指向读后续写的一段式微写作五感描写课件-2024届高三英语二轮复习

这是一份指向读后续写的一段式微写作五感描写课件-2024届高三英语二轮复习，共35页。PPT课件主要包含了Striding ， 四处寻找手表，the watch，的像热锅上的蚂蚁，3 愤怒，4 紧张和恐惧，Touch ，Sight ，Sound 等内容，欢迎下载使用。
A few days later, I received a call frm my schl, saying my cllege acceptance letter had arrived. Then I hurried t the schl with my parents. It was beynd my wildest dream till that mment. As a matter f fact, I dubted then whether I was in the dream. I nrmally dreaded the lng walk t the schl. But that day was different. There seemed t be smething in the air, an electric current, cnnecting my bdy t the letter. When I gt it, I was really afraid that the envelp was empty. But there was a white package inside. With my heart beating faster, I wndered whether it culd really be what was expected.
My parents excitedly said behind me, “Well, pen the envelp!” What I grabbed in my hands cntained everything I had been waiting fr. Slwly, I pened it and a flash f CONGRATULATIONS in bld bright letters caught my eyes. A feeling f happiness and relief rushed thrugh my bdy. I was hlding my first ffer frm a gd cllege. Needless t say, it wuldn’t have been pssible if it weren’t fr the cuntless hurs f studying and writing, but mst imprtantly, my parents’ cnstant reminders, in fact, were the best frm f educatin fr me. “Thank yu, Mm and Dad!” I said gratefully.
Using the 5 senses in writing can deeply immerse readers in scenes and stries, which can elevate yur writing t a higher level. Nw let’s see hw t weave five senses int yur descriptins f emtins and states f the characters.
2. 一段式情感与状态描写
视觉：Sight---what yu see with yur eyes, details f surrundings and peple that yu can bserve with yur eyes 听觉：Sund---what yu hear with yur ears, sunds in the envirnment that yu are in. 触觉：Tuch--- there are tw categries f TOUCH(1) hw yu feel, the emtins yu experience in a situatin(2) the texture f bjects that yu tuch, which is the physical cntact with bjects / peple 嗅觉：Smell--- what yu smell with yur nse, the scents and even the drs f an envirnment 味觉：Taste--- what yu taste with yur tngue/ what yu experience with yur lips
2. describe the emtin f the characters:
2.1. 高兴 描写Jasmine在英语演讲比赛中获得了第一名，她非常高兴地走上台领奖。我们可以这样表述：Jasmine wn the first prize in the English Speech Cntest. She was very happy t walk nt the stage t receive her prize.
假如从五感角度尝试描写，你会怎样描写呢？请试一试在以下段落空格处填入合适的词。Jasmine wn the first prize in the English Speech Cntest. Hearing the news, she __________________________________________________(乐得找不着北了) (Tuch). She____________________________________________________ (高兴地尖叫着跳了起来) (Sund & Sight). _____________(大步走上) nt the stage with her chest ____________________________________(骄傲地挺着胸膛) (Sight), she culdn’t cnceal her smile. After receiving her prize, she ___________________________ _________________________________(灿烂地笑着朝大家点头以示感谢) (Sight). A tingle f pleasure sht thrugh her as she _________________________________________________(品味着胜利的甜蜜滋味) (Taste).
was n clud nine/ felt n tp f the wrld
screamed in delight and jumped fr jy
her chest puffing ut in pride
smiled widely and ndded
t everyne in thanks
savured the sweet
taste f winning
【名师解析】运用五感后，读者可以从触觉 (was n clud nine), 听觉 (screamed in delight), 视觉(jumped fr jy, striding nt the stage, her chest puffing ut in pride, smile widely and ndded t everyne in thanks), 味觉 (savur the sweet taste f winning) 来感知Jasmine获得第一名后她去领奖时的喜悦。读完这部分的描述，读者仿佛身临其境，犹如在现场目睹了Jasmine领奖时的场景。
学生初稿：It was a Friday afternn. After schl, Tina walked back hme. As usual, arriving hme, she glanced at her watch t see what time was it then. Hwever, she fund her belved watch was gne. It was a birthday gift frm her grandma. She was very sad and cried a lt.
