　　One weekend in July，Jane and her husband，Tom，had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately，on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake，Jane was so angry that she said to Tom，“I’m going to find a better spot for us to camp，” and walked away.

　　With no path to follow，Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place，she turned around，hoping to see the lake. To her surprise，she saw nothing but the forest and，far beyond，a snow-capped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.

　　“Tom!”she cried. “Help!”No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving，but the farther she walked，the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall，Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark，Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.

　　Jane rose at the break of day，hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling （滴落） somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy，she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now，Jane began to walk along the stream and hoped it would lead her to the lake.

　　As she picked her way carefully along the stream，Jane heard a helicopter. “Is that for me?” Unfortunately， the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later，another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse，thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them down if they came back again.

But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. ____________________________________

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　　It was daybreak when Jane woke up. _________________________________________

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________　　步骤一：品读语篇——抓住要点很关键

　　前文概要

　　审语篇类型：记叙文

　　审时态：一般过去时

　　审前文大意以及要点

　　第一段：露营的路上夫妻吵架，简出走；

　　第二段：简迷路；

　　第三段：简自救，思念汤姆；

　　第四段：简寻找出路；

　　第五段：简听到直升机的声音。

步骤二：戴着镣铐跳舞——研读首句，高度融合原文，合理想象情节

　　①续写第一段所给首句：But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.

　　上文提到简迷路，在野外待了一夜，第二天听到了直升机的声音，她试图吸引直升机的注意。根据第一段的首句提示可知，再没有直升机飞过来，而且夜幕再次降临。本段续写时，要注意描写简继续自救的过程。例如如何度过寒冷的夜晚、简当时的心理感受等。

　　②续写第二段所给首句：It was daybreak when Jane woke up.

　　本段应该描写简继续自救和最终获救的过程。续写时要注意前面提到的直升机以及她是如何引起直升机上人员的注意的。

步骤三：斟酌打磨——丰富续写词汇，生动描述情节

　　话题激活词汇

　　环境：forest，stream，rock，berry，valley，steep，cave，lake，waterfall

困难：hunger，starve，thirsty，injure，broken，blood，panic，shelter，survive（survival），suffer，cold，severe 　　

活动：walk，climb，fall，crawl，taste，attempt，struggle to one’s feet，make one’s way to，pick up

情绪：tired，break down

　　救援：rescue team，doctor，search for

　　意志品质：calm，courage，will

　　评价：amazing，make it

句式翻译

1. 晚上的温度比白天更低了，简穿上了她的黄色上衣。

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2. 她感到身心疲惫。（both...and连接两个状语）

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3. 她继续向前走，因为她真的很想尽快见到汤姆。（because引导原因状语从句）

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4. 简沿着小溪走了大约两个小时，觉得很累，所以她找到了一个平坦的地面来度过漫长而艰难的夜晚。（so连接并列分句）

___________________________________________________________________________________________　　5. 她正沿着溪边走。（主谓状）

___________________________________________________________________________________________　　6. 她听到直升机从头顶上飞过。（主谓宾宾补）

___________________________________________________________________________________________　　7. 直升机发现了她，把她带到了她丈夫那里。（and连接并列成分）

___________________________________________________________________________________________　　8. 他给了她曾经收到过的最温暖的拥抱。（定语从句）

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步骤四：创造性表达——润色注重细节，句式再造升级

1. 将句1升级为so连接的并列句

___________________________________________________________________________________________　　2. 把句2、3升级为含although引导的让步状语从句的复合句

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4. 用be doing...when升级句5、6

___________________________________________________________________________________________5. 把句7、8升级为含who引导的定语从句的复合句

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步骤五：高分在即——连句成篇，认真誊写并仔细检查

But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. ____________________________________

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　　It was daybreak when Jane woke up. _________________________________________

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课时把关练

Part IV Writing

参考答案

步骤三

1. The temperature got lower at night than in the daytime. Jane put on her yellow blouse.

2. She felt exhausted both physically and emotionally.

3.She continued walking forward because she really wanted to meet Tom as soon as possible.

4.Jane followed the stream for about two hours and felt tired，so she found a flat ground to spend the long and hard night.

5.She was walking along the stream.

6.She heard a helicopter flying overhead.

7.The helicopter found her and took her to her husband.

8. He gave her the warmest hug she had ever received.

步骤四

1.The temperature got lower at night than in the daytime，so Jane put on her yellow blouse.

2. Although she felt exhausted both physically and emotionally，she continued walking forward because she really wanted to meet Tom as soon as possible.

3. Following the stream for about two hours，Jane felt tired，so she found a flat ground to spend the long and hard night.

4.She was walking along the stream when she heard a helicopter flying overhead.

5. The helicopter found her and took her to her husband，who gave her the warmest hug she had ever received.

步骤五

　　But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. The temperature got lower at night than in the daytime，so Jane put on her yellow blouse. Although she felt exhausted both physically and emotionally，she continued walking forward because she really wanted to meet Tom as soon as possible. She walked slowly and carefully in darkness. Following the stream for about two hours，Jane felt tired，so she found a flat ground to spend the long and hard night.

　　It was daybreak when Jane woke up. She felt hungry. After a short adjustment，she began the hard trip. She was walking along the stream when she heard a helicopter flying overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse and flagged it wildly in the air. This time，the helicopter found her and took her to her husband，who gave her the warmest hug she had ever received.