专题10 主旨升华类-备战2024高考读后续写真题逐步解析专练

这是一份专题10 主旨升华类-备战2024高考读后续写真题逐步解析专练，共11页。试卷主要包含了1 整体把握， 大卫和我被要求捡些树枝生火， 当然，妈妈又“忘了”带帐篷了等内容，欢迎下载使用。

（2017年11月浙江卷）
A vacatin with my mther
I had an interesting childhd: It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because f my mther-lving, sweet, and yet absent-minded and frgetful. One strange family trip we tk when I was eleven tells a lt abut her.
My tw sets f grandparents lived in Clrad and Nrth Dakta, and my parents decided t spend a few weeks driving t thse states and seeing all the sights alng the way. As the first day f ur trip apprached, David, my eight-year-ld brther, and I unwillingly said gd-bye t all f ur friends. Wh knew if we’d ever see them again? Finally, the mment f ur departure arrived, and we laded suitcases, bks, games, camping equipment, and a tent int the car and bravely drve ff. We bravely drve ff again tw hurs later after we’d returned hme t get the purse and traveler’s checks Mm had frgtten.
David and I were always a little nervus when using gas statin bathrms if Mm was driving while Dad slept:”Yu stand utside the dr and play lkut while I g, and I’ll stand utside the dr and play lkut while yu g.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Hney, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gsh… I thught they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t abut t take any chances.
On the furth r fifth night, we had truble finding a htel with a vacancy. After driving in vain fr sme time, Mm suddenly gt a great idea: Why didn’t we find a huse with a likely-lking backyard and ask if we culd set up tent there? David and I became nervus. T ur great relief, Dad turned dwn the idea. Mm never culd understand ur bjectins. If a strange family shwed upn her frnt drsteps, Mm wuld have been delighted. She thinks everyne in the wrld as nice as she is. We finally fund a vacancy in the next twn.
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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us.
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We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way.
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真题解析
2.1 整体把握：
2.2逐句写作：
第一段：
1. 想到这顶帐篷，妈妈建议我们到下一个村子去野营，眼睛闪闪发光。
Thinking f this tent, Mm suggested that we g camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering.
2. 考虑到她的热情，我们都同意了。
Cnsidering her enthusiasm, we all agreed.
3. 当我们的车门打开时，妈妈立刻冲了出去，催促我们搭起帐篷。
When the dr f ur car pened, Mm strmed ut instantly and urged us t put up the tent.
4. 大卫和我被要求捡些树枝生火。
David and I were asked t pick up sme branches t build a fire.
5. 当我们回来时，爸爸妈妈已经舒舒服服地躺在帐篷前的草地上，和一个我们这个年纪的当地男孩愉快地交谈着，他好奇地看着帐篷。
And when we came back, Dad and Mm had already lain dwn the grass cmfrtably in frnt f the tent, talking merrily with a lcal by at ur age, wh kept glancing at this tent curiusly.
6. 很快我们就知道那个衣衫褴褛的男孩连家都没有。
Sn we learnt that the by in rags even didn’t have a hme t live in.
7. 当然，妈妈又“忘了”带帐篷了。
Of curse, Mm “frgt” t take this tent with us again.
第二段：
8. 在那次旅行中，我们和爷爷奶奶住在一起。
And we als had a nice time living with my grandparents during that trip.
9. 但给我印象最深的是那个帐篷，妈妈故意忘记了。
But what impressed me mst was that tent, which was frgtten deliberately by Mm.
10. 虽然她很喜欢去野营，但出于同情，她把这顶帐篷送给了那个可怜的男孩。
Thugh she did lve ging camping, she presented that pr by with this tent ut f sympathy.
11. 是妈妈让我的童年多姿多彩。也是她向我展示了给予的真正意义。
It was Mm that made my childhd clrful. And it was als she that shwed me the true meaning f giving.
