专题16 2022年6月浙江卷（帮助无家可归的人）-近年新高考英语真题读后续写解析+讲评课件

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历年高考英语读后续写真题分析
第二节(满分25分) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I needed t d smething in my cmmunity (社区) in rder t cmplete the cmmunity service hurs required t graduate frm high schl. Sme f my friends had signed up t spend time at a sup kitchen, s I did, t. It seemed like a gd thing t d. I thught that we wuld just be passing ut dinners t thse in need, but I fund ut we wuld be ding everything frm preparing t serving the dinner. We began preparing the fd, frm mixing salad dressing t separating frzen meat. Much still needed t be dne befre dinner was served, but already utside the building many hmeless peple were gathering. It wasn’t until a cuple f hurs later that we pened the drs and began serving dinner. As the line f peple came tward me, I gt a little scared. I’d cme face t face with the hmeless: Hw shuld I act? Hw wuld they treat me? Wuld they hate me fr having mre than they did? While sme f the peple lked very friendly, sme f them lked s dangerus. I didn’t have t much time t wrry abut it. I was assigned (分配) t serve the salad with the lady next t me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I fund quite cmfrting. I had never seen s many peple wanting fd. They were f all ages and natinalities. Mst f them wre clthes that were trn and dirty. Sme lked like they had tally given up n life, while thers seemed t be making the best f the situatin, smiling and jking. Sme were better ff than thers, but they all needed a gd meal and a warm place t eat. It saddened me t think f hw many peple there were wh didn’t have a place t call hme and the nly fd they gt came frm a sup kitchen. Para.1 As they came in my directin, I put n my brightest and happiest smile. Para.2 I was s happy that I had earned my service hurs in this way.
Wh : hmeless peple and me
When : when they began preparing the fd fr cmpleting the cmmunity service.
What : many hmeless peple were gathering befre the shp pened
Where: at a sup kitchen
Hw/why : Think f hw many peple there were wh didn't have a place t call hme and the nly fd they gt came frm a sup kitchen.
Backgrundinfrmatin
What the authr encuntered
What did the authr feel
Hw t help the hmeless
climax/cnflict
讲述了作者为了完成高中毕业所需的社区服务时间，需要在所在的社区做点什么，作者去了施粥所
作者发现准备过程中要做的事情很多，作者看到无家可归的人靠近时心里有点害怕
作者看到了年龄和国籍各不相同的人，这让作者感到很难过
第一步 依据首句，构思框架
两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量。
第一段首句后的衔接句、第一段尾句 、第二段首句后的衔接句。
即第二段的尾句——能体现故事圆满结局的句子或故事给我们启示的句子。
(2) 写好三个衔接句
(3) 写好一个升华句
第二步 增加细节，展开续写
①由第一段首句内容“当他们朝我走来的时候，我露出了最灿烂、最幸福的笑容。”可知，第一段可描写作者是怎么为无家可归的人施粥。
②由第二段首句内容“我很高兴我用这种方式赢得了我的服务时间。”可知，第二段可描写作者对这次社区服务的感悟。
①倒：pur/decant②意识到：realize that/be aware that③主张：urge sb. t d/advcate sb. t d
①感谢：gratefully/thankfully②急切的：anxius/eager/nervus③ 带来温暖：brught warmth int my heart
(由that引导的宾语从句和wh引导的定语从句)This experience made me realize that there are s many peple in this wrld wh need ur help. (由关系代词that引导的定语从句，省略了that和when引导的时间状语从句)I will never frget the way they lked at me when they were given fd.
第一段：作者是怎么为无家可归的人施粥。
As they came in my directin, I put n my brightest and happiest smile. Nervus as I felt, I did my utmst t keep myself calm and hand ut the delicately-wrapped meal t thse in need, with my hands trembling. Upn seeing it, every ne f them beamed with smile, gently murmured “Thank yu” and bwed t me sincerely, which brught warmth straight int my heart. The passing time witnessed the smth prcess f this event. It was nt until the night wiped ut the last ray f sun that we finished ur cmmunity service fr the hmeless.
时间的流逝见证了这一事件的顺利进行。直到夜晚把最后一缕阳光吹灭，我们才完成了对无家可归者的社区服务
第二段描写作者对这次社区服务的感悟
I was s happy that I had earned my service hurs in this way. Nt nly did I clear my previus prejudice against thse wh seemed t be dangerus and unamiable, but als I extended a helping hand t thse wh wanted fd and clthes. I suddenly came t realize that nt everyne was blessed with frtune and brn t be wealthy, therefre, we shuld always keep grateful fr what life blessed us with. Hwever, we did have the pwer t share ur happiness with thers, that is, spreading lve. Lve is everything, like the clear mn hanging high in the sky, spreading its cmfrting mnlight selflessly t everyne.
爱是一切，就像高悬在天空中的明月，无私地向每一个人传播着它令人安慰的月光。
Nervus as I felt Keep myself calmHand ut the mealWith my hands tremblingBeam with smileBw t me Bring warmth int my heart
Clear my prejudiceBrn t be wealthyKeep grateful Share ur happiness Spread lve
The passing time witnessed the smth prcess f this event. It was nt until the night wiped ut the last ray f sun that we finished ur cmmunity service fr the hmeless.
Lve is everything, like the clear mn hanging high in the sky, spreading its cmfrting mnlight selflessly t everyne.
时间的流逝见证了这一事件的顺利进行。直到夜晚把最后一缕阳光吹灭，我们才完成了对无家可归者的社区服务。
1. 课堂教学中微型训练
课文/语篇练习/试卷:对故事后续内容进行猜测 ☞ 一个情节/一个语段/一两个句子续写训练穿插于课堂教学过程中让学生不经意间完成微型的续写任务
由浅入深，循序渐进?要适合自己学生的实际让绝大多数学生都能读得懂写得出适时给予积极评价和鼓励调动学生的想象力和逻辑思维能力，激发学生的写作热情
2. 由易到难渐进式训练
1. 在阅读中尝试预测后续内容
适当的位置暂停
设想可能的几种结尾
2. 在阅读中积累细节描写素材
多留意故事类文章结构和语言表达人物描写、动作描写、语言描写、情感描写、环境描写?做好分类积累，以备续写之用
3. 注意积累记叙文的关联词语
记叙文在时间先后、故事起因、发展的共通表达?时间，让步，转折结果，最后感悟
4. 多练多写熟悉续写套路
除了在阅读中积累素材外，一定要多练多写，每周至少写一篇练习。熟悉评分标准，依照标准去写，在适量练习中总结出适合自己的方法和套路