【期末百题复习】2022-2023学年 人教版英语 九年级上学期：专题10-书面表达精练精析14篇

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专题10 书面表达精练精析14篇
1． 在即将举行的中学生国际文化交流活动中，你将代表学校介绍中国的传统节日，请你从所给的卡片中任选一张，用英语写一篇发言稿，介绍该节日。
The Spring Feitival
☆Time：in January or February
☆Activities: welcome the new year, visit relatives, got together…
☆Meaning: the biggest day of year, a new start…
The Mid-Autumn Festival
☆Time：in September or October
☆Activities: express wishes and hopes, have mooncakes, enjoy the moon…
☆Meaning: symbol of being together, missing family members far away…
注意：1. 发言稿中必须包含卡片上的信息，并适当发挥；
2. 文中不得出现真实姓名、学校名称等信息；
3. 词数80左右；
4. 文章的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Ladies and Gentlemen,
Welcome to the Chinese culture tour. ___________________________________________________
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That’s all. Thanks for listening.

2． 毕业之际，学校要举办一场毕业生告别晚会。假如你是九年级一班的李明，将代表班级在会上发言。请结合内容提示写一篇80~100词的发言稿。
提示：1. How are you feeling while giving the speech？
2. Who do you want to say thanks to？
3. Why do you want to thank them？
4. Your wishes for the future.
要求：1.语言通顺，要点齐全，意思连贯，条理清楚，书写规范；
2.文中不得出现真实的姓名和学校名称；
3.文章开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear teachers and classmates，
I'm Li Ming from Class 1，Grade 9. __________________________________________________
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That's all. Thank you.

3． 请仔细观察下面的图片，并根据所给提示和要求写一篇短文。
提示：（1）What are the man and the woman doing?
（2）What should you do when you see people litter like this? Why?
要求：（1）短文须包括所有提示内容，可适当发挥。
（2）短文中不要出现真实的地名、校名和人名。

（3）词数80个左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
参考词汇：throw, environment, civilized(文明的

I can see a man and a woman in the picture. The man is______________________________________
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4．先阅读下面表格中所给的信息，然后写一篇80词左右的英语短文介绍三人喜欢去的地方。（开头已给出，不计入总词数）
Persons
Places
Advantages
Disadvantages
I
library
quiet, read books
not enough seats on Sundays
Tom
supermarket
convenient, inexpensive
sometimes too many people, have to wait for a long time
Molly
mall
relaxing, fascinating
crowded, noisy

Different people like to go to different places. _____________________________________________
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5．初中生活中，你有些什么改变？你是怎样改变的？请以“How I Have Changed”为题写一篇英语小短文，描述你发生的变化。写作内容包括兴趣爱好、行为习惯、学习习惯等方面。
要求：1.80词左右；
2．任选两方面内容；
3．语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁；
4．文中不得使用你的真实姓名、校名。
How I Have Changed
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6．请根据下列提示写一篇短文。词数：80左右。
提示：1.今天是Millie的生日。Millie的妈妈给她买了一件白衬衫、一条粉红色短裙和一双白色的鞋子。
2.衬衫是丝绸的，产自杭州，穿起来很舒服。裙子是棉的，鞋是皮革的，都产自上海。衬衫和鞋很相配。
3.Millie很喜欢它们。穿上它们，她看起来很漂亮、很时髦。
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7． 为了配合“足球进校园”活动，你们班开展了一次主题班会。请你以足球迷的身份，根据下列表格中的要点提示，用英语向同学们介绍足球这项运动并谈谈自己的梦想。
常 识

历史悠久，深受喜爱
世界杯4年举行一次

好 处

男生女生皆可参加
利于培养团队精神
考生自拟(至少1点)

偶 像

梅西，有足球天赋

梦 想

考生自拟(至少1点)

