备考2024届高考英语一轮复习第二部分读后续写专题二热考话题素材1挑战自我

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[2022新高考Ⅰ]It was the day f the big crss-cuntry run. Students frm seven different primary schls in and arund the small twn were warming up and walking the rute（路线）thrugh thick evergreen frest.
I lked arund and finally sptted David， wh was standing by himself ff t the side by a fence. He was small fr ten years ld. His usual big tthy smile was absent tday. I walked ver and asked him why he wasn’t with the ther children.He hesitated and then said he had decided nt t run.
What was wrng？ He had wrked s hard fr this event！
I quickly searched the crwd fr the schl’s cach and asked him what had happened. "I was afraid that kids frm ther schls wuld laugh at him，" he explained uncmfrtably. "I gave him the chice t run r nt， and let him decide."
I bit back my frustratin（懊恼）. I knew the cach meant well — he thught he was ding the right thing. After making sure that David culd run if he wanted， I turned t find him cming twards me， his small bdy rcking frm side t side as he swung his feet frward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him frm walking r running like ther children， but at schl his classmates thught f him as a regular kid. He always participated t the best f his ability in whatever they were ding. That was why nne f the children thught it unusual that David had decided t jin the crss-cuntry team. It just tk him lnger — that’s all. David had nt missed a single practice， and althugh he always finished his run lng after the ther children， he did always finish. As a special educatin teacher at the schl， I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was prud f his strng determinatin.
We sat dwn next t each ther， but David wuldn’t lk at me.
I watched as David mved up t the starting line with the ther runners.
1.He was inspired and decided t have a try.
①用形容词作状语改写句子，使行文更连贯。
Inspired， he decided t have a try.
②运用连续动作描写将David决定参赛这一过程细化。
Inspired， he tk a deep breath and gathered his curage， "I will have a try."
2.They cheered him n.
①将人群具体到个人或一些人，因为"我"尤为关注David，所以他一摔倒，"我"应该是第一个作出反应的人，紧接着是他的同学们。这样使情节发展更加自然顺畅。
I started t shut encuragement and his classmates all appeared and cheered him n.
②用as引导的时间状语从句改写句①，并运用现在分词短语作状语改写cheer him n，使句子语法结构更丰富。
As I started t shut encuragement， his classmates all appeared，cheering him n.
③为句②同学们的加油鼓励增加具体的话语，使内容更富有画面感。
As I started t shut encuragement，his classmates all appeared， cheering him n. "Cme n， David. Yu can d it！ " they shuted enthusiastically.
3.David finished the run.
①使用具体的动作描写表示David完成比赛，切合当时比赛的氛围和场景。
David crssed the finish line.
②为句①增加对David通过终点线时人们的欢呼声和喝彩声的描写，使情节自然，更具有画面感。
David crssed the finish line with wild cheers and applause.
Wesatdwnnextteachther，butDavidwuldn’tlkatme. His eyes deliberately avided mine， with his limbs unavidably shaking. "It’s nt the real yu， David，" I patted him gently n the back（轻轻地拍了拍他的后背） and said quietly. "Yu have prepared s much fr it. Lk at my eyes and tell me. D yu want t run？" I held my breath（屏住呼吸） as David lked up. Inspired， he tk a deep breath and gathered his curage（深吸一口气，鼓起勇气）， "I will have a try."
IwatchedasDavidmveduptthestartinglinewiththetherrunners. The starter’s gun sunded！ David spared n effrt t run as if he had frgtten all his weaknesses， but he still tripped within a few kilmeters. My heart sank. As I started t shut encuragement， his classmates all appeared， cheering him n. "Cme n， David. Yu can d it！" they shuted enthusiastically. Tuched， he picked himself up and started again. Finally， he crssed the finish line with wild cheers and applause. Excitement swallwed him（他激动坏了） and he embraced me tightly. At that time， I knew he had already vercme the darkness stuck in his mind（战胜了他脑海中的阴霾）.人物
主要人物David：从文中的描述"small fr ten years ld" "big tthy smile" "had wrked s hard fr this event" "had a brain disease" "always participated t the best f his ability"和"had nt missed a single practice"可知，David身患残疾但积极乐观、意志坚强。
次要人物"I"：从文中的描述"making sure that David culd run if he wanted"和"familiar with the challenges David faced" "prud f his strng determinatin可以看出，"我"是一个关爱学生的老师，也暗示了续写部分应有"我"与David沟通并试图劝说他参加比赛以及David听从劝说并以坚强的意志完成比赛的情节。
原文最后一段中描述的"his classmates thught f him as a regular kid"表明，同学们对David态度友好，这也为续写第二段David在赛场上时同学们的表现埋下了伏笔。
情节及
情感线
越野赛前得知David决定不参加比赛（David情绪低落，害怕被嘲笑）→找教练获悉原因，回想David虽患脑疾却认真积极训练（"我"为他感到自豪）→续写第二段提示语，David走向起跑线（David重拾勇气和信心）。
主题
根据读后续写"结局圆满"的原则可知，David最终应该完成了比赛。再结合原文中David遇到的困难——行走不稳、害怕被嘲笑等可知，文章最终的主题应该体现David直面挑战、克服恐惧、战胜自己。
续写
第一段
根据续写两段的提示语可知，本段主要描述David从不愿参加越野跑，到走向起跑线参加比赛的转变过程。涉及的人物是"I"和David，主要故事情节："我"开导、鼓励David以及他对"我"的劝说的反应，侧重人物对话、动作、表情和心理描写。尾句衔接第二段提示语：David最终决定参加越野跑。
续写
第二段
根据续写第二段提示语可知，本段的故事情节应发生在越野赛跑线路上，涉及的主要人物是David，也可以呼应原文，加入"我"、教练和学生们的反应。主要故事情节：David在越野赛跑过程中的具体表现及比赛结果，侧重人物在比赛过程中以及受到大家鼓舞后的动作、心理描写。最终升华主题，David战胜了内心的恐惧。