中考英语二轮复习英语写作提高练习专题06 叙事描写类 (含答案)

　  叙事描写类的书面表达是以叙述和描写为主要表达方式，以写人、叙事和经历、写物、绘景等为主要内容的文体：

这一类的书面表达动词现率最高，且富于变化，用得最多的是动词的过去时态，各种时态为辅。合理使用丰富多彩的动词时态是这类书面表达的首要语言特征。人物类书面表达如果是对人的性格、外貌等叙述常用一般现在时，如果通过事件来刻画人物的性格，那么就要用过去时。写好这类书面表达要注意以下几点:

1.头绪分明，脉络清楚

写好书面表达，首先要头绪分明，脉络清楚，明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析，弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程，然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都要围绕五个＂W＂和一个＂H＂来展开，分别是why, what, when, where, who及how。

2.突出中心，详略得当

在文章的框架确定后，对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍，应该从表现文章主题的需要出发，分清主次，定好详略。详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节，略写或粗述那些非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而会使情节罗列化，使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题，也需要一定的技巧。

3.用活语言，准确生动

记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的叙事描写类书面表达的语言既要准确、生动，又要表现力强，这样才能把人、事物描写得具体生动。

1. Among various kinds of things/persons in my mind, ...is the most unforgettable one．

2. On a sunny/rainy morning， while I was...First of all... Then...　After that...  In the end...

加分句子：

1. Sth. impressed me greatly...

2. What impressed me most is that...

经典句型：

1. Last Sunday（Saturday...）, it was sunny（rainy, windy, foggy） 

2. I got up very early （late）. After breakfast I went to with my friends by bike, bus...   

3. We enjoyed ourselves.

4. We forgot the time. We didn’t come back until 5 o’clock.   

5. We all felt very tired, but we were happy.  

6. I thought I would never forget this trip. 

7. Last summer, my parents and I went to Beijing for our holidays.   

8. We visited a lot of places of interest.  

9. We had a good time there. 

10. We bought a lot of things. The clothes here are good and cheap. 

• 人物类书面表达主要通过刻画人物性格，塑造人物形象，反映生活，表现主题，模版如下：

• 叙事和经历类书面表达通过叙述事件的起因、经过和结果表现主题。
• 写景状物类书面表达通过对事物和景点的描述表现主题。文章宜采用总—分—总的结构或总—分的结构，模版如下：

典例一【2020 •河北中考】

李硕今年五岁，他的妈妈疫情期间去支援武汉。请根据下面四幅图片及文字提示写一篇短文。

            say goodbye                                              kiss his mother

            receive a warm welcome                              give her a big hug

注意：（1）短文须包括每幅图片的主要信息，可适当发挥，提示词语供参考；

（2）文中不得出现真实的地名、校名和人名；

（3）词数80左右。开头已给出，不计入总词数。

Li Shuo is a five-year-old boy. One Sunday afternoon, his mother was going Wuhan to help patients there.

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【写作思路】

本题属于看图作文，题目的开头已给出。要求根据图画内容并结合文字提示，发挥想象来写一篇英语作文。写作时要包含每幅图片的主要信息并进行适当发挥。适当使用副词和连词等增加亮点。写好时，再阅读一遍，减少语法错误，不要犯单词拼写上的错误。

【参考范文】

Li Shuo is a five-year-old boy. One Sunday afternoon, his mother was going Wuhan to help patients there. His father took him to say goodbye to her. One day, he saw his mother on TV while she was away. He missed her so much that he kissed his mother across the TV screen. When the outbreak was under control, his mother came back with other medical workers. They received a warm welcome. As soon as his mother got home, Li Shuo gave her a big hug. How he misses his mother!

这是一篇比较优秀的例文。例文紧扣题目要求，根据图画及文字提示，以一般过去时讲述了李硕的妈妈去武汉抗疫到回来的过程中的几个细节。例文简明扼要，结构清晰，语言表达到位。

短语：say goodbye to sb.；across the TV screen；be under control；come back；medical workers；receive a warm welcome；give sb. a hug。

句型：One day, he saw his mother on TV while she was away. (while引导的时间状语从句)；

 He missed her so much that he kissed his mother across the TV screen. (so ... that引导的结果状语从句)；

When the outbreak was under control, his mother came back with other medical workers. (when引导的时间状语从句)；

 As soon as his mother got home, Li Shuo gave her a big hug. (as soon as引导的时间状语从句)；

How he misses his mother! (以how开头的感叹句)

典例二 (2020徐州中考）

.2020 年 6 月 16 日，我市某中学发生了一件感人的事情。请以 What a moving story!为题，写一篇英语短文，简要叙述事情经过并谈谈感想。要点如下：

注意：

（1）词数 90 左右。短文需包含表格中的要点，但不要逐字翻译。

（2）短文已给出的部分（见答题卡）不计入总词数。

（3）短文中不得出现真实姓名、校名和地名。

 参考词汇：空调：air-conditioner    瓷砖：ceramic tile

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【参考范文】

What a moving story!

A moving story happened in a school of our city on 16 June, 2020.

In order not to disturb the students who were studying at school, two workers decided to put in air-conditioners at night. It was rainy and wet. When they were carrying one air-conditioner, they broke one ceramic tile. Feeling sorry for what they had done, they left a note and 50 yuan to pay for the tile. The school, however, didn’t accept the money. The students gave the two workers thumbs up and sent a water-melon to show their gratitude.

I think both the workers and the school have done something right. If we do something wrong, we should be honest and face it bravely. Meanwhile, forgiving others is always appreciated. Just as the saying goes, “one good turn deserves another”.

