技巧02 如何构思情节-高一英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练
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技巧02 如何构思情节
情节是叙事性文本的构成要素之一,由一系列相互关联的事件构成,是叙事性文本中最为典型、最为生动的内容。解读叙事性文本,不仅应抓住情节的起因、发展、高潮、结局,更应抓住情节的内在冲突、矛盾等。一方面,高考续写内容主要集中在情节的高潮和结局部分。此部分反映个体经验及思想上的困惑 与冲突、危机的出现或转折、矛盾冲突以某种方式得到解决及事件的最终结局。因而,合理的续写情节应包括矛盾冲突、危机转折、问题 解决和最终结局。另一方面,高考读后续写不是独立存在的,它是已有叙事情节的延续,这就要求学生在主题、情感、人物和事件等方面与已有情节保持一致 。读后续写中,学生可以利用如下步骤进行故事的情节分析及设置:
1.研读续写源语篇,确定故事话题与主题
读后续写,首先在于“读”。“读”的一个重 要意图在于确定材料的主题 。主题也称之为“中心思想”,是语篇的灵魂 。因此,续写情节应紧紧围绕主题这个核心,突显 主题的现实价值和情感意义。主题的确定有两条途径:一是提炼,二是感悟。认识事物是由浅入深、由表及里的过程。我们要对已有材料进 行分析、归纳、筛选,并从不同的角度进行比较鉴别,去粗取精,由感性到理性,这样才能提炼 出事物的本质和深刻的主题 。感悟来自苦思 而产生的灵感 。苦思的过程就是对材料信息 进行去伪存真、由表及里的感悟过程。主题始终蕴藏着作者的意图或价值取向。主题一般包括中心内容与价值取向两个方面。中心内容是文章所负载的信息 。价值取向是作者想要通过作品传达的思想。作者可能会用标题、一个词、一句话或一段话呈现主题,而学生需要敏锐地获取这些关键信息以提炼出主题及作者的价值取向 。一般来说,作者的价值取向包括历史意义、伦理意义、人生意义、现实价 值、情感价值等。
2.寻找语篇的隐性话语,发现隐藏在故事背后的问题
隐性话语(隐性话语(伏笔))是上文看似无关紧要的事或物,对下文将要出现的人物或事件预先作出的某种提示或暗示。隐性话语(伏笔)有以下三种作用:为故事的展开服务,给予读者暗示;制造悬念,提高读 者继续阅读的兴趣;强调伏线必须有始有终, 前文的迹象提示必在后文中体现 。阅读材料中的隐性话语(伏笔)在续写部分得以体现,才能使得续 文情节合情合理,即学生在续写中要遵循“寻找隐性话语(伏笔)— 回应隐性话语(伏笔)”的写作规则 。然而,隐性话语(伏笔)经常零星散落在试题材料中,不易发觉 。有 时,试题材料中看似“闲笔”之处却是重要的伏笔信息。学生如何才能精准地找出“潜伏”在 试题材料中的隐性话语(伏笔)? 通过梳理历次高考读后 续写试题材料,我们发现,隐性话语(伏笔)通常体现在特 定的人、物(事件)、语言、情感、主人公期待和 反常情境六个方面 。通过关注这六个方面, 我们就能找到隐性话语(伏笔),进而通过回应隐性话语(伏笔)来设置合理的情节。需要注意的是,试题材料中 可能会有很多隐性话语(伏笔),而续写内容不可能回应 所有隐性话语(伏笔),这就需要学生选取有助于推动情 节发展或能突显试题材料价值取向的隐性话语(伏笔)来 设置情节 。例如,以 2021 年6月浙江卷读后续写试题的隐性话语(伏笔)及其回应为例进行详细阐述:
【物(事件)】
隐性话语(伏笔):
①My dad earned money to pay family expenses from age 14.
②I didn’t really understand his world.
③ I thought that I would surpass anything he had accomplished after high school gradua- tion.
④I planned to do with the pay as I wished.
⑤I wasn’t interested more work.
⑥I understood immediately what my parents were worried about.
