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【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
A man came hme frm wrk late again, tired and irritated , t find his 5-year ld sn waiting fr him at the dr. "Daddy, may I ask yu a questin?"
"Yeah, sure, what is it?" replied the man.
"Daddy, hw much mney d yu make an hur?"
"That's nne f yur business. What makes yu ask such a thing?" the man said angrily.
"I just want t knw. Please tell me, hw much d yu make an hur?" pleaded the little by.
"If yu must knw, I make $20.00 an hur."
"Oh," the little by replied, head bwed.
Lking up, he said, "Daddy, may I brrw $10.00 please?"
The father was furius . "If the nly reasn yu wanted t knw hw much mney I make is just s yu can brrw sme t buy a silly ty r sme ther nnsense, then yu march yurself straight t yur rm and g t bed. Think abut why yu're being s selfish. I wrk lng, hard hurs everyday and dn't have time fr such childish games."
The little by quietly went t his rm and shut the dr. The man sat dwn and started t get even madder abut the little by's questining. Hw dare he ask such questins nly t get sme mney. After an hur r s, the man had calmed dwn, and started t think he may have been a little hard n his sn. Maybe there was smething he really needed t buy with that $10.00 and he really didn't ask fr mney very ften. The man went t the dr f the little by's rm and pened the dr.
"Are yu asleep sn?" he asked.
"N daddy, I'm awake," replied the by.
"I've been thinking, may be I was t hard n yu earlier," said the man.
"It's been a lng day and I tk my ut n yu. Here's that $10.00 yu asked fr."
The little by sat straight up, beaming. "Oh, thank yu daddy" he yelled.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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Then, the little by reaching under his pillw…
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After hearing what the by said, the man felt s srry fr what he had said t his sn.
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：一位父亲工作很晚回到家，他5岁的儿子问他工作一个小时多少钱并向他借10美元。父亲对此很生气并朝儿子发了火。事后，父亲仔细思考后觉得儿子可能有所困难才开的口，所以最后还是借了钱。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为父亲the man和他5岁的儿子the little by。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。父亲工作很晚回到家；儿子问父亲工作一个小时多少钱并向他借10美元；父亲为此生了气并叫儿子回自己房间反思；父亲考虑后觉得儿子事出有因便最后借了这10美元给儿子。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(develpment)。故事总体的发展应该是儿子用他借的10美元和自己已有的零用钱买了父亲一个小时的时间，此件事情让父亲反思自己以前花太少的时间陪儿子了。续写第一段：根据第二段开头提示的句子，小男孩接下来的行为让父亲感到惭愧。所以可能是小男孩拿着借的钱给父亲买了份礼物，也可能是小男孩拿着向父亲借的钱和自己已有的钱买了父亲一个小时的时间。续写第二段：父亲为自己说过的话感到抱歉，可以写父亲之后用实际行动来弥补儿子，也可以写父亲开始反思以前太把重心放在工作上，而忽略了应多花点时间陪陪儿子。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(pints)。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点：”What wuld the by d after he gt father’s $10.00? Wuld he just buy a silly ty r sme ther nnsense fr himself just like what his father said? Wuld he d smething special t his father?”等。第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：”Hw wuld the father feel after hearing what the by said? What wuld the father d? What changes wuld the father make? ”等。
[参考范文]
Then, the little by reaching under his pillw, he pulled ut sme mre up bills. The man, seeing that the by already had mney, started t get angry again. He grumbled why the by wanted mre mney even if he already had sme. The little by slwly cunted ut his mney, then lked up at the man. "Because I didn't have enugh, but nw I d," the little by replied, "Daddy, I have $20.00 nw. Can I buy an hur f yur time?"
