（新高考）2021届高考二轮复习专题十 读后续写 教师版

这是一份（新高考）2021届高考二轮复习专题十 读后续写 教师版，共10页。试卷主要包含了评分原则，续写步骤等内容，欢迎下载使用。

命题趋势
纵观历年读后续写，篇篇记叙文好故事，或遇险，或趣事，或助人，但无论是什么内容，故事读起来都引人入胜，续写写起来也抓耳挠腮。
出题人的设题其实大同小异，通过完整故事的叙述，考查学生用英语叙事和描写的能力，尤其是动作、情感和环境的细节描写。每篇读后续写都离不开两条线：情节线、情感线。故事的发展、情节的推动都与这两条线息息相关，而对情节和情感的描写大多是通过对动作、心理、情感和环境等细节描写来体现的。不同的文章对这四方面侧重不同，或是兼而有之。而我们的续写内容也必然要沿着文中已给的情节线和情感线进行合情、合理续写，通过对人体动作、外在表情、内在情感、心理活动和景物等的细节描写，灵活多样的表达，来推动故事达到高潮，使其“有血有肉、生动形象”，否则我们写出的内容极有可能味同嚼蜡。
考点清单
一、评分原则
1．本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。
2．评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。
3．词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。
4．拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对文章的影响程度予以考虑。
5．如书写较差以致影响文章，可将分数降低一个档次。
6．评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：
(1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
(2)内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用情况；
(3)应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；
(4)上下文的连贯性。
各档次的给分范围和要求
二、续写步骤:
（1）精读文章，确定文章线索。
每篇文章都有各自独特的写作思路，通过精读文章（考试说明中的样题是记叙文，所以可以推测，考察的主要类型是记叙文，所以下边的方法才成立），找到该篇文章的写作线索，例如什么人（wh）什么时间(when)在什么地方(where)因为什么(why)做了什么事儿(what)，最后有了什么发展(hw)。这样分析有利于考生“顺藤摸瓜”。
（2）仔细审题，明确续写要求。
一般短文后面的“注意”都有对此短文续写的具体要求，如字数限制、续写段落的首句提示，这样考生能做到“心中有数”。
（3）回扣原文，揣摩续写思路。
根据文章后面的要求，再次快速回读短文，抓住文章的思路，结合段首的提示语，最终确定续写段落的思路，同时结合文章划线词语提示，确定续写段落的内容。
（4）拟写草稿，修改错词病句。
在确定了思路和内容之后，最关键的就是结合提示语或者文中划线的关键词语拟写草稿。拟写时，注意句子结构的多样性、语言的丰富性，并通过句与句之间连接词的正确使用，使上下文连贯。这一步是得分的关键。必杀技：使用2-5个动作描写，1-2个环境描写，1-2个对话，1-2个表情或者心情。
方法不难，积累是关键。应注意积累记叙文和故事类篇章中的词汇、句型和语段，尤其是涉及故事细节描写和人物的表情、动作、心理活动等的表达，丰富自己的记叙文类英文语料库。
3.续写方法
（1）精读所给语言材料，理清文章脉络并明确作者的论点，确定文章主旨。
（2）寻求前文与续写段段首句之间的内在联系，站在作者的角度，设计并发展情节，想象要合理，情节要连贯。
（3）后续情节一般为故事的高潮或延续，是原作者声音的延续、态度的延伸，因此，要尽量符合原文思路，并求得与读者的心理共鸣，让读者回味无穷。
（4）续写时心态要端正，所续写内容要积极、健康向上，把事物美好的一面展示出来。
（5）利用自己已有的知识和经验，在继承原作者风格和语言基础之上，准确、地道地表达，充分展示语言的表现力。提高关联词与过渡语的使用率，增强整句表现力。
（6）如果所给短文为议论文，那么议论文中的段落首句多为主题句，观点鲜明。续写时，要围绕段落分论点确定论证方法，如正反对比、例证等。
精题集训
（60分钟）
精准预测题
(一)
“The mall? Really, Mm?” 13-year-ld Michelle asks her mther as her sister Nicle, three, lks n. “Abslutely.” Patty smiles. “Yu girls deserve sme fun, and I need t get ut f the huse.” With dialysis (透析) treatments every five hurs, Patty rarely ventures (冒险) frm her Raymnd, New Hampshire, hme. She’s als been waiting fur years t receive a call—the call that wuld call her fr the duble rgan transplant (移植) she s desperately needs t live—the call that culd cme at any time. “There,” Patty smiles. “Let’s g have an adventure!”
Befre leaving Patty phnes her firefighter husband Gary. But there’s n answer. Patty and her children arrive at the mall. “Wha!” Patty laughs, frgetting in the excitement t call Gary.
