2023届高考英语二轮复习书面表达金课读后续写课件

这是一份2023届高考英语二轮复习书面表达金课读后续写课件，共60页。PPT课件主要包含了走 近 阅 卷，阅 卷 演 练，写 作 一，写 作 二，写 作 三，写 作 四，读懂文章，How，典例分析等内容，欢迎下载使用。
析阅卷标准 明答题思路
根据所给的一段约350词的语言材料和段落的开头语进行约150词的续写，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。 提供的短文，多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。 就目前已考过的读后续写来看，都属于“prblem-slving”的思路。
prblem-slving
1. 续写部分与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；2. 内容的丰富性和对文章关键词语的覆盖情况；3. 应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；4. 上下文的连贯性。
阅卷时主要考虑以下内容
读后续写是一种将阅读与写作紧密结合的考查形式，可以说是 。主要考查以下四个方面的能力：1. 迅速获取文章主题（theme）、关键信息（5W1H）、语言特色的能力。2. 语篇建构能力。3. 创造性思维。4. 语言运用的准确性与丰富性。
what, when, where, wh, why, hw等
明确文本的中心思想和写作目的
研判故事的语言风格和语言特色
读后续写题型能力考查的解读
前后衔接上下连贯风格一致
基于故事发展（故事线+感情线）预测正能量结局。弘扬社会主义核心价值观。
故事跌宕起伏，人物会遇到困难或问题，最终解决。
迷路了失败了吵架了犯错了贼逃了
回到了家最终成功和睦相处改过自新绳之以法
评分员陈开始的一句话“With great cnfidence, she began t find sme methds t satisfy her stmach.”这句话跟上文的天黑下来不是特别地连贯。接下来看第一段的最后一句“Night fell",天黑了下来，“Jane fell int sleep, dreaming she wuld be rescued by a helicpter and be back t Tm."这句话连贯得比较好，而且还用了ing形式dreaming。再看第二段，第二段天亮了，“Frtunately, it was sunny which brightened Jane's heart."这个连贯地也比较好。再来看一下他的语言。这篇的语言写得比较好，比如说有“Uncnsciusly, Jane fund sme rubbish belnged t her.",语言虽然写得比较好，但是好像不是很恰当。然后有一句N sner she saw Tm did she burst int tears."用了一个n sner,但是后面的语法出现了一点问题。然后有比较好的短语“be wild with jy"还有句型“with tears n face",好词好句比较多，但是也有点点小错误，可以定在第四档的十七分左右。
1. 您是怎样评分的? 一般需要读几次续写才能得出评分? 连贯初步定档，语言+故事完整性、精彩度，最后定档。 三次：连贯，语言，确认2. 对于评分标准您有哪些建议? 书写3. 您现在是如何训练学生读后续写的? 理解前文、达到连贯、打好语言基础。感受逻辑性和连贯性
该篇作文在逻辑、语言方面做到了平衡、全面、出色。首先，在逻辑上，该篇文章做到了合理合情：起初，主人公身陷森林，内心充满了悔恨，在面对困难时焦虑、畏惧；之后，主人公努力求生，最终获救，并且领悟到了一定的人生道理。纵观整个故事，情节发展不仅符合两段给出的开头所限定的情景要求，而且还设置了一定的悬念，增强了故事的可读性。在语言上，这篇文章并没有一味采用大词、难词，而是在高中词汇范围内精挑细选，活用了许多小词，增加了许多阅读趣味。例如，文章第一句“an abslute darkness ruled the frest”中，“rule”一词就使用了拟人的修辞手法，让森林阴森黑暗的一面展露无遗，同时描绘出主人公身处绝境的紧迫性。在“Eager and excited, she flagged her yellw bluse...”一句中，直接将情绪形容词放在句首，使用了非谓语动词的语法，表达精练。此外，“There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expressin f relief.”一句中，使用了几个短句，却包含了两处非谓语动词语法，同时活用了“wear”一词，把两个人相见时的场景生动地描绘了出来。总体来说，这篇文章反映出该考生课外阅读较多，平时应有较多练笔。
这篇文章最大的特色就是语言能力非常突出。 首先，全文使用了非常多的高级词汇，如“cluster, rage, dminate, infuriated”等等。这些词汇不仅准确地描绘出人物的动作，而且对环境描写也更为生动。不过，其词汇的使用也有一些只求大、不注意词义搭配自然程度的嫌疑，甚至有误用，如“adhere, flurish, astund”等。在修辞方面，文章多处使用拟人修辞手法，如“Clusters f stars decrated the vast sky, weakly shining in the mn-eclipsed darkness.”以及“Sunshine embraced the frest plain.”两句中，两个动词“decrate”，“embrace”使用了拟人。在语法上，全文主要使用非谓语动词，力求用最精练的语言表达出最生动的画面。 值得一提的是，文章虽然没有使用许多句式，但却从没给读者句子重复、单调的感觉，究其原因，是作者巧妙地给每句话设置了不同的主语。另外，本文每句话采用的写作切入角度也值得研究。例如，第一段中，作者从远景（stars, sky）到近景（stream），再到细节特写（ears），勾勒出了故事发生的不同场景，让故事显得有血有肉，情节丰满，这也成为了文章逻辑上的出彩点。
