专题01 “三首歌” 学会环境描写-备考2024年新高考英语读后续写六大招式
展开环境描写,是续写重要描写手段之一,可以起到融情与景的效果,衬托人物的内心世界。适当的环境描写可以使文章读起来有真实感。
比较下面两种表达:
I g t schl happily.
加上环境描写:The mrning sunshine shining gently, fragrant flwers smiling frm ear t ear, green trees swaying cheerfully, I tgether with Tm and Jerry set ut early riding my bike, talking and singing all the way.
环境描写示例:
1. I can well remember that there was a time when a deep blue sky, the sng f the birds, mnlight and flwers culd never have kept me spellbund.
2. The wind was hwling dreadfully and the rain was puring heavily, whipping against the branches f lined tress,a strng feeling f hrrr creeping n me.
环境描写大招一
刘德华演唱《冰雨》: 冷冷的 冰雨 在我脸上 胡乱地 拍
形容词 意象 介短 副词 动词
The icy rain is whipping my face mercilessly.
大招一:形容词+意象+动词+副词/方位介短
招式体验:
1)The wind blew.
改写:The gentle warm wind blew sftly n the face.
2)The trees waved.
改写:The tall green trees waved quietly n the radsides.
3)The sun shne.
改写:The mrning sun shne n the grund warmly and gently.
The warm mrning sunlight fell n the grund mildly.
具体续写过程中,可将三个(多个)意象结合起来,形成排比句,综合表达,构建更动感的画面。如:
That night wind hwled ruthlessly. 夜风无情地呼啸着。
Sme unknwn creatures murmured in the dark. 一些不知名的生物在黑暗中喃喃自语。
The mnlight shne weakly n the grund. 月光微弱地照在地上。
合并:The night wind hwled ruthlessly, nameless creatures murmured in the dark and the mnlight shne weakly n the grund.
排比句:意象1+动词1,意象2+动词2,and 意象3+动词3.
场景综合表达示例:
1. stream溪流: The afternn sunlight fell n the grass, the wind blew lightly, and the water flew silently dwn the stream.
2. flame火灾: Ht air envelped the rm, the lights glwed in the smke, and flames spread wildly in all directins.
3. beach海边: The mild sunlight fell n the sand, the air blew sftly frm the sea, and the crwds played happily n the beach.
4. lake湖边: The thin cluds flew slwly in the sky, the tall green trees waved wildly in the wind, and the sunlight shne n the lake.
5. classrm: Lights shne brightly n the flr, tidy desks and chairs lined up neatly, and the students listened t the teacher attentively.
6. playgrund: Blazing sunlight burned like an ven, ht air surrunded the playgrund, the crwds were cheered wildly the runners.
真题实践:根据中文,完成下列句子
1. The sun shne warmly n the runway, the trees glwed in the warm sunlight, all f which were encuraging David t cmplete the run. 阳光热烈地洒在跑道上,树木闪烁着微光,这一切都在鼓励着David坚持完成跑步。
2. The leaves were shimmering, the air was filled with delight, and everything arund was celebrating David’s bravery. 树叶闪着微光,空气弥漫着快乐的气息,周围一切都在庆祝David的勇敢。
3. The warm sun shne n David’s face, the trees swayed with the wind, and the whle frest applauded David’s curage. 暖阳洒在大卫的脸上,树木们随风摇曳,整座森林都为大卫的勇气而喝彩。
4. Bathed in the warm sunshine, the trees waved in the breeze, sharing David’s delight f finishing the game. 沐浴再温暖的阳光下,树木在微风中摇曳,分享着David完成比赛的喜悦。
环境描写大招二
伍佰《与你到永久》:风儿轻轻的吹,雨也绵绵下个不停
The wind blws gently, and the rain keeps falling.
--- A gentle wind breezing, a fine drizzle was falling steadily like my missing fr yu.
大招二:写景+比喻+特点:
句式:写景句(本体),+ like + 喻体 + that从句/非谓语动词
招式体验:
1. The stars are in the sky.
---The bright stars scattered in the sky, like gems twinkling brilliantly. 天上的星星像宝石一样闪闪发光。
2. The tree is waving.
--- The trees waved wildly in the air, like drunken man trembling frm side t side. 树像醉汉一样摇摇晃晃。
3. The stars sparkled.
--- The stars sparkled vividly, like a curius child glazing at us.
--- The stars sparkled vividly, like a curius child, that glazed at us.