At 3:05 Gary returns t the fire huse. Just as he’s abut t phne hme t check n Patty, the phne is ringing! “We’ve gt a match!” Patty’s dctr says. “But she’s gt t Charltte, Nrth Carlina, by midnight.” Gary’s heart beats fast as he calls hme. “Why desn’t she answer?” Gary dials again and again.
Gary wrries at the fire statin. He’s bked fur tickets n bth f the tw flights t Nrth Carlina, a 6 pm frm nearby Manchester r a 7:25 pm frm Bstn. Where are yu Patty? With still n answer, Gary hangs up and dials the plice department. He and his firefighter clleagues phne lcal stres and malls.
Nw as Patty and her daughters g shpping, the mall ludspeakers are making an annuncement. But in the crwded mall, Patty desn’t hear it.
At 5:45 Gary realizes it’s t late t make the Manchester flight. And if he desn’t find Patty sn, they wn’t make the Bstn flight either. Patty still hasn’t returned at 6:40. “Cme hme, Patty!” he begs, lking at the driveway. 7:00. It’s t late! Gary panics. Suddenly, he hears the sund f a car! “Patty!” he cries. Sptting her car pulling int the driveway, he calls the fire department. “Get that helicpter here!” he shuts. “She’s hme!”
Paragraph 1:
Patty spts Gary racing tward her, a nervus lk n his face and suitcases in his hands!
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Paragraph 2:
At 7:37 the plane takes ff.
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【答案】
Patty spts Gary racing tward her, a nervus lk n his face and suitcases in his hands! She is quite cnfused abut what has happened. “Yur rgans!” Gary cries. “They’re waiting fr yu! But we have t get yu t Charltte! Nw!” Patty is in shck. Helping Patty int the helicpter, Gary asks the pilt if they can make it t the airprt in time. The pilt smiles, “Yur fire chief gt the airline t hld the flight!” “Yu hear that, hney? Yu’re ging t live!” Gary says t Patty.
At 7:37 the plane takes ff. The plane lands in Nrth Carlina at 10:50. There is plenty f time left fr Patty t make the deadline. After a 10-hur-lng peratin, dctrs tell Gary the transplant culdn’t have gne better—the rgans are a perfect match. Tday, Patty is hme recvering, and her dctrs say she shuld live a full and nrmal life. “I live with the knwledge every day that I am alive because s many peple care abut me.” Patty says happily.
【解析】
这是一篇记叙文。Patty守在家里等待了四年器官移植，就在她决定带孩子们去逛商场的那天，医生通知丈夫找到了跟她匹配的器官，需要她在午夜前赶到Charltte, Nrth Carlina，丈夫买好了机票却到处找不到Patty。当Patty终于回来的的时候飞机已经晚点了，作为消防员的丈夫只能调用直升机……
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“Patty发现Gary朝她跑过来，脸上一脸紧张，手里拿着行李箱!”和第二段句首“飞机7点37分起飞”可知，第一段应该写从Patty和Gary见面后到上飞机前的对话和准备工作。
②由第二段首句内容“飞机7点37分起飞”可知，第二段可描写Patty到达Charltte的时间及到达之后的手术及术后结果。
2.续写线索：准备起飞——起飞——到达——手术成功——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类：
①按时到达机场：make it t the airprt in time /arrive at the airprt in time/appear at the airprt befre the deadline
②.关心：care abut/wrry abut/ be cncerned abut /lk after/take care f
情绪类：
①困惑：is cnfused abut /des nt knw entirely/ des nt realize
②震惊：in shck/greatly surprised/can nt believe what happened
【点睛】
[高分句型1]. Helping Patty int the helicpter, Gary asks the pilt if they can make it t the airprt in time.（helping是现在分词短语做伴随状语）
[高分句型2]. I live with the knwledge every day that I am alive because s many peple care abut me.（that引导knwledge的同位语从句，同位语从句中包含了because引导的原因状语从句）
（二）
“Want t g t the pl tmrrw?” Rsa asked Stephanie during recess. The pl at the YMCA was ne f their favrite places, where they learnt and practiced swimming.
Rsa and Stephanie did everything tgether. They rde the schl bus tgether. They sat tgether during lunch. They tk dance lessns tgether and they even went t the same summer camp. Their classmates called them “twins”. They were best friends. Mst f the time.
Smetimes, thugh, when Stephanie was with ther friends, she ignred Rsa r treated her like a little kid, even thugh they were the same age. Rsa and Stephanie had played tgether since they were babies, but smetimes Stephanie didn't act like a friend.
Tday was ne f thse times.
