专题03 “三个公式”解锁情感描写 讲义+练习

这是一份专题03 “三个公式”解锁情感描写 讲义+练习，共14页。试卷主要包含了 续写词数应为 150 左右；，词汇激活等内容，欢迎下载使用。
在故事的发展中，人物情感的变化是展现其性格的关键。续写时延续情感线索，不仅能凸显人物性格，还能升华文章主题。细腻的情感描写能让文章细节更加生动，使情节与细节相得益彰，提升文章的精彩程度。然而，许多学生在情感描写上存在词汇匮乏、表达单一的问题。为此，我们总结出三个实用句型，助力同学们提升写作水平。
万能句式一：adj 1 and adj 2, 主句，ding… / 独立主格结构
句式来源
“Wrn ut and famished, he made his way hme, keeping silent all the way.”
（他疲惫不堪又饥肠辘辘地往家走，一路上沉默不语。）
用法示例
**原句**：She stepped nt the stage t receive the award.
**升级后**：Amazed and delighted, she stepped nt the stage t receive the award, beaming with pride.
（她既惊奇又高兴，走上台领奖，满脸自豪。）
**原句**：He gt acquainted with many cmpanins.
**升级后**：Friendly and sciable, he sn gt acquainted with many cmpanins, having a great time with them.
（因友善且善于交际，他很快结识了许多伙伴，与他们相处愉快。）
**原句**：We met at the schl gate early in the mrning.
**升级后**：Anxius and eager, we met at the schl gate early in the mrning, chattering animatedly all the while.
（带着急切与渴望，我们一大早就在校门口会合，一直兴致勃勃地聊着。）
用法体验
Thrilled and dedicated, we were discussing with ur classmates and jtting dwn ur ideas, hping t cntribute t slving the tugh prblem.
（满心激动，我们专注地和同学讨论并写下想法，希望能助力解决难题。）
Deeply shcked and perplexed, I read letter after letter, each cnveying a similar sentiment.
（万分震惊与迷茫之中，我一页页翻看信件，每封都传达着相似的情绪。）
Overjyed and excited, Tm quickened his steps and rushed twards the brand - new car, knwing that he finally wned it.
（汤姆欣喜若狂，加快步伐奔向那辆崭新的汽车，深知自己终于拥有了它。）
Cntent and pleased, my sister lked at the painting, regarding it as the mst utstanding wrk in the wrld.
（妹妹心满意足地看着那幅画，觉得它是世界上最出色的作品。）
用法实战
Terrified and helpless, he std there mtinless fr a while, unable t believe what he had just witnessed.
（既恐惧又无助，他愣在那儿好一会儿，不敢相信刚刚目睹的一切。）
Despairing and exhausted, Lucy slwly cruched dwn, with tears trickling dwn her face.
（绝望又疲惫，露西缓缓蹲下，泪水顺着脸庞滑落。）
Curius and thrilled, we culdn't wait t exchange gifts with the internatinal friends, expressing ur prfund friendship thereby.
（好奇又兴奋，我们迫不及待地和国际友人互换礼物，以此表达我们深厚的友谊。）
Highly excited and fcused, we were discussing with ur classmates and recrding ur suggestins, hping t play a part in slving the prblem.
（激动万分，我们全神贯注地与同学探讨并记录建议，期望能为解决问题出份力。）
句式改造
**原句**：He entered the library. (紧张)
**升级后**：Nervus and a bit jittery, he quietly slipped int the quiet library, bk in hand and heart punding.
（他紧张又有些颤抖，悄悄溜进安静的图书馆，手里拿着书，心跳加速。）
万能句式二：量词 + 表情感状态的名词 + 动词 + sb
常用量词
a gush / rush / trrent / spurt / feeling f…
常用动词
grab, clutch, take hld f，creep（蔓延），engulf（吞没），well up（涌起），rush（冲），sweep acrss（席卷），verpwer（征服）
用法示例
**原句**：When he learned that he wn the cmpetitin, he felt extremely excited.
**升级后**：The mment he was infrmed f his victry in the cmpetitin, a gush f excitement grabbed him.
（当他知道比赛获胜时，一股兴奋的情绪抓住了他。）
**原句**：She was extremely srrwful.
**升级后**：She was clutched by a rush f srrw and culdn't help weeping bitterly.
（她悲痛万分，忍不住失声痛哭。）