After hearing what the by said, the man felt s srry fr what he had said t his sn. Tears filled his eyes and he gave a deep hug t the sn. In the past few years, he was always engaged in wrk and never spent a single weekend with his sn. This $20.00 is just a shrt t all f us wrking s hard fr ur living. Dn’t let time slip thrugh ur fingers withut having spent sme quality time with thse wh really matter t us.(除给定词外，169 wrds)
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。根据第二段开头提示，小男孩一定做了让父亲很感动的举动。因此小男孩借到钱以后，加上自己已有的零用钱向父亲买了他一个小时的时间。父亲听到儿子的话后，十分感动和抱歉，对自己以前的行为有较大的感触，并进行了反思。最后两句从全文的角度进行概括，突出故事的主题。
[提炼归纳]
1. 合理拓展情节
读后续写首先要读通给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基础上根据提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化，可以通过设问的方式，将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来，以利后续写作时的信息整理和语言组织。在该练习中，通过两段开头给的提示进行合理的推断，并通过事先设问的方式构思文章。两段分别以小男孩和父亲为主人公进行不同角度的叙述，符合故事发展的合理结局。
2. 有效运用连接手段
在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合，还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段(cnnectives)的有效运用，例如范文中我们用了after来说明事件的先后顺序，in the past few years来转接过去情况的描述，because来引出小男孩借钱的原因。这些连接词的使用可以使文本读上去更有逻辑感，也使文章更加紧凑连贯。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
Brwnie and Harry were neighbr dgs in Stwe, a beautiful and peaceful twn in Lamille Cunty, Vermnt, United States, wh met everyday t play tgether, running after each ther jyfully. Like pairs f dgs yu can find in mst any neighbrhd, these tw lved each ther and played tgether s ften that they had wrn a path thrugh the grass f the field between their respective huses.
One evening, Brwnie's family nticed that Brwnie hadn't returned hme as usual. They went lking fr him with n success. Brwnie still didn't shw up the next day, and, despite their effrts t find him, by the next week he was still missing.
Curiusly, the ther dg, Harry, shwed up at Brwnie's huse alne ne day. He barked, jumped and pestered(纠缠) Brwnie's human family, shwing that he was filled with anxiety. Busy with their wn lives, the family just ignred the nervus little neighbr dg and decided t let the missing dg g.
Harry refused t take “n” fr an answer. Ted, Brwnie’s wner, was steadily disturbed by the angry, determined little dg. One mrning Harry fllwed Ted abut, barking mre insistently, then rushing tward a nearby empty lt and back, as if t say, “Fllw me, please!I's very urgent!”
Eventually, Ted went after the mad Harry acrss the empty lt as Harry paused t race back and bark encuragingly. The little dg led the man under a tree, past sme tree jungles, t a lnely spt a half mile frm the huse. There Ted fund his belved Brwnie, and he was alive, with ne f his frnt legs falling int a steel trap. At that mment, Ted understd the strange behavir f Harry.
Feeling regretful, Ted nw wished he had taken Harry's earlier appeals seriusly. Hwever, Harry had dne mre than simply led Brwnie’s human wner t his trapped friend. Ted nticed smething quite remarkable befre him and was shcked that the amunt f lve that the dg has fr his partner culd be s utstanding.
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In a circle arund the injured dg, there were sme remains f meals.
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Brwnie was saved and taken hme by his wner Ted.
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2. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
A funny thing happened t Arthur when he was n the way t wrk ne day. As he walked alng Park Avenue near the First Natinal Bank, he heard the sund f smene trying t start a car. He tried again and again but culdn’t get the car mving. Arthur turned and lked inside at the face f a yung man wh lked wrried. Arthur stpped and asked, “It lks like yu’ve gt a prblem,” Arthur said.
“I’m afraid s. I’m in a big hurry and I can’t start my car.”
“Is there smething I can d t help?” Arthur asked. The yung man lked at the tw suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If yu’re sure it wuldn’t be t much truble, yu culd help me get these suitcases int a taxi.”
“N truble at all. I’d be glad t help.”
The yung man gt ut and tk ne f the suitcases frm the back seat. After placing it n the grund, he turned t get the ther ne. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the lng lud nise f an alarm.
It was frm the bank. There had been a rbbery (抢劫)!
Park Avenue had been quiet a mment befre. Nw the air was filled with the sund f the alarm and the shuts f peple running frm all directins. Cars stpped and the passengers jined the crwd in frnt f the bank. Peple asked each ther, “What happened?” But everyne had a different answer.
Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned t lk at the bank and walked right int the yung wman in frnt f him.
She lked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she lking at me like that?” He thught. “The suitcase! She thinks I’m the bank thief!”
Arthur lked arund at the crwd f peple. He became frightened, and withut anther thught, he started t run.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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As he was running, Arthur heard the yung man shuting behind, “Stp, stp!”
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The taxi stpped in frnt f the Plice Statin and Arthur
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Frm the first day he entered my classrm, Willard P. Frank existed in his wn wrld, shutting ut his classmates and me. My attempts at building a friendly relatinship with him were met with cmplete indifference. I culd see that his classmates fared n better. Willard was strictly a lner wh seemed t have n desire r need t break his silence.
Shrtly after the Thanksgiving hliday, we received wrd f the annual Christmas cllectin f mney fr the less frtunate peple in ur schl district. “Christmas is a seasn f giving,” I tld my students. “There are a few students in the schl wh might nt have a happy hliday seasn. By cntributing t ur Christmas cllectin, yu will help buy fd, clthing and tys fr these needy peple. We will start the cllectin tmrrw.”
When I called fr the cntributins the next day, I discvered that almst everyne had frgtten except fr Willard P. Frank. The by dug deep int his pants pckets as he walked slwly t my desk. Carefully, he drpped tw quarters int the small cntainer. “I dn’t need milk fr lunch,” he mumbled. Fr a mment, just a mment, he smiled. Then he turned and walked back t his desk.
That night, after schl, I tk ur few cntributins t the schl principal. I culdn’t help sharing the incident that had taken place. “I may be wrng, but I believe Willard might be getting ready t becme a part f the wrld arund him,” I tld the principal. “Yes.” he ndded. “And we might d well t have him share a bit f his wrld with us. I just received a list f the pr families in ur schl wh mst need help thrugh the Christmas cllectin. Here, take a lk at it.” As I gazed dwn t read, I discvered Willard P. Frank and his family were the tp names n the list. Seeing this, I decided t d smething fr him.
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On that Sunday, I paid a visit t Willard’s family.

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The next day, I had a special class fr Willard.

4.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整故事。续写的词数应为150词左右。
The big Twn Hall clck was striking midnight when Frank began t crss the bridge. The dark night air was cld and a little wet, and the street lamp gave little light. Frank was anxius t get hme and his ftsteps rang ludly n the silent night.
When he reached the middle f the bridge, he thught he culd hear smene cming near behind him. He lked back but culd see n ne. Hwever , the sund cntinued and Frank began t walk mre quickly. Then he slwed dwn again , thinking there was nthing t fear in a twn as quiet as this.
Just then , he heard shrt , quick steps clsely behind him. By the time he reached the ther side f the bridge , he culd almst feel smene at his heels. He turned rund and there std a man in a large cat. A hat was pulled dwn ver his eyes and very little f his face culd be seen.
Frank said smething abut the weather in an effrt t be friendly. The man did nt answer but asked rughly where Oakfield Huse was. Frank pinted t a big huse in the distance and the stranger cntinued his way.
Then Frank wndered why the stranger had wanted t find Oakfield Huse at such an hur. He knew that the peple wh lived there were very rich. Almst withut realizing what he was ding , he began fllwing the stranger quickly.
The man was sn utside the huse and Frank saw him lk up at the windws. A light was still n and the man waited until it went ut. When abut half an hur had passed, Frank saw him climb niselessly ver the wall and heard him drp n the grund at the ther side.
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Nw Frank knew what the man wanted t d.
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Frank culdn’t just stand in the dark and wait.
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Thrughut life, we cme acrss many peple wh impact us in a way. The persn wh left a great impact n me is my dad.