2.3 范文赏析
The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us. Thinking f this tent, Mm suggested that we g camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering. Cnsidering her enthusiasm, we all agreed. When the dr f ur car pened, Mm strmed ut instantly and urged us t put up the tent. David and I were asked t pick up sme branches t build a fire. And when we came back, Dad and Mm had already lain dwn the grass cmfrtably in frnt f the tent, talking merrily with a lcal by at ur age, wh kept glancing at this tent curiusly. Sn we learnt that the by in rags even didn’t have a hme t live in. Of curse, Mm “frgt” t take this tent with us again.
We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way. And we als had a nice time living with my grandparents during that trip. But what impressed me mst was that tent, which was frgtten deliberately by Mm. Thugh she did lve ging camping, she presented that pr by with this tent ut f sympathy. It was Mm that made my childhd clrful. And it was als she that shwed me the true meaning f giving.
素材积累
3.1 高级句型素材积累（名词性从句 / 强调句）
名词性从句
他突然想到里面那家人有危险。
It ccurred t him that the family inside was in danger.
他们应该再次尝试的想法值得考虑。
The thught that they shuld try it again is wrth cnsidering.
最令他印象深刻的是，他在竞赛中得了一等奖。
What impressed him mst was that he wn the first prize in the cmpetitin.
Harry完全不知道他们在说什么。
Harry desn’t have the slightest idea what they are talking abut.
他没有被重点大学录取的原因是他的分数太低了。
The reasn why he wasn’t admitted int a key university was that his grades were t lw.
强调句
是妈妈让我的童年多姿多彩。也是她向我展示了给予的真正意义。
It was Mm that made my childhd clrful. And it was als she that shwed me the true meaning f giving.
直到我遇到你，我才知道真正的幸福。
It was nt until I met yu that I knew real happiness.
我们确实希望今后有更多有意义的活动。
We did hpe there wuld be mre meaningful activities in the cming future.
3.2 主旨升华类素材积累
1> 有时候一些小小的善行可能足以带来巨大的改变。
Smetimes, a small act f kindness may be pwerful enugh t make a huge difference.
有时候表达一些小小的关爱也可能融化人们内心的孤单。
Smetimes, a small gesture f care will pssibly melt peple’s lneliness.
一个小小的善行，无论对施予者还是接受者，都是一份祝福。
One simple act f kindness is a blessing fr bth the giver and the receiver alike.
当别人遭遇尴尬的情况时，我们应该设身处地地为他们着想。
When awkward situatins happen t thers, we shuld put urselves int their shes.
永远不要低估你的行为的力量。即便一个小小的表示，也可能不仅传播了爱，还对别人的生命产生了积极的影响。
Never underestimate the pwer f yur actin. With ne small gesture, yu may nt nly spread lve, but als psitively influenced thers’ lives.
四、模拟演练
练习（一）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节，使之构成一个完整的故事。
A little girl whse parents had died lived with her grandmther and slept in an upstairs bedrm. One night there was a fire in the huse and the grandmther died while trying t rescue the child. The fire spread quickly, and the situatin was terrible.
Neighburs called the fire department, then std helplessly by, unable t enter the huse because flames blcked all the entrances. The little girl appeared at an upstairs windw, crying fr help, just as wrd spread amng the crwd that the fire- fighters wuld be delayed a few minutes because they were all at anther fire.
Suddenly, a man appeared with a ladder, put it up against the side f the huse and disappeared inside. When he reappeared, he had the little girl in his arms. He delivered the child t the waiting arms belw, then disappeared int the night.
An investigatin revealed that the child had n living relatives, and weeks later a meeting was held in the twn hall t determine wh wuld take the child int their hme and bring her up.
A teacher said she wuld like t raise the child. She pinted ut that she culd ensure her a gd educatin. A farmer ffered her an upbringing (教养) n his farm. He pinted ut that living n a farm was healthy and satisfying. Others spke, giving their reasns why it was t the child's advantage t live with them.
Finally, the twn's richest resident rse and said, “I can give this child all the advantages that yu have mentined here, plus mney and everything that mney can buy.”
Thrughut all this, the child remained silent, her eyes n the flr.
“Des anyne else want t speak?” asked the meeting chairman. A man came frward frm the back f the hall. He walked slwly and appeared t be in pain.