**原句**：I felt frightened.
**升级后**：I was seized by a strng feeling f dread with my heart punding.
（我感到恐惧，心跳加速。）
用法体验
At the sight f her sweet smile, a feeling f warmth swept acrss me.
（看到她甜美的笑容，一股温暖涌上我心头。）
Hearing his prmise, Lily smiled bradly, a rush f happiness welling up in her heart.
（听到他的承诺，莉莉绽开笑容，一股幸福的暖流涌上心头。）
Hearing my mther's cmfrt n the phne, I was filled with a rush f gratitude, my eyes welling up with tears.
（听到电话里母亲的安慰，我心中满是感激，眼眶湿润。）
句式变化
“ding…, sb. felt a strng sense f + 情绪名词 + surging up in sb’s heart and cursing thrugh sb, ding…”
意为“某人感到一股强烈的……在内心涌起、流淌”。句首可加 ding sth 表情绪产生原因；句尾可加 ding sth 或 which 表情绪产生结果。
Seeing her child's excellent perfrmance n the stage, the mther felt a strng sense f pride surging up in her heart and cursing thrugh her, culdn't help clapping her hands.
（看到孩子在舞台上出色表演，妈妈心中满是骄傲，不禁鼓起掌来。）
Seeing his lst - and - fund pet, he felt a strng sense f surprise surging up in his heart and cursing thrugh him, hugging it tightly.
（看到失而复得的宠物，他心中满是惊喜，紧紧抱住它。）
Imagining the upcming hliday, the students felt a strng sense f anticipatin surging up in their hearts and cursing thrugh them, culdn't help cheering.
（想象着即将到来的假期，学生们心中满是期待，忍不住欢呼起来。）
万能句式三：（ding…），s + adj / adv + 部分倒装 + that…, (ding…)
用法示例
**原句**：He culdn't help laughing.
**升级后**：Recalling the funny stry, s amused was he that he culdn't help laughing, tears streaming dwn his face.
（回想起那个有趣的故事，他觉得太好笑了，忍不住大笑起来，眼泪都流了下来。）
**原句**：Sptting the appraching danger, s frightened was the little rabbit that it trembled all ver like a leaf.
**升级后**：看到逼近的危险，小兔子吓得浑身像树叶一样抖个不停。
**原句**：Catching sight f the fierce tiger, s scared did I feel that my hands started shaking and my feet refused t mve.
**升级后**：看到那只凶猛的老虎，我吓得双手开始颤抖，双脚也挪不动了。
用法体验
Recalling thse warm memries, s tuched was she that her eyes filled with tears and she culdn't speak fr a lng time.
（回想起那些温馨的回忆，她感动得热泪盈眶，久久无法言语。）
S excited was Jhn that he rushed frward and hugged his friend tightly.
（约翰兴奋极了，冲上前去，紧紧拥抱了他的朋友。）
技法综合体验
听到这个惊人的消息，他兴奋地跳起来，眼中闪烁着光芒。“Hearing this astnishing news, he leaped up in excitement, with his eyes glistening brightly.”
亲眼见到自己的偶像，艾米激动得几乎窒息，呆呆地站在那里，嘴巴张得老大。“Seeing her idl in persn, Amy was s thrilled that she almst gasped fr breath, standing there dumbfunded with her muth wide pen.”
向朋友倾诉完烦恼后，他不安地坐在椅子上，手指不停敲打着桌面，心跳加速。“Having pured ut his trubles t his friend, he sat restlessly n the chair, his fingers drumming n the table and his heart racing.”
他恶狠狠地盯着对手，几乎无法抑制心中的怒火，声音因愤怒而颤抖。“Glaring at his ppnent viciusly, he culd barely cntain his anger, his vice shaking with rage.”
马克冷得浑身发抖，疲惫不堪，完全不知道该如何摆脱这糟糕的处境。“Shivering with cld and extremely exhausted, Mark was cmpletely at a lss as t hw t get ut f this terrible situatin.”
刹那间，泪水模糊了双眼，他感动得说不出话来。“In an instant, with tears blurring his eyes, he was t tuched t say a wrd.”