Three mnths after turning furteen, my life was great. I was getting settled int a high schl; my grades were already starting ff greatly and I was making friends. One day as I came hme frm schl, I walked int ur living rm, finding my mm and dad talking. My parents turned t me and tld me t sit dwn because there was smething imprtant they had t tell me. I sn fund ut that my dad’s liver (肝脏) was failing and he needed an immediate transplant. I was shcked and cnfused. He was wrking and never lked sick. My parents tld me nt t wrry because everything wuld be fine. Fur mnths had passed and my dad still had nt received a new liver; he was prgressively getting wrse. His bdy seemed t be getting weaker, but he cnstantly said he was fine.
It was getting hard fr my family and me. My dad had t quit his jb leaving my mm t be the nly prvider. I had t take n the respnsibility f cleaning the huse, cking meals and checking n my dad while my mm was at wrk. I had t cut back n hanging with my friends because my dad was beginning t g in and ut f the hspital. My fcus fr schl was starting t slip. S were my grades. Tw nights befre my schl spring break, my mm received a call frm the hspital that my dad had been in a car accident and that he was in hspital. Surprisingly, my dad hadn’t received a scratch n him. Then next night my mm received a call frm the dctr stating that there was a liver that matched my dad’s bdy and that he needed t get t the hspital immediately.
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My mm and I rushed t the hspital and my dad was brught int surgery.
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Having t take n s many respnsibility at hme and cnstantly wrn abut my dad has helped shaped me int the persn I am tday.
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答案与解析
1.【参考范文】
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In a circle arund the injured dg, there were sme remains f meals. It turned ut that Harry had been visiting Brwnie regularly in rder t keep his friend alive. Everyday Harry tk half f his dg fd here t Brwnie. Harry tried his best t beg the wner t ask fr mre leftvers and then he came ut with the fd. Each night Harry stayed with Brwnie t prtect him frm ther meat-eating animals, leaning clse t Brwnie t keep hi warm and encurage him t keep his spirits up.
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Brwnie was saved and taken hme by his wner Ted. His frnt leg was treated by an animal surgen. He was attended s carefully and very sn he recvered. Everyday Harry came t see him and played with him happily. Fr many years thereafter, the tw families still watched the faithful friends having fun and chasing each ther dwn that well-wrn path between their huses. The tw dgs nt nly set up their wn friendship but als made the tw families harmnius and clse tgether.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，两只小狗Brwnie和Harry是邻居， 每天会一起玩， 以至于两家之间的草地上已经被踏出了一条小径。一天傍晚， Brwnie突然不见了踪影， 它的主人苦寻无果便决定放弃。但Harry却不断到Brwnie 主人家， 狂吠， 乱跳， ”纠缠”着Brwnie 的主人一家，通过它坚持不懈的”纠缠”， Brwnie的主人跟随着它找到了被困的Brwnie。
Paragraph 1的开头是“在受伤的Brwnie四周，有一圈残羹剩饭”，文章中最后一段讲到”Harry不仅仅只是带领Brwnie的主人来到它被困的朋友跟前”，由此可知，这些食物是Harry给Brwnie带来的，本段应描述在Brwnie 被困的日子里， Harry是如何带食物给Brwnie的，并且上文提到两只小狗的感情十分深厚， 在这期间， Harry应该会一直陪伴和保护着Brwnie。
Paragraph 2的开头是“Brwnie被它的主人Ted救下并带回家”， 由此可知， 接下来可能会描述Brwnie被带回去接受治疗， 伤好后， 两只小狗又开始一起开心地嬉戏玩耍，且可以根据情节进一步延伸，如两只小狗的友情也进一步拉近了两家人的距离。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，续写部分与原文内容一致，使之构成一篇完整的短文
【范文点评】
本续写描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：turn ut，take half f ，cme ut with，nt nly … but als …等高级词汇；名词性从句It turned ut that Harry had been visiting Brwnie regularly in rder t keep his friend alive.非谓语动词Each night Harry stayed with Brwnie t prtect him frm ther meat-eating animals, leaning clse t Brwnie t keep hi warm and encurage him t keep his spirits up.等高级句式。
2.【参考范文】
As he was running, Arthur heard the yung man shuting behind, “Stp, stp!” Arthur immediately realized thatthe yung manwas thebankrbber. S Arthur didn’t stp, but cntinued t run until he saw and caught a taxi in frnt f him. He quickly put thesuitcasein the car and said t the driver, “Please hurry t the Plice Statin. I have a case t reprt t the plice. The man shuting behind isthe bank thief!”The taxi raced away t the Plice Statin like an arrw.