Paragraph 1:
When he gt t the frnt f the hall, he std directly in frnt f the little girl and held ut his arms.
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When asked her chice, the girl gave peple the reasns firmly.
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练习（二）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节，使之构成一个完整的故事。
The Wilsns were having dinner. The fd was left frm their Thanksgiving dinner tw days befre: turkey sup and turkey meat mixed with ptates. Eleven-year-ld Angelina asked, “Are we having turkey ice cream, t?” Her father replied, “Angelina, have yu frgtten that I had n jb fr a whle year? Nw I have wrk again. Yu shuld be very thankful.” “I’m srry I said that abut the turkey! But unless I get a new dress, I will nt lk gd fr the Christmas Festival.” Angelina murmured.
The Festival was the winter hliday celebratin f a grup she belnged t: the Avaln Girls’ Service Club. They wrte cheerful cards fr hspital patients. They cked meals fr the hmeless. But the Christmas Festival was different. The girls wre party clthes and many peple came t see them perfrm. Angelina had nly a plain gray dress that she had wrn t the event last year. And nw it was a little t shrt. Angelina appealed t her parents t buy ne fr her, a beautiful red dress in Frbes’ Stre. Her mther sighed, “Well, we cannt buy it. We have t be careful. Yu never knw when I might lse my jb.”
All hpe was nt gne. There was a sign in the Frbes stre windw that said “layaway (分期付款)” . Angelina pulled ten wrn dllar bills frm her cat pcket. She ran t the stre and begged the salespersn, Mrs. Harding, t hld ‘her’ dress fr her. “Ok. But yu must cme back in tw weeks t pay the rest.” Angelina felt like jumping int the air. She was s happy that she tld Mrs. Harding abut the Avaln Service Club’s wrk and its Christmas party.
Then, Angelina shk and suffered in the cld wind lking fr wrk. Finally, Angelina gt a jb making new clthing fr dlls. Angelina was excellent at sewing. Sure enugh, the dlls’ dresses turned ut beautiful. She gt twenty dllars. Still, she was far frm having enugh mney fr her dress. She felt helpless as the final payment date arrived.
She returned sadly t Frbes’ Stre, “I dn’t have enugh mney fr the dress.” Then she saw Mrs. Harding's eyes were red. She lked like she had been crying. She said the stre was clsing and she was lsing her jb.
注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Suddenly, Mrs. Harding said she wuld pay the rest f the mney s Angelina culd have it.
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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My days always started with a tw-t fur-mile run n a nearby greenway. Fr abut tw years, I had a very faithful running partner. This giant, range tabby cat was prbably the gentlest cat I had ever encuntered. He wuld see me climbing the hill and jin in, running alngside me fr abut a quarter mile until he mewed enugh t get me t stp and pet him. A few minutes later, when I attempted t restart my run, he wuld wind arund my ankles t keep me lnger. Althugh he was a rather fat fellw, I always brught him sme cat fd.
On fair-weather afternns, I wuld pick up my fur-year-ld granddaughter frm pre-schl and we wuld visit the tabby cat tgether. She wuld insist n bringing him an afternn treat. Befre lng, he started winding arund her little ankles as well.
One day, while my granddaughter was puring ut the plastic baggie full f cat chw mixed with leftver chicken, she brught up a gd pint. She cried ut, “We've gt t call them smething!” My granddaughter stepped back and, deep in thught, studied the cat carefully as he enjyed the remains f her Happy Meal. Then she annunced, “I've gt it! Tm Tm! ”
All the regular runners, walkers, bikers and visitrs t the greenway sn came t knw the big, friendly range tabby as "Tm Tm". My granddaughter lved the cat. She lked frward t ur greenway walks and visiting Tm Tm, smething simple that the tw f us did tgether. With her birthday appraching, I wanted t d smething extra special. I cperated with a lcal cllege art student and prduced a self-published children's bk fr my granddaughter abut ur greenway friend. My nly real intent was t print a cpy r tw fr her birthday, s I was pleasantly surprised when several cpies were sld! Sn, Tm Tm became the mst famus cat in twn!