注意：1. 词数90左右。短文的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数；
1.短文须包括所有要点，不要逐词翻译，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺；
2.短文中不得真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
参考词汇：梅西 Messi
Dear classmates,
I’m very excited to hear that China will build 20,000 football-themed schools by 2020. ____________
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8．中西方的饮食习惯大不相同。请写一篇80词左右的短文，介绍一些差异。
要点提示：1. different food
2. What do westerners use when they are eating? What about Chinese people?
3. eating etiquette（like whether people can make a loud noise when eating...）
词语提示：differences，prefer，steak（牛排），make a loud noise，impolite...
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9．(2017﹒北京)宽容是一种美德。人与人之间难免会有磕磕绊绊。面对矛盾，多一份包容和谅解，生活就会多一缕阳光。
某英文网站正在开展以＂包容、谅解＂为主题的征文活动。假如你是李华，请用英语写一篇短文投稿，谈谈生活中你原谅他人的一次经历，主要内容包括：你们之间发生了什么，你为什么原谅对方，以及原谅对方之后的感受。
提示词语：hurt, realize, forgive（原谅）, happy
提示问题：What happened between you and him/her?
Why did you decide to forgive him/her?
How did you feel after forgiving him/her?
I still remember what happened between _________________________________________________
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10． 假定你是李平(Tel:1361234567),家住滨海市人民路1号。你在美国旅行期间不慎遗失钱包,曾向宾馆询问。以下是宾馆的答复邮件,请你阅读后进行回复,词数80左右。
From: Mr. Smith, hotel manager
Hi Li Ping,
Thank you for your email about your lost wallet.
Please send me some more information. When did you stay in our hotel and what room were you in? Please describe your wallet. What was in it? Send me your address and phone number.
All the best，
Mr. Smith