首先，在逻辑上，文章前半段对剧情的合理拓展非常符合情境：主人公从悔恨到无奈，最终鼓起勇气寻找出路。情节的丰富曲折增强了故事的可读性。 在语言方面，文章使用了多种句型，如“Never in her wildest dream had she thught that she wuld run int such serius truble.”一句使用了倒装句；“It suddenly ccurred t her that she had a family and Tm t attend t.”一句用了主语从句；“Praying that the helicpter will cme back again, Jane sat dwn.”一句使用了非谓语动词。句型的多变避免了句子的单调乏味，使文章更有灵性。同时，一些词汇的使用也使文章比较生动，例如“Desperate and hpeless, Jane knelt dwn, tear streaming dwn her face.”一句中，“stream”的使用非常贴切。
该作文最大的亮点在于其语言的地道性。从文中使用了“at a lss”，“in a desperate attempt”，“spt”，“wrn ut”等词。同时，该考生的组句能力也非常出色。文章中出现了多个长句、复杂句，例如“Feeling unbearably cld and extremely exhausted, Jane was quite at a lss as t hw t cpe with the terrible situatin.”一句中，非谓语动词是其中的亮点语法，表达了人物当时的身体状况。 值得一提的是，该篇作文中没有一处出现人物对话，但仍然保证了故事的可读性与真实感。为何？因为作者对故事的各个情境、人物的动作、心理活动等方面都进行了细致入微的描绘，代替了语言相对简单的对话，反而让文章的语言显得更书面化。这一点，值得各位考生借鉴——人物对话写得越多，意味着作文的口语程度越高，往往不太容易得分，如果犯错，却容易失分，所以不太建议用大量对话。
答题情况分析及审题建议第一，从逻辑方面来看，大部分考生对故事的主要情节拓展基本做到了合情合理，衔接较为顺畅。但是，也有不少考生构思能力较为欠缺，无法在短时间内理清故事脉络以及写作意图，对所给的十个关键词、两段开头语中提供的线索信息没有很好利用，未实现语言交际的目的。第二，从语言方面来看，大多数考生能做到语言的基本正确。但是很多考生仍然基础薄弱，不能用英文传达意义，出现一些低级错误。第三，抄袭现象比较严重。抄袭的情况一般分为三类：抄自续写原文部分，抄自试卷的其他部分（如阅读题），或者之前背诵的某一段文章。由于读后续写的内容连贯性强，抄袭的同学很难浑水摸鱼，往往以零分或低分告终。第四，内容创新不够，平淡无奇。既然是故事，需要一定的情节构思和布局，不要求考生必须出奇制胜，但也需要考生能有较清晰的逻辑思维能力和一定的创造能力，情节合情合理，达到最后的合理收官。第五，整体卷面美观程度有待提高，行文书写体现不了语言美。
析文章结构 创故事情节
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Jenny was a pretty eight-year-ld girl.One day when she and her mther were checking ut at the grcery stre, Jenny saw a plastic pearl necklace (项链), by which she was ttally defeated. Hw eagerly she wanted it! But when she saw the price, her heart sank a little. She gathered up her curage and asked her mther if she wuld buy it fr her. Her mther said, “Well, it is a pretty necklace, but it csts an awful lt f mney. I can buy yu the necklace, but when we get hme, we shuld make up a list f husewrk that yu can d t pay fr the necklace.” Jenny agreed immediately, feeling a burst f jy. S her mther bught the pearl necklace fr her. Jenny wrked n her husewrk determinedly and earnestly every day. Sn Jenny paid ff the pearls.Jenny had a very lving daddy. When Jenny went t bed, he wuld read Jenny her favrite stry. One night when he finished the stry, he said, “Jenny, d yu lve me?” “Oh, yes, Daddy, yu knw I lve yu.” the little girl said delightedly (高兴地), with a brad smile n her face. “Well, then, give me yur pearls.” Hearing that, Jenny frze there, an anxius expressin twisting her face. “Oh! Daddy, nt my pearls! But yu can have Rsy, my favrite