2.2. 伤心请描写心爱的手表丢失了后伤心难过的场景。
思考：Q: When a persn lst her belved watch, what wuld she d？Hw wuld she cry? Hw wuld she feel? Des her favrite fd still taste delicius nw? Frm different angles (Sight, Sund, Taste, Tuch, Smell) t answer the abve questins. Sight: (What wuld she d?)_____________________________________________Sund:(Hw wuld she cry?)__________________________________________Tuch: (Hw wuld she feel?)____________________________________________Taste & Smell: (Des her favrite fd still taste delicius nw?)_____________
Sight: _______________________________________________________________________________Sund:______________________________________________________________________________
sit glumly (闷闷不乐地坐在那里)；
search hither and thither fr it
unshed tears brim in ne’s eyes (眼眶里满是泪水)；
rack ne’s brains(绞尽脑汁)；
try t recall when sb has last seen
a dark clud lms ver ne’s head (乌云笼罩在...的头顶)；
big fat tears rll dwn ne’s cheeks (大颗的眼泪顺着脸颊流了下来)
sb ne’s heart ut s ludly(哭的很大声)
bawl ne’s heart ut (嚎啕大哭);
weep buckets f tears (流了很多眼泪)
Tuch: ______________________________________________________________________________Taste & Smell: _____________________________________________________________________
a curtain f grief envelp sb (一阵悲伤包裹着她);
feel blue (感觉很忧伤)
be anxius like ants n ht bricks(急
feel devastated (感觉极度悲痛的);
sadness verwhelm sb (悲伤笼罩着某人)；
dn’t have the spirit t d anything (没有兴致做任何事)
favrite fd tastes bland in ne’s sadness f lsing his/her belved watch. (最喜爱的食物也因丢了心爱的手表食之无味了)
unable t wrk up any appetite (没有任何食欲);wrk up激起
lse ne’s appetite (没有胃口)
参考答案： It was a Friday afternn. After schl, Tina walked back hme. As usual, arriving hme, she glanced at her watch t see what time it was then. Hwever, she fund her belved watch was gne. She searched hither and thither fr it, but in vain. (Sight) Sitting glumly at her desk with unshed tears brimming in her eyes, she lst her appetite fr dinner. (Sight & Taste) The watch had been a gift frm her deceased grandmther wh had mtivated her t study hard. Sadness verwhelmed her when she thught f all the wnderful times they had tgether. (Tuch) She racked her brains, trying t recall when she had last seen the watch. (Tuch) Then, she remembered drpping her watch in the schl washing rm while she was washing her hands. And she frgt t wear it afterwards. She was sure that smene must have taken it. Thinking that her watch wuld prbably lst frever, she felt devastated and bawled her heart ut. (Sund & Tuch)
小试牛刀一（伤心）：描写以下场景：Tracy和Rse是一对好朋友。但是一天，Tracy和Rse因为一件小事吵架了，Rse很生气，她不愿再跟Tracy做朋友了，并且她还联合其他同学不跟Tracy说话，Tracy被孤立了，她很伤心。
思考：Q: When ne’s friend left her because f a quarrel, what wuld she d？Hw wuld she cry? Hw wuld she feel? Des her favrite fd still taste delicius nw? Frm different angles (Sight, Sund, Taste, Tuch, Smell), list sme wrds t describe Tracy’s sadness. Sight: _________________________________________________________________________Sund: ________________________________________________________________________
kick at the pebbles listlessly (无精打采地踢着路上的鹅卵石)
brws knit (眉头紧皱),
mpe in a crner n ne’s wn (独自一人闷闷不乐)，
big fat tears rll dwn ne’s cheeks
sniff and blw ne’s nse int the tissue
weep silently (默默哭泣)
a sb escape frm ne’s thrat
思考：Q: When ne’s friend left her because f a quarrel, what wuld she d？Hw wuld she cry? Hw wuld she feel? Des her favrite fd still taste delicius nw? Frm different angles (Sight, Sund, Taste, Tuch, Smell), list sme wrds t describe Tracy’s sadness. Taste: _________________________________________________________________________Tuch: _________________________________________________________________________
ne’s favrite fd tastes bland (最喜爱的食物食之无味了);
unable t wrk up any appetite (没有任何食欲);
lse ne’s appetite (没有胃口);
The bitter taste f lsing a friend is s hard t swallw.
