容，欢迎下载使用。

你校即将举办以“Challenge Yurself”为主题的演讲比赛，请你写一篇发言稿参赛。内容包括： 1. 对挑战的看法； 2. 相关经历； 3. 应对挑战的建议。注意： 1.词数100左右；2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Passage 1Mst peple nly cnsider challenges harmful. But I think they are als very imprtant t us. Tw years ag, I was quite pr in English. Hwever, encuraged by my teacher, I decided t challenge myself and make imprvements. With great determinatin, I made effrts t study every subject. Finally, my hard wrk paid ff and I even made sme new friends. T tackle challenges, my first advice is t face them psitively. Dn’t face them negatively r just escape frm difficulties. Mst imprtantly, believe in urselves and never give up. Always remember t keep cnfident and persistent when yu seek success.
Passage 2Mst peple nly cnsider challenges as demanding tasks that cause anxiety, stress and even fear. But I think they are als great pprtunities t make prgress. Tw years ag, I was quite pr in English. Hwever, encuraged by my teacher, I decided t challenge myself and make imprvements. With great determinatin, I kept practicing fr mnths. Finally, my hard wrk paid ff and I even wn a prize in an English speaking cntest. T tackle challenges, my first advice is t face them psitively. This gives us curage t get started. Mst imprtantly, believe in urselves and never give up. Cnfidence and persistence always matters n ur way t success.
Activity 1 Read and Judge
Which passage is better? Why?
Activity 2 Cmpare and Analyze
Why is passage 2 better?
Paragraph 21. Mst peple nly cnsider challenges harmful. But I think they are als very imprtant t us.t general 2. Mst peple nly cnsider challenges as demanding tasks that bring anxiety, stress and even fear. But I think they are als great pprtunities t make prgress.specific
Paragraph 31. Tw years ag, I was quite pr in great determinatin, I made effrts t study every subject. Finally, my hard wrk paid ff and I even made sme new friends.ff the pint 2. Tw years ag, I was quite pr in great determinatin, I kept practicing fr mnths. Finally, my hard wrk paid ff and I even wn a prize in an English speaking cntest.mre relevant
Why passage 2 is better?
Paragraph 41. T tackle challenges, my first advice is t face them psitively. Dn’t face them negatively r just escape frm difficulties. Mst imprtantly, believe in urselves and never give up. Always remember t keep cnfident and persistent when yu seek success.repetitive 2. T tackle challenges, my first advice is t face them psitively. This gives us curage t get started. Mst imprtantly, believe in urselves and never give up. Cnfidence and persistence always matters n ur way t success.cncise (简练)
What cnclusin can we make abut “适当增加细节”when writing?The added details shuld be relevant, specific and cncise .
要点扩写原则：切题、具体、精炼，杜绝与主题相关度不高、太宽泛空洞或重复啰嗦的内容。
Activity 3 Explre and Find ut
1. Hw t be specific?
Challenges are gd.
(1) Challenges are beneficial and inspiring.(2) Challenges are gd. Fr example, they prvide chances fr us t imprve ur knwledge and skills.(3) Challenges are gd. Withut them, we culd hardly make any prgress.
use specific expressin
prvide evidence (example...)
give explanatin (reasn, influence...)
Activity 3 Explre and Find ut
2. Hw t be relevant?
Tw years ag, I was quite pr in English. Hwever, encuraged by my teacher, I decided t challenge myself and make imprvements. With great determinatin, I made effrts t study every subject. Finally, my hard wrk paid ff and I even made sme new friends.
fcus n the subject
kept practicing fr mnths
wn a prize in an English speaking cntest.
What des relevant mean?
[clsely cnnected with the subject yu are discussing r the situatin yu are thinking abut ]
Why d we add details?
T supprt ur ideas -- serve the writing purpse.
serve the writing purpse
3. Hw t be cncise?
(1) T tackle challenges, my first advice is t face them psitively. Dn’t face them negatively r just escape frm difficulties.T tackle challenges, my first advice is t face them psitively. T tackle challenges, my first advice is t face them psitively, which will prvide curage fr yu t get started.
avid repetitive infrmatin
avid repetitive infrmatin
use elliptical(省略) sentences, nn-predicate verbs (非谓语v)
(2) When we face challenges, we shuld be brave and ptimistic.When facing challenges, we shuld be brave and ptimistic.Facing challenges, we shuld be brave and ptimistic.
use attributive clauses r prnuns
(3) Yu can als turn t thers fr advice. Turning t thers fr advice may help yu find a better slutin t the prblems. Yu can als turn t thers fr advice. This may help yu find a better slutin t the prblems.Yu can als turn t thers fr advice, which may help yu find a better slutin t the prblems.
Activity 5 Summarize
Adding details
be specific
be relevant
use specific expressin
use elliptical sentence, nn-predicate verb, attributive clause, prnun...
Activity 4 Identify and Practise
Identify the prblems f the sentences and discuss hw t imprve them.
1. Once I met a challenge. Eventually, I wrked hard and vercame it.2. There are many ways t deal with challenges. Mst imprtantly, yu shuld exercise regularly t keep healthy. 3. Life is full f challenges. Yu can find challenges everywhere and nbdy can avid them n matter where they are.
nt relevant
Activity 6 Plish Yur Writing
Wrk in grups, identify the prblems f the writing and imprve it using the methds learned in this class.1. Underline and number the sentences that needs imprving.2. Find ut the prblems (t general, nt relevant r nt cncise).3. Make imprvements and explain what methds are used.
Activity 7 Present and Assess
2. Wrk in grups and make cmments n the presented wrk, especially the specificity, relevance and cnciseness f the added details.
1. Present yur wrk t the class. Intrduce what has been imprved and explain why yu d it that way (prblem, methd).
1. Find a partner and peer-edit yur writing.2. Write a secnd draft.