dll. Remember her? Yu gave her t me last year fr my birthday. Okay?” “Oh n, darling, that’s kay.” Her father brushed her cheek with a kiss, gently and calmly. “Gd night, little ne.”A week later, her father nce again asked Jenny after her stry, “D yu lve me?” “Oh yes, Daddy, yu knw I lve yu.” the little girl murmured sftly, trying t escape frm her father’s eyes. “Well, then, give me yur pearls.” “Oh, Daddy, nt my pearls! But yu can have Ribbns, my ty hrse. D yu remember her? She is my favrite.” The little girl begged. “N, that’s kay,” her father said, smiling bradly and sweetly and brushed her cheek again with a kiss. “Gd bless yu, little ne. Sweet dreams.”注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
Paragraph 1：Several days later, when Jenny’s father came in t read her stry, Jenny was waiting anxiusly fr him n the bed. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph 2：Hlding the plastic pearl his daughter ffered, the father dragged ut a blue bx.____________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
读六要素（ Wh, What, When, Where, Why, Hw）
Persn：First persn? Secnd persn? Third persn?
Tense : The simple past tense ? The simple present tense?
Thrugh Reading
注意：有时候一个文本并不具备所有的要素，可能只会涉及其中的三到四个
Wh is the main character? When did the stry happen? Where did the stry happen? What happened in the stry? Why did he want the necklace?Hw was the stry ended?
Jenny and her daddy
One night when her daddy finished the stry
At Jenny’s bedrm
Her daddy wanted her plastic pearl necklace.
He wanted t knw which is mre imprtant t Jenny, he r her necklace.
Jenny didn’t give it t her daddy.
Wh: Jenny and her daddy
When: One night when her daddy finished the stry
Where: At Jenny’s bedrm
What : Her daddy wanted her plastic pearl necklace.
Why: He wanted t knw which is mre imprtant t Jenny, he r her necklace.
What is the stry abut?
Jenny did a lt f husewrk in exchange fr a plastic pearl necklace . Her daddy asked her twice whether she culd give him her necklace. She said n t her daddy.
Hw: Jenny didn’t give it t her daddy.
Third persn
The simple past tense
Plt planning
情节: 一般包括开端、发展、高潮、结局等部分。
Jenny, her mther, her daddy
Paragraph 1:
Paragraph 2:
Jenny did husewrk in exchange fr a plastic pearl necklace
Her daddy asked her twice whether she culd give him her necklace.
She said n t her daddy. 
The key wrds:
Jenny at the grcery stre pearl necklaceDaddybedlvedelightedlygivefavritekiss
Infer the plt develpment accrding t the given sentences
Paragraph 1：Several days later, when Jenny’s father came in t read her stry, Jenny was waiting anxiusly fr him n the bed.
