2024年高考英语读后续写+概要写作课件汇总新题型-读后续写-第15篇

这是一份2024年高考英语读后续写+概要写作课件汇总新题型-读后续写-第15篇，共21页。PPT课件主要包含了三大原则，事件梳理，两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量，意识重病无人探望，从未抱怨给予希望，床上哭泣幡然醒悟，即使失明心中有光，热爱家庭勇敢面对，范文评析等内容，欢迎下载使用。

凡是故事都应有跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。
故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，等等。
内容要前后衔接，上下连贯,语言表达风格一致。
读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题，理清故事的主要人物和事件。
仔细阅读所给两段的首句，结合正能量结尾，思考大致框架。
依据情节发和常识，在确定的框架内，可按“所见/遇所想，所为所感”等构思具体细节。
思考再三，把修正润色后的续写整洁地写入答卷。
读后续写 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之 构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
I was blind! It was nly fr six weeks, but it seemed an end f the wrld. During that time, I was in a Clumbus hspital, very scared, very alne, and extremely hmesick fr my husband and five kids. I spent hurs, even days, wndering if I wuld ever be able t see my children again. I had spent s much time feeling srry fr myself. When the dctr annunced I was getting a rmmate, I was far frm excited. Actually, I didn’t want anyne t “see” me this way. Like it r nt, within a shrt time, my rmmate mved int the bed n the ther side f the rm. Her name was Jni.
Hwever, I started liking Jni several days later. She had such a psitive attitude that she was always cheerful, and never cmplained (抱怨) abut her wn illness. She ften said t me jkingly that I was lucky nt t be able t see myself in the mirrr during this time. Whenever I felt scared, Jni culd always get me t laugh with her crazy jkes. Je, my husband, came t visit me smetimes with the five kids. But I never saw anyne visit her. One evening, Je came alne. Jni must have sensed ur need t be alne. She was s quiet that I wasn’t sure she was in the rm. During my husband’s visit, Je and I talked abut the pssibility that I might never see again. He prmised me that nthing culd change his lve fr me, and we wuld cntinue t raise ur family.
Paragraph 1： After my husband left, I heard Jni stirring(翻身)in her bed. Paragraph 2： After talking with her, I awke frm a deep sleep that night.
主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，特别要弄清故事的人物，时态(通常是一般过去时)，事件(故事的起因和经过)，语言特色(以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保持不变)，等等。
1、读懂大意，理清脉络
人物时态和事件语言特色不要变
simple past tense
I was blind!
It was nly fr six weeks
During that time, I was in a Clumbus hspital
I had spent s much time feeling srry fr myself.
my rmmate mved int the bed n the ther side f the rm. Her name was Jni.
Whenever I felt scared, Jni culd always get me t laugh with her crazy jkes.
Je, my husband
Je and I talked abut the pssibility that I might never see again.
He prmised me that nthing culd change his lve fr me, and we wuld cntinue t raise ur family.
我和丈夫谈论着或许我的视力再也无法恢复。Je说不论怎样他依然爱着我并会照顾好家庭。
我的丈夫Je总是会带着我的五个孩子来探望我。有一天Je一个人来到了病房，Jni没有出声，我以为她没在房间。
一个叫Jni的人成为了我的室友。她一直保持着乐观的心态，从没抱怨过她的病情。每当我感到害怕时，她总会讲笑话逗我开心。
我失明了六个星期，在那期间我住在哥伦布医院，每天都在担心我的丈夫和五个孩子。
各类从句： 状语从句：When the dctr annunced... Whenever I felt scared, Jni culd...宾语从句：She ften said t me jkingly that I was lucky nt t be able t see myself in the mirrr during this time.同位语从句：abut the pssibility that I might never see again
分词短语：I spent hurs, even days, wndering if I wuld ever be able t see my children again.
1、细读句首，构思框架
两段首句定一框 由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。
二框二首正能量 第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。
从第一段首句可知Jni一直在病房里没有离开，并听见了我跟Je的谈话，而从第二段首句可知我与Jni进行了交谈，故可得知第一段应该为我和Jni的交谈内容，分析前文，我从没听见过有谁来探望Jni，可以推断出她们的谈话应该是关于Jni的。
Paragraph 1： After my husband left, I heard Jni stirring(翻身)in her bed.(在我丈夫走后，我听见了Jni在床上翻身的声音)Paragraph 2： After talking with her, I awke frm a deep sleep that night.(那天晚上，在和她交谈之后，我从熟睡中清醒。)
由第二段首句可知我从和Jni交谈中获得的一些信息使我清醒，说明Jni有些秘密让我知道并让我吃惊。前面我总是因为自己失明而难过、害怕并且消极，因为是正能量结尾，所以第二段我们可以写因为Jni我改变了自己的想法，对待自己的病情也变得乐观积极向上。
Paragraph 2： After talking with her, I awke frm a deep sleep that night.(那天晚上，在和她交谈之后，我从熟睡中清醒。）
2、增加细节，开始写作
在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所思、所说、所做等给每段增加5至8个具体细节，我们称之为叫“58细节添加法”。
Paragraph 1： After my husband left, I heard Jni stirring(翻身)in her bed.(在我丈夫走后，我听见了Jni在床上翻身的声音。)
根据构思的大致框架，推断故事中人物所见、所思、所说、所做等每段增加五至七个具体细节或叫“57细节法”。
询问是否醒来，舍友道羡慕
Paragraph 2： After talking with her, I awke frm a deep sleep that night.(那天晚上，在和她交谈之后，我从熟睡中清醒。)
根据一致性原则，除内容上要语义衔接，上下连贯外，语言风格也要一致，应使用分词语短和形容词作状语，同时注意使用从句。
3、修改润色，整洁誊写
审读初稿，注意语义是否衔接，前后是否连贯，事件是否符合逻辑，语言特色是否与前文一致。在修改润色之后，整齐工整地誊写在答卷上。
Paragraph 1： After my husband left, I heard Jni stirring in her bed. When I asked her if she was awake, she said, “Dn’t yu knw hw lucky yu are t have s many peple lving yu? Yur husband and five kids are s beautiful!” At that mment, I realized fr the first time that during ur weeks tgether in the hspital, Jni hadn’t had a husband r child visiting her. Frm her dctr’s visits, I just nly knew she was very sick. Yet she never cmplained and had spent the days f her life giving hpe t me.
Paragraph 2： After talking with her, I awke frm a deep sleep that night. As I lay in bed, tears watered my eyes. I realized that I culd see the brightness f the light with my heart. Even thugh I was nt able t see what Jni lked like, I am sure she is ne f the mst beautiful peple in the wrld. Thanks t Jni, I will never allw myself t lse sight f the imprtant things in family… things like warmth and lve and smetimes even srrw we had t face.
1.上下连贯：使用用了At that mment, Frm her dctr’s visits, Yet ,Thanks t Jni等连接性成分。
2.语义衔接：When I asked her if she was awake与上文语义衔接；I will never allw … things like warmth and lve and smetimes even srrw we had t face体现正能量。
感谢Jni，我永远不会让自己忽视家庭中重要的东西，比如温暖和爱，有时甚至是我们不得不面对的悲伤。体现正能量原则
总之，范文符合续写三原则。