专题六 训练41 读后续写微技能——动作链的构成课件PPT

这是一份专题六 训练41 读后续写微技能——动作链的构成课件PPT，共35页。PPT课件主要包含了研典例　学技法，精彩范文，范文赏析，即时练　夺高分等内容，欢迎下载使用。
在读后续写的写作过程中，成功的动作描写，可以交代人物的身份、地位，可以反映人物心理活动的进程，可以表现人物的性格特征。相反，空洞、笼统的描写会使内容缺乏生动性，使人物形象不丰满。人物的动作或简单，或复杂，都不是一下子就能完成的，细心观察都能捕捉到最能体现人物特征的慢镜头。因此，在描写动作时，同学们要学会细化动作，把动作过程分解成一连串细微的动作，形成动作链，写出动作的连贯性，这样才能使描写具有画面感，使人物更立体。读后续写作文中动作描写没有头绪？不知道如何下手？不如拆解动作，构造动作链，让你的动作描写既丰富又精彩！
1.举个例子，何为构造动作链？我们先看一句高考样题范文。He stpped the taxi，jumped in with the suitcase and tld the driver，“G t the plice statin，please.”这句话的意思是：他拦下了出租车，拿着手提箱跳进了车里，然后对司机说，“请到警察局去。”其实，这句话只是描写了“上车”的动作，然而通过拆解，细致地展现了一个动作下的组成部分。其本质是避免简单粗暴地使用一个动词概括整个动作，而是用2－3个动词组合进行描述。可以用一个公式总结以上例句，即：上车＝拦车＋上车＋告知目的地
2.再比如2017年高考真题中的一个优秀范文句子。 She wuld get ff the car excitedly，laughing and dancing arund.这句话的意思是：她会兴奋地下车，又笑又跳。这句讲的是一个比较粗线条的妈妈，动作描写完整地描述了这位妈妈下车时及下车后的表现，即：下车＝下车＋笑＋跳构造动作链条的训练过程需要我们仔细观察，结合一点语文功底进行合理联想，并多多积累动词。同时，这也为我们提供了两种构造动作链条的句式：1.A，B and C(连词连接动词)；
2.使用非谓语。♦A，B and C结构下面将用三个句子来说明这个结构。第一句：“男孩们跳入湖中嬉戏”想一想：“跳入湖中”这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？跳入湖中嬉戏＝冲向湖边＋脱掉衣服＋跳入水中The bys rushed excitedly t the lake，tk ff their clthes and jumped int the water.
第二句：“她抱住儿子”想一想：“抱住儿子”这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？抱住儿子＝冲向前＋蹲下＋一把抱住She dashed frward，knelt dwn and gathered her sn int her arms.
第三句：“这个歌手唱歌”想一想：“唱歌”这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？唱歌＝扫视观众＋深吸一口气＋开始演唱The singer glanced at the audience，tk a deep breath and began t sing.
♦使用非谓语下面用三种模式和三个句子来说明这种描写动作的句子结构。第一种句子模式：现在分词(v.-ing)凸显同一对象同时发生不同的动作。第一句：“老人静坐”想一想：“静坐”这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？静坐＝坐在夕阳下＋看报纸＋听广播The ld man sat under the sunset，reading the newspaper and listening t the radi.
第二种句子模式：having dne 表现动作先后关系。第二句：“没有买到票”想一想：“买票”这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？没有买到票＝排了很久队＋被告知票卖完了Having queued fr 3 hurs，he was tld that the tickets had been sld ut.
第三种句子模式：过去分词(v.-ed)凸显被动。第三句：“孩子们哭了”想一想：“哭”这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？或者孩子们因为什么哭了？哭了＝被感动＋哭了Deeply mved by the stry，the children began t cry.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。An 80-year-ld man was sitting n the sfa in his huse alng with his 45-year-ld highly educated sn.Suddenly a crw(乌鸦) perched(停留) n their windw.
