高考英语书面表达读后续写公开课

这是一份高考英语书面表达读后续写公开课，共42页。PPT课件主要包含了如何构思续写的内容，读后续写的高分攻略，读后续写的具体要求，Elements等内容，欢迎下载使用。

提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。
Step 1 Read fr elements
Step 2 Read fr plts
Step 3 Gather ideas
Step 4 Make predictins
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 Steve was the mst amazing persn in all f Minneaplis, and he was my cusin. By the age f 19, Steve was a star baseball player at the University f Minnesta. I wanted t be exactly like him. S when Steve asked me t g with him n a spring fishing trip in nrthern Minnesta, I was excited! After planning the trip, we gathered clthes and supplies, and began ur great adventure. We reached the Superir Natinal Frest in nrthern Minnesta by early evening. On ur way t the campsite, Steve pinted t a small huse faraway in ne f the muntains, saying that it was the ranger statin (护林站) where the frester wrked.
Finally, after a lng walk, we reached the campsite and set up the camp as the sun was setting. Steve knew all the tricks f an experienced wilderness camper. After we gathered enugh wd frm the frest, he started the campfire using nly stne and steel — n matches. Fr supper we feasted n freeze-dried beef, wild rice and pea sup. I ate greedily after all that wrk. Tired enugh, we climbed int ur sleeping bags early and talked abut ur plans fr fishing the next day. We were still talking quietly when a sudden nrth wind picked up; the temperature drpped and it began t snw. Steve fund a way t increase the temperature inside the tent. He dragged a lg frm the frest t the ppsite side f the campfire. Then he wrapped aluminum fil (铝箔) arund the lg. The heat frm the fire reflected ff the fil and int the tent. Sn images f lake fish were filling my dreams.
The snw had stpped, but smetime later a pwerful wind must have kicked up the flames f ur dying fire. I was suddenly awakened by Steve. Our tent was n fire. Frightened, I ran ut f the tent immediately. The tent cllapsed (倒塌) with Steve inside. Withut any thught f endangering myself, I reached int the burning tent and pulled him t the icy lake. Frtunately, we were nt seriusly hurt.注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；2. 至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1: Later, as we std by the burning tent t keep warm, we cnsidered ur difficult situatin. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph 2: Suddenly, we heard a nise in the frest. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Step 1 Read fr elements
I, Steve, frester
In spring
In a frest
An adventurus fishing trip
Step 2 Read fr plts
Beginning (character and setting)
Climax (the main prblem r cnflict)
Ending (a time t slve the prblem / hw things end up)
Stry Muntain
1. Steve asked me t g n a spring fishing trip.2. We reached the campsite and set up the camp. 3. Our tent was n fire and we escaped t the icy lake.4. ?
Step 3 Gather ideas
体裁：记叙文时态：一般过去时原文核心信息解读：“我”和表哥去森林里露营，夜里下起了雪，天很冷，表哥生起了篝火，“我们”在温暖中入睡了。睡着后，帐篷起火了，“我们”匆忙逃了出来，但帐篷烧毁了……
Step 4 Make predictins
可用于续写的已知信息：
“我们”在荒芜人烟的森林深处，孤立无援，随身物品也都随着帐篷一起烧毁了，正当不知道该怎么办的时候，林中传来了声响，发现是护林人开着车过来了。原来护林人看到了火光，过来一探究竟，结果“我们”得救了。
文章中出现过frester (护林人)，这是极其有用的信息，另外根据常识可知，护林人最重要的工作之一就是侦查火情，所以森林中有火情的话，护林人一定会一探究竟。
One pssible versin:
Paragraph 1: Later, as we std by the burning tent t keep warm, we cnsidered ur difficult situatin. Our campsite was in the deep f the frest, really far away frm the highway. We were in the middle f nwhere, wearing nly underwear, with ur supplies burnt int ashes, including ur cellphnes. Even Steve was unsure what t d next. The nly thing we culd d was just sit in the cld air and wnder hw t get ut f the frest.
Paragraph 2:
Suddenly, we heard a nise in the frest. Anxiusly we listened and stared int the darkness. A jeep appeared. A frester had sptted the light frm the fire and had cme t have a check. We jumped int the warm vehicle and the frester drve us t the ranger statin, where we were given clthes and were able t call ur parents. Steve and I had many mre camping adventures frm then n, but it was n this trip that Steve began t treat me mre like a friend rather than a yunger cusin. Our friendship cntinues t this day.
