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思维导图
环境描写的重要性
首先要明确的是，把主旨想清楚，时刻不忘“写景乃为主旨服务”这句话。如果景物与主旨无关，就是为写景而写景，就是无效的写景。
例如，大家看看我要传达出“高兴”与“悲伤”两种不同主旨时，该用下面哪种景物描写。
A. 花儿低着头，杨柳无精打采。
B. 花儿昂着头，杨柳摆动这枝条。
答案一目了然。
所以，景随主旨变。先确定主旨，然后来写景，这样才有效果。
通常情况下，传达出的情感好，则用褒义色彩的美好的、正向的词。传达出情感需要不好，则用贬义色彩的糟糕负面的词。大家看下面三例：
The wind was blwing dreadfully(恐怖地)。
The wind was blwing sftly（柔和地）。
The wind was blwing cmfrtably（舒服地）。
可以看出三句传达出什么样的情感吧。
第一种方法：“情景交融”法
用一个公式来表达就是：写景+感受
写景后，再添加一个明显的情感描写，就是指：有时在景物描写之后，加上一两句自己的情感态度。这样做的整体效果就是：情境交融。当然，如果你想造成“留白启发思考”的效果，那么就没有必要添加这种显性的情感态度描写了。
举个例子，大家记得2017年11月高考《健忘的妈妈》的故事续写吧。第一段可以用到下面三句：
That night we set up ur tent in a park.（那天晚上我们在公园里搭起帐篷。）
The mn was held up abve the sky, shining her smth and charming mnlight. （月亮被高举在天空的上方，照耀着她那光滑而迷人的月光。）
Twinkling stars were blinking（眨眼）, and fragrant（芬芳的）breeze（微风） gently blew.（闪烁的星星眨着眼，芬芳的微风轻轻地吹着。）
这个景物描写很精彩。但是如果后面在加一句：
Resting beside my mther, with hands held tightly by her, I feel the wrld is s beautiful.（躺在母亲身边，双手紧紧地握着母亲，我觉得这个世界是如此美丽。）
这样一加，就让“母亲”显现，就让“我与母亲关系和谐”的主旨就显现了。
再比如，下面两句景物描写：
第1句：The wind was hwling dreadfully and the rain was puring frm the heaven, whipping against the branches f lined（成排的） trees.
（风可怕地嚎叫，雨从天倾斜而来，拍打着成排的树枝。）
第2句：The wrld was laded with a sea f darkness（世界承载着一片海洋般的黑暗）.
这两句的后面，如果再加一句：
I was seized with the raring pwer f nature. A sense f hrrr creeping up n me. （我被自然发怒的力量抓住了。一种恐惧感悄悄爬到我身上。）
这样就进一步强调了自己的情感。
总之，根据凸显“情感”的需要，我们可以决定是不是该加一句显性的“情感表达”，来决定是不是呈现显性的“情景交融”。
第二种方法：比喻法
我们的环境描写还可以用比喻手法，用“like”即可，并交代、突出特点。如果总结成公式，那就是：
写景+比喻+特点
与大家分享的例子是一位美国作家的短篇小说The Whistle (寒笛)中的写景片段：
原文是：
Night fell. The darkness was thin, like sme sleazy dress that has been wrn and wrn fr many winters and always lets the cld thrugh t the bnes. Then the mn rse.