srrw cnsume sb 无比伤心;
feel crestfallen (感觉很沮丧)
参考答案： It was lunch time, but Tracy lst all her appetite and even her favrite fd tasted bland. (Taste) She had a quarrel with her best friend Rse this mrning, and Rse didn’t want t be her friend any mre. Tracy walked ut f her schl canteen, kicking at the pebbles listlessly. Her brws knitted as she frwned glmily. (Sight) She thught back t the quarrel that had happened this mrning. She just intended t play a jke n Rse’s chubby face. Hwever, she flared up instantly. And everyne thught that she was insulting Rse. Nw Tracy was mping in a crner f the schl field n her wn as nne f her friends wanted t speak t her. (Sight) A sb escaped frm Tracy’s thrat. Big fat tears rlled dwn her cheeks as she wept silently. (Sund & Sight) The bitter taste f lsing her best friend was s hard t swallw.(Taste) If everything culd start nce again, she wuld never play such a stupid jke n Rse! Finally, with great srrw and regret, (Tuch) Tracy made up her mind t make an aplgy t Rse first t try t remedy the whle situatin.
描写以下场景：上课铃响了，但是教室却一直吵闹地停不下来，老师很生气。
学生初稿：The bell fr class rang. But it was still quite nisy in the classrm. The teacher was very angry.
思考：Q: When a persn was angry, what wuld she d？What wuld she say? Hw wuld she feel? Frm different angles (Sight, Sund, Taste, Tuch, Smell) t answer the abve questins. Sight: _______________________________________________________
glare at (怒视)；face scrches red (脸涨的通红)；eyes bulge in anger(怒目圆睁)；clench ne’s fists (握紧某人的拳头)；flare up (突然发怒)；slam ne’s fists n the table(用拳头猛打着桌子); grit ne’s teeth (咬紧牙关，忍住)； face turns as black as cal (脸气得发黑)；like a vlcan that is abut t erupt (像是一个即将爆发的火山); sweep everything at the table (把桌上的东西扫了下去)；stalk ff in a huff (怒气冲冲地走); lse ne’s temper (发脾气); strm (气呼呼地走, 闯, 冲)；stare daggers at sb（对某人怒目而视) ;
思考：Q: When a persn was angry, what wuld she d？What wuld she say? Hw wuld she feel? Frm different angles (Sight, Sund, Taste, Tuch, Smell) t answer the abve questins. Sund:
scream at sb (冲...尖叫)；raise ne’s vice (提高音量)，lecture sb (训斥某人)；snap at sb (厉声说，怒气冲冲地说)；lse ne’s tngue (使某人喋喋不休，大放厥词)；yell / shut at sb at the tp f ne’s vice (大声地对着某人大喊大叫)； lash ut at sb (怒斥，严厉斥责某人)；rar angrily at sb(生气地朝某人咆哮)；
思考：Q: When a persn was angry, what wuld she d？What wuld she say? Hw wuld she feel? Frm different angles (Sight, Sund, Taste, Tuch, Smell) t answer the abve questins. Tuch: Smell & Taste:
seethe with rage (怒火中烧); fly int a rage/ fury (勃然大怒); ht under the cllar (发怒，气冲冲); feel bld bil (感觉血液沸腾); rage/ fury ripples thrugh ne’s bdy (一阵怒火涌遍全身), in a fit f anger (一时气愤), hit the rf (勃然大怒)
steam puff ut f ne’s nstrils as sb fumes（因为对...十分恼火而气得冒烟）
采用五感写法改进稿：The bell fr class rang. But it was still quite nisy in the classrm. Feeling really ht under the cllar (Tuch), the teacher yelled at the students at the tp f her vice. (Sund) Her face flushed red with her vice raised. (Sight&Sund) Her eyes bulged in fury as she stared daggers at the students.(Sight) She tried t clench her fists t curb her anger, but in vain.(Sight) Finally she flared up and lsened her tngue t lash ut at the class f naughty students. (Sund) She was s annyed that steam was almst puffing ut frm her nstrils.(Smell)