The taxi stpped in frnt f the Plice Statin and Arthur said t the plice wh had been waiting and wh had already received therbberyreprt, this suitcase is that f the bank rbber. It may be filled with the mney stlen frm the bank, I hand it t yu. Please get ready t arrest the man.”
【解析】
通过审题，我们可看出命题者的要求是根据英语部分所提供的情景，续写一篇150词左右的短文。
另外，在情景的后面还有用英语所作的要求，要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；续写完成后，用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。实际上，这类试题给出了一个较为宽松的写作环境。考生应在给定的要求下多发挥想象，合理地编造故事情节，写作时注意时态的正确使用，主要时态为过去时，适当的时候用过去进行时态，尽量做到语句通顺，思路流畅，尽量用自己熟悉的表达，恰当地使用连词进行语句过渡，使文章条理清楚；合理使用副词，使文章更生动具体。如文中immediately，quickly等，文中使用了定语从句The taxi stpped in frnt f the Plice Statin and Arthur said t the plice wh had been waiting and wh had already received the rbbery reprt使文章更富有层次感。非谓语动词的使用让语句更为简练，如：It may be filled with the mney stlen frm the bank.
3.【参考范文】
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On that Sunday, I paid a visit t Willard’s family. On entering his huse, I was surprised t find a barely empty rm with a brken bed and a dirty sfa. Willard tld me his mther died and that his father was missing, leaving him t live with a sick grandma. When asked why he had given the tw quarters, Willard mumbled, “I just want t help thers by cntributing my milk mney.” I culdn’t help bursting int tears, thinking I shuld help him break his silence.
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The next day, I had a special class fr Willard. I shared his stry with the whle class and said, “Nw, n behalf f the peple in need, I shuld say thanks t Willard, yu are great!” After a silence, all the students clapped, saying “Willard, yu are great!” and they walked t him and hugged him tightly. A friend relatinship was built and Willard’s silence was brken by a smile n his face.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，沉默寡言的Willard同学，在感恩节其他同学都忘记带要捐赠的东西时，Willard毅然决然捐出了自己的牛奶费用。作者随后在贫困生名单中发现Willard赫然在列，所以决定帮助Willard。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：星期天我前往Willard家进行家访。上文讲到Willard时贫困家庭，所以这一段落的续写应该是围绕着Willard家有多么贫困所展开。所以应该具体写家中的装潢来体现贫困。第二段的开头：接下来的一天，我决定给Willard一场特别的课。上文说到虽然贫困，但是Willard还是捐出了自己的牛奶钱。所以这一段肯定是要通过这堂课对Willard的奉献精神进行赞扬，以及课堂结束后所带来的结果。
续写时要求使用文章中的关键词，所以这就增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉文章的主要大意以及关键词，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：can’t help ding; burst int tears; mumble等高级词汇；宾语从句和状语从句的省略When asked why he had given the tw quarters, Willard mumbled, “I just want t help thers by cntributing my milk mney.”展示了句式的多样性；而非谓语作状语I culdn’t help bursting int tears, thinking I shuld help him break his silence.更是写得好；通过这些高级句型，让这篇文章增色不少。
4.【参考范文】
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Nw Frank knew what the man wanted t d.Everyne knew that Oakfield Huse was filled with artwrk wrth millins f dllars. It was clear t Frank that the family inside was in danger. Wuld the man have a weapn? Wuld he be strng enugh t verpwer him befre he culd harm the peple inside? Frank’s heart was racing with fear. He reached fr his cellphne t call the plice, but fund it ut f pwer. If nly he had charged his phne befre leaving the ffice, but it was t late.
