中考英语二轮复习书面表达高分作文攻略22 人物介绍 (含答案)

22 人物介绍

相关话题作文素材储备与写作指导

以人物介绍为主要内容的文章，在初中阶段的写作训练中出现较多。该主题源于实际，贴近学生生活。每个人都有自己的情况，可以和学习有关，也可以和娱乐、体育运动等有关。学生在写作中容易做到言之有物，有感而发。

实践案例1

题目

Write a composition in at least 60 words on the topic "Something that I like doing most at home". (以“我在家最喜欢做的事”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文。)

审题

这是篇以“我在家最喜欢做的事”为题的全命题说明文，但具体内容没有限制。题目的要求和指示也非常明确，即围绕“what do 1 like doing most"，why do I like doing it"和"how does it help me"这三个问题进行写作。在写作时，首先需阐明文章的主题，即我在家最喜欢做的事，例如:阅读、绘画、唱歌、演奏乐器、运动、养花种草、烹饪等;其次，可以说明之所以喜欢的原因，以及它带给我的帮助和好处。为了使行文更连贯，可以适当使用一些过渡词和连接词，比如what's more, in addition, as a matter of fact, above all, all in all等，从而使文章更有层次感和逻辑性。同时，也要注意文章的时态，本文的写作应使用一般现在时，尽量避免过于详细地叙述过去的某个事件或经历。

段落结构

本文可采用三段式，即“总一分一总”的写作结构:

●第一段(开头):提出文章的主题，明确阐述说明的主要内容，即在家最喜欢做的事情。●第二段(中心段):文章的中心部分，对主题进行展开说明，可围绕“为什么”及“怎么样”展开。可以适当使用一些承接过渡词，使文章层次分明，要点衔接自然。

●第三段(结尾):文章的结尾段，对全文进行总结，概括事理和观点，起到首尾呼应的效果。

核心语汇

take up (doing) sth.开始从事....

be keen on / be fond of / be interested in (dong) sth.喜欢、热衷于做....

spend ... (in) doing sth.花时间做.....

enjoy I practise doing sth.喜欢/练习做....

make sb. relaxed / excited让...放松/兴奋的

improve one's skill 提高技能

enrich one's mind丰富头脑

broaden one's horizon拓宽视野

cultivate one's interest培养兴趣

gain knowledge from....中获得知识

do good to ......有好处

参考句型

V-ing is a great way to relax myself and gain pleasure....是放松自我获得乐趣的方式。

It is interesting/ relaxing / helpful for sb. to do sth. 对某人来说做某事是有趣/放松/有帮助的

... plays an important role in my daily life....在我的 日常生活中发挥重要作用。

In order to ... we can/ should/ need to ..为了...我们可以/应该/需....

初稿

I like reading most at home.

First, reading can relax myself after doing homework. Second, reading can help me gain more knowledge and understand our life better. Third, reading books can create a silent atmosphere and make me more patient. In addition, it is very interesting and exciting to read some novels or detective stories.

All in all, reading is the thing that I like doing most at home.

点评:

该生的这篇习作内容切题，结构完整，是三段式的总分总结构。语言表达比较流畅，正确使用了动名词做主语的结构、形式主语it的句式以及定语从句。但是，这篇作文的正文部分，作者在阐述阅读的好处时，没有进行详细说明，阐述得不够充分;开头和结尾也显得较为单调和乏味，没有亮点:全文使用的连接过渡词过多。此外，文中还有一些语法和句式错误，比如: reading can relax myself after doing homework,应该改为I can relax myself by reading after doing homework,以确保主、从句逻辑主语一致。

修改稿

I like reading most at home because it plays an important role in my daily life. It has also helped me in many different ways.

First of all, reading makes me more knowledgeable. For example, I can learn more idiomatic expressions by reading English novels. What's more, reading turns out to be a good way to relax and entertain myself. After a long day at school, reading books can bring me a lot of happiness and pleasure.

To sum up, I can gain not only knowledge but pleasure as well through reading. That's why I like reading most at home.

点评:

从结构来看，这篇习作结构完整，是典型的三段式作文，首尾呼应。从内容来看，开头开门见山地说明了阅读对作者的重要性和带来的帮助:文章中心段落分两个层次较为详尽具体地阐明了阅读对作者的帮助，有理有据， 内容详实; 结尾总结了全文的观点，收尾自然。通篇文章用词准确，语言地道，句式丰富。总的来说，是一篇比较好的作文。

习作

Listening to music is my favorite thing to do at home. I always listen to some music and songs in my spare time for various reasons. First and foremost, it is a desirable relaxation when I feel tired after a day's hard work. Besides, listening to music is a perfect way to reduce my pressure and sorrow. Whenever I listen to my favorite songs, I will feel much relaxed. To sum up, listening to music is beneficial to me and it makes my life more colorful

实践案例2

题目

Write at least 60 words on the topic“         has helped me learn a lot” (以“             帮助我学到了很多”为题，写-篇不少于60个词的短文。)

提示:日常学习和生活中有很多事情可以在各个方面帮助我们。请举一个例子加以说明，并谈谈你的体会。

审题

这是篇半命题说明文，写作时应该围绕“what has helped you learn a lot"，“when did you first take it up"和"how did it help you"这三个问题展开。在写作时，首先阐明文章的主题，即带给我帮助的事，其次，可以阐述它在哪些方面帮助了你，并举例说明。但应避免在文章中讲述具体的故事，不要写成记叙文。

段落结构

本文可采用三段式，即“总一分一总”的写作结构。

核心语汇

spare no efforts to do sth.不遗余力地做某事

sb. get/ be familiar with ...某人熟悉......

sth. be familiar to sb.......对某人来说是熟悉的

set out to do sth.开始做....

devote oneself to (doing) sth.专心做，致力.....

lead to/ result in sth.引起，导致....

contribute to (doing) sth.促成，有助于...

make up one's mind to do sth.下定决心做....

be determined to do sth.坚决地做.....

have difficulty 1 trouble (in) doing sth.....有困难

overcome difficulty to achieve success克服困难获得成功

参考句型

■I first learned to play the piano at the age of7.