⑦ the truck
回应:
①He exerted all his energies to support the family without any bitter words.
② I now understand all the efforts my dad put into the family.
③I would never surpass what my dad did for the family due to my little responsibility tak- en for the household.
④I decided to contribute all my money to mend the truck instead of buying a new basket- ball.
⑤That night, before I went to bed, I decided to continue my work if I could because I learned the true meaning of growing up.
⑥⑦My parents had intended to fix the bro- ken truck but couldn’t get enough money to afford it.
通过梳理试题材料中人、物(事件)、语言、 情感、主人公期待及反常情境等隐性话语(伏笔)信息,我们能够快速把握叙事的情节,找到矛盾冲突的 原因,进而发现亟待解决的问题。
3.丰富故事情节的内涵,突出问题解决的实际意义
历次高考读后续写试题材料多为遇险脱困、生活趣事等常见的个体经历,其情节主线并不复杂 。学生三言两语便能写完情节主线内容,而这又引发了另一个问题: 学生写出的情节徒有主线骨架,并无“血肉”。 例如,2021 年新高考I卷读后续写试题中写完 Jenna 和 Jeff做好早餐送到母亲床前,看着母亲吃完早餐的时候,是否就应该结束续写呢?其实不然。 我们还可以从环境、心理、动作、语言和情感等五个方面着手,丰富情节内容,推动问题的解决。
4.聚焦事件发生始末,确保叙事的层次性
叙事文本就是叙述人物活 动、事件发生经过、作者抒发情感的语篇,其结 构一般遵循以下三种顺序:
(1) 时间顺序:叙事主要用来叙述过去发生的事件,这个 事件既可以是真实的,也可以是虚构的 。叙事的特点是,叙事中事件发生的时间顺序就是事件实际发生的时间顺序。如果叙述的时间发生改变,那么叙述的事件也会发生相应改变 。例如:
事件一:On the way home full of excitement, I thought about how to make use of the “huge”sum of money.“I need a new football in the future.”I whispered to myself. Approaching my house, I noticed my dad and mom standing beside the old truck of my family, looking sad.
事件二:On the way home full of excitement, I thought about how to make use of the “huge”sum of money. Approaching my house, I noticed my dad and mom standing beside the old truck of my family, looking sad.“I need a new football in the future.”
事件一是基于 2021年6月 浙江卷读后续写试题材料进行的续写,其传递的是作者可能会改变钱的用途,将钱用于解决家里的困难 。而事件二则恰恰相反,其传递出作者即便知道了家里的困难,仍然想买新足球的想法 。事件一、二传达的意义之所以大相径庭,原因就在于改变了叙述的时间。
(2)空间顺序:叙事文本尤其是关于景物的叙事文本,常常会出现空间位移的现象,这在一定程度上是 由于景物都是以一定的空间为背景的 。空间位移一般可以分为两种:一种是以作者的位置 为中心,推向其他人或物的位置;另 一种是作者在行动中,按行动路线所涉及的空间逐个叙事状物,即人们常说的“移步换形”。 例如:
(2018年6月浙江卷读后续写 ) I knew we had gotten hopelessly lost. After seemingly ages, there came a loud cry of my dad. As a quick response, I shouted in a loud voice.“Dad, I’m here!”Tracing my voice, Dad finally found me and we got reunited.
( 2021年6月浙江卷读后续写)On the way home full of excitement, I thought about how to make use of the“huge” sum of money. Approaching my house, I noticed my dad and mom standing beside the old truck of my family, looking sad. That night, before I went to bed, I decided to continue my work if I could because I learned the true mean- ing of growing up.
(3)情感顺序:情感顺序指将客观事物固有的逻辑关系巧妙地组合在思想情感发展的线索中,组成一个层次式的语篇,体现了人在认识事物过程中的情感变化与不断成长的心路历程,以及面对 矛盾冲突时的思想转变和情感变化 。情感层次的不断提升不仅有助于推动情节的发展、矛盾冲突的解决,更有助于突显语篇的情感价值,进一步升华主题 。例如:
( 2021 年6月浙江卷读后续写 ) From age 14, my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses. I didn’t really understand his world either. At home, my dad said, “A job’s a big step to growing up. I’m glad you will be contributing to the household. ”My dad’s words made me realize that my earnings might not be mine to do with as I wished. My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasn’t interested. I decided it was not fair that I had to contribute my money.