听到这个尴尬的问题，大卫满脸通红，不停地挠着头，试图找个合适的回答。“On hearing this embarrassing questin, David blushed deeply, scratching his head cnstantly, trying t find a prper answer.”
从未想过自己会陷入如此困境，她感到无比的焦虑和无助。“Never had she thught that she wuld be trapped in such a predicament that she was verwhelmed with anxiety and helplessness.”
素材积累
开心
得知孩子们的想法，梅雷迪思夫人喜形于色。而后，孩子们欢快地准备起爆米花。带着一篮爆米花，他们兴高采烈地前往伯纳德家，欲与他分享这绝妙计划。听闻此言，伯纳德喜极而泣，眼中满是泪花。看到那篮爆米花，他的父母也欣喜万分。不久，令他开心的是，爆米花美味至极，很快售罄。他归来时，满脸洋溢着喜悦。笑声在房间中回荡。
“Learning the children’s idea, Mrs. Meredith was s verjyed that she smiled brightly. Then, the children gt dwn t preparing ppcrn cheerfully. With a basket f ppcrn, they left fr the Bernard’s jyfully t share with Bernard the gd plan. Hearing what they said, Bernard danced with jy, with tears filling his eyes. At the sight f the basket f ppcrn, his parents were als seized with jy. Later, much t his delight, the ppcrn was s tasty that it sn sld ut. He sn returned, his whle face beaming with delight. Laughter lingered arund the rm.”
伤心
今年我被选中代表学校参加即将到来的比赛。但因太过骄傲，我忽视了练习的重要性。比赛当天，我信心全无，饱受怯场之苦。最终，我满眼含泪走下舞台。比赛结束后，结果公布，我未获奖。我满心悲伤，咬着下唇，拖着沉重的双腿，心情沉重地走出演讲厅。我伤心垂头，悲伤笼罩双眼。走进教室，失望与悲伤如潮水般涌来，泪水滑落脸颊。接下来的日子，我仿佛置身悲伤的海洋，什么都不想做。
“I was selected t represent my schl in the appraching cntest this year. But I was s prud that I neglected the imprtance f practicing fr the cntest. On the day f the cntest, I began t lse cnfidence in myself and suffered frm stage fright. In the end I walked ff the stage, my eyes filled with tears. Finally, results were annunced after the cntest. I did nt win any prizes. I bit my bttm lip with sadness filling her heart. I dragged my heavy legs with a sinking heart and mved ut f the lecture hall. I hung my head in sadness, great srrw cluding my eyes. On entering the classrm, disappintment and sadness came in waves and tears streamed dwn my cheeks. The next fllwing days, I felt like she was flating in an cean f sadness, nt wanting t d anything.”
生气
门开了，进来一个年轻人。看到我们往行李箱装东西，他愤怒地大叫，眼中闪烁着恼怒。他大发雷霆，跺脚来回走动。他指责我们非法闯入他的房间，并威胁要报警，这把我的孩子们吓得不轻。就在这时，我丈夫购物回来。听到这人的无礼言语，他心中燃起怒火。似乎局面已无法调和，达到沸点。争吵令他怒火更盛，如火山爆发。最终，我丈夫无法遏制怒火，气冲冲地摔门而出。
“The dr pened and in came a yung man. Shcked t see us packing things int ur suitcase, the yung man let ut a yell f anger, with his eyes shining with annyance. He was in a furius passin, and went stamping abut. He accused us f illegally entering his rm and threatened t call the plice, which scared my children t death. Just at that mment, my husband returned after his grcery shpping. Hearing the man's rude wrds, a fire f rage burning in his heart. It seemed that n settlement wuld be pssible, and the situatin reached a biling pint. Quarrels fueled his anger and he erupted like a vlcan. Eventually, unable t cntain his anger, my husband strmed ut f the rm, slamming the dr furiusly behind him.”
害怕