The father asked his sn，“What is this？”The sn replied，“It is a crw.”After a few minutes，the father asked his sn fr the secnd time，“What is this？”The sn said，“Father，I have just nw tld yu；it’s a crw！”After a little while，the ld father again asked his sn fr the third time，“What is this？”
At this time sme expressin f irritatin(恼怒) was felt in the sn’s tne when he said t his father with a rebuff(生硬回绝)，“It’s a crw，a crw.”A little while later，the father again asked his sn the furth time，“What is this？”This time，the sn shuted at his father，“Why d yu keep asking me the same questin again and again，althugh I have tld yu s many times‘IT IS A CROW’.Are yu nt able t understand this？”
A little later the father went t his rm and came back with an ld tattered(发皱的) diary，which he had maintained since his sn was brn.On pening a page，he asked his sn t read that page.
When the sn read it，the fllwing wrds were written in the diary：Tday my little sn aged three was sitting with me n the sfa，when a crw landed n the windw.My sn asked me 23 times what it was，and I replied t him all 23 times that it was a crw.I hugged him lvingly each time he asked me the same questin.I did nt at all feel irritated but I rather felt an affectin fr my inncent sn.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。After reading the diary，__________________________________________________________________________________________Feeling ashamed，the sn gt dwn n his knees befre his father._____________________________________________________
After reading the diary，the sn’s eyes were filled with tears and he began t reflect n the days when he used t sit tgether with his father.His father wuld patiently answer the same questin all 23 times withut feeling irritatin while his father asked him the same questin just fur times! The sn thught t himself: If I attain ld age，hw will my sn lk at me? Will he think f me as a burden? Will he shut at me because f my pr sight，pr hearing r pr understanding?
Feeling ashamed，the sn gt dwn n his knees befre his father.He made an aplgy t his father，begging his father t frgive him fr his bad behavir.He said this alud，“I prmise t see yu happy frever，Dad.It is yu wh have cared fr me ever since I was a little child，shwering yur selfless affectin n me.Yu wrked hard t make mney s that I culd affrd t g t university.I will lk after yu in the best way.”
1.故事情节完整合理，叙述流畅，描写细腻。文中一些动作链的使用使得故事情节更加紧凑，描写更加生动传神。如：(1)After reading the diary，the sn’s eyes were filled with tears and he began t reflect n...(2)He made an aplgy t his father，begging his father t frgive him fr his bad behavir.
2.语言表达形式丰富。(1)强调句和状语从句的使用：It is yu wh have cared fr me ever since I was a little child，shwering yur selfless affectin n me.(2)介词短语的使用：His father wuld patiently answer the same questin all 23 times withut feeling irritatin while his father asked him the same questin just fur times！　　
一、阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。The Water f LifeIt was ne f the httest days f the dry seasn.We had nt seen rain in almst a mnth.The crps were dying.Cws had stpped giving milk.The creeks and streams were lng gne back int the earth.
It was a dry seasn that wuld bankrupt several farmers befre it was thrugh.Every day，my husband and his brthers wuld g abut the tiring prcess f trying t get water t the farm.If we didn’t see sme rain sn，we wuld lse everything.It was n this day that I learned the true lessn f sharing and witnessed the nly miracle I have seen with my wn eyes.I was in the kitchen making lunch fr my husband and his brthers when I saw my six-year-ld sn，Billy，walking tward the wds.He wasn’t walking with the usual carefree abandn f a yuth but with a serius purpse.I culd nly see his back.
He was bviusly walking with a great effrt trying t be as still as pssible.Minutes after he disappeared int the wds，he came running ut again tward the huse.I went back t make sandwiches，thinking that whatever task he had been ding was cmpleted.Mments later，hwever，he was nce again walking in that slw purpseful stride tward the wds.This activity went n fr ver an hur：walking carefully t the wds，and then running back t the huse.Finally，my curisity gt the best f me.I crept ut f the huse and fllwed him n his jurney.