第五档：21分-25分第四档：16分-20分第三档：11分-15分第二档：6分-10分第一档：1分-5分
第五档： 21分-25分
与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富，准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。内容比较丰富，应用了5个以上短文所标出的关键词语。所使用的语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达。比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
第四档： 16分-20分
第三档（11分-15分）
与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接；写出了若干有关内容，应用了4个以上短文中标出的关键词语；应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义的表达；应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。
第二档（6分-10分）
与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接；写出了一些有关内容，应用了3个以上短文中标出的关键词语；语法结构单调、词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达；较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。
第一档（1分-5分）
与所给短文和开头语的衔接较差；产出内容太少，很少使用短文中标出的关键词语；语法结构单调、词汇项目很有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达；缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容不连贯。
一、书写潦草，卷面涂改；二、上下文的连贯性差；三、错词错句多，好词好句少；四、没有丰富和生动的细节推动情节的发展；五、与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度差；六、没有使用5个或5个以上原文中的划线词语，没有划出所 用的划线词语。
Tip 1: 故事要围绕着主要人物展开。
Tip 2: 详细刻画角色及其情感。
Tip 4: 使用恰当的修饰词以使描写更加生动。
Tip 3: 使用恰当的衔接词以使故事更有连贯性。
Tip 5: 做到首尾呼应以使故事更加有条理。
Tip 6: 确保第二段和第一段的衔接有逻辑。
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tm, had driven three hurs t camp vernight by a lake in the frest. Unfrtunately, n the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started t quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was s angry that she said t Tm, “I’m ging t find a better spt fr us t camp” and walked away. With n path t fllw, Jane just walked n fr quite a lng time. After she had climbed t a high place, she turned
arund, hping t see the lake. T her surprise, she saw nthing but frest and, far beynd, a snwcapped muntain tp. She suddenly realized that she was lst. “Tm!” she cried. “Help!” N reply. If nly she had nt left her mbile phne in that bag with Tm. Jane kept mving, but the farther she walked, the mre cnfused she became. As night was beginning t fall, Jane was s tired that she had t stp fr the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much t be with Tm and her family. She wanted t hld him and tell him hw much she lved him. Jane rse at the break f day, hungry and thirsty. She culd
hear water trickling (滴落) smewhere at a distance. Quickly she fllwed the sund t a stream. T her great jy, she als saw sme berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling strnger nw, Jane began t walk alng the stream and hpe it wuld lead her t the lake. As she picked her way carefully alng the stream, Jane heard a helicpter. Is that fr me? Unfrtunately, the trees made it impssible fr peple t see her frm abve. A few minutes later, anther helicpter flew verhead. Jane tk ff her yellw bluse, thinking that she shuld g t an pen area and flag them if they came back again.
注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1：    But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again. ____________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2：    It was daybreak when Jane wke up. __________________________________________________________
The underlined wrds
Character: Tm, JaneSetting: yellw huse, stream, lake, helicpter, at a distanceActin: walked, climbedMd: t her great jy
quarrel吵架，生气离开
(helicpters)
rescued? 被救？
cnfused，tired
细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻辑关系；围绕划定的10个关键词，合理创新故事情节。
Para. 1: But n mre helicpters came and it was dark.  续写部分：简当时的感受？ 简是如何过夜的？ 简睡着了吗？Para. 2: It was daybreak when Jane wke up. 续写部分：简获救了吗？ 谁救了简？ 怎么救的？ 她当时的感受？
一、所续写短文的词数应为150左右（词数少于130的， 从总分中减去2分）；二、应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语，少用1 个扣1分，少用2个扣2分，少用3到4个扣3分；三、续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语， 少划1个不扣分，少划2个到3个扣1分，少划4个扣2分。
But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again. Feeling disappinted, Jane had t stay alne fr anther night. After walking a lng distance again, it ccurred t her that she had a bx f matches with her. She was wild with jy and used them t burn sme branches s that she culd get sme warmth. Staring at the jumping fire, Jane thught f all the things that she and Tm had experienced tgether. Only in this way culd Jane feel better and fall asleep. 　　
It was daybreak when Jane wke up. Feeling refreshed, she cntinued t walk alng the stream t find the way ut. At nn, t her great jy, she finally caught sight f a wide water surface at a distance. It was the lake! Als she sptted a crew f plicemen seeking alng the bank! It seemed that they als sptted her because they were mving twards her! It was Tm wh called the plice. Finally, they led her t her husband. And the minute they met, they hugged tgether firmly as if they wuld never separate again. They gt hme and have led a happy life ever since.
该文为最高档五档作文22分。第一、续写部分和原文及首句的融合度高。第一段开头Jane had t stay alne fr anther night一句中的anther night说明作者理解了原文中Jane已经度过了一夜的事实，又为下文她睡着了埋下了伏笔，从而和第二段又衔接上了。第二段开头作者说，Jane感觉精力恢复了，与段首所说的醒来呼应。
第二、该文内容丰富。增加了a bx f matches和jumping fire，极有画面感；同时，在第二段，Jane看到了平静的湖面、警方的活动和他们见面后的喜悦等细节都描写得很生动。另外，在情节的推进方面，作者在第一段续写“生火”和第二段续写的开头“继续前行”使故事复杂化，然后完成故事（看到湖面、警察和Tm）。