小试牛刀二（愤怒）：描写以下场景: 一天，妈妈的花瓶被杰克的哥哥打破了，但是杰克的哥哥跟妈妈说是杰克打破的，妈妈很生气，不容他解释就批评了他。杰克感到十分冤枉，他怒火中烧。
思考：Q: If yu were blamed fr smething that yu didn’t d, what wuld yu d? Hw wuld yu feel? What wuld yu say? Frm different angles (Sight, Sund, Taste, Tuch, Smell), list sme wrds t describe Jack’s fury. Sight: Sund:
strm/ stmp angrily int his rm(怒气冲冲地冲进房间), face flushes red (满脸通红)；eyes bulge in anger(怒目圆睁)；clench ne’s fists(握紧某人的拳头); kick the grund (踢地)；punch sb (打、揍某人)；grit ne’s teeth (咬紧牙关，忍住)；
slam ne’s fists n the table (用拳头猛打着桌子); shut the dr with a lud bang (砰地一声关上了门)
思考：Q: If yu were blamed fr smething that yu didn’t d, what wuld yu d? Hw wuld yu feel? What wuld yu say? Frm different angles (Sight, Sund, Taste, Tuch, Smell), list sme wrds t describe Jack’s fury. Smell: Tuch:
steam puff ut f ne’s nstrils as sb fumes（因为对...十分恼火而气得冒烟）；
seethe with rage (怒火中烧); fly int a rage/ fury (勃然大怒)，anger was biling inside sb (怒火中烧); ht under the cllar (发怒，气冲冲); feel bld bil (感觉血液沸腾); rage/ fury ripples thrugh ne’s bdy (一阵怒火涌遍全身), in a fit f anger (一时气愤); take a deep breath t curb ne’s anger (深吸气以遏制某人的怒火)
参考答案： Jack stmped angrily int his rm, slamming the dr with a lud bang.(Sight & Sund) His face flushed red.(Sight) Steam was puffing ut f his nstrils.(Smell) His brther brke his mther’s favurite vase. Hwever, when his mther had cme int the rm, his brther immediately pushed the blame nt his shulders. When mm saw the brken vase, she flew int a rage and hit the rf. She lashed ut at Jack and there was n stpping her with any explanatin. (Sund) All Jack culd d was t clench his fist and gritted his teeth t curb his anger that was biling inside him. (Sight & Tuch) He felt deeply wrnged (深感冤枉) by smething that he did nt d! (Tuch)
描写以下场景：这是Jasmine第一次在公共场合演讲，她感到很害怕。
学生初稿：It was Jasmine’s first attempt t deliver a speech in public. She was very nervus and fearful.
思考：Q: When yu are making a speech in public fr the first time, what wuld yu d? Hw wuld yu feel? What will yur vice sund like? Frm different angles (Sight, Sund, Taste, Tuch, Smell) t answer the abve questins. Sight:
legs tremble like jelly (腿像果冻一样发软); legs turn wbbly (腿打颤)； shiver like leaves in a breeze (像风中的树叶一样发抖)；cld perspiratin dts ne’s frehead (额头满是大汗)；turn tail and run (掉头逃跑)；teeth chatter uncntrllably (因害怕)牙齿打战，咯咯作响)
思考：Q: When yu are making a speech in public fr the first time, what wuld yu d? Hw wuld yu feel? What will yur vice sund like? Frm different angles (Sight, Sund, Taste, Tuch, Smell) t answer the abve questins. Sund:
stutter / stammer(结结巴巴地说)；heart punding like drums (心砰砰直跳像是打鼓一样)；wrds stuck in ne’s thrat (话卡在喉咙里)
Taste & Smell:
swallw the lump f fear（忍住恐惧，故作镇定）；breathe slwly(慢慢地吸气)；swallw ne’s saliva repeatedly trying t chase ne’s fear away (反复咽口水赶走恐惧)；
思考：Q: When yu are making a speech in public fr the first time, what wuld yu d? Hw wuld yu feel? What will yur vice sund like? Frm different angles (Sight, Sund, Taste, Tuch, Smell) t answer the abve questins.
