备考2024届高考英语一轮复习第二部分读后续写专题二热考话题素材6关爱邻里

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[2020新高考I]The Meredith family lived in a small cmmunity. As the ecnmy was in decline， sme peple in the twn had lst their jbs. Many f their families were struggling t make ends meet. Peple were trying t help each ther meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a mst kind and thughtful wman. She spent a great deal f time visiting the pr. She knew they had prblems， and they needed all kinds f help. When she had time， she wuld bring fd and medicine t them.
One mrning she tld her children abut a family she had visited the day befre. There was a man sick in bed， his wife， wh tk care f him and culd nt g ut t wrk， and their little by. The little by — his name was Bernard — had interested her very much.
"I wish yu culd see him，" she said t her wn children， Jhn， Harry， and Clara. "He is such a help t his mther. He wants very much t earn sme mney， but I dn’t see what he can d."
After their mther left the rm， the children sat thinking abut Bernard. "I wish we culd help him t earn mney，" said Clara. "His family is suffering s much."
"S d I，" said Harry. "We really shuld d smething t assist them."
Fr sme mments， Jhn said nthing， but， suddenly， he sprang t his feet and cried， "I have a great idea！ I have a slutin that we can all help accmplish（完成）. "
The ther children als jumped up all attentin. When Jhn had an idea， it was sure t be a gd ne. "I tell yu what we can d，" said Jhn. "Yu knw that big bx f crn Uncle Jhn sent us？ Well， we can make ppcrn（爆米花）， and put it int paper bags， and Bernard can take it arund t the huses and sell it."
When Mrs. Meredith heard f Jhn’s idea， she thught it was a gd ne， t.
With everything ready， Bernard started ut n his new business.
1.They went t tell Bernard the plan.
①用can’t wait代替句中的g，凸显他们激动、急切的心情。
They culdn’t wait t tell Bernard the plan.
②为句①补充地点状语，将场景从Meredith家转移到Bernard家。
They culdn’t wait t call at Bernard’s huse and tld Bernard the plan.
③将句②中告诉Bernard他们的计划，改写为现在分词短语作状语的形式，使语法结构更丰富。
They culdn’t wait t call at Bernard’s huse，telling Bernard the plan.
2.They were tuched.
①将人物聚焦到情感更易外露的Bernard母亲身上，并用burst int tears凸显感动的程度，营造画面感。
Bernard’s mther was tuched，and burst int tears.
②用引导结果状语从句改写句①，使句子内部关系更紧密。
Bernard’s mther was s tuched that she burst int tears.
③用倒装句式升级句②，使句子更高级。
S tuched was Bernard’s mther that she burst int tears.
3.His ppcrn was ppular.
①补充原因状语，说明为什么受欢迎，使文章逻辑更严密。
His ppcrn was ppular fr its lw price as well as the nice flavr.
②为句①增加结果，凸显受欢迎的程度。
His ppcrn was ppular fr its lw price as well as the nice flavr，s bags f ppcrn were sld ut.
③利用句式（it’s nt lng befre）改写句②爆米花卖完的情况，进一步说明爆米花受欢迎的程度。
His ppcrn was ppular fr its lw price as well as the nice flavr，s it was nt lng befre bags f ppcrn were sld ut.
WhenMrs. MeredithheardfJhn’sidea，shethughtitwasagdne，t. Having gt the apprval f their mther， the children began t carry ut the plan happily. Early in the mrning， they culdn’t wait t call at（迫不及待地去拜访） Bernard’s huse， telling Bernard the plan. S tuched was Bernard’s mther that she burst int tears（Bernard的母亲感动得热泪盈眶）. Afterwards， they gt dwn t making preparatins（着手做准备） tgether with Bernard. Sn after， they succeeded in making ppcrn and packed it with paper bags.
Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedutnhisnewbusiness. He went dr t dr arund the cmmunity where he lived，nervus and anxius alng the way（一路上既紧张又不安）. Much t his astnishment（令他非常惊讶的是）， his ppcrn was very ppular fr its lw price as well as the nice flavr. It was nt lng befre bags f ppcrn were sld ut， which was far beynd his expectatins（远远超出了他的预期）. Hlding the mney he earned tightly in his hand， he knew withut the Meredith family’s kindness and assistance， his family wuld still be suffering in years t cme.人物
主要人物Mrs. Meredith，her three children（Jhn， Harry， Clara）：从文中的描述"a mst kind and thughtful wman" "spent a great deal f time visiting the pr" "bring fd and medicine t them" "We really shuld d smething t assist them"可知，Mrs. Meredith一家人善良、乐于助人。续写部分可通过动作、行为等描写延续他们的这一特点。
主要人物Bernard：文中对Bernard的描述"He is such a help t his mther. He wants very much t earn sme mney"体现了他勤劳、孝顺、懂事，为续写第二段他卖出爆米花，得到足够贴补家用的钱奠定了基调。
情节及
情感线
Mrs.Meredith经常帮助贫困者（她很有同情心）→她告诉孩子们关于一个贫困家庭的情况（孩子们很关心）→孩子们讨论如何帮助Bernard（很想提供帮助）→Jhn想到了一个好办法（孩子们开心、兴奋）
主题
本文主要讲了Mrs. Meredith鼓励孩子们去帮助Bernard一家的故事，文章最终的主题应该展现邻里之间互助互爱。
续写
第一段
Mrs. Meredith认为Jhn出了个好主意，接下来应讲述孩子们得到Mrs. Meredith的肯定后采取的行动以及Bernard一家对Jhn这个主意的反应。尾句衔接续写第二段提示语：他们帮助Bernard制作好了爆米花。本段侧重通过对人物间对话、动作、表情等的描写推动故事情节的发展。
续写
第二段
Bernard开始了他的新营生，接着应讲述Bernard卖爆米花的情况：如何售卖，在哪里卖，卖给谁，在这个过程中Bernard的感受如何。再根据续写故事"结局圆满"的原则可知，Bernard最终通过卖爆米花挣到了钱，因此本段可侧重描写Bernard的心理感受和变化。结尾部分适当升华主题：Bernard表达感恩，邻里关系和谐。