11 感恩 中考英语满分作文赏析

11 感恩

NO.1

（2022·湖北湖北·中考真题）在你的成长历程中，有许多值得感恩的人，如父母，老师，同学……他们或帮助过你，或影响到你，你最想感恩谁？请根据以下提示，用英语写一篇短文。

要点提示：1. 他/她有什么特点（外貌，性格……）？

2. 他/她对你影响最深的一件事是什么？

3. 你想怎样感谢他/她？

写作要求：1. 词数90左右（开头已经给出，不计入总词数）；

2. 根据要点提示，可以适当发挥；

3. 文中不得出现真实的姓名及校名。

参考词汇：be grateful to对……心存感激；have an influence on对……有影响；

care about关心；unforgettable难以忘怀的

The Person I Want to Express My Thanks

In my life, many people helped and influenced me a lot. The person I want to express my thanks most is... _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

【满分作文赏析】

The Person I Want to Express My Thanks

In my life, many people helped and influenced me a lot. The person I want to express my thanks most is my English teacher Mr. Lee. He is tall and thin. He has short black hair and wears glasses. He is always friendly and patient with us.

When I was in Grade 8, my English was very poor. One day, he asked me to take part in an English speech contest. He said, “Your pronunciation is really good. Try your best. I believe in you”. With the help of Mr. Lee, I got the first prize. My English improved a lot.

Mr. Lee has a great influence on me, I am grateful to him. I will work hard to become better. I think that’s the best gift for my dear teacher.

【解析】

1.题干解读：本文主要以“The Person I Want to Express My Thanks”为题并结合题干中的问题进行写作，介绍你最想感谢的人，可适当增加细节。

2.写作指导：本文以一般现在时和一般过去时为主，人称以第二人称和第三人称为主。第一段介绍自己想感谢的人的特点；第二段讲述他对你影响最深的一件事；第三段讲述你会如何感谢他。写作时运用不同的句式和短语使文章层次清晰、逻辑清楚，做到无单词拼写和语法错误。

NO.2

（2022·湖南湘潭·中考真题）亲爱的同学，恭喜你即将毕业。在过去的三年初中学习中，你的老师教导、关心、帮助过你。请你选择一位老师，表达你对他（她）的感激之情。

内容包括：

1.你对这位老师的印象；

2.你感谢他（她）的原因；

3.你对他（她）的祝福。

注意：

1.词数在80词左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）；

2.可适当举例或拓展；

3.文中不能出现可能透露真实身份的任何信息（如校名，师生名字等）。

It’s time for me to say goodbye to my junior school life. I’m here to say thanks to _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

【满分作文赏析】

It’s time for me to say goodbye to my junior school life. I’m here to say thanks to my English teacher Mr. Zhang. She is very kind and patient. She has helped me a lot in my studies since I came to this school. When I was in trouble, she used to encourage me and give me some good advice. At one time I failed to pass an English test and I was very sad about it. She came and cheered me up. She told me some good ways to improve my English. With her help, I have made great progress in English. I’m so thankful to her for her kind help that I will work harder and try to do better in the future. I hope she will become better and better.

【解析】

1.题干解读：该题目属于记叙文写作，本文开头已经给出，选择一位你想要感谢的老师，表达感激之情，根据提示要点进行写作，可以适当发挥。

2.写作指导：本文主要用第一人称和第三人称来描述，时态以一般过去和一般现在时为主。本文可以采用一段式写作，要求描述对老师的印象，感谢的原因以及对老师的祝福。写作时保持主谓一致性，做到无语法和标点错误。

NO.3

（2022·江苏无锡·中考真题）生命中总有一些值得我们感恩的人。最近，无锡教育电视台将举办题为“The Person I Want to Thank”的英语演讲比赛。假如你想感谢身边某位对你有影响的人(父/母亲、老师、 朋友……)，请根据以下流程图写一篇英文演讲稿参加比赛。

注意事项：

1. 演讲稿须根据流程图自拟，要求语句通顺、意思连贯、符合题意；

2. 流程图中括号部分为非限定性内容，仅供参考；

3. 词数在100个左右，演讲稿的首尾已在答题卡上给出，不计入总词数；

4. 演讲稿中不得使用真实的个人及学校信息；

5. 演讲稿必须写在答题卡指定的位置上。

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【满分作文赏析】

The Person I Want to Thank

In my junior school life, many people have helped me. I thank them very much. But the person I want to thank most is my English teacher Miss Lee.

Miss Lee is beautiful with long hair. And she is kind. She helps me a lot. She often helps me with my English. When I am in trouble, she always encourages me to face my difficulties and gives me good advice. I still remember that once I failed in an important English exam and was upset. She cheered me up and told me some good ways to improve my English. With her help, I made great progress in English and became interested in it. I’m very thankful for all that she has done for me. She has a great influence on me, and her help is very useful for my future development.

【解析】

1.题干解读：本文是一篇演讲稿。写作时要根据汉语提示的内容，写出最想感谢的人是谁；他/她的外表、性格；举例说明为何感谢他/她；以及对你的影响。

2.写作指导：本文应该以第一人称和第三人称为主来叙述内容；叙述想感谢的人的外表和性格时应用一般现在时，叙述具体的故事时应用一般过去时。同时写作时注意语句的连贯性，保证词汇和语法的正确使用。