本文主要用第三人称进行写作，讲述事情主要采用一般过去时态来写作。讲述事情的经过叙述完整且条理清晰。

短语：in order not to; decide to; at night; feel sorry for; pay for; give…thumbs up。

句型：

When they were carrying one air-conditioner, they broke one ceramic tile. (when引导的时间状语从句)；

If we do something wrong, we should be honest and face it bravely. (if引导的条件状语从句)；

Feeling sorry for what they had done, they left a note and 50 yuan to pay for the tile.(what引导的宾语从句)；

In order not to disturb the students who were studying at school, two workers decided to put in air-conditioners at night. (who引导的定语从句)

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【2020吉林长春中考模拟】始于今年年初的新冠病毒(COVID-19) 严重影响了人们的日常生活， 中国举全国之力抗击疫情。请以"COVID-19 Brought People Closer Together" 为题写一篇不少于80词的短文，给学校英语园地投稿，叙述你与家人在抗疫期间亲身经历的一件事或所见、所闻，以及你对这件事情的感悟。(文中不得出现真实的人名和校名)

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【答案】例文：

COVID-19 Brought People Closer Together

Last Sunday, I took part in a special activity themed “Fighting COVID-19” for middle school students. I felt COVID- 19 brought people closer together.

I saw a lot of volunteers. They were all busy with their work. Even though all the people were tired, none of them stopped to have a rest. It is reported that a high school student went to Wuhan on his own to volunteer without telling his mother. He wanted to do what he could to help people in need. He helped the patients distribute food, get medicine, talk to them, and encourage them to face with COVID-19 bravely. I was deeply moved by his behavior.

As middle school students, we should learn from him.

【2019 •甘肃省天水市】“你养我长大，我陪你变老”父母亲一直在为我们的成长默默付出，成长要学会感受爱、回报爱。今天你即将毕业，是向父母表达感激的好机会。请根据以下所给要点，写一篇英语短文。

要点：

(l)给我生命，一直照顾我成长；

(2)努力工作，为我提供良好 生活和教育条件；

(3)拥有爱心，教我学会……；

(4)今天，我要为你们……（自主发挥一至少两点）a

注意事项：

(l)词数80左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数；

(2)文中不得出现真实的地名、校名、人名等信息。

You bring me up. I will be with you in your life. You are important persons in the process of my growth. ____

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【天津市西青区2019年九年级初中毕业生学业考试调查】班里同学成绩有好有差，对于学习成绩好的同学是否愿意和学习成绩差的同学坐在一起呢？我们看看李磊是怎么做的呢，请同学们按照以下内容要点记叙这件事并发表你的观点。

1. 李磊的学习成绩非常好，乐于助人，和班里每个同学都相处融洽

2. 上周，班里新来了一个同学叫做王刚，张老师让他坐在李磊旁边。

3. 王刚成绩不好，上课爱说话惹老师生气。很多人不愿意和他做朋友。

4. 但是李磊帮他学习，并且阻止他上课乱说话过了一段时间他们共同取得了进步。

5. 如果你的身边有王刚这样的 slower student，你会怎么做？

注意：1. 词数：100词左右，短文的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数；

2. 短文需包括表中所有要点，内容可适当发挥，以使行文连贯；

3. 参考词汇：成绩差的学生： a slower student；使老师生气 make sb. angry 乱说话 talk nonsense

Li Lei is a very good student. He is _____________________________________________________________

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A

【参考范文】

You bring me up. I will be with you in your life. You are important persons in the process of my growth.

You give me life and take care of me all the time. When I have problems with my study and life, you are always patient enough to help me and encourage me. In order to let me live a pleasant life and receive good education, you always work hard from morning to evening every day. You are also persons who have a heart full of love.

You are ready to help people in need. It is you who teach me to be a kind person. In the past, I never said “I love you” to you. Today, I will graduate, so I want to say it to you loudly. I will study harder to get better results in the future.

I hope you will be happy and healthy forever.

本篇范文成功地完成了写作任务，按照写作要求，根据词语及问题提示，用简洁的语言，准确地表达出汉语意思，语言流畅。写作思路清晰。

B

Li Lei is a very good student. He is good at studying and ready to help others so he gets on well with his classmates.

Last week a new student called Wang Gang came to his class and Mr. Zhang made him sit next to Li Lei. But Wang Gang is weak in learning and loves talking in class. This made teachers angry Some of the students wouldn’t like to make friends with him. But Li Lei helps him study and stops him talking nonsense in class. After some time, they made great progress together.

If I share a desk with this slow student like Wang Gang, I will help him patiently and learn from each othe

本文属于材料作文，介绍李磊如何帮助差生王刚以及如果你的身边有和王刚一样的差生，你会如何做。根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑，可适当增加内容。

这是一篇优秀的作文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别使用一些亮点词句，如be good at, be ready to do, get on well with, be weak in, make friends with, make great progress, share with, learn from以及过去分词作后置定语。增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。

Venice — a city of great art

Venice, a small,  waterside city in northeast Italy. It has been known as ＂City of Water＂, ＂City of Bridges＂and ＂The Ctiy of Light＂. It is considered by many people to be one of the most beautiful cities in the world.

Between February 21 and March 4, carnival（狂欢节）hits the streets. For most people, carnival means large parties and feasts. But in Venice, it also means traditional masks and costumes. Today, people in Venice still dress up in the strangest ways — as armed soldiers, butches and fishermen, for example.

   威尼斯，一个位于意大利东北部的水边小城。它被称为＂水之城＂，＂桥梁之城＂和＂光之城＂。它被许多人认为是世界上最美丽的城市之一。

   每年的2月21日至3月4日是这儿的嘉年华(狂欢节)。对大部分人来说，狂欢节意味着大型聚会和聚餐。但是在威尼斯，它还意味着传统面具和服装。今天的人们仍然会以最奇怪的方式乔装打扮，比如打扮成武装的士兵、粗鲁的男人或渔民。