I understood immediately what my parents were worried about. My parents had intended to buy a new truck but couldn’t get enough money to afford it. Suddenly, I realized what I should do my part in the family responsibilities. Hold- ing the money, I said,“Dad, here is what I got for my work. I hope it would help. ”That night, before I went to bed, I decided to continue my work if I could because I learned the true mean- ing of growing up.
2021 年6月浙江卷读后续写试题材料体现出作者情感 层次的不断递进和升华 。首先,语篇描写了作者情感的第一层次---自私 。作者不理解为 何父亲从小就赚钱养家,对父亲暗示他要将打 工赚来的钱用于补贴家用较为抵触 。两周后,作者便萌生了不愿再工作的想法,并认为将自 己辛苦赚来的钱用于补贴家用是不公平的 。接着,语篇描写了作者情感的第二层次---责 任 。当作者意识到父母因没有足够的钱购买 全家赖以生存的卡车而担忧时,他主动把赚来的钱交给父母。最后,语篇描写了作者情感的第三层次---成长 。作者决定继续工作,主动承担起一份家庭责任 。上述语篇通过情感描写的不断递进,既推动了情节的发展,又突显了主题。
5.基于故事进展引入新角色,以合理解决矛盾冲突
续写内容中最主要的情节就是故事的高潮部分。所谓高潮就是矛盾冲突激化最激烈、 涉事各方最终角力即将分出胜负的关键节点。一旦矛盾冲突得以解决,叙事就走向结局。在有些情形下,主人公会碰到自己无法解 决的矛盾冲突,此时就需要叙事材料中其他涉 事人或物来帮助主人公走出困境 。如果协助 主人公走出困境的其他人或物已在试题材料 中出现,我们称之为介质。介质在高考读后续 写试题中经常出现。介质就是作者安排的某 个人物或事件为下一个人物或事件的出现埋 下的隐性话语(伏笔)。如果协助主人公走出困境的人 物或事件没有出现在试题材料中,或试题材料 只是暗示这一人物或事件即将出现,我们称之
为第三方角色 。第三方角色引入的唯一目的 就是帮助主人公脱离困境,使叙事朝着主人所期待的结局发展 。例如,2020年7月浙江卷读后续写试题最后解决人熊大战这一矛盾冲突的第三方角色是护林员(rangers)。护林员这个角色虽然在所给材料中并未出现,但试题材料已对其进行了暗示“I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way. ”。叙事情节中矛盾冲突的解决要遵循“意料之外,情理之中”的原则,即无论作 者设计的情节多么惊险曲折,介质的回应或第 三方角色的引入必须合乎情理,并能助力问题 的解决。
6.点明人物或故事的结局,回应源语篇的隐性话语
结局是指一系列事件的结束,包括人或物 的下场、目的的实现或失败等。叙 事的结局是指主要矛盾冲突解决后至故事结束的阶段。在此阶段,事件最终以符合主人公 预期的结局收尾,即便结局不符合主人公预期,那也对主人公有着重要的意义或价值。结局是建立在开端、发展、高潮基础上的对整个故事情节所做的最后完结和交待,其不是孤立存在的,具有不可替代性。结局若设置巧妙则 对作品的内容、主旨都具有画龙典型句式之用;结 局若草率结束则成狗尾续貂之憾。结局的设置有虚实两种情况 。虚的结局是指作者不直截了当告知读者事件的准确结局,而是留有 空间让读者去想象;实的结局是指作者明确告知读者事件的结局 。例如, 在 2018 年 6 月浙江卷读后续写试题中,对于“we”能否找到回农场的路,虚的结局可以设置为“And just when all hope seemed lost, anxious shouts were heard in the distance with torches coming into sight. ”,实的结局则可以设置为“Finally, Uncle Paul found us and we were back, safe and sound. ”。因此,成功的结局只是叙事活动在时空上的暂时停止,其文本的现实价值与精神意 义由读者去想象和阐释,从而赋予文本更长久 的生命力。
1.阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
Anna was the school's best dancer and this was what she told her parents everyday. “Mrs.Kelly says I am very gifted,” she said, “She says maybe I will be the best dancer in our ballet(芭蕾)team. ”
Mrs. Kelly had said these things, but she had said so to a number of dancers in order to encourage them because she believed it’s important to get students inspired. Anna was also inspired by her words to be winner and beat everyone else. However, Mrs Kelly actually preferred that Anna just liked to dance on the stage.