Paragraph 2：Hlding the plastic pearl his daughter ffered, the father dragged ut a blue bx.
Tip2: 先留意所给第二段的开头语，里面的一些关键信息必须要在第一段里面有所体现
Tip3: 结合关键词展开推断
思考： 根据第二段开头，可知Jenny把项链给了爸爸。可以从动作，对话，情绪等几方面去考虑
1. 门打开了，爸爸走进来。2. 爸爸发现Jenny心事重重，问她发生什么事了。3. Jenny坐在那，不回答。4. Jenny问她爸是不是真的想要她的珍珠项链5. 答曰是。6. Jenny把项链给了爸爸。
析语言特点 仿语言风格
读后续写－如何打磨语言
vivid writing
Ways t plish yur stry
3.prper cnjunctins
2.abundant sentence patterns
1.advanced wrds and phrases
1. Advanced wrds and phrases
(1)丰满人物内心（心情的表达） Rich adjectives and ther useful expressins t prtray the inner thughts f the figures(2)增加表达效果（动作的表达） Detailed verbs t make expressins pwerful (3)丰富故事情节（细节和连贯） Prper adverbs t enrich yur stry
小提示：1.高级词汇的选择遵循具体性原则，晚词优先原则1) a gd/nice wman  a warm-hearted/generus/hnest wman2) Finding the lst diamnd ring wuld be difficult. Finding the lst diamnd ring wuld be challenging.3) Ashleigh's carelessness caused the lss f the diamnd ring. Ashleigh's carelessness were respnsible fr ... 小提示：2. 避免重复使用同一词语1) The Hannahs thanked Krey, saying “Thank yu fr yur kindness, r we will never have it” again and again.2) The Hannahs expressed their gratitude t Krey, saying “Thank yu fr yur kindness, r never will we have it” again and again.
2. Abundant sentence patterns
思考翻译：穿着白色裙子，这个女孩儿看起来非常漂亮。(1) The girl wears a white skirt, and she lks beautiful.(2) Wearing a white skirt, the girl lks pretty beautiful.(3) Wearing a white skirt, the girl appears abslutely breathtaking, making me fall in lve with her.
Basic Sentences
Cmplex Sentences
1. As the ecnmy was in decline, sme peple in the twn had lst their jbs. 2. She knew they had prblems, and they needed all kinds f help. 3. When she had time, she wuld bring fd and medicine t them.4. One mrning she tld her children abut a family she had visited the day befre. 5. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, wh tk care f him and culd nt g ut t wrk, and their little by.
6. I wish yu culd see him. 7. ... but I dn’t see what he can d.8. After their mther had left the rm, the children sat thinking abut Bernard.9. I wish we culd help him t earn mney,...
10. I have a slutin that we can help accmplish (完成).11. When Jhn had an idea, it was sure t be a gd ne.12. I tell yu what we can d, Yu knw that big bx f crn Uncle Sam sent us?
Cmplex Sentences (Classified)
Grup One -- Object Clauses2. She knew they had prblems, and they needed all kinds f help. 6. I wish yu culd see him. 7. ... but I dn’t see what he can d.10. I wish we culd help him t earn mney, I tell yu what we can d,...
Grup Tw -- Attributive Clause4. One mrning she tld her children abut a family she had visited the day befre. 5. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, wh tk care f him and culd nt g ut t wrk, and their little by.11. I have a slutin that we can help accmplish (完成).13. Yu knw that big bx f crn Uncle Sam sent us?
Grup Three -- Adverbal Clause1. As the ecnmy was in decline, sme peple in the twn had lst their jbs. 3. When she had time, she wuld bring fd and medicine t them.8. After their mther had left the rm, the children sat thinking abut Bernard.11. When Jhn had an idea, it was sure t be a gd ne.