To Mr. Smith
Subject: Lost wallet
Dear Mr. Smith,
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Yours,
Li Ping
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11．俗话说：“国有国法，家有家规。”为了使子女身心健康、顺利成长，使家庭成员之间的关系更融洽、更和谐，每个家庭都会有这样或那样的家庭规矩。比如：必须按时回家，不准玩电脑游戏等。请你结合你家的实际情况，根据下面的提示和要求，以“My family rules”为题，写一篇短文。
提示：1. 家里有哪些家规； 2. 对家规的感受； 3. 对父母的建议。
要求：词数100左右。
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12．你喜欢音乐吗?请用英语写一篇短文，谈谈你喜欢的音乐及音乐人，并说明理由。
要求：1. 用两到三个定语从句； 2. 条理清楚，语句通顺，80词左右。
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13．生活中有许多美好的事情值得回忆。你的美好回忆是什么？它是怎么发生的？请以＂My sweet memory＂为题写一篇英语短文描述一下吧。
注意：
1. 80词左右；
2. 文中不得出现真实的姓名和校名。
My sweet memory
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14．假如你是Jim，正在美国学习。你的中国朋友Li Ping在学习英语过程中遇到了一些困难，向你求助，请你给他写一封电子邮件，介绍一些你学英语的方法，并鼓励他一定要动脑学，别放弃。
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参考答案
1．Ladies and gentlemen,
Welcome to the Chinese culture tour. Now allow me to introduce one of the Chinese traditional festivals, the Mid-Autumn Festival.
The Mid-Autumn Festival usually falls in September or October when the moon appears the biggest and the brightest in the year.
During the festival, Chinese people sit around the table with their family members and enjoy mooncakes as well as the beautiful moon. People believe that the round mooncakes and a full moon are symbols of being together. When seeing them, people will miss their family members far away. At the same time, they will express wishes and hopes for them. Does it sound interesting?
That’s all. Thanks for listening.
【详解】
发言稿首先对到来的游客表示欢迎。第二句从总的方面介绍中国传统节日—the Mid-Autumn Festival.中秋节。接下来介绍中秋节在一年中的时间，大自然现象。第二段介绍中国人在中秋节期间的活动：围坐在一起赏月，代表团圆。最后对于听众表达感谢。通篇语言通顺，长短句搭配得体，句子优美，主要运用一般现在时态，符合语境。口语化符合演讲稿要求。
2．Dear teachers and classmates，
I'm Li Ming from Class 1，Grade 9.I'm a bit nervous but very proud to speak at the school leavers' party.
First，I'd like to thank our teachers. We have learned a lot from you. You've developed our interests，skills and made us grow up happily. You'll always be our role models.
Next，I should thank my classmates. We've studied together，helped each other and had a lot of fun. Soon we will go to new schools and we may not see each other so often in the future. But I believe our friendship will last forever.
Wish you all success and good luck in the future.
That's all. Thank you.
【详解】
1. 题干解读：本文是一篇应用文，写一篇发言稿。通过审题了解写作的主要内容：假如你是九年级一班的李明，将代表班级在学校举办的毕业生告别晚会上发言，题目是“My speech at the school leavers’party”，根据提示可知本发言稿包括四个方面的内容，缺一不可，同时要注意发言稿的格式；文章侧重于老师等人对于学生现在造成的影响，要感谢他们，所以主要的时态应该用现在完成时，可以夹杂少量的其他时态如一般现在时，对于未来的愿望可以用一般将来时等；人称为第一人称。注意文中不得出现真实的姓名和学校名称。
2. 例文点评：例文采用四段式，第1段自我介绍，第2和3段表示感谢老师和同学，第4段表达祝愿。本文格式正确，时态使用准确，表达清楚连贯，特别使用了表达顺序的词（First，Next，）使文章具有条理性。
高分亮点：
本文使用的短语：learn a lot from/make sb. do sth. / grow up /help each other /have a lot of fun/ Wish sb. success and good luck/ in the future/would like等。
多种时态是正确使用：1.一般现在时，例如，I'm a bit nervous but very proud to speak at the school leavers' party.；2.现在完成时，例如，We have learned a lot from you.；3. 一般将来时，例如，You'll always be our role models.
表达建议和祝愿的句型：I should thank my classmates./ Wish you all success and good luck in the future.。
【点睛】
书面表达要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。语言要规范，时态运用要正确，叙述清楚条里，学习中注意总结，牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章的表达更有逻辑性，更富有条理。注意书写的规范：大小写、标点符号等的正确运用。注意检查：单词拼写、语法、动词时态、语序、主谓一致等。写作六步法：1.审题：文体，时态，人称。2.抓住要点：要点是否齐全，适当补充。3.扩充句子：通过增加状语，定语，连词，使句子意思饱满充实。4.连句成文，合理使用连词。5.改正错误：拼写是否错误，语法时态是否正确，连词是否恰当等。6.誊写作文：注意书写工整美观整洁。
3．I can see a man and a woman in the picture. The man is throwing his rubbish in the public place.The other woman is stopping him and telling him to put it into the dustbin.The city is our home. We should protect it. Therefore, when we see someone litter like this, we should act like the woman.The environment should be protected by everybody.We should be civilized citizens.
【详解】
亮点说明：这篇习作的层次清晰，内容饱满，表达流畅。文中使用了非常好的短语，例如in the picture，in the public place，the other woman，put it into the dustbin，like this。而I can see a man and a woman in the picture./ We should protect it./ We should be civilized citizens.等多种情态动词句式it is important for everyone to protect them.的运用，丰富了习作内容，使表达多样，是本文的最大亮点。
