2023届新高考英语读后续写特训救人型（故事构造“三部曲”）学案

这是一份2023届新高考英语读后续写特训救人型（故事构造“三部曲”）学案，共13页。
Part2：救人故事构造三部曲 PAGEREF _Tc11154 \h 4
第一步：救人之前（恶劣环境+负面情绪） PAGEREF _Tc28076 \h 4
第二步：救人之中（努力+救人动作+如释重负） PAGEREF _Tc15875 \h 5
第三步：救人之后（感激+升华） PAGEREF _Tc3773 \h 6
Part3：灵活应用 PAGEREF _Tc5577 \h 7
例1：河中救人 PAGEREF _Tc11105 \h 7
例2：海边救人 PAGEREF _Tc27334 \h 9
读后续写很多时候会涉及自然灾害与防范、安全常识与自我保护的话题，会经常涉及到危难之际，挺身而出救助他人的故事。在这个话题中有时会写到危难之际，利用所学急救知识，成功救人脱离生命危险的故事；有时会写到楼内突发火灾，警察/群众舍己救人的故事；有时会写到群众/路人遇到有人不幸溺水，鼓足勇气跳入水中施救的的故事。
Part1：经典例文（铁轨救婴儿）
It was 7 a.m. n 12 May 1998.Mhr had already scanned several packages listing dangerus materials abard the train. The presence f gas wuld mean taking extra precautin when braking the 6,200-tn train. With explsive gas n bard, it wuld be disastrus if the train came ff the track. After a final inspectin, Mhr jumped abard. He was heading east, int a sun that prmised a beautiful day fr their 276-km run t Peru, Indiana.
At arund nn that day, Marshall prepared t tackle sme yardwrk. It was a beautiful day fr it, she thught, gazing past the huses acrss the street. Sme 45 meters away, railrad tracks shne in the sun.
Marshall began wrking in a patch (地块） f sil. Sitting next t her, cheerfully running her hands thrugh dirt, was her 19-mnth-ld daughter, Emily. Fr a while, she kept turning t check n Emily, wh played clse at hand. Eventually, thugh, Marshall's absrptin in her wrk became ttal.
Mhr apprached the twn where Marshall lived at abut 1:45 p.m. and slwed the train t the 40-kmph speed limit. He activated the flashing lights and warning bell. Mhr had been thrugh the twn hundreds f times, but he grew extra cautius runding the first curve.
As the train came ut f the curve, Mhr nticed a small dt n the track abut 200 meters ahead. He thught it might be a dg. Althugh it was against the rules t d s in the twn, he began lightly tapping his hrn. "Cme n, puppy, mve," he urged.
The tts (嘟嘟响） f a train whistle startled (使受惊吓） Marshall frm her yardwrk. That's dd, she thught. They dn't usually blw the whistle thrugh twn. She glanced ver t check her daughter, and her heart skipped. Emily was nwhere in sight.
Nw, as the train apprached within 100 meters f the bject n the rail, Mhr narrwed his eyes, trying t make ut what exactly was lying ahead. Then shck ran thrugh him like electric current.
注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语：
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para 1
"My Gd!" he yelled as a tiny face turned twards him. “It's a baby!"
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Para 2
The child was nw just 36 meters ahead.
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【答案】
Para 1
"My Gd!" he yelled as a tiny face turned twards him. “It's a baby!" Mhr had an instant decisin t make, applying full emergency brakes with half the train still wrapped arund a curve. He had t risk an emergency stp. Hard as he try, the train kept mving just as a cat saw a fish, whse enticing smell attracted the cat t apprach the baby.Meanwhile, Marshall rushed twards her daughter, nervus but desperate, fearing the train wuld run int her belved.
“我的上帝啊！”他像一张小脸转向他时大声喊道。“这是个婴儿！”莫尔立即做出了决定，实施了紧急刹车，一半的火车仍然绕在弯道上。他不得不冒着紧急停车的危险。在他的努力中，火车继续移动，就像一只猫看到了一条鱼，它诱人的气味吸引了猫接近婴儿。与此同时，马歇尔冲向紧张但绝望的女儿，担心火车会撞到她的爱人。
Para 2
The child was nw just 36 meters ahead. Mhr pulled the brake with his whle effrts.The sund f wheels grinding against the rails rang thrugh the sky. The situatin was quite dangerus.As the train was almst stpped, he immediately pened the left dr f the engine cab quickly and swiftly jumped frm the mving train and ran back t the child. She lay crying by the tracks.A great relief sweeping ver Mhr, he lifted her frm the dirt hurriedly. It was nly then that Mhr nticed the train had stpped and Marshall was just cming t her baby.With the baby in his arms,Mhr began t walk twards the mther.