--- The stars sparkled vividly, like naughty children lking at us with curisity. 顽皮的孩子好奇地看着我们。
4. A fire still fluttered in the grate, like a bird trying t find its way ut f the rm. 一团火还在壁炉炉膛里舞动着,就像一只挣脱束缚的鸟。
5. The last leaf f autumn fluttered t the grund, like a drp f autumn’s tear, melting silently in his verwhelming srrw. 秋天的最后一片叶子像一滴秋天的眼泪一样飘落在地上,在巨大的悲伤中默默融化。
大招二表达示例:
1. wind:The icy wind started hwling, like a sharp knife scratching my face.
2. sun: The mrning sunlight flded in thrugh the curtain, like pieces f gld dancing n the flr.
3. tree: Tall trees lined up n bth sides f the street, like sldiers thrwing lng shadws n the grund.
4. clud: The white cluds hang lw in the sky, like pieces f cttn sailing with the wind.
5. rain: The dreadful rain was puring dwn, like mnsters beating wildly against the windws.
6. flwer: The flwers dtted the garden, like spirits dancing gracefully in the air.
环境描写大招三
《漂洋过海来看你》:在漫天风沙里望着你远去,我竟悲伤的不能自已
I was t sad t cntrl myself as seeing yu ging away in the sandy strm.
--- The sand all ver the sky, yur familiar figure fading away, a fld f grief welled up in my heart, sweeping ver my bdy.
方法三:情景交融:写景+感受
意象+动词ing,+ 感受:
句式一:(无灵主语)a ripple f +情感名词 ran thrugh sb’s heart; a fld f +情感名词 welled up in sb.
句式二:(人称主语)sb. was brimmed ver with +情感名词;sb. was immersed in +情感名词.
大招体验:
The wind was hwling dreadfully and the rain was puring frm the heaven, whipping against the branches f lined trees. I was seized with the raring pwer f nature. A sense f hrrr creeping up n me. 风可怕地嚎叫,雨从天倾泻而来,拍打着成排的树枝。我被自然发怒的力量抓住了。一种恐惧感悄悄爬到我身上。
表达示例:
1. wind:The icy wind hwling, a ripple f tensin ran thrugh his heart.
2. sun:The mrning sunlight flding in thrugh the curtain, a ripple f satisfactin ran thrugh the twins’ heart.
3. mn:The silvery mn glwing in the sky, a ripple f grief ran thrugh Jane’s heart.
4. snw:Featherily snwflake falling frm the sky, I was immersed in delight.
5. rain:Heavy rain beating dwn n the street, I was immersed in remrse.
6. crwd:Crwds f peple gathering int the classrm, I was immersed in awkwardness.
综合运用:
(先尝试概括性描述,在概括描述的基础上增加细节描述,注意逻辑关系及语意的合理。)
示例:It gt dark.
--- It was cmpletely dark except the faint light given ut by a few stars in the sky.
--- The wrld was burdened with a sea f darkness. A sense f hrrr creeping up n me. I immediately turned arund t slide int the bed and curled up.
大招综合运用:
风:
这个冬季,天气异常寒冷。此刻没有风。
(概述)This winter, the weather was unusually cld. There was n wind at the mment.
(细节)This winter, the weather was unusually cld. There was n wind at the mment. The wrld seemed t be frzen and the river have stpped its ftsteps. 这个冬季,天气异常寒冷。此刻没有风,世界好像停止有这一刻,河流也停下了脚步。
2) 外面刮起了大风,地上的灰尘乱飞。
(概述)Outside, there was a strng wind, the dust n the grund flying in disrder。
(细节)Outside, there was a strng wind, blwing the branches in all directins. The dust n the grund was flying in disrder, which made peple unable t pen their eyes. 外面刮起了大风,吹的树枝乱摆,地上的灰尘乱飞,让人睁不开眼睛。
雨:
3) 昨天下了倾盆大雨。
(概述)It was raining cats and dgs.
(细节)It was raining cats and dgs yesterday when schl was ver. I was all wet when I gt hme. 昨天放学的时候在下着倾盆大雨。我到家时全身都湿了。
4)汤姆在暴雨中淋湿了。
(概述)Tm was caught in a heavy dwnpur.
(细节)Unfrtunately, Tm was caught in the heavy rain, wet thrugh frm head t te, like a drwned rat. 真不幸,汤姆在暴雨中被淋成了落汤鸡。
5) 刚才还是白云朵朵,一霎时狂风暴雨起来了。
(概述)Just nw there were still white cluds, but in a flash, it pured dwn.