饥饿的熊循着气味来到我们被高铁丝网围住的营地。它又拉又咬铁丝网，后腿站立，推搡木栅栏。恐惧将我完全笼罩，我动弹不得。我惊恐万分，双腿颤抖，手心冒汗。身旁的妻子呆立原地，被吓得动弹不得。看到北极熊的血盆大口，她几乎被吓死。这毛茸茸的家伙攻击围栏，瞬间撕开一个小口。看到这可怕场景，我们感觉血液凝固。喉咙发紧，双腿发软。我和埃利尝试了所有防熊措施，大声呼喊、猛敲锅具、向空中鸣放空弹。
“The hungry bear fllwed his nse t ur camp, which was surrunded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He std n his back legs and pushed at the wden fence psts. A burst f hrrr held me entirely in its pwer, and I was unable t mve an inch. Extremely frightened/panicked, I felt my legs trembling and my palms sweating. Beside me was my wife, wh was rted t the grund, wh was rted t the grund, frzen with fear. At the sight f the plar bear’ bldy muth, she was nearly dead with fright. The furry creature launched an attack n the fence, instantly leaving a narrw pening n it. We felt that the bld in ur bdy frze because f the terrible sight. Our thrats tightened and ur knees felt weak. Elli and I tried all the bear defense actins we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pts hard, and fired blank shtgun shells int the air.”
紧张
完成测试表演后，我向巴特勒先生致谢，知晓结果次日会张贴在合唱室门口。我整夜辗转难眠。次日清晨，我匆忙赶到学校，紧张地瞥向合唱室门口的名单，感觉心都提到嗓子眼。名单顶端正是我的名字。备受鼓舞的我，为表演日更加刻苦练习。终于，表演日来临。站在后台，紧张感扑面而来。听到叫我的名字，我心里忐忑不安。颤抖的双腿带我走上舞台，我手心冒汗，心跳加速。满是观众的大厅让我愈发不安。我的心剧烈跳动，仿佛要蹦出来。此时，我看到角落的巴特勒先生，他点头与我坚定对视，让我安心。音乐响起，我开始歌唱。结束时，礼堂爆发出如潮的欢呼声。
“When I finished her testing perfrmance, I thanked Mr. Butler and knew the result wuld be psted n the dr f the chral rm the next day. I culdn’t fall asleep, tssing and turning in bed fr a whle night. By the next mrning, I hurried t the schl and nervusly glanced at the list n the dr f the chral rm, feeling as if my heart were in my muth. There, at the tp f the list was psted my name. Inspired, I practiced even harder fr the day f perfrmance. Finally the day fr the perfrmance came. When I was standing backstage, nervusness/tensin came flding ver me. When my name was called I culd feel butterflies in my stmach. My trembling legs brught me nstage, and I culd feel my palms sweating and heart racing. The hall crwded with audience made me even mre uneasy. My heart was punding/thumping hard, as if it were abut t pp. At that mment, my eyes parked n Mr. Butler at the crner. He ndded and exchanged a determined glance with me, which timely put my heart back in place. With the music rising, I began my singing. When I finished, the auditrium erupted int a sea f cheers.”
感动
次日，我们想起带来的崭新帐篷，决定沿河露营。旅途中景色绝美，妈妈激动不已。每到新地方，妈妈都难掩兴奋，像孩子般欢呼雀跃。她会下车，兴奋地又笑又跳。抵达露营地，妈妈激动尖叫，找到一片空地，立刻指挥我们搭帐篷。我们眼中闪烁着兴奋光芒，坐在草地上，享受壮丽的大自然。
“The next day we remembered the brand new tent we had brught with us. We decided t camp alng the river. The views n the jurney were surprisingly beautiful, a wave f excitement taking hld f Mm. Every time we gt t a new place，Mm culd hardly cntain her excitement, and wuld cheer up like a child. She wuld get ff the car, laughing and dancing arund with excitement. The mment we arrived at the camping place, letting ut a scream f thrill, Mm lcated a clearing and immediately guided us t pitch the tent. With eyes glittering \twinkling with excitement，we sat n the grass, enjying the splendid nature.”