这个孩子现在只有前面36米远。莫尔竭尽全力地拉下了刹车。车轮撞击铁轨的声音响彻天空。情况很危险。当火车快停下来时，他立即打开驾驶室的左门，迅速从行驶的火车上跳下来，跑回孩子身边。她躺在铁轨边哭泣。他使莫尔松了一口气，急忙把她从泥土里抬了起来。直到那时，莫尔才注意到火车已经停了下来，马歇尔正要来接她的孩子。莫尔抱着孩子，开始向母亲走去。
【分析】
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了火车司机Mhr，在一次驾驶火车全速前进时，他注意到远处的铁轨上有个黑点，他以为是一条狗，后来证实这个黑点是一个婴儿。他要在保证火车安全的情况下，救下这个婴儿。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“我的上帝! ”当一张小脸转向他时，他大叫起来。“是个婴儿！”，可知，第一段可描写火车司机Mhr的心理感受及其采取的措施，同时可以描写婴儿妈妈Mashall的现场反应。
②由第二段首句内容“这时火车距离婴儿只有36米了。”可知，第二段可描写火车司机Mhr努力减速火车直至火车停下，然后救婴儿，最终婴儿平安得救。
2.续写线索：看见婴儿——决定刹车——跳车救孩子——孩子得救
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.做决定：make a decisin/make up his mind/keep in mind that
②.刹车：pull the brake/stp the train with effrt
③.救孩子：save the child/ rescue the child/save the baby's life
情绪类
焦急：anxius/have ne's heart in ne's muth
【点睛】
[高分句型1]. Mhr had an instant decisin t make, applying full emergency brakes with half the train still wrapped arund a curve. （applying...为现在分词作状语）
[高分句型2]. Hard as he try, the train kept mving just as a cat saw a fish, whse enticing smell attracted the cat t apprach the baby.（as引导的让步状语从句，whse之后为非限制性定语从句）
Part2：救人故事构造三部曲
第一步：救人之前（恶劣环境+负面情绪）
1、恶劣环境
（1）一到晚夏，池塘就会被绿色的起泡浮渣覆盖。有时候，池塘里冒出一阵强烈的难闻的味道。In late summer, the pnd wuld be cvered by a green and bubbly scum（起泡的浮渣）. Smetimes a strng, unpleasant smell rse frm it.
（2）在池塘中间，冰面忽然露出了一条裂缝。
In the middle f the pnd, the ice gave way with a sudden crack.
（3）空气里弥漫着浓厚灼热的味道。A thick burning smell filled the air.
2、负面情绪：害怕
(1) Watching the shre in the distance, I felt pwerless(无力的) as if we were brken tiny bats at the mercy f strng waves.
(2) Exhausted and cld, the thught that we might die here flashed acrss my mind，
which made me quiver with an uncntrllable terrr/hrrr/fright(难以控制地发抖)
Lking at the vast sea, I felt a sense f fear surging thrugh my whle bdy (在身体涌动)
第二步：救人之中（努力+救人动作+如释重负）
1、.挣扎努力
Tm lked thughtful(若有所思)
“We need t think ut a way!” I muttered (喃喃自语), scratching my head.(绞尽脑汁)
...,We swam tth and nailspared n effrt t
tth and nail
spared n effrt t
(全力以赴地).
2. 救人有关的惊险场面描写
(1) The next thing I knew I was hanging n t the edge f a hle in the ice by arms utstretched n the ice. Frm my shulders dwn I hung in icy water.
(2) I tried t climb ut f the hle, but when I gt a knee n the ice, it brke like windw glass(像玻璃一样破裂). （浙江省十校联盟考试续写2020.10）
(3)As the cat became cmpletely wet, it dragged me dwn(把我拖下水). I was tired f the struggle and rested with my arms stretched ut n the ice.（浙江省十校联盟考试续写2020.10）
3实施救援的过程
“帮我把西蒙斯弄下车！”诺伍德对惊慌失措的朋友们大声喊道。（2021年山东新高考质量测评联盟）
“Help me get Simmns ut f the car!” Nrwd yelled ludly t her friends, wh were left in a panic. 诺伍德和朋友们把西蒙斯从车里拉了出来，把他放在一个安全并且离车有点远的地方。
尽管紧张而焦虑，诺伍德努力让自己镇静下来，对西蒙斯进行了急救。（2021年山东新高考质量测评联盟）
Nervus and anxius, Nrwd struggled t calm herself dwn and carried ut first aid t Simmns.