译文：
夜色降临, 暮色稀薄, 犹如穿过了数个冬季的敝衣, 难以抵御刺骨的严寒。而后月亮升起。
（sleazy 稀薄的， let.. thrugh 让...通过,类似pass thrugh）
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我们再来做句子分析：
这句话的核心句是：The darkness was thin，即：暮色稀薄。其他内容都是锦上添花的作用，就是让这个核心句子显得更加完整具体。怎么做到的呢？首先是用到了比喻：这里的 like.就起到了这个作用：“like sme sleazy dress”像是一条薄薄的裙子，将darkness比作薄薄的裙子还不够，还穿了好几个冬天(has been wrn and wrn fr many winters),冬天里穿裙子一定非常的寒冷。于是作者又加上了寒冷入骨(t the bnes)。如此，一个寒冷的夜晚(cld night)与一件不能御寒的敞衣相联系，内容可以如此丰富。
关于比喻，可能有些同学不是特别熟悉，再给大家一个例句：
A fire still fluttered in the grate (壁炉炉膛), ... like a bird trying t find its way ut f the rm.一团火还在壁炉炉膛里舞动着，就像一只挣脱束缚的鸟。
这句话里，把壁炉里跳动的火苗比作想挣脱束缚的鸟（find its way ut f the rm）。使“火苗”的描写更加生动。
我们再来上面提到的“薄雾”的例子，回忆一下公式：
写景+比喻+特点
如果说详细一点就是：
平平无奇的交代下自然现象+比喻（定语从句或非谓语修饰）+突出特点(冷得不得了)
学习读后续写，最快的方式，就是改编，仿写。我们一起来牛刀小试一下吧：如果我们要描写“雾”，应该怎么写呢？
The wind was blwing. The mist was getting thick, like a huge textured velvet clak, making what is hidden inside an unclear mystery.
风正在吹。雾越来越浓，像一件巨大的有质感的天鹅绒斗篷，把一切隐藏在模糊的神秘之中。
这句仿写的句子很好的get到了比喻的精髓，非常好的运用了“like”，textured velvet clak（有质感的天鹅绒斗篷），形象具体。非谓语making做状语，也着实炫了一下语法。既简洁描绘了景色，又营造了一种神秘、紧张的氛围。
素材积累
1. 人物动作的画面定格
They std there fr a mment, side by side, waiting fr the rushing hliday current and fr their place in it. Then the daughter glanced ver and mmentarily regarded her mther. And slwly, almst reluctantly, she placed her arm with apparently unaccustmed affectin arund her mther’s shulders and gently guided her back int the deluge. 她们并肩站在那里，等待着节日的浪潮，等待着她们在浪潮中的位置。 然后女儿扫了一眼，立刻注视着她的母亲。 慢慢地，几乎是不情愿地，带着明显不习惯的爱她把胳膊放在她母亲的肩膀上，轻轻地引导她回到洪水中。
His hard wrk paid ff! Hlding the sda tin firmly, Reuben rushed fr the shp t buy the brch. The mment he gt the beautiful brch, he burst thrugh the frnt dr and placed it in Dra’s hand. Never had Dra received such a gift. Speechless and happy, she held her sn tightly int her arms, with tears welling up in her eyes.他的努力得到了回报！鲁本紧紧地握着汽水罐，冲向商店去买胸针。他一拿到那枚漂亮的胸针，就冲进前门，把它放在朵拉的手里。多拉从来没有收到过这样的礼物。她高兴得说不出话来，紧紧地把儿子抱在怀里，眼泪涌了出来。
Standing beside the empty rad, they lked up int the sky, feeling the precius peace frm within.