尴尬
此时，我们站在长长的假日结账队伍中。我觉得是个好机会，便躺地上，不停尖叫：“我要那电话。” 妈妈声音颤抖：“贝基，你最好马上起来。” 我充耳不闻，继续撒泼。妈妈涨红的脸写满窘迫，我却依旧我行我素。突然，妈妈竟也躺我旁边，同样又踢又叫，索要她渴望的东西。见状，我愈发尴尬，心跳加速，脸热得发烫。仿佛空气都消失了，感觉全世界都在注视我们。“妈妈，停下。妈妈，起来。” 我含泪哀求。她看我一眼，起身，掸掸衣服上的灰尘。
“By nw we were standing in the lng hliday line t pay the bill. and I figured it was a gd chance. I threw myself n the grund, screaming, “l want that telephne.” ver and ver again. “Becky, yu’d better get up at nce”, my mther said with a trembling vice, embarrassment written in her red face.
综合演练：
“I just want a nrmal birthday party,” April tld Bailey as they walked hme frm schl.
Bailey knew what April meant. April’s parents lved the envirnment. And because April happened t be brn n Earth Day, all her parties had an Earth Day theme.
“Remember when yu turned seven?” said Bailey.
“Hw culd I frget the Thrw-Out Blwut?” said April.
“We helped ut at yur garage sales and dnated the mney t charity. And when yu turned eight...”
“It was a Tree Spree,” finished April. “We planted maples.” “Last year, we all cllected newspapers t recycle,” said Bailey. “The Print Sprint.” April graned.
Bailey giggled. “I thught it was fun.”
Later that night, as April laded the dishwasher, she said, “I’d like t plan my wn party this year.”
“Sure,” said Mm. “We culd have a Cmpsts Carnival.” “Great idea!” said Dad.
April cleared her thrat. “I’d like t g t Maze Craze instead.” “Really?” said Dad, surprised.
“I guess we culd d that. Dad and I can send yu kids there.” said Mm.
April culdn’t wait fr her birthday! She and her friends wuld have s much fun. And they wuldn’t have t think ne bit abut the earth.
At schl the next day, April tld her friends. “I’m having my birthday party at Maze Craze!”
“Yu are?” said Jsie. “But we always d smething earthy n yur birthday.” “Remember that salamander we fund tw years ag?” said Tyler. “Yeah,” said April. “This year, we’re nt even ging utside.”
“Oh!” said Tyler.
The fllwing weekend, everyne gathered in the parking lt utside f Maze Craze. “Thanks fr cming,” said April. “I’ve been s excited abut my party. N shvels.
N cllecting recyclables. Nthing earthy abut it.” She shifted her feet. “Then I gt here this mrning and saw this parking lt.”
April’s friends glanced arund. Plastic bttles bunced acrss the grund. Newspapers and fast-fd sacks blcked the strm drain. Shpping bags rustled in the trees.
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“What a mess!” April frwned.
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April lked at the cllected rubbish and smiled.
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续写单句训练
“多么糟！”阿普丽尔皱了皱眉头。