He was cupping bth hands in frnt f him as he walked，very careful nt t spill the water he held.Maybe tw r three tablespns were held in his tiny hands.I sneaked clser as he went int the wds.Branches and thrns slapped his little face but he did nt try t avid them.He had a much greater purpse.As I leaned in t spy n him，I saw an amazing sight.A mther deer with a huge pair f deer hrns appeared in frnt f him，with a baby fawn(幼鹿) lying n the dry grund.I almst screamed t get him away.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。Hwever，Billy walked right up t them._____________________________________________________________________________I witnessed the mst beautiful heart wrking hard t save a life._______________________________________________________
[参考范文]Hwever，Billy walked right up t them.Cautiusly he knelt dwn by the weak baby fawn，seemingly familiar with the tw creatures.The fawn suffering frm dehydratin and heat exhaustin lifted its head up with great effrts and eagerly lapped up the water cupped in my beautiful by’s hands.The mther deer std by as if in guard.Nt until the fawn licked the last drip f water did Billy mve a little bit.I cntained myself nt t make a slightest sund，fr fear f scaring them.
I witnessed the mst beautiful heart wrking hard t save a life.With the water gne，Billy jumped t his feet and met my smiling eyes.Befre he tried t explain，I strde t him and held him tight.As the tears that rlled dwn my face began t hit the grund，they were suddenly jined by ther drps and mre drps and mre.I lked up at the sky.It was as if Gd，Himself，was weeping with pride.The rain that came that day was a miracle，saving ur farm，just like my by saved a life.
二、阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。“I’m ging t schl tday！”annunced my little brther，Trevr，buncing t the breakfast table.Mm lked at me，“Isn’t it great，Annie？Yu’ll bth be at the same schl！And I can’t help remembering his first day t daycare when I had t calm him dwn by blwing kisses.”
Actually，it was nt great at all.Schl used t feel like my thing.But nw he wuld sit in my ld classrm，with my ld teacher.Enugh！I hated t see the naughty Trevr as part f my schl life.As we arrived at the schl gate，Trevr turned t me and asked whether he culd play with me during the break，wrried and hesitant.I shk my head and reminded him f the schl rules: Yu small kids play in the kindergarten area.I stay n the big playgrund!
I pulled Trevr frward and led him t his classrm，where he was greeted by his teacher，Mrs Mrena，“Hell，Trevr！Want t cme and meet the ther kids？”Trevr ndded and let g f my hand.I disappeared in a flash，excited t jin my friends.When the bell rang，I was given a seat by an pen windw where I culd see the kindergarten rm if I lked utside.I faced frward，trying t fcus n what the teacher was saying.Fr n reasn，a questin cntinuusly crssed my mind: Hw was Trevr?
During the break，I frgt all abut Trevr.It was great t be back at schl！I was running t the slide when a lud cry rang ut acrss the playgrund.It sunded familiar.I lked t the kindergarten area.There was Trevr sitting in the sandbx，tears n his face.“I want t g hme！”he hwled.Mrs Mrena was talking t him，but he was still crying.
I tk anther step tward the slide.Then Trevr cried again.My feet turned，and I was running tward him.But there was a fence between the kindergarten area and the big playgrund，and I culdn’t g where he was.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。Then，I did the best thing I culd think f.___________________________________________________________________________Sn the bell rang and the schl was ver.____________________________________________________________________________
[参考范文]Then，I did the best thing I culd think f.I std n the very edge f my playgrund and called，“Trevr！”He lked up and ran t the fence.I blew him a kiss.He stpped crying.I blew anther ne，and he began t smile.“What are yu ding？”Lisa asked.“When my mm used t drp Trevr ff at daycare，she’d calm him dwn by blwing kisses like this，”I explained.“Can I try？”she asked.“Yes，”I said，and she blew Trevr a kiss.Sn Emma and Grace were blwing kisses，t.Trevr just smiled.