点睛：书面表达题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥的作文。它要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。所以，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。
4．Different people like to go to different places. I like to go to the library, because it is quiet and I can read all kinds of books there. But there are not enough seats on Sundays. Shopping in the supermarket is convenient and inexpensive, so Tom likes shopping there. But sometimes there are too many people and he says he has to wait for a long time to pay. Molly likes shopping in the mall. Though it is usually crowded and noisy, she thinks it is relaxing and fascinating.
【详解】
1.题干解读：这是一篇材料作文。在写作时应承接短文开头，主要介绍I, Tom and Molly三人去的不同地方，分别说出三个地方的有利条件及不利因素。
2.例文点评：例文时态采用一般现在时为主，重点介绍图书馆、超市和商场三个地方的有利条件及不利因素。叙述时避免汉语式英语，句意正确，条理清晰。
3.高分亮点：
短语：all kinds of；enough seats；on Sundays；too many；wait for；a long time；in the mall。
句型：there be句型；because引导的原因状语从句；though引导的让步状语从句。
5．How I Have Changed
How time flies！Three years has quickly passed.And I have changed a lot during these years.
On one hand，I wasn't good at English at first.When my English teacher learnt about that，she taught me how to memorize new words and to read as many passages as possible.Soon I made great progress and became interested in English.
On the other hand，in my first year，I was too weak to do much exercise.But with the help of the teachers and classmates，I do exercise whenever I am free.And now I can run very fast and I'm also good at playing basketball like other boys.
Thanks to the middle school life，I have changed so much！Thanks to the teachers and classmates，I have learnt so much！Never will I forget the valuable middle school life!
【解析】
这是一篇给材料作文，介绍初中生活中我发生的变化。结合所给材料，可知本文主要考查一般过去时和一般现在时，人称为单数第一人称，注意主谓一致问题，句子结构主要为系表结构和动宾结构，注意一些常见句式的应用，比如：I wasn't good at……，I was too weak to……，I can……，I have learnt……等句式的应用。写作中注意运用代词，注意多种句式交替运用。写作中注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系。
点睛：本文结构紧凑，语言简练。开头介绍了三年飞逝，我发生了很多变化，接下来介绍我具体的变化：兴趣爱好、行为习惯、学习习惯等方面，最后我将不会忘记珍贵的中学生活。此处be good at, learn about, as…..as possible, on one hand, on the other hand, with the help of, thanks to等这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。
6．例文
Today is Millie’s birthday. Millie’s mom bought her a white blouse, a pink skirt and a pair of white shoes. The blouse is made of silk. It was made in Hangzhou. It’s comfortable to wear. The skirt is made of cotton and the shoes are made of leather. They were both made in Shanghai. The blouse matches the shoes very well. Millie likes them very much. She looks pretty and modern on them.
【详解】
1.题干解读：这个一篇提纲作文，介绍了Millie的生日，根据所给材料写出正确的短文。
2.例文点评：这些要点构成写作的基本框架。我们要做的就是用正确的英语把要点表达出来，并适当发挥想象说出自己的观点。动笔前要认真阅读材料，不要遗漏要点，并适当发挥。根据材料内容可知本文主要是用一般现在时态和一般过去时态来写，要注意主谓一致等问题。写作中要适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。
3.高分亮点：
短语：buy sb. sth.；be made of；be made in；looks pretty and modern。
句型：It was made in Hangzhou. It’s comfortable to wear.； The skirt is made of cotton and the shoes are made of leather.。
7．Dear classmates，
I’m very excited to hear that China will build 20，000 football-themed schools by 2020．
Football has a very long history．It is liked by people all over the world．The World Cup takes place every four years．Playing football has lots of advantages．First，both boys and girls can take part in it．Second，it helps develop team spirit．What’s more，playing football is good for our health．
I’m a football fan．Messi is my hero．He has a gift for playing football．My dream is to become a famous football player like Messi．I hope China will hold the World Cup some day．
Thank you for your attention．
【详解】
试题分析：本题要求按提纲的提示，介绍足球运动并谈谈自己的梦想。要求仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确本文主要从三个方面来写：介绍足球运动及其好处；说说自己的偶像；谈谈自己的梦想。要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写。根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；语言表达要符合英语习惯。
写作亮点：本文语言精炼，像第二自然段的Football has a very long history. It is liked by people all over the world. The World Cup takes place every four years. it helps develop team spirit. What’s more, playing football is good for our health. 等等句子，简洁，但是句意表达清楚；同时，本文用了被动语态、动名词作主语、不定式作表语等等语法形式，使表达生动；用了first, second等使得短文层次清楚。