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: On a Friday in January, the frecast was calling fr a snwstrm.
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Paragraph 2: Tm Tm has been part f ur family fr the past three years.
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范文赏析
练习（一）
When he gt t the frnt f the hall, he std directly in frnt f the little girl and held ut his arms. His hands and arms were terribly scarred. The little girl cried ut, “This is the man wh rescued me!” With a leap, she threw her arms arund the man's neck. She buried her face in his shulder and sbbed fr a few mments. Then she lked up and smiled, stating happily she wuld live with him.
When asked her chice, the girl gave peple the reasns firmly. She said in a lw but determined vice, “I really desire t get a gd educatin that will give me chances t live my dreams. Besides,I knw that mney means a lt t me since I have n relatives t rely n. But it's the man wh saved my life when I was desperately facing a fire like that. Withut him, I wuldn't be here, waiting fr a new chice. I hpe that I can d whatever I can t pay back his kindness.”
练习（二）
Suddenly, Mrs. Harding said she wuld pay the rest f the mney s Angelina culd have it. “Yur club always des gd wrk. I wuld like yu t have this dress fr yur Festival.” Angelina thught hw much she wanted the red dress. But she remembered hw sad her father had felt during that lng year when he had n wrk. She chse her wrds carefully, “That is very gd f yu, Mrs. Harding. But yu will need all yur mney until yu get anther jb.” Angelina expressed thanks and clsed her hand arund the wrn dllar bills Mrs. Harding returned t her. With that, she said gdbye and ran ut f the stre int the cld street.
Outside, Angelina saw a man wh lked like Santa Claus was asking peple fr mney t help pr peple. Angelina std still fr a mment n the snwy sidewalk. Then, quite suddenly, she gave the man dressed as Santa Claus several dllars. “Mrs. Harding is nt the nly ne wh wants t help ther peple.” Just as suddenly she decided that maybe she wuld buy sme material t add length t her ld gray wl dress. And she started t plan hw she wuld sew bright red ribbns alng the neckline. Wh knew, maybe she culd lk gd at the Festival after all. But, in any event, she wuld have fun. After all, it was Christmas time.
练习（三）
On a Friday in January, the frecast was calling fr a snwstrm. I went t the greenway and left extra cat fd in case that I was unable t make it back ut fr a few days. Later that night, as I watched the almst disaster-like cnditins, my heart sank as I thught f my greenway partner. Mre than a ft and a half f snw blanketed the grund after the strm passed, which was far mre than had been predicted. Tm Tm was fund the next day trapped under a bridge between tw high piles f snw and ice. I was s thankful he was alive! At this pint, I knew what I had t d.
Tm Tm has been part f ur family fr the past three years. Of all the cats I have ever had, I can hnestly say that he has taught me the mst. Much like a faithful dg, Tm Tm listens fr my car t pull up in the driveway. I can smetimes see him jumping dwn frm his upstairs lkut windw and hear him running dwn the steps as I'm unlcking the dr, making sure he beats me t the kitchen by the time I enter. As I sit at my desk finishing this passage f my faithful running partner, I realize that he chse me, nt the ther way arund and I'm s glad he did.
主题语境
人与自我--学习与生活--家庭生活
语篇话题
本篇读后续写为记叙文，文章大意为我们一家人在旅游露营的时候遇到小男孩，他很穷对我们的帐篷很感兴趣，妈妈故意“忘记”带帐篷，实际上是将帐篷送给了小男孩。
情节梳理
故事要素
when：ne hliday when “I” was eleven
where：n the way f travelling
wh：my family and a little by
what：when I was eleven, ur family tk a trip. During the trip, my mther suggested camping with ur tent, and smething meaningful and helpful happened.
情节走向
通过第一段首句“The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us.”可预测，续写思路为：搭帐篷--露营--遇到小男孩--妈妈“忘记”带帐篷
通过第二段首句“We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way.”可预测，续写思路为：与爷爷奶奶共游--妈妈“忘记”的帐篷--实际是妈妈故意留给小男孩--感悟