Christmas Day was cming. I was just a kid then, and my big sister tld me there was n Santa Claus. I fled t my grandma because she wuld be straight with me. I knew Grandma always tld me the truth. Grandma was hme, and I tld her everything. She was ready fr me. "N Santa Claus?" she shuted. "Ridiculus! Dn't believe it. That rumr has been ging arund fr years, and it makes me mad." "Nw, put n yur cat, and let's g. "G where, grandma?" I asked. "Where" turned ut t be Kerby’s General Stre, the ne stre in twn that had a lit bit f just abut everything. As we walked thrugh its drs, Grandma handed me ten dllars "Take this mney," she said, "and buy smething fr smene wh needs it. I’ll wait fr yu in the car" Then she turned and walked ut f Kerby’s. I was nly eight years ld. I’d ften gne shpping with my mther, and never had I shpped fr anything all by myself. The stre seemed big and crwded, full f peple cmpeting t finish their Christmas shpping. Fr a few mments I just std there, cnfused, hlding that ten-dllar bill, wndering what t buy and wh t buy smething fr.
I suddenly thught f Bbby Decker, wh was a kid with bad breath and messy hair. He sat right behind me in Mrs. Pllck's grade-tw class. Bbby Decker didn't have a cat. I knew that because he never went ut fr recess during the winter. His mther always wrte a nte, telling the teacher that he had a cugh, but we kids knew that Bbby Decker didn't have a cugh, and that he didn't have a cat. I wuld buy Bbby Decker a cat! Settled n a red ne, which lked really warm, and he wuld like that. "Is this a Christmas present fr smene?" the lady behind the cunter asked kindly, as I laid my ten dllars dwn. "Yes." The nice lady smiled at me, put the cat in a bag and wished me a Merry Christmas.Paragraph1：That evening, Grandma helped me wrap the cat in Christmas paper.___________________________________________________________________Paragraph 2: Grandma and 1 waited breathlessly fr Bbby Decker’s frnt dr t pen and finally it pened._______________________________________________
写作出彩 高级且丰富的句式同样重要(1) Never had I shpped fr anything all by myself. (2) The stre seemed big and crwded, full f peple cmpeting t finish their Christmas shpping. (3) Fr a few mments I just std there, cnfused, hlding that ten-dllar bill, wndering what t buy and wh t buy smething fr. (4) I suddenly thught f Bbby Decker, wh was a kid with bad breath and messy hair.(5) His mther always wrte a nte, telling the teacher that he had a cugh, but we kids knew that Bbby Decker didn't have a cugh, and that he didn't have a cat.
并列动作： The nice lady smiled at me, put the cat in a bag and wished me a Merry Christmas.伴随状语：使用分词形式、使用“with”结构、使用独立主格结构、使用形容词、名词、介词短语 His mther always wrte a nte, telling the teacher that he had a cugh. Brn int a pr family, Bbby Decker didn't even have a warm cat. Quickly, we ran int the car, with ur hearts beating wildly. They hugged each ther tightly, tears rlling dwn their cheeks. Bbby Decker saw the cat, cnfused but excited.
That evening, Grandma helped me wrap the cat in Christmas paper. She asked me t write "T Bbby, frm Santa Claus” n it. Then we went t Bbby Decker's huse. We parked ur car, nt faraway frm his huse, and we walked t his frnt dr. Silently, I put the Christmas present dwn when Grandma kncked at his dr. Quickly we ran int the car. Then we waited fr him.
Grandma and I waited breathlessly fr Bbby Decker 's frnt dr t pen and finally it pened. Bbby Decker went ut. When he saw the cat in the bag, he lked very surprised and then called his mther t g ut. They hugged each ther in tears and prayed t Santa Claus. I felt very prud f what I had dne. At that time I decided t be Santa's helper frever. That mment, I came t realize that Santa Claus is in everyne's heart if he is willing t be ne f his helpers.
Let’s have a try!