(细节)The weather in summer is unpredictable. Just nw there were still white cluds, but in a flash, lightning and thunder brke ut, and there came a dwnpur. 夏天的天气真是变幻莫测。刚才还是白云朵朵,一霎时就电闪雷鸣,狂风暴雨起来了。
热:ht(热);melt(融化);sweat like a pig(汗流浃背);rain fire(天气火热)
1)天气闷热得要命。
(概述)The weather was s ht.
(细节)The weather was s ht that there was n wind, and the thick air seemed t be frzen. 天气闷热得要命,一丝风也没有,稠乎乎的空气好像凝住了。
2) 天气热得吓人,我汗流浃背。
(概述)The weather was terrible and I was sweating like a pig.
(细节)Thugh nt ding anything, I was sweating like a pig. It was nt just ht. It was African ht, which was t terrible t tlerate. 虽然我什么都没做,但还是汗流浃背。不止是热,是像非洲一样热!天热得吓人。
冷:cld, bne-chilling
1)天很冷。
(概述)It's freezing cld.
(细节)I can't stp shivering frm the cld trembling all ver. 我冷得不停打哆嗦。
2)这寒风真是刺骨.
(概述)The wind was bne-chilling.
(细节) The wind was s bne-chilling that it cut right thrugh me. 这寒风如此刺骨,直接穿过我的身体。
应试素材积累:
1. 夏夜:宁静的夜空中挂着一轮明月和闪烁的星星,与慢节奏的村庄形成一幅和谐的美景。
There is harmny between the mn and stars in the quiet sky and the slw pace f the village.
2. 春天户外:小鸟像音乐家一样,在树上唱着优美的歌,蝴蝶像多采多姿的舞蹈家一样,拍动着翅膀,飞来飞去。
The birds, like musician, sang their meldius sngs in the trees, and butterflies, like clrful dancers, were fluttering here and there.
3. 露水:当阳光照耀在露珠上时露珠像珠宝一样闪闪发光。
The drps f dew sparkle like jewels when the sun shines n them.
路边长满了嫩绿的草,草上沾满了小小的露珠,他们静静等待着大地母亲的苏醒。
The grass is sft and green n the side f the rad, with little dewdrps n each piece f grass, they quietly welcme mther earth t wake up.
4. 日出:第二天,日出的光线很早就将他唤醒。夜晚的星星都被阳光藏在粉蓝色的天空下。
The next day, the sunlight wke him very early, hiding the stars under a pink blue and blue sky.
旭日从雾霭中冉冉升起,东升红彤彤,新鲜而充满生机.
The sun cming up frm its flat bed f fg, red and new and full f prmises.
5. 月光:一个美丽而宁静的夜晚,月亮像一个圆盘挂在黑暗的夜空中,淡淡的月光普照万物.
It is a beautiful and quiet night. The mn is like a disc hanging n the dark sky , which casts its light n everything.
6. 夏雨:开始雨点很大,溅起地上的灰尘,打在屋顶上丁当作响.
The first drps f rain are huge; they split int the dust n the grund, and plunk n the rf.
紧接着头顶上又是一声惊雷,然后天空中轰鸣的雷声不断。
Suddenly there cmes a terrible thunder clap verhead, and then the sky is full f rars f thunder.
7. 冬雪:当我第二天早晨起床时,我看到大地被厚厚的白色毯子覆盖着。
When I gt up the next mrning, I saw that the grund was cvered with a vast blanket f whiteness.
8. “安静祥和”
When I was bathed in the sunlight, it felt like the amber-like sunshine was kissing every inch f my skin. (沐浴在阳光下;琥珀色的阳光亲吻着全身的肌肤)
Mist-cvered muntains(薄雾霭霭的山上) were dtted with small farms and villages.(点缀着)
The sund f my ftsteps was accmpanied nly by the gracefully waving reeds.(优雅地随风飘扬的芦苇)
9. “风雨交加”
The sky is vercast, darkened with glmy cluds. (乌云密布;黑云压顶)
On that dark and strmy night, the waves were crashing and the winds were hwling.(海浪肆意拍打;劲风咆哮。)
The rain came puring dwn, and the winds blew and beat against the huse. (雨倾盆而下,洪流猛涨,狂风肆意的冲击着房屋。
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