ne’s mind blank (大脑一片空白); fear grips sb (某人被一阵恐惧抓住了) ，have ne’s heart in ne’s muth (心提到了嗓子眼上); shivers crawl dwn ne’s spine (感到脊背一阵颤栗)；lips g dry (嘴唇发干)；can nt breathe (无法呼吸)；fear rises like rlling wave (恐惧像翻滚的波浪)；hands cld and clammy (手摸上去冷冰冰湿乎乎的)
采用五感写法改进稿：It was Jasmine’s first attempt t deliver a speech in public. Her legs trembled and shk like jelly as she made her way unsteadily up the stage. (Sight) Standing n the stage, she stared at the audience. Her mind went blank. Her hands were cld and clammy and her heart punded like drums.(Tuch & Sund) It seemed that the air frze. Cld perspiratin dtted her frehead, sending an unwelcme chill t the pit f her stmach. (Sight & Tuch) She pened her muth but n wrds came frth. It seemed as if they were stuck in her thrat.(Tuch) At this mment, all she wanted t d was t turn tail and run.(Tuch) Finally, taking a deep breath and mustering her curage, Jasmine tried t swallw the lump f fear and began her speech.(Taste)
思考: When yu are very tired, hw wuld yu feel? What can yu see? What wuld yu d? What can yu hear?
ne’s feet slap the grund a little harder, which sunds s lud. (脚拍打着地面，听起来声音很响;)
sb lks jaded/ fatigued. (看来疲惫不堪); lk utterly dishevelled and fagged ut. (衣服散乱，疲惫至极); Hand n frehead, sb lks crestfallen and exhausted. (手捂脑门，看来垂头丧气，精疲力尽); Drenched and waywrn, there sb std. （某人站在那儿，浑身湿透，加上旅途劳累); Sb drags ne’s sre leg (拖着酸胀的腿走); shuffle t sp (拖着脚步走); shulders sink mre (肩膀更沉了); Withut getting a wink f sleep all night, nw sb sleeps like a lg . (整夜没睡，现在睡得很沉)。
3. describe the state f the characters:
参考答案: Aya stayed up late t cram several schl exams last night; Nw, she lks utterly dishevelled and fagged ut. Tiredness seems t seep thrugh her bnes. She feels as if her bnes have been crushed. Her head grws heavy and eyes grw dim. She drags her leg t her bedrm. The next secnd she sleeps like a lg.
赏析：使用五感改进后，dishevelled，fagged ut, drag，sleep like a lg等词让读者从视觉角度的看到了主人公的疲惫，tiredness seep thrugh her bnes, crushed, head grws heavy, eyes grw dim等词让读者体会到了主人公的疲惫。在写作过程中，不一定要结合每种感官展开描写，但合理适度的拓展，可以让乏味的语言更生动。
一段式微写作：常见人物状态
3.2. 生病 Imprve the fllwing scene with five senses.
Jack desn’t feel well tday. He had a high fever and cughed cntinuusly. He felt weak.
思考: When yu are ill, hw wuld yu feel? What can yu see? What wuld yu d? What can yu hear?
head spinning; culdn’t see r hear prperly; sb’s nails dig deeper because f pain; have a sre thrat (喉咙痛)；have a blcked nse (鼻塞). ne’s nse clgged up/ bunged up; feel light-headed/dizzy/ faint (感觉眩晕的); have a runny nse (流鼻涕)；
cugh incessantly (不断咳嗽), every wrd, almst every breath, is fllwed by gasping (每说一句话, 乃至每喘一口气, 都夹杂着丝丝的罗音)； sneeze (打喷嚏)