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Frank culdn’t just stand in the dark and wait. He had t d smething, even if it meant risking his wn life. At his feet he silently fund several gd-sized stnes, and he threw them with all his strength right at the windws f the huse. The clatter wke up the peple inside the huse and a light came n upstairs. The man frze, nt quite knwing what had just happened. Lights came n everywhere in the huse and within a minute the night was filled with sunds f plice sirens screaming twards Oakfield Huse.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。根据所给的两个段首句，来续写一个完整的故事。
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，午夜时分Frank走在路上，总感觉有人跟着自己，他放慢脚步，发现一个身穿大衣，帽檐遮脸的人，Frank与其交谈，试图表现出镇定的样子，而那人并不理睬，只顾着问Oakfield Huse怎么走。Frank好奇陌生人为什么这么晚要去Oakfield Huse，并且住在那里的人非常富有。想到这些，Frank决定悄悄跟随谋生人看他到底要做什么，在Oakfield Huse外，Frank看到陌生人等灯全熄灭后翻墙进入了Oakfield Huse里面……
根据段落首句，确定段落走向。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：现在Frank知道这个男人要干什么了。可能Frank猜出这个男子是盗贼。接下来Frank会做什么呢？第二段开头是：Frank不能站在那里干等。他又在等什么呢？很有可能Frank报了案，他认为不能干等着警察来。所以第一段续写Frank报案，第二段Frank接下来采取了什么措施，最后盗贼被擒住。
【范文点评】
本文续写情节合情合理，内容拓展丰富，并且运用了丰富多变的句式：如It was clear t Frank that the family inside was in danger. 此句运用了it做形式主语；If nly he had charged his phne befre leaving the ffice, but it was t late.此句运用了虚拟语气；He had t d smething, even if it meant risking his wn life.此句运用了让步状语从句……为文章增色添彩。
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My mm and I rushed t the hspital and my dad was brught int surgery. We were waiting anxiusly utside. After what seemed t be a lng time, his dctr came ut and infrmed us that the surgery was successful, but my dad culdn't leave the hspital fr at least a mnth. During my dad's stay in the hspital and his adapting t his new liver, my father still tried t cmfrt us, saying that everything wuld be OK.
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Having t take n s many respnsibility at hme and cnstantly wrn abut my dad has helped shaped me int the persn I am tday. I becme mre respnsible fr my family and even fr everything. Seeing my dad remain psitive and strng thrughut his jurney has taught me nt t take my life fr granted, but still psitive t life. Als, having seen my dad in hspital fr mnths has inspired me t g int the medical field as a dctr. Thus, I can d everything in my pwer t help thse in need.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，作者十四岁时一天放学回家父母告诉作者，父亲需要肝脏移植，四个月过去了，父亲仍然没有接受新的肝脏移植；他的病情越来越严重。他的身体似乎越来越虚弱，但他不断地说他很好。作者的母亲成为了家庭的支撑，作者也必须承担起打扫房间、做饭和照看爸爸的责任。在学校放春假的前两天晚上，妈妈接到了医院的电话，说作者父亲出了车祸，住院了。令人惊讶的是，父亲身上没有任何伤痕。第二天晚上，母亲接到了医生的电话，说有一个肝脏与父亲的身体匹配，需要马上送到医院。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：我和妈妈赶到医院，爸爸被送进了手术室。所以后文应该是讲述父亲接受手术后的情况，手术很成功，但父亲至少一个月都不能出院。在父亲住院期间，他正在适应他的新肝脏，父亲仍然说一切都会好起来的。第二段开头是：我在家里承担了那么多的责任，而且总是穿着我父亲的衣服，这些都塑造了我今天的样子。本段应该写作者在这件事中的体会，作者变得更负责，父亲也教会了作者要积极地面对生活。同时，看到父亲住院几个月的经历也激励作者进入医学领域，成为一名医生，可以尽自己所能去帮助那些需要帮助的人。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：anxiusly, seem t, infrm sb. that, at least等高级词汇短语；After what seemed t be a lng time, his dctr came ut and infrmed us that the surgery was successful, but my dad culdn't leave the hspital fr at least a mnth.运用了宾语从句；Als, having seen my dad in hspital fr mnths has inspired me t g int the medical field as a dctr.运用了动名词短语作主语等高级句式。