“Students! Students!”Mr. Kelly called to the small group of girls around Anna. “I’d like to introduce to you our new student, Sally. She loves dancing as you do. I hope you all take time to say hi to her nicely.”
Anna looked at Sally with dancing shoes in her hands. Sally did not have a dancer’s body: She was short, with legs that looked like they belonged to a frog instead of an eleven-year-old girl. Anna felt relaxed and was sure this girl would not dance well.
In the following weeks, however, it turned out that Anna made a wrong guess about Sally’s dancing performance. In fact, Sally was not jut a good dancer, but an amazingly gifted dancer. She danced in beautiful ways that Anna thought was impossible for such a short girl.
What’s more, Sally was a nice girl. She often helped girls with difficult dance moves. She was active, She was smart, and everyone liked her. It seemed that Sally was taking everything away from Anna.
Anna was sad and mad. The school ballet team would pick out the best dancer in only two weeks. She worried that Sally would win the contest and become the best dancer.
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1.所续写短文词数应为150左右;
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Anna felt upset and then she thought out a plan.
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Sally put on her dancing shoes, feeling something wrong with them.
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2.阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I ever studied at a school that was down the street from a homeless shelter (收容所). The shelter was right next door to a little gas station where they sold breakfast daily. I would rode my bike to the station. I would buy a sandwich and a coke every morning from the store. There was always someone standing around outside asking for money to get something to eat. As my family wasn’t rich, I hardly had money to spare, but sometimes I would give the homeless my change until I noticed most of them would go inside and buy a beer with the money instead of food. I stopped giving out my change and just told them I didn’t have money.
One day, as I was walking out of the store, I noticed an old man who was obviously homeless. However, interestingly, he was always wearing a nice suit (西装) and a tie and just sitting on the sidewalk watching the cars go by. When I walked past him, he asked me in a very kind voice whether I had any change to spare so that he could get a sandwich. Before I could say a word, he added that he wasn’t wanting “beer money”. I had just enough money in my pocket that day to pay for another sandwich and a can of coke. So, I just walked back inside the store and bought him some breakfast. When I came out and gave it to him, his eyes lit up. He said, “Thank you very much!” We sat and talked for a minute before I had to go to school.
It became an everyday ritual (习惯). I learned that his name was Massey and from Africa. Whenever I had the to spare, I would buy two sandwiches and two cokes. We would sit outside the store, have our breakfast together and talk for a while until it was time for me to go to school.
For a while, I stopped buying our breakfast every morning because my brother’s birthday was coming up. I wanted to save up so that I could buy him a gift. I explained to Massey the reason and he said he understood, but still sat and talked with me.
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My brother’s birthday finally came and I felt depressed because I hadn’t too much money to buy him a gift.
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The next day when it came time for our morning chat, I asked Massey if he had left the gift on my bike.
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3.阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My father is a practical man. He can’t explain calculus (微积分) , but he can tell you how much pressure boiler needs. He put himself through night school to become an engineer, but that was only after he worked as an electrician and a mechanic.
One day we walked by a toy store window. Sitting in the corner was the most unusual dollhouse (玩具屋) I’d ever seen. It was shaped like an upturned log.
“Oh, Daddy,” I said, “isn’t it beautiful? Do you think Santa Claus will bring it to me?”