我七岁第一次学习弹钢琴。

■The first time I took up ... I was deeply attracted by it/I fell in love with it.第一次开始做....我就被深深吸引/我就爱上了它。

■Every time I practise playing the piano, I feel relaxed and delighted.

每一次我练习弹钢琴的时候，我都感到放松和愉快。

The more I learned about ... the more interested I became in it.

.....了解得越多，我就越感兴趣。

■It has helped me to face the difficulties with courage, instead of running away.它帮助我勇敢地面对困难，而不是退缩逃跑。

范文

I've learned to play badminton since I was ten years old. When I play badminton, I not only feel relaxed but also learn a lot. To begin with, I have learned not to give up easily.

Even if I fail in several competitions, I will work even harder to improve my skill because I know if I give up, I will never win. What's more, I have learned to set up a goal before I practise. With a goal in my mind, I will be more determined to overcome any difficulties and to achieve success. Besides, I will be more confident after I win a match. In conclusion,I do enjoy playing badminton for the reason that it has benefited me a lot.

点评:

这篇习作以体育运动为主要内容，开头即简明阐述了打羽毛球带给作者的好处，结尾也恰到好处地对全文进行了总结，并起到了点题的作用。而在正文部分，作者分三个层次依次进行具体说明。针对每个观点，作者都不忘给出实例和细节来进行支撑。

相关话题优秀作文解析

（一）

Miss Black

Miss Black is an excellent teacher. She is a good-looking woman, with gentle manners and a kind smile.

Miss Black likes her work very much. She works very hard and tries her best to make every class perfect. Listening to her lessons is an artistic entertainment. Indeed, she treats her students as her own children. She is very strict with their study, but in the daily lives, she is kind to them. She always shows deep concern for them and makes great efforts to make them more independent.

She is so nice that all the students respect her very much.

参考译文

布莱克老师

布莱克老师是一-位出色的老师。她是一位长得很好看的女士，有着温柔的行为举止和和蔼的微笑。

布莱克老师非常喜欢她的工作。她工作非常努力，力求使每节课都完美。听她讲课就是一种艺术的享受。实际上，她对待学生就像对待她自己的孩子。她对他们学习的要求非常严格，但是在日常生活中，她对他们非常友好。她总是很关心他们，努力使他们更独立。

她是这样的友好，所有的学生都非常尊重她。

亮点词汇

0good-looking 好看的

manner行为举止

artistic艺术的

independent独立的

respect 尊重

出彩句型

She is a good-looking woman, with.她是一位长得很好看的女士，有着...

.... is an artistic entertainment.是艺术的享受。

She treats...as..她将.....当......对待。

She is kind t...她对...很和蔼。

She always shows dep concern for她总是很关心....

高分点评

在作者形象生动的介绍之下，一一个和蔼可亲的布莱克的老师形象跃然纸上。 文章主要对布莱克老师的外貌、教学、育人等方面展开了介绍，详略得当，说明过程有条有理。 文章运用的短语多姿多彩，如"try one's best' "be kind to"等。

（二）

Charlie Chaplin

Charlie Chaplin was born in 1889 in London. He came from a family of artists.His mother was an actress and his father was an actor.

He started dancing and singing for money in 1894. At that time, he lived a poor life. In 1904, he went to America and he became a film director in 1914. He made many funny films from 1914 to 1966. And he also starred in many silent comedies, like Modern Times. He died in 1977. Hearing the news, lots of people were very sad. People all over the world will remember him forever.

Until now, people are still attracted by him and his movies.

参考译文

查理.卓别林

查理.卓别林于1889年出生于伦敦。他来自一个艺术家家庭。他的父母亲都是演员。1894年，他开始通过跳舞、唱歌赚钱。那时，他过着贫穷的生活。1904年， 他去了美国，1914年， 他成为了一名电影导演。1914 年到1966年间，他制作了很多搞笑的电影。他也主演了很多无声喜则，如(摩登时代)。他近于1977年。听到这个消息，很多人都非常伤心。全世界的人们将永远记住他。

直到现在，人们仍被他和他的电影所吸引着。

亮点词汇

come from a family ....来....的家庭

artist 艺术家

actress  女演员

film director电影导演

Place of interest名胜古边

star in...主演....

silent 沉默的

出彩句型

He came from a family of artists.他来自一个艺术家家庭。

He started doing他开始做.....

He lived a poor life. 他过着贫穷的生活。

He made many funny film.他制作了很多有趣的电影。

people are still attracted by.. 人们....吸引着

desert沙漠

高分点评

本文以时间为轴线，截取了查理.卓别林人生中的几个片段进行描述，体现了他伟大的艺术成就和对人们的影响。从结构上看，文章分成了三个部分，详略得当，叙述具体。从词句上看，表达非常地道，如"star in° "live a poor life" "People all over the word will remember him forever"等。