8．There are many differences in eating habits between China and Western countries.
Firstly，Chinese people like rice，noodles，vegetables and meat while Western people prefer bread，milk，salad and steak. Secondly，westerners are used to eating with knives and forks，but the Chinese eat with chopsticks. Thirdly，westerners don't make a loud noise during meals. They think it is impolite. But it is common for the Chinese to talk with their family and friends while having dinner.
【详解】
1.题干解读：本题要求介绍中西方饮食习惯的异同，属于说明文写作。作者开篇就明确中国和西方国家在饮食习惯上有很多不同；然后分三点介绍中西饮食文化的区别。
2.例文点评：这篇习作共有二段，是“总分”结构。用第三人称展开叙述，时态是一般现在时。内容充实，区别明确，结构完整，表达条理，是一篇优秀的习作。
3.高分亮点：
短语：between … and, be used to doing, with knives and forks, make a loud noise, to talk with, have dinner.
句型：Secondly, westerners are used to eating with knives and forks, but the Chinese eat with chopsticks.（并列结构）
Chinese people like rice, noodles, vegetables and meat while Western people prefer bread, milk, salad and steak.（时间状语从句）
They think it is impolite.（宾语从句）
But it is common for the Chinese to talk with their family and friends while having dinner.（固定句型）
【点睛】
书面表达题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥的作文。它要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。所以，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。
9．I still remember what happened between me and Tom. Yesterday, I had a fight with my friend Tom. He took away my pen without my agreement. My father bought it for me last year, and I like it very much. His behavior hurt me. I was very angry. For his sorry, he wrote a card:＂Sorry, please forgive me＂. He felt ashamed for what he did. At last I realized that I was too stingy. I choose to forgive him. He was very happy for my forgiveness. I was very happy, too. Through this matter, we became good friends.
As the Chinese old saying goes＂To err is human＂. In our whole long life, I believe, nobody can make no mistakes. Children may broke bowls, students may cheat or do something against the teacher, and grown-ups may do something wrong on their work or even something against the law. Keeping something unpleasant in mind does no good to us. Letting the unhappy matters go brings happiness and pleasure back to our life.
【解析】
试题分析：本文属于话题类作文，话题是“包容、谅解”。主要关于个人经历的，需要考生写出谅解他人的经历，具体内容围绕以下三个方面：1.你们之间发生了什么事？2.你为什么决定原谅他（她）？3.谈谈你原谅他（她）之后的感受。仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点。考生需要从三个方面作答，指出原谅对方的一件事情，原谅的原因以及原谅之后的感受。根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；语言表达要符合英语习惯。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。
【亮点说明】：这是一篇比较优秀的作文，本文很好地完成了试题规定的任务。覆盖所有内容要点；语言表达要符合英语习惯，准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，用词准确、句子通顺、行文连贯。首先指出原谅的对象，“I still remember what happened between me and Tom.”
接着详细描述发生的事情，先指出矛盾点，“Yesterday ,I had a fight with my friend Tom.He took away my pen without my agreement…..” 然后，描述转折点，是他认识了错误，给我道歉For his sorry,he wrote a card:”Sorry ,please forgive me” .He felt ashamed for what he do. 事情发展的最后，我原谅了朋友并拥抱和好，“I choose to forgive him.He was very happy for my forgiveness.I was very happy,too.Through this matter,we became good friends..”最后描述自己的感悟As the Chinese old saying ….. Letting the unhappy matters go brings happiness and pleasure back to our life.
10．Dear Mr. smith,
Thank you so much for your reply. I stayed in your hotel on July 6, in Room 106, and I remember having left my new black wallet on the table. My ID card, two credit cards, as well as a 100-dollar bill, are in my wallet. Would you be kind enough to send me the wallet to No. I Renmin Road, Binhai, China by mail if you find it? Please call me on my phone number 1361234567 if needed.
Thanks again. (80词)
Yours,
Li Ping
【解析】本文是书信类文章，要求根据已有的邮件写一封回信，信的开头和结尾已经给出。因为要求是根据邮件进行回复，所以考生需要对来信的内容很好的审核，每个问题都需要回复。作文结构为：感谢回复-清晰回答相关问题-提出归还请求-再次感谢。
写作时一定要注意信件的格式，行文要连贯，表达要清楚；同时要注意语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯；注意不要犯语法、句法以及搭配性错误；要使用自己有把握的句式、单词，词汇、句式要丰富多样，避免句式单一。最后检查所用时态、人称是否符合要求；检查段落是否完整，句子表达是否准确，语法、拼写、标点、移行、大小写等方面是否有误等。
11．例文
My family rules