诺伍德和她的朋友们把西蒙斯放到平躺的位置，打开了她的呼吸道。（2021年山东新高考质量测评联盟）
4、如释重负
Ensuing their safety, I felt a surge f triumph .(感到一阵胜利的喜悦)
Hearing the news, I culdn't help restraining my excitement.(情难自抑)
It thrilled us t hear the gd news (听到新消息很高兴).
On hearing the gd news, Tm and I sighed in great relief(如释重负地叹了口气), grinning merrily at each ther.
第三步：救人之后（感激+升华）
1、感激
如果我没有得到急救，我就会死了。西蒙斯感激地对诺伍德说。（2021年山东新高考质量测评联盟）
“If I had nt been given first aid, I wuld have dead.” Simmns said t Nrwd gratefully. Simmns shwed her gratitude t Nrwd, saying “It was yu wh came t my aid and saved my life.” 西蒙斯对诺伍德表示了感谢，她说：“是你来帮助我，救了我一命。”（2021年山东新高考质量测评联盟）
“谢谢你进入我的世界，我会永远记住你为我所做的。” 西蒙斯对诺伍德说。（2021年山东新高考质量测评联盟）
“Thank yu fr entering my wrld and I will always remember what yu have dne fr me.” Simmns whispered t Nrwd.
2、升华句
(1) 花点时间来学习急救和心肺复苏术。拯救了生命，而且很有效。
Take sme time t learn the knwledge f first aid. It saves lives, and it wrks.
(2) 这个故事表明，良好的急救知识真的可以起作用。
The stry shws that a gd knwledge f first aid can make a real difference.
(3) 每个人都应该学点急救知识，因为在紧急情况下每一秒都很重要。
Everyne shuld learn smething abut first aid, fr every secnd will cunt in an emergency.
(4) 了解基础的急救知识有助于你对紧急情况作出迅速的反应。Knwing basic first-aid techniques will help yu respnd quickly t emergencies.
Part3：灵活应用
例1：河中救人
Bys like t be cnsidered t be brave, but what kind f things can be cnsidered t be brave? It is nt a questin that can be answered by wrds, but by the actual deed. A by with the name Henry gave us a gd example. Rnny and Henry were tw friends in the same class. They always played tgether and went hme tgether. One day as Rnny and Henry were ging hme after schl, they saw sme peple fighting in the street crner. Rnny said excitedly, “Sme peple are fighting! Let's g and have a lk!” But Henry refused, “It's nne f ur business. We'd better g hme and dn't get clse t them. Als ur parents are expecting t have dinner with us tgether at hme and I dn't want them t wrry abut me.”
“Yu are a cward, and afraid t g,” said Rnny, and ff he ran t the spt with sme ther bys. Henry had t g hme alne and didn't think abut it anymre.
But Rnny thught Henry was a cward and tld all the bys that. They laughed at him a great deal. Frm then n, they lked dwn upn Henry and didn't want t play with him.
Henry was sad but he wasn't angry with Rnny fr his rude behavir, because he had learned that true curage was shwn mst in bearing misunderstanding when it was nt deserved, and that he ught t be afraid f nthing but ding wrng. Thus, he just ignred the ther bys' laughter and cntinued t stick t his thught and g t schl and study as well. Hwever, Rnny didn't invite Henry t g hme with him anymre. Instead, he had his new friends wh als thught Henry was a cward. Every day after schl, they didn't g hme directly but went t the river r smewhere t play games and had lts f fun.
注意：
1.所续写的短文词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为二段，每段的开头语已经为你写好；
4续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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A few days later, smething terrible happened t Rnny.


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At that mment, Henry happened t pass by.


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A few days later, smething terrible happened t Rnny. That afternn after schl, Rnny was bathing with sme f his new friends in the river happily. Suddenly, he was stuck in the mud and culdn't get ut. He struggled hard but he was still trapped. He screamed fr help, but all in vain. The bys wh had called Henry a cward gt ut f the water as fast as they culd. They were s scared and did nt even try t help him.
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At that mment, Henry happened t pass by. He heard the screams and ran t the river as sn as pssible. Seeing Rnny was almst drwned, Henry tk ff his clthes immediately and jumped int the water withut any hesitatin. He reached Rnny just as he was sinking the last time. With great effrt, and with much danger t himself, he brught Rnny t the shre in time. Henry was happy t help his friend, thugh he was extremely tired.