“Srry. I’m already ging t the pl,” Stephanie said. “Tni and Vanessa and I are ging.” She gave a brad smile, but in Rsa’s eyes, it wasn’t her nice smile. Saying nthing mre, she walked straight away t jin Tni and Vanessa, and Rsa was left standing alne, with her face burned and an angry tensin cming int her limbs.
After schl, at dance class, Stephanie talked and giggled with the ther dancers as they stretched in frnt f the mirrr. When Rsa came in, Stephanie didn’t say hell t her, but just anther smile. Rsa hesitated fr a while abut whether she shuld jin them, but she still felt t upset.
Then she nticed Kiara, the new girl. Rsa jined her and began stretching, t. Kiara smiled and Rsa smiled back. The tw girls began t talk. Rsa discvered that Kiara was nt the quiet girl she had thught she was. Kiara talked a lt — abut her little brther, abut the tree huse her uncle had built and even abut swimming. “I lve swimming,” Kiara said. “I will hld a pl part at the YMCA. Wuld yu like t cme?” “Yes. It’s awesme.” Rsa respnded. She tried nt t check the mirrr t see if Stephanie had nticed. She hped Stephanie felt left ut.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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After the dance class, when Rsa barded the bus, Stephanie was waiting in their usual seat.
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When Rsa saw Stephanie in lw spirits, her heart sank.
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【答案】
After the dance lessn, when Rsa barded the bus, Stephanie was waiting in their usual seat. Seeing Rsa, Stephanie quickly mved her backpack ff the seat t make rm fr her. But Rsa walked past and slid int the empty seat next t Kiara. They were talking abut the pl party when Stephanie went ver. “D yu still want t g swimming tnight?” Stephanie asked. “I’m already ging,” she said withut lking up. “Kiara and I are ging tgether.” Rsa smiled. Stephanie ndded and lked at her feet.
When Rsa saw Stephanie in lw spirits, her heart sank. Getting even didn’t feel the way she had expected. She culd walk away with her new friend and nt lk back. But when she saw Stephanie's watery eyes, her heart beat painfully. "Maybe we culd all g tgether.” Rsa said. Stephanie’s face lit up. “I’m srry fr ignring yu. Thank yu fr yur tlerance.” Stephanie said. Rsa gave her a hug and said, “I was t sensitive. Thank yu fr yur tlerance, t.” The tw girls smiled at each ther, which was their nice smile.
【分析】
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Rsa和Stephanie是从小到大的好朋友，但有时Stephanie表现得不像朋友，有一天Rsa问Stephanie要不要一起去基督教青年会的游泳池游泳，Stephanie说她去过了就不去了，这让Rsa很尴尬；之后在舞蹈课上Rsa结识了新来的女孩Kiara，Rsa邀请Kiara一起去游泳，想以此来报复Stephanie。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“舞蹈课结束后，Rsa登上公共汽车时，Stephanie正在她们平常的座位上等着。”可知，第一段可描写Stephanie为Rsa腾位置，但Rsa并未坐在Stephanie身旁，而是与Kiara坐在了一起，Stephanie问Rsa还去不去游泳，Rsa说她和Kiara一起去，Stephanie很失落。
②由第二段首句内容“当Rsa看到Stephanie情绪低落时，她的心一沉。”可知，第二段可描写看到失落的Stephanie，Rsa并没有报复的快感，Rsa邀请Stephanie一起去游泳，最后两个女孩和解，露出美丽的笑容。
2.续写线索：座位——问话——失落——释然——和好——笑容
3.词汇激活
行为类
①迅速移开背包：quickly mved her backpack ff / swiftly mved her backpack ff
②走过去：went ver / walked ver
③不回头：nt lk back / nt turn her head
情绪类
①心跳得很痛苦：beat painfully / beat bitterly
②露出喜色：lit up / brightened up
【点睛】
[高分句型1]. Seeing Rsa, Stephanie quickly mved her backpack ff the seat t make rm fr her.（用了现分词短语作状语）
[高分句型2]. The tw girls smiled at each ther, which was their nice smile.（用了which引导的非限制性定语从
句）
档次
描述
第五档
(21－25)
——与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。
——内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。
——所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。
——有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
第四档
(16－20)
——与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。
——内容比较丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。
——所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达。
——比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
档次
描述
第三档
(11－15)
——与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。
——写出了若干有关内容，应用了4个以上短文中标出的关键词语。
——应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义表达。
——应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。
第二档
(6－10)
——与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。
——写出了一些有关内容，应用了3个以上短文中标出的关键词语。
——语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有一些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达。
——较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。
第一档
(1－5)
——与所提供短文和开头语的衔接较差。
——写出内容太少，很少使用短文中标出的关键词语。
——语法结构单调，词汇项目很有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达。
——缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容不连贯。
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