站在空旷的道路旁，他们抬头仰望天空，从内心感受到珍贵的平和。
2. 特殊寓意的写景画面
The sky was a billin pure eyes f light and the grass green underft, it was as if night and day had becme ne beautiful mment. Dawn had cme. 天空像是一亿只纯净的眼睛拼接在一起，脚下是青草，仿佛黑夜和白昼已成为一个美丽的时刻。黎明已经来临。（黎明到来的画面）
Dawn sent shimmering rays ver the placid cean, bestwing a glden path frm the shre t the hrizn.黎明在平静的海面上放射出出闪闪发亮的光线，留下一条从海岸到地平线横亘而过的金色道路。（黎明到来的画面）
The crystal and cerulean water was gentle as I waded thrugh it, the sunset like range paint n a blue canvas.当我涉过水晶般天蓝色的轻柔的水时，日落就像蓝色画布上的橙色颜料。（美好日落时的画面）
The lingering sunlight was bliterated by the rapidly falling night，resembling a pitch-black curtain draped ver the sky.逗留在天际的最后一缕阳光被迅速落下的夜幕擦除，就像是天空被一层漆黑的幕布覆盖。（日落时的画面）
The mn under siege by stars seemed t lighten the night bringing frth stars that shne and hung in the blackness. The never ending blackness cnsumed everything.被群星围困的月亮似乎照亮了黑夜，带来了在黑暗中闪耀和悬挂着的群星。无尽的黑暗吞噬了一切。（描写夜空的画面）
Lking up, I saw the sun shine brighter than I ever knew befre. I saw a tree in the distance glisten gently as it reflected the sun's rays. My cnsciusness ebbed away with the heat. I tk a few blinks befre I landed with a thud. 抬头一看，我看到太阳比我以前所知道的还要明亮。我看见远处有一棵树反射着太阳光，发出柔和的光辉。我的意识随着热度而衰退。我眨了眨眼，然后摔倒在地才猛然回到现实中，恢复了知觉。（特殊寓意）
Dtted with glittering stars, the sky, midnight blue, gave the scene a fairytale quality. 缀满星光的天空，午夜的蓝色，给了这一场景一个童话般的质量。（神话般美丽的夜空画面）
The rain drummed n the windw, bidding farewell t the last beam f sunlight.雨水打着窗户，向最后一缕阳光告别。 （雨水来临的画面）
Kissed by the rain and glistening, the wet grund is cld under ft. A dense earthly sweet smell rises frm the grund, envelping everything within its sft embrace.潮湿的地面走起来很冷，被雨水亲吻后闪闪发光。一股浓郁的泥土般的香味从地上升起，把一切都包裹在它柔软的怀抱里。（雨后清新的画面）
The leaves crunched beneath my feet as I strlled dwn the street. Occasinally, ne wuld fall past me, lightly swaying as the air gently carried it t the grund. 我在街上漫步时，树叶在我脚下嘎吱作响。偶尔，有叶子会从我身边掉下来，轻轻地摇晃，缓缓落到到地面。（描写落叶的画面）

模拟演练
读后续写模拟专练01
读后续写 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Deep in the frest, my husband and I had climbing ver and crawling under the dwned trees that blcked the dirt path befre us. It was May, yet we walked up a snw-cvered hill. When we nticed ur jeans were wet up t ur knees, it did nt dampen ur spirits. Nt nce did we say, “let’s turn arund.” This was ur vacatin, and we were n an adventure. Little did we knw this was the beginning f many mre surprises.
The trail was marked as an easy ne-kilmeter hike, yet we were already walking a lng distance. Our lightheartedness stpped when we came ut int a clearing and saw a parking lt withut ur rental car in it. As my eyes scanned the surrundings, nthing lked familiar. My heart raced. I realized we were lst in a ntinal park that did nt fficially pen fr anther week.
Usually, I am the calm ne in the relatinship, but my husband surprised me with his calmness. This did nt cmfrt me; In fact, it heightened my fear. As we walked, I asked my husband t call fr help, but there was n cell-phne signal in this islated（偏僻的）area.
It was awfully quiet except fr ur ftsteps hitting the rad, and my heavy breathing. My husband suggested we cnserve energy and walk slwer. With each step n the rad, my feet and thighs hurt while my mind raced with thughts abut peple wh gt lst in the Canadian wds fr days.
My visin sharpened. I nticed everything arund me: the trees, rcks and snw. I thught we culd eat the snw n the grund in case we needed water. Fr the first time in my life, I was ready and willing t get a ride, but we did nt meet with a single car n the rad. Silently, I prayed multiple times. We fcused n each ther, made jint decisins and cnnected thrugh gratitude. We managed t stay n the main rad and walked straight n.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语己为你写好；
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My husband suddenly sptted a small building n a hill in the distance. ______________________________________________________________________________________
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Just then, a friendly wman appeared, saying, “Hell.”