1. She asked me t write "T Bbby, frm Santa Claus” n it. Then we went t Bbby Decker's huse. She wrte "T Bbby, frm Santa Claus" n it, after which she drve me ver t Bbby Decker's huse, explaining I was fficially ne f Santa's helpers. 2. We parked ur car, nt far away frm his huse, and we walked t his frnt dr.Grandma parked dwn the street frm Bbby's huse. Taking a deep breath, I dashed fr his frnt dr.Grandma parked dwn the street frm Bbby's huse. Then, she gave me a nudge, whispering, “All right Santa Claus, get ging”. Taking a deep breath, I dashed fr his frnt dr.
3. Silently, I put the Christmas present dwn when Grandma kncked at his dr. Quickly we ran int the car. Then we waited fr him.Seeing n ther peple ntice us, I put the Christmas present dwn, punded his drbell and then Grandma and I crept and hid in the car.
1. Bbby Decker went ut. Out went Bbby Decker./ There std Bbby Decker.2. When he saw the cat in the bag, he lked very surprised and then called his mther t g ut. Seeing the cat in the bag, he put his hand ver his muth, dumbstruck. After a while, he yelled at his mther t g ut.
3. They hugged each ther in tears and prayed t Santa Claus. I felt very prud f what I had dne. They hugged each ther in tears and after hearing them say “thanks” t Santa Claus, I felt very prud f what I had dne.4. That mment, I came t realize that Santa Claus is in everyne's heart if he is willing t be ne f his helpers.It was that night that I realized the truth that he wh has n Christmas in his heart will never find Christmas under a tree.It was that night that I realized thse awful rumrs abut Santa Claus were just what Grandma said they were: ridiculus. Santa Claus was definitely alive and we were actually n his team.
Appreciatin: Para 1: That evening, Grandma helped me wrap the cat in Christmas paper. She wrte "T Bbby, frm Santa Claus" n it, after which she drve me ver t Bbby Decker's huse, explaining I was fficially ne f Santa's helpers. Grandma parked dwn the street frm Bbby's huse. Then, she gave me a nudge, whispering, “All right Santa Claus, get ging”. Taking a deep breath, I dashed fr his frnt dr. Seeing n ther peple ntice us, I put the Christmas present dwn, punded his drbell and then Grandma and I crept and hid in the car.
Appreciatin: Para 2: Grandma and I waited breathlessly fr Bbby Decker’s frnt dr t pen and finally it pened. Out went Bbby Decker. Seeing the cat in the bag, he put his hand ver his muth, dumbstruck. After a while, he yelled at his mther t g ut. After hearing them say "thanks" t Santa Claus, I felt very prud f what I had dne. At that time I decided t be Santa's helper frever. It was that night that thse awful rumrs abut Santa Claus were just what Grandma said they were: ridiculus. Santa Claus was definitely alive and we were actually n his team.
小提示：结合使用长句与短句根据实际情况在文章中交替使用长句与短句，使得文章错落有致，这样不仅使文章在形式上增加美感，而且使文章读起来铿锵有力，如:I tk a deep breath, rushed t his frnt dr, and put the present dwn. Then I rang the drbell and flew back t the car.`Taking a deep breath, I rushed t his frnt dr, and put the Christmas present dwn. After punding his drbell, Grandma and I crept and hid in the car.
小提示：恰当套用某些固定表达1) After punding his drbell, Grandma and I crept and hid in the car, feeling nervus but excited. We culdn't take a breath.After punding his drbell, Grandma and I crept and hid in the car, feeling t nervus and excited t take a breath.2) They felt tuched and thrilled. And they culdn't help hugging each ther in tears and prayed t Santa Claus.They felt s tuched and thrilled that they ) When he saw the cat in the bag, he lked very surprised and then called his mther t g ut.The mment he saw the cat in the bag, he put his hand ver his muth, dumbstruck. After a while, he yelled at his mther t g ut.