Dad looked at the $100 price tag—an exorbitant (过高的) figure in those days. “I think even Santa couldn’t afford this house,” he joked, hiking up his belt as he often does when he’s nervous. “Maybe one day, sweetheart.”
On Christmas morning, I awoke early and raced downstairs. In the dim (昏暗的) light, I made out some wrapped boxes under the tree—but none large enough to contain my dollhouse. Dad could see my disappointment. He pulled me onto his lap and gently told me how, as a boy, he had wanted a red wagon, but his father couldn’t afford one. He said he made his own from wood and old wheels he found. “I’ll make one for you,” Dad promised me.
And right after Christmas, despite all the unfinished projects at home, he started it. I had thought it was an easy toy to make, but every step of the long process was more complex (复杂的) than I had expected. Night after night, Dad would come home from his job dead tired, yet he’d always find time to work on the log house. In the dim light, dad was always busy creating my dollhouse.
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I hesitated (犹豫) , wondering if I should help mу father.
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In all, it took one month of hard work by us.
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4.阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Thirty years ago, Cayley was greatly surprised to find that she had a brother. She made up her mind to find him. Since then she refused to leave the home she grew up in, hoping that her brother would knock on the door one day. Little did Cayley know that her brother, Nick Rhoades, had been longing to do so, but only to walk away at the last minute. But thanks to the TV programme Long Lost Family, the pair have enjoyed an emotional reunion.
Cayley’s mum Jacqueline left the family when her daughter was only seven to start a new life in America. Cayley was brought up by her grandmother Victoria, who died in 2001, and she clearly remembered first finding out about her brother Nick. Cayley was quite angry with the fact that was covered up. So she was determined to find her brother no matter what difficulties she would meet with.
Many years later, Cayley, her husband, Colin, and their children were still staying in the house where she grew up because she always had hope that one day her brother would knock on the door. Her husband Colin was very understanding and even though they had two other houses to move to, they stayed in the same house. She never gave up hope.
Meanwhile, when Nick knew he was adopted, he did ask his parents questions and they told him everything they knew. His adoptive parents were so loving and his mum had adopted hundreds of children. Nick had been one of those lucky kids. He had lived a really very happy childhood. Sadly, when Nick was 18 his adoptive mum died of cancer. After several years, his adoptive father also died. Nick was extremely sad during that period of time. Once again, he became a poor orphan without parents, which led him to make the decision to find his birth mum Jacqueline.
Nick had been given his birth certificate (出生证) by his adoptive parents with an address on it.
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Nick and his wife Sandra decided to find his mother’s house.
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Thankfully, Nick’s sister Cayley and Nick’s wife Sandra both turned to Long Lost Family for help.
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5.阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Shoes are made for walking.
But Aamir, a homeless Indian boy, doubted it. Wandering the noisy railway platform, he found one of his flip-flops (人字拖鞋) broken again. He hurried to a corner, sat down and tried to fix it, his bare foot pressing awkwardly against the ground. However, it was beyond repair.
He gave up and looked around aimlessly, staring at people’s shoes. Suddenly, his eyes were drawn to two boyish legs wearing flawlessly white socks and equally perfect black leather shoes, which were glittering in the mid-day sun. It was a boy of his age. He couldn’t treasure his possession too much, obviously, because every ten seconds, he stopped, bent down and carefully wiped a dust or two from his shoes. His father was constantly glancing over and urging him, “Hurry up! The train is coming!”
Aamir’s eyes followed the father and son, but mostly the leather shoes, as if enchanted (被施魔法的). Imagining himself wearing them, the comfort from the good leather, jaw-dropping look on his friends’ faces, he couldn’t help cracking a big smile.
The bell of the train drew him back; the fancy-shoe boy and his father were about to get aboard. They tried to crowd into the doorway. However, the instant the boy entered the compartment (车厢), one of his shoes fell off and before he could pick it up, the train began to pull away.
The shoe was now lying alone on the platform. Aamir’s eyes lit up with excitement. Like an arrow, he shot for the shoe and then picked it up, holding it with both hands as if holding the Queen’s crown. After a few seconds of hesitating and looking from the shoe to the train and back, he began racing--with only one good shoe, his flip-flop.