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翻译小练习：
1. 我们很快就发现自己正朝着它前进。
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2. 在偏僻的地方找到这样一座大楼，我们充满了希望和兴奋。
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3. 我们摇摇晃晃地爬上山，好像所有的痛苦都消失了似的。
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4. 当我们走近时，一个牌子出现了，上面写着：行政办公室。
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5. 然而，它并没有对外开放。
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6. 空荡荡的大厅使我们一下子紧张起来。我们站在那里绝望地想知道下一步该怎么办。
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7. 我几乎抑制不住自己的热情，脱口而出：“我们迷路了！”
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8. 她安慰我们，给我们开了个房间休息一下。
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9. 看到我们又冷又饿，她用热巧克力招待我们。
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10. 看了地图后，我们发现我们的车停在三公里外。
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11. 她让我们搭便车回去，我们欣然接受了。
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12. 又看到我们租来的车，我松了一口气。有如此难忘的经历真是太幸运了！
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读后续写模拟专练02
读后续写 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was time t g hme. “Remember t wrk n yur class speeches fr hmewrk,” Miss Walker called, as everyne started talking and packing their schl bags. Jenny felt sick. She hated having t read alud in class. She was sure everyne gt really bred listening t her. Once, when Jenny was reading ut her hliday diary, Lee was even lking at his watch, a silver and blue ne which seemed just magical.
Jenny watched Lee walk ahead f her as they left schl. He seemed s clever, and he had a certain srt f shining cnfidence. He was just ne f thse peple wh were gd at everything. Jenny sighed. As she turned the crner, she saw Lee's watch lying right in the middle f the path.
Jenny knew she shuld just pick it up and return it t him, but she didn't want t run after him. Jenny bent dwn quickly, picked up the watch and ran hme. On arriving hme, Jenny put it n almst withut thinking. She was surprised it fitted s well. She walked t the mirrr and started practicing her speech. Wrds just flded ut f her. “I'm ging t talk abut swimming. I have been lucky. I've wn lts f cmpetitins. But when I'm in a race, I'm nt really thinking abut winning. I'm just lving the feeling f being in the water...”Jenny laughed with excitement. She walked acrss the rm. She suddenly seemed t have a certain srt f cnfidence. Turning back t the mirrr, Jenny saw a flash f light frm the watch in the glass. The flashes f silver seemed almst magical. S maybe Lee's watch really DID have smething magic.
The next day, as the lessn began, Miss Walker asked wh was ging t be brave and g first. N-bdy mved. Jenny slwly raised her arm. Befre Miss Walker culd say anything, there was a shut frm behind. “She's stlen my watch!” Lee said angrily,“ It went missing at schl yesterday.”
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语己为你写好；
Paragraph 1:
Everybdy was fixing their eyes n Jenny, waiting fr an explanatin.
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At that mment, Miss Walker smiled and asked the class t listen t Jenny's speech first.
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翻译小练习：
1. 珍妮把手表还给他，看着他，为自己的所作所为感到抱歉，低声说：“不，我没有偷你的‘魔法手表’。我昨天捡到的。但是……”
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2. 沃克斯小姐对珍妮说：“但你打算在演讲结束后把那只“魔法手表”还回去，对吗？
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3. 我相信你会喜欢的。既然你还了表。让我们把注意力集中在你的演讲上吧，勇敢的姑娘。”
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4. 珍妮向她点点头，在心里重复着“我相信你……勇敢的女孩”这几个字。
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5. 珍妮心想：“至少沃克小姐相信我，至少我是个勇敢的女孩。”
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6. 她鼓足勇气站在全班同学面前，带着沃克小姐鼓舞人心的微笑和句子。
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7. 她的话又涌了出来。
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8. 珍妮甚至连“魔法手表”都没有。她逐渐明白，只有信念，才有信心。
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