虽然她一直渴望一个非地球日的生日，但很难对这样的混乱视而不见。

她转过身来对朋友们说：“先捡垃圾怎么样？”

她的提议很快得到了其他人的批准，很快他们就成功了。

艾普丽尔的妈妈从后备箱里拿了一些手套，而她爸爸设法取出了树里的购物袋。

艾普丽尔和贝利拿着这些袋子收集了散落的瓶子。

在下水道旁，乔西和泰勒竭尽全力清除了堵塞物。

许多人都能动手轻松地干活。

不久之后，三个袋子里装满了罐子和报纸，以供回收利用。

阿普丽尔看着收集到的垃圾，笑了笑。然后她抬头看着她的朋友们。

他们参加生日派对的整洁衣服浑身湿透，但他们的脸上却很满意。

为地球做些事感觉很好。

“大家，地球日快乐，”April说。“现在我们准备好迎接迷宫大火了。”“April生日快乐！”她的朋友们喊道。

“我很幸运能出生在地球日了！””（“哇，又一个朴实的生日，”）April自想。“明年的堆肥嘉年华可能是个好主意。”

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【文本解析】
【分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了April过生日疯狂迷宫玩时，看到外面很多垃圾，于是建议朋友们先捡垃圾，他们为参加生日聚会而穿的整洁衣服被汗水湿透了。但他们的脸上洋溢着满意的神情，能为地球做点事的感觉真好。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“‘真是一团糟!’April皱起了眉头”可知，第一段可描写April建议朋友们先捡垃圾，描述他们捡垃圾的经过。
②由第二段首句内容“April看着收集的垃圾笑了”可知，第二段可描写April对捡垃圾的感受以及朋友们的反应。
2.续写线索：April皱眉——April建议捡垃圾——大家设法捡垃圾——April和朋友们感觉为地球做点事真好
3.词汇激活
行为类
渴望：lng fr/desire
支持：apprve/ supprt
努力做某事：make great effrts t d sth./ take pains t d sth.
情绪类
困难：difficult / rugh
良好：gd / great
得分句型
1：Thugh she had been lnging fr a nn-Earth Day birthday, it was difficult t turn a blind eye t such a mess. (运用了thugh引导让步状语从句)
2：Hw abut picking the trash first? (运用了动名词作宾语)
单句训练
“What a mess!” April frwned.
Thugh she had been lnging fr a nn-Earth Day birthday it was difficult t turn a blind eye t such a mess.
She turned arund t her friends, “Hw abut picking the trash first?”
Her prpsal was quickly apprved by thers and sn they were in business.
April’s mum grabbed sme glves frm the trunk while her dad managed t remve thse shpping bags in the trees.
With the bags, April and Bailey cllected scattered bttles.
By the drain, Jsie and Tyler made great effrts t clear the blckage.
Many hands make light wrk. In a shrt while, three bags were filled with cans and newspapers t recycle.
April lked at the cllected rubbish and smiled.
Then she lked up at her friends.
Their neat clthes fr the birthday party were saked with sweat, but their faces glwed with satisfactin.
It felt s gd t d smething fr the earth.
“Happy Earth Day, everyne,” said April. “Nw we are ready fr Maze Craze.” “Happy Birthday, April!” shuted her friends.
“I’m s lucky t have been brn n Earth Day! ” (“Ww, anther earthy birthday,” )April thught t herself. “A Cmpsts Carnival may be a gd idea fr next year.”
范文：
“What a mess!” April frwned. Thugh she had been lnging fr a nn-Earth Day birthday it was difficult t turn a blind eye t such a mess. She turned arund t her friends, “Hw abut picking the trash first?” Her prpsal was quickly apprved by thers and sn they were in business. April’s mum grabbed sme glves frm the trunk while her dad managed t remve thse shpping bags in the trees. With the bags, April and Bailey cllected scattered bttles. By the drain, Jsie and Tyler made great effrts t clear the blckage. Many hands make light wrk. In a shrt while, three bags were filled with cans and newspapers t recycle.
April lked at the cllected rubbish and smiled. Then she lked up at her friends. Their neat clthes fr the birthday party were saked with sweat, but their faces glwed with satisfactin. It felt s gd t d smething fr the earth. “Happy Earth Day, everyne,” said April. “Nw we are ready fr Maze Craze.” “Happy Birthday, April!” shuted her friends. “I’m s lucky t have been brn n Earth Day! ” (“Ww, anther earthy birthday,” )April thught t herself. “A Cmpsts Carnival may be a gd idea fr next year.”