He held the leather shoe up, trying to pass it to the boy through the window, who was desperately reaching out his hand as well. However, it was never close enough.
Para 1: That left Aamir no choice but to throw the shoe onto the train.
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Para 2: But when he raised his head, Aamir saw the other shoe thrown out of the window.
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参考答案
1.【参考范文】
Somehow, she even was a little excited about the plan when thinking that maybe she would be the best dancer. She began to think of the plan carefully. Firstly, she thought Sally must perform badly and leave a terrible impression on audience on the stage. Therefore, she decided to put something that couldn’t be found in Sally’s shoes. An idea hit her: sand, which seemed to be the most suitable thing for this plan. As a result, Anna put some sand in Sally’s shoes secretly.
However, she insisted on dancing with the smiling expression to present the perfect condition. All these things were caught by Anna who was standing on the wing. Looking at her insistence with pain, Anna felt a sense of guilt instead of the pleasure from success of the plan. So, Anna told the truth in shame and chose to withdraw from the competition after Sally limped painfully off the stage. To her surprise, Sally smiled and said, “it’s the friendship rather than the best dancer that matters.” Anna was moved deeply and headed for the stage.
【写作指导】本文以人物线索展开,讲述了自傲的芭蕾舞者Anna接受不了转来的舞蹈生Sally,但是出乎意料的是,Sally不仅是一位很有天赋的舞者,而且活泼聪明,大家都很喜欢她。得知学校要在两周内挑选出最好的舞者,Anna担心Sally会赢得比赛。
1. 段落续写
①由第一段首句内容“Anna感到不安,然后她想出了一个计划。”可知,第一段可描写Anna的计划是如何生成和落实的。
②由第二段首句内容“Sally穿上舞鞋,觉得有点不对劲。”可知,第二段可描写Sally坚持表演,Anna对自己的行为感到内疚。
2. 续写线索
Anna计划的生成过程以及落实——Sally察觉不对劲但坚持表演——Anna感到内疚并退赛——Sally安慰——Anna深受感动
3. 词类激活
行为类
①留下印象:leave an impression on sb./impress sb.
②坚持:insist on
③退赛:withdraw from the competition
情绪类
①感到内疚:feel guilty/feel a sense of guilt
②感动的:moved/touched
【典型句式】
【高分句型1】Somehow, she even was a little excited about the plan when thinking that maybe she would be the best dancer. (运用了when引导的时间状语从句的省略,宾语从句)
【高分句型2】Looking at her insistence with pain, Anna felt a sense of guilt instead of the pleasure from success of the plan. (运用了现在分词短语作伴随状语)
2.【参考范文】
My brother’s birthday finally came and I felt depressed because I hadn’t too much money to buy him a gift. That morning, I decided to buy two sandwiches and two cokes. I wanted to share breakfast with Massey. However, I didn’t see him. I felt upset and went to buy a sandwich. To my surprise, when I walked out fromthe store, I found, on the seat, an electrical train and a birthday card that said “Happy Birthday” with a little smiley face. When I looked around, I could see Massey walking into the shelter.
The next day when it came time for our morning chat, I asked Massey if he had left the gift on my bike. He avoided the question. He asked if my brother had a good birthday. I never got him to give me a straight answer about the birthday gifts, but I knew it was him. I showed my gratitude for what he did for us. Not too long after that, Massey moved away. However, every year on my brother’s birthday and mine, we would get a card in the mail with no return address that said nothing but “Happy Birthday” with a little smiley face.