My parents are very strict with me，and they have made some basic rules that I must obey. Firstly，I must get home and finish my homework on time after school. Secondly，I cannot play computer games，even in my free time. Thirdly，I have to do some chores，such as making the bed and tidying my bedroom. If I break one of them，I will be punished. But thanks to these rules，I can live a healthy and regular life.
I think the second rule is unfair to me. I hope sometimes I could be allowed to play computer games for a while. It will make me relaxed.
【详解】
1.题干解读：该题目属于记叙文写作，请你结合你家的实际情况，根据下面的提示和要求，以“My family rules”为题，写一篇短文。提示：1. 家里有哪些家规； 2. 对家规的感受； 3. 对父母的建议。要求：词数100左右。第二段叙述“守株待兔”这一故事；第三段概括故事寓意并结尾。
2.例文点评：例文采用第一人称来叙述故事内容；时态采用一般现在时为主。这篇文章语言规范，叙事清楚，时态运用正确，叙述清楚条里，语句通顺，意思连贯，特别适用了表示先后顺序的词（First, Secondly, Thirdly）使文章更具条理性，思维缜密。
3.高分亮点：
短语：are very strict with；after school；play computer games；such as；make me relaxed。
句型： 定语从句they have made some basic rules that I must obey.条件状语从句If I break one of them，I will be punished.宾语从句I hope sometimes I could be allowed to play computer games for a while.
【点睛】
这篇文章语言规范，叙事清楚，时态运用正确，叙述清楚条里，语句通顺，意思连贯，特别适用了表示先后顺序的词（First, Secondly, Thirdly）使文章更具条理性，思维缜密。（1）学习中注意总结，牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章的表达更有逻辑性，更富有条理。（2）列好提纲和要点及需要的重要短语或句型。（3）切忌堆砌词语、句子，注意运用适当的连词使句子流畅、连贯。注意表达的顺序。 （4）注意书写的规范：大小写、标点符号等的正确运用。 （5）注意检查：单词拼写、语法、动词时态、语序、主谓一致等。
12．例文
After a day's study，I always listen to music to relax myself. I like music that is quiet and gentle，so my favorite music is country music. It is quite great. It has great lyrics. My favorite singer is John Denver who can sing the words clearly. He is well-known in the world. You can listen to his music at night with your light on in the bedroom. I like him because his music reminds me of wonderful love.
【详解】
1.题干解读：本题要求写喜欢的音乐及音乐人，属于记叙文写作。作者开篇就明确对音乐的喜爱I always listen to music to relax myself；然后介绍自己喜欢的音乐及音乐人；最后照应开头，重申学生在日常生活中应该经常分担家务。
2.例文点评：这篇习作虽然只有一段，但结构清晰，是“总分”结构。用第一和第三人称展开叙述，时态是一般现在时。内容充实，理由明确，结构完整，表达条理，是一篇优秀的习作。
3.高分亮点：
短语：listen to music, relax myself, country music, be well-known, in the world, at night, in the bedroom, remind sb. of sth.
句型：After a day's study，I always listen to music to relax myself.（非谓语动词结构）
I like music that is quiet and gentle，so my favorite music is country music.（复杂状语从句结构）
My favorite singer is John Denver who can sing the words clearly.（定语从句）
I like him because his music reminds me of wonderful love.（原因状语从句）
【点睛】
书面表达题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥的作文。它要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。所以，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。
13．My sweet memory
My 14 - year- old birthday left me a sweet memory.
The classroom seemed empty when I entered it that morning. Suddenly my classmates stood up from below the desks almost at the same time, and they sang a happy birthday song to me together.  “Happy Birthday to you!” and best wishes from my classmates and teachers appeared on the screen.  What a big surprise! I was moved to tears. That moment was fixed in my mind forever.
【解析】
试题分析：本篇书面表达以“My sweet memory”为题，结合本题所给的写作信息，阐述 “你的美好回忆是什么？它是怎么发生的？”。根据内容提示可知本文应运用一般过去时态，注意一些常见句式的应用。写作中注意连词、固定短语的交替使用，使文意连接紧密，还要注意使用丰富的语句，注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系，最后最好要表达出自己的感想和看法。
写作亮点：本文结构紧凑，语言简练。文中14 - year- old birthday，at the same time, best wishes，on the screen, and, in my mind 等词（组）恰当使用，使上下文意连接紧密；文中还多处使用了并列句、时间状语从句、感叹句、被动句等，语句丰富，大大增加了信息的容量，使文章增色不少，值得学习。
14．Dear Li Ping,
I’m glad to help you. Here is my advice on learning English.
To improve your listening, I think you should do more listening exercise. You can learn new words and sentences by listening to tapes or watching English movies. As for grammar, you can try to improve it by reading. You’d better take notes when you read textbooks, English stories, magazines and newspapers. I think that will help you a lot. And don’t be afraid to speak English. You should do more speaking practice. It’s a good idea to join an English club. Remember that the best way to learn English is to use it.
I suggest that you should learn English wisely instead of memorizing words only. Please try it and don’t give up. I hope my advice will help you.
【详解】
1.题干解读：该题目属于应用文写作，按照邮件的格式书写。写作分为三段式，第一段表达很高兴能够帮助你，第二段具体介绍英语学习的方法，最后一段对他进行鼓励并希望他取得进步。
2.写作指导：本文使用一般现在时，针对英语学习方面的建议进行叙述。通过听力、语法以及说英语方面进行详细地阐述。切记不要遗漏要点，可以适当增加情节使行文连贯。