输入是输出的基础，不能纯粹地通过写作来提升写作，而应该通过阅读来学习如何写作。以合适的语篇为载体，多读美的东西，进行语篇分析，培养逻辑思维能力。考试题型的二次开发： 精读完形（叙事类）任何一篇完形都覆盖着几乎80%的语法，包含经典短语和句子，都是百里挑一的好文章。完形的主题与续写的主题基本一致，都告诉我们一些人生道理（心灵鸡汤）。注重积累，形成自己的语料库，如悲伤逆流成河，惊讶到目瞪口呆，紧张到无法呼吸等等。
Practice makes perfect!
Plish yur draft
修改: 保证用上关键词，确保语法正确，替换高级词汇，然后运用各种从句、复合结构、非谓语动词、以及强调句和倒装句等特殊句式扩写: 增加一些语言描写、动作描写、情绪描写、环境描写，增添语言的丰富性。
1. The dr pened, and Jenny’s father came in.
When the dr pened, her dad came in, with a stry bk in his left hand.
2. Jenny’s father fund her daughter upset, and asked her what had happened?
Seeing Jenny sitting n the bed with an anxius lk, he went ver, held her hands, and asked what was the matter.
3. Jenny just sat there. She said nthing.
Shaking her head, Jenny said nthing.
4. Jenny asked her father whether he really wanted her pearl necklace.
Fr a mment, silence filled the rm. “Daddy,” Jenny’s vice brke the silence, “D yu really want my pearl necklace?”
5. Her father said yes.
Lking gently int her daughter’s eyes, he ndded with a delighted smile n the face.
6. Jenny gave it t her daddy.
“Okay.” Jenny cntinued, “Despite my affectin fr the lvely necklace, it is yu and mm that I lve much better.” Befre her dad culd say a wrd, Jenny tk ut the necklace frm under the quilt and gave it t him.
Neat cpying
Neat cpying
The dr pened, and Jenny’s father came in. Jenny’s father fund her daughter upset, and asked her what happened? Jenny just sat there. She said nthing. After a while, Jenny asked her father whether he really wanted her pearl necklace. Her father said yes. Jenny gave it t her daddy.
When the dr pened, her dad came in, with a stry bk in his left hand. Seeing Jenny sitting n the bed with an anxius lk, he went ver, held her hands, and asked what was the matter. Shaking her head, Jenny said nthing. Fr a mment, silence filled the rm. “Daddy,” Jenny’s vice brke the silence, “D yu really want my pearl necklace?” Lking gently int her daughter’s eyes, he ndded with a delighted smile n the face. “Okay.” Jenny cntinued, “Despite my affectin fr the lvely necklace, it is yu and mm that I lve much better.” Befre her dad culd say a wrd, Jenny tk ut the necklace frm under the quilt and gave it t him.
Several days later, when Jenny’s father came in t read her a stry, Jenny was waiting anxiusly fr him n the bed. When listening t the stry, Jenny was ttally absent- minded, with her hands hlding the pearl necklace tightly and firmly. When the stry came t an end, unexpectedly, Jenny ffered her belved necklace t her father, with her fingers trembling autmatically. N ne knew what the necklace meant t her. She whispered t her father, sftly and gently, “ Daddy, yu knw I lve yu mre than the necklace.” Then, the necklace slid int her father’s hands determinedly.
Paragraph 2： Hlding the plastic pearl his daughter ffered, his father dragged ut a blue bx. Much t Jenny’s amazement, a beautiful real pearl necklace lay peacefully in the bx, which set her heart racing. Jenny frze there, a thrilled expressin twisting her face. Befre Jenney was able t say smething, her father brushed a warm kiss n her face and gathered her int his arms. Hlding the genuine necklace in her hand, Jenny lifted her lip, tears beginning t blur her visin.
搭建流程 输出续写范文
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成-篇完整的短文。 We were enjying the summer vacatin n the beaches n Beautiful Gulf shres Alabama.My daughter was abut 6 years ld and the yungest was 3. We bught a tw-man inflatable(需充气的) bat thinking this wuld make fr a really fun day fr the tw girls. And s it did.The tw f them played all day in that bat. Nt far frm us, a middle-aged man was taking a sunbath, greeting us with a smile nw and then. Later the little ne gt tired and was beginning t lk pretty pink with t much sun. S, I tk her t ur spt n the sand and placed an umbrella ver her as my lder girl cntinued t play in the bat. I prbably became a little t invlved with my yunger daughter and spent a little t much time nt nticing what was ging n the small distance t the water. But as I lked, I became cncerned because I saw the little bat had mved far ut frm the shre with my ldest daughter in it. I called t her t cme in clser t shre but she seemed t be t frightened t accmplish just that. We hadn't thught t buy any ars(桨) fr the bat. Her little arms were t shrt t reach acrss the bat and int the water. All she culd d was paddle (蹚水) hard t ne side and was just making small circles. Abut this time, thers n the beach nticed this but n ne seemed t be ding anything but watching. Being a pitiful swimmer, I was standing as far ut in the water as I culd. Shuting instructins t her with n success, I watched her flat farther ut t sea and prayed t Gd. "Lrd. I dn't believe yu gave me this beautiful child fr me t watch her flat ut t sea. Lrd, please save her!"注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 As if by miracle (奇迹)，that middle-aged man turned ut t be the answer t my prayer. . I reached ut my hands as my girl gt ut f the bat. .
Analyze the reading
Build the framewrk
2.My lder daughter’s bat had mved far ut frm the shre.
5. That middle -aged man turned ut t be the answer t my prayer.
1.We were enjying the summer vacatin n the beaches.
3. Her little arms were t shrt t she culd d was just making small circles.
4. N ne help me but watching.
7. Ending?
6. What happened?
disappinted
discuraging
Cmb the pltlines
Design the M-bridge
A stranger saved my daughter.
A middle-aged man helped my daughter ut when she had truble in the sea.
Theme can be:Lve can be passed n.Kindness is
(What des the authr in the stry want t tell us?)
Extend the creatin
Fulfill the expressins
P1: As if by miracle , that middle -aged man turned ut t be the answer t my prayer.
Plt-- the man’s behavir
善良、乐于助人动作：his head, 语言：
Emtins--my respnse
感激、担心grateful/mvewrried
跳下海去救人被海浪冲走坚持不懈，成功营救女孩
Plt--My future behavir
女儿的反应My daughter was trembling all ver.中年男人的反应The middle-aged 我的反应Tears f gratitude filled my eyes.
感动、感激内疚我以后的打算
P2: I reached ut my hands as my girl gt ut f the bat.
Step 1. Lgical Pltting with the given key wrds情节推理和关键词协同
P1: As if by miracle, that middle -aged man turned ut t be the answer t my prayer.
P2: I reached ut my hands as my girl gt ut f the bat.
Q1: Why he is the answer t my prayer?Q2: What did him d? Q3: Hw did I feel?
Q1: Hw did I feel?Q2: Hw did I change the pinin twards stranger?Q3: What des the stry intend t tell readers?
Generate the draft
对段首语进行分析、设问 两个段首语是重要的续写提示，控制着情节的发展方向。对其分析设问，能够将预测的故事情节以问题的形式呈现，利于打开思路，整理信息和组织语言。
Eventually they made it back t shre and gt a strm f applause.
Para1: As if by miracle, that middle -aged man turned ut t be the answer t my prayer.
Befre I knew it, he had jumped int the water and swam tward the bat.
I kept my eyes n him. At ne time, he was swallwed by the huge waves.
Anyhw, he re-emerged and made steady advances twards his gal.
After what seemed t be centuries, he managed t reach the edge f the small bat.
He then turned arund and made his way back pulling and calming my girl.
Harmnize the wrk
Even tday I dn't knw his name, but his kindness is always in my heart and inspires me t pass this kindness n.
Para2. I reached ut my hands as my girl gt ut f the bat.
My daughter was trembling all ver, and her face was as pale as a sheet f paper.
I held her tight in my arms and breathed a sigh f relief.
Tears f gratitude filled my eyes.
It tk a lng time befre I restred my pwer f speech.
I turned arund t thank the middle-aged man, nly t find he was nwhere t be fund.