【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了作者在读书时总是会给无家可归的人零钱,但在注意到大多数人用钱来买啤酒而不是食物后,就不再给他们零钱了。一天,作者遇到一位需要零钱来买食物的老人,用自己的零钱给老人梅西买了食物,这形成了一种日常习惯,作者总是给老人买早餐并和老人聊聊天。作者在为哥哥准备生日礼物的时候,向梅西解释不再给他准备早餐了,梅西表示理解,并继续坐着与作者交谈。
1.段落续写
①由第一段首句内容“我哥哥的生日终于到了,我感到很沮丧,因为我没有太多钱给他买礼物。”可知,第一段可描写作者准备和梅西一起吃早餐时没有看到梅西,但是在自己的座位上发现了生日礼物和生日贺卡。
②由第二段首句内容“第二天,当我们早上聊天的时候,我问梅西是否把礼物忘在我的自行车上了。”可知,第二段可描写虽然梅西没有承认是自己送了礼物,但是作者知道是梅西,并对其表示感激。
2.续写线索
感觉沮丧——去见梅西——看到礼物——询问梅西——表示感激——生日贺卡
3.词汇激活
行为类
①决定做:decide to do/make up one’s mind to do
②买:buy/purchase
③知道:know/be aware of
情绪类
①失望的:upset/disappointed
②表示感谢:show my gratitude/express my thanks
【典型句式】
【高分句型1】He asked if my brother had a good birthday. (由连接词if引导宾语从句,作asked的宾语)
【高分句型2】 I showed my gratitude for what he did for us.(由连接词what引导宾语从句,作介词for的宾语)
3.【参考范文】
I hesitated, wondering if I should help my father. But he seemed to know what I thought and one night said to me with a smile, “I need your help. Let’s create the dollhouse together.” “But, daddy, I don’t know how,” said I. “That doesn’t matter. I will teach you,” said my father. So every night when he worked on the dollhouse, I would sit by his side and he would patiently and lovingly teach me how to make such a toy. It was really not easy, but our efforts paid off and we finally made it.
In all, it took one month of hard work by us. My joy was beyond description at that moment. Then I heard my father saying, “I can build a lot of things, but I can’t build your life. All I can do is to help you build your own.” I would always remember his words, so the dollhouse became the most special gift to me. Long after I gave up playing dolls, I would occasionally bring it down from the attic just to admire it and remember those days when we worked together to bring my dream to life.
【写作指导】这是一篇记叙文。文章讲述了作者和父亲一起路过一家玩具店的橱窗,看到一个玩具屋,作者很喜欢,但是价格很贵,最后作者和父亲一起经过一个月的辛苦,完成了一个玩具屋的制作。
1. 段落续写:
①. 由第一段首句内容“我犹豫了,不知道我是否应该帮助我的父亲。”可知,第一段可描写父亲看出作者的想法然后主动和作者说让其帮忙的场景和之后他们一起制作玩具屋的过程。
②. 由第二段首句内容“总之,我们花了一个月的时间辛勤工作。”可知,第二段可描写玩具屋做成之后作者的喜悦之情和父亲对作者的教诲以及作者自己的感悟。
2. 续写线索:不知是否应该帮忙——想法被看出——一起制作玩具屋——一个月后做成——心情喜悦——父亲教诲——感悟
3. 词汇激活
行为类
①. 创作:create/produce
②. 教:teach/instruct
③. 欣赏:admire/appreciate
情绪类
①. 亲切地;充满爱意地:lovingly/affectionately
②. 愉悦;高兴:joy/delight
【典型句式】
[高分句型1]. But he seemed to know what I thought and one night said to me with a smile. (运用了what引导的宾语从句)
[高分句型2]. I would occasionally bring it down from the attic just to admire it and remember those days when we worked together to bring my dream to life. (运用了when引导的定语从句)
4.【参考范文】
Nick and his wife Sandra decided to find his mother’s house. It felt so strange that Nick knew it was exactly the house when they were approaching it. He had a feeling that he had been living here long long time ago. He was eager to knock at the door, but he stopped all of a sudden. His concern was that he might interrupt his mother. He didn’t want to go into the house directly and told her they were her son and daughter-in-law.
Thankfully, Nick’s sister Cayley and Nick’s wife Sandra both turned to Long Lost Family for help. Cayley wanted to find her little brother, and Sandra wanted to help her husband find about his mum. Cayley was asked lots of personal questions. She burst into tears when she knew they were about her brother. When they finally met, Nick knew it was exactly his sister. They were so alike, even their gestures or ways of speaking were the same. A month later, Nick was reunited with his mum, who flew back from America. They are always meeting up from then on.