第1段
几天后，罗尼发生了一件可怕的事情。那天下午放学后，罗尼和他的一些新朋友在河里快乐地洗澡。突然，他被困在泥里，无法出来。他努力挣扎，但仍然被困住了。他尖叫着呼救，但都没有成功。那些叫亨利是懦夫的孩子们尽可能快地离开了水面。他们很害怕，甚至没有试图帮助他。
第2段：
就在那一刻，亨利碰巧经过了。他听到了尖叫声，就尽快跑到河里去了。看到罗尼差点被淹死，亨利立即脱下衣服，毫不犹豫地跳进了水里。他上次就在罗尼下沉时，到达了罗尼。他费了巨大的努力，对自己也很危险，及时把罗尼带到了岸边。亨利很乐意帮助他的朋友，尽管他非常累。
例2：海边救人
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
On July 8，2017，eight members f a family in ttal，were enjying an evening tgether at the beach in Panhandle，Flrida．As the sun sank lwer n the hrizn，the tw bys Nah，11，and Stephen，8—swam int the waves withut the grwn-ups nticing．Sn they realized that the cean had pulled them int the sea．After trying and failing t swim back，they started waving and screaming fr help．But the lifeguards had been ff duty fr the evening．
The bys had been struggling fr several minutes when Jacky and Tabatha，a cuple frm Gergia，heard them．They dived int the water and sn reached the tw brthers．But after a few minutes，they were all trapped in a rip current(离岸流)—a pwerful ne that culd sweep even the strngest swimmer ut t sea! By then，sme teenagers had heard the cry．One f the teens rushed int the water，grabbed Jacky，and pulled him back t shre．Meanwhile，Tabatha culd feel herself being pulled farther ut．She was already exhausted and beginning t feel desperate as she was trying t save bth bys alne．
Onshre，Jacky was terrified．A man stpped．“What’s wrng?”asked Shaun，wh was heading back t his car．“My wife is drwning!”Brittany said．Shaun immediately strde(大步跨)int the water．But several minutes later，a gaping 15 feet still lay between him and Tabatha and the bys．He knew that if he cntinued，he’d becme anther victim．He turned arund t seek help．
It was abut that time that Rberta，the bys’mther，returned frm the bathrm and lked arund fr her children．She was shcked t spt them flating much farther ut than they were allwed t g．She fught the waves t get t her screaming sns and the stranger wh was trying t save them，but she quickly discvered it was nearly impssible t make headway in any directin．Lking arund，Rberta sighed with relief t see sme mre peple cming t help．
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When they tried in vain t rescue the brthers and Tabatha, a risky idea came t them.
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By then, mre swimmers had als nticed the grup in truble and rushed t jin the human chain. _______________________________________________________________________________
【答案】
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When they tried in vain t rescue the brthers and Tabatha，a risky idea came t them．T keep themselves frm lsing their fting in the rip current，they began hlding n t ne anther t frm a human chain extending frm the beach all the way ut t the struggling and Tabatha．They stayed linked tightly and managed t ensure they were safe by making their feet firmly planted in the sand．Hwever，that required mre links—prbably dzens f them．Shaun sptted ther swimmers n the beach and shuted，“Dn’t just stand there! Cme and help．”
当他们试图营救塔巴塔兄弟和塔巴塔兄弟时，他们想到了一个危险的主意。为了防止自己在激流中站稳脚跟，他们开始互相抓住，形成一条人链，从海滩一直延伸到挣扎中的塔巴塔。它们紧紧地联系在一起，并把脚牢牢地放在沙子里，以确保自己的安全。然而，这需要更多的链接——可能有几十个。肖恩发现海滩上还有其他游泳者，他喊道：“不要只是站在那里！”来帮忙吧。”
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By then，mre swimmers had als nticed the grup in truble and rushed t jin the human chain．One by ne，link by link，ttal strangers walked int the waves and grasped ne anther by the wrists，determined that n ne wuld die n that beach．At last，they made it and Tabatha and the tw brthers were saved! “Thse peple n the beach are angels n earth，”said Rberta．“Whether it is the first persn r the last persn in the chain，they are all ur heres，wh helped get ur family ut f truble．
到那时，更多的游泳者也注意到这群人陷入了麻烦，于是冲去加入。一个接一个地，一个接一个地走进海浪，抓住手腕，决定没有人会死在海滩上。最后，他们成功了，塔巴塔和两兄弟得救了！“海滩上的那些人都是地球上的天使，”罗伯塔说，“无论是铁链上的第一人还是最后一个人，他们都是我们的英雄，他们帮助我们的家人摆脱了麻烦。