【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了失散多年的姐弟二人在 Long Lost Family节目的帮助下重逢的故事。
1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“Nick和他的妻子Sandra决定找到他母亲的房子。”可知,第一段可描写Nick和妻子寻找自己的姐姐和自家的老房子,以及见面时候的感受。
②由第二段首句内容“幸运的是,Nick的姐姐Cayley和尼克的妻子Sandra都向 Long Lost Family节目寻求帮助。”可知,第二段可描写在该节目的帮助下,节目在对当事人进行询问的情况以及弟弟与姐姐团聚时的场景。
2.续写线索:得知家中有个弟弟走散——姐姐决心寻找弟弟——与弟弟失之交臂——在Long Lost Family节目的帮助下和弟弟团聚——定期探望保持联系
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.接近:approach /get close to
②.进入:go into/enter
③.团聚:reunion /reunite/get together
情绪类
①.渴望,热情:be eager to do/be enthusiastic to do
②.大哭:burst into tears/burst out doing
【典型句式】
[高分句型1]. She burst into tears when she knew they were about her brother. (由连接词when引导的时间状语从句以)
[高分句型2]. A month later, Nick was reunited with his mum, who flew back from America.(由关系代词who引导非限制性定语从句)
5.【参考范文】
That left Aamir no choice but to throw the shoe onto the train. With his eyes fixed on the window, Aamir put all his strength in his right hand and made a powerful throw. However, he abruptly fell off because of the broken flip-flop. Without a second thought, he tried again, the shoe just flew past the window frame and fell on the platform like a dead leaf. Seeing this, Aamir stamped his feet, wearing a frustrated look. “Are shoes really made for walking?”, Aamir thought with depression. He drooped his head, not knowing what to do next.
But when he raised his head, Aamir saw the other shoe thrown out of the window. Miraculously, it landed on the platform several steps away from him. Before he could look up again and seek out the fancy-shoe boy, the train sped on, vanishing in the distance. What remained in sight was the meandering rail track and the rolling mountains far away. Twenty years later, when he was launching his new footwear product at a press conference, wearing a pair of shining leather shoes, Aamir started his presentation with a simple sentence: “Shoes are made for walking.”
【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开。无家可归的印度男孩阿米尔坐在站台上,看着自己破旧的人字拖鞋不禁感到一阵悲伤。这时,他突然被一个和他同龄的小男孩的皮鞋所吸引。男孩儿在赶火车时,掉了一只皮鞋。阿米尔捡到皮鞋后犹豫了几秒钟,然后开始奔跑,企图把这只皮鞋还给火车上的男孩。
1. 段落续写
①由第一段首句内容“这让阿米尔别无选择,只能把鞋子扔到火车上。”可知,第一段可描写阿米尔为了把鞋子还给男孩所做出的努力。
②由第二段首句内容“但是当阿米尔抬起头时,他看到另一只鞋被扔出了窗外。”可知,第二段可描写男孩把鞋扔给阿米尔后,对阿米尔人生的影响。
2. 续写线索:阿米尔没有鞋——小男孩鞋掉了——阿米尔扔鞋——小男孩送鞋——感悟
3. 词汇激活
行为类
①扔:throw/throw away/throw over
②固定:fix on/focus on
③掉下来:fall off/drop off
④下垂:droop/lower
⑤消失:vanish/disappear/gone
情感类
①有力的:powerful/strong/hefty
②沮丧的:frustrated/dispirited/depressed/disheartened/disappointed
③奇迹般地:miraculously/amazingly/surprisingly
【典型句式】
【高分句型1】With his eyes fixed on the window, Aamir put all his strength in his right hand and made a powerful throw.(使用了独立主格结构作伴随状语)
【高分句型2】Before he could look up again and seek out the fancy-shoe boy, the train sped on, vanishing in the distance.(使用了before引导时间状语从句和现在分词表进行)
【高分句型3】What remained in sight was the meandering rail track and the rolling mountains